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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Oak trees and such are truly a sight to remember.
playing under an oak tree for a child is sheer fun.
I had my share of fun under our tamarind and banyan trees. Even in high summer it was cool under their spreading branches.

You showed what fun it was to be a child and play at will.
"you slowly fade
into the dark."

The tree is referred to as a third person and also as second person. Interesting!

I see the child playing under a sunlit tree with it wide branches and in the evening as the sky darkens and shadows gather.

Imagery and perfect rhythm attract me.

It flows well.

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Review of Think Positively  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi,

I loved this poem from the very ironic beginning.

"I prefer to think darkly,"
But the expression is percent positive.

I agree that the best place to store memories is the mind, which is quicker in flashing them than the technical devices.

There is something absolutely touching about the memories you want to have of life, family, nature and children.

"bamboo soughing in the wind,"

The uniqueness of the use of sight, smell, touch and feeling flows right into my heart.

Hard drive can never compete with your "software" which is simply indelible.

I am truly lucky to have come across this beautiful poem.
Thank you for sharing.

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for entry "Fernando
Review by jaya
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Rated: ASR | N/A (Review only item.)
Hello Megan!

Congratulations on the occasion of your WDC Account Anniversary. *CakeP*
Hope you are having a wonderful day.

The melody Fernando is a hot favorite even among the young people. The lilting melody provides soothing music. One can sit back enjoy as the waves of sweetness wash over one's mind and soul.
Just lovely!

This poem is a pleasant surprise for me. The literary device you used is simply amazing. Creating a story poem out of a popular song o ABBA is a novel idea.

A soldier at war and his wife at home faced life individually. Her worry is transparently shown.
Fernando returns home as a war hero. The couple is happy to be together.

You built the story around war and the sacrifices made by the soldiers.

Your creative effort is much appreciated.

Imagery is visual and the events are depicted with clarity.

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Review of Teachers  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This happens.
If a teacher is made up of mediocre stuff, this happens.
I went through it too.
she offered no help.
On the contrary discouraged me.
But I held on to myself. won the odds and stood victorious.

This is what less confident students should do. If the teacher fails, seek help somewhere else. She or he is not the end-all and be-all of teaching.
"You called me disappointing"

Unfortunately, there are those who simply do nothing. At least confide in parents, who might offer advice or help.
Doing nothing is as much a fault as that of a teacher who has nothing to offer to the pupil. Both are to be blamed equally.

This self degrading poem shows a serious flaw in our educational system. If the teachers are not properly interviewed before appointment, they can fail the students and the students. Their confidence is undermined and a young mind is destroyed.

"I could have been something
Been someone"

Very sad indeed!

Imagery in this free style poem is vivid and the issue at hand, is well shown.

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Review of A Season of Grace  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Human seasons are unique to each one of us.
We look at nature comparing her changing colors to the changes we undergo.

My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary.
Congratulations as you usher in a new year into your account. *Cake*
Have a wonderful day.

Like nature our spring comes in youth and the heart is ready to receive love and romance.
It is short lived with long lasting memories.
"of seasons past, of true love --"

Season of fall and the reasons for being grateful appear to be the main theme of this free style poem.
The trees shed leaves and a mature heart sheds the "dross" of youth and romantic love.
A new season dawns and the heart is ready for a spiritual dawn to receive the endless love of the Master.

"I yield these leaves assured --
He brings a new season."

Imagery is eye-catching.
It flows well.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
True love is possible for the lucky.
I could see that love is hard to come by despite meeting many women.

"Gone like the wind
Fast as they begin"

This rhyming poem is well composed showing the way life was for the seeker of love. So much water but not a drop to drink.

Each stanza unrolls with yet another same story of love failure with no respite in sight.

But he knows the reason why this happened.
"You talk way to much
Keeps you out of touch"

"to much"
(too much)

This could happen in real life too.
"It's is sad but it's true"

With right word choices and a perfect rhythm, it is a winner.
It flows well.

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Review of Losing "IT"  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Emily,
you named the lost thing "IT". The capitalization shows the importance attached after losing IT.

My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary.
Congratulations on this occasion. *CakeB*
Hope you are having a lovely day.

Losing something valuable and realizing it much later could be absolutely frustration, be it time, place, person or thing.

"Today "IT" was taken away from me,
or maybe I just threw "IT" away,
I'm not sure."

We all go through these moments of loss which could be avoided, but that doesn't happen. Why? it makes me wonder if it is some kind of force in the universe, free will or destiny that persuades us to lose it.
Only loser might be able to say why and how he or she missed IT.

This is a well composed poem with vivid imagery and food for thought.
It flows well.

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Review of Escape  
Review by jaya
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Abusive fathers and non cooperating trucks!
If only he had some kind of magical touch he would have flown away from this crude father.

Hi,
my review is for your WDC Account Anniversary.
Congratulations on this cheery occasion.*Cake3*
Have a cool day.

The boy certainly stirs my pity and at his father I gnashed my teeth. Desired effect well achieved.
The suffering and pain of being the son of an abusive father comes through clear and loud.
Ages pass and still the torture continues.
Shame on such fathers!

The boy's decision to flee from a place equal to hell was commendable. First things first. His priority is understandable in the face of cruel odds.

I felt the end is anticlimactic. If "I hate you" is gratifying then that's his means of escape I guess.

The incidents draw me into the lives of a lonely son and a drunk father.

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Review of First Lesson  
Review by jaya
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Beautiful!
Use power only for good, not bad. If only the leaders use their absolute power similarly to achieve good not bad.

Hi, I am Jaya and I am reviewing this perceptive piece for your WDC Account Anniversary.
Congratulations! *CakeB*
Have magical day!

I loved the little girl's character. She is a natural with her new magical wand. Instinctive and impulsive too.
Power favors those with pure motives, and not for malicious ends.
Moral is well driven with the incident of the badly injured fawn and the glowing tip of the wand.
" "That is how it works. Pure heart, pure mind. Remember.""

Well told story with crisply flowing prose and sensitive characterization. Descriptions leave me wishing to write likewise.

Thank you for sharing talent.

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Review of Open Your Eyes  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a poem after my heart because it exhorts me to stand up and pull myself up from grief and sorrow.
I needed this encouragement to be brave and take on a future, which paves way to rediscover happiness.

“Free your soul from sadness
Feel the sun’s cleansing rays.”

I can see the use of nature imagery to bring solace to soul and spirit.
The wind, the sun, the clouds and the sky are the elements that help us in getting inspiration and joy.
In a joyous heart are sown seeds of hope that lend courage to a stricken soul.

Beautifully crafted poem with a perfect ABCB rhyme and a well-balanced rhythm.

It flows well.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Even an ageless one like a fortune teller succumbs to age and a foggy mind.
No one is beyond the dictates of time.

Hello Joto-Kai,
I am Jaya and I am glad I came across this telling poem in your portfolio.
My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary.
Congratulations on this cheerful occasion. *Cake*
Have a great day.

The fortune teller had me attracted to his trade from the beginning. Perhaps because we too have similar professionals in our town.
Despite our better thinking, we get interested in the mysteries of fortune telling. It is definitely a weakness born out of worry, fear and sheer curiosity.

"I took joy in sharing happy news.
I comforted those whose futures were not so bright."

These lines show that he is very humane and feels joy and sorrow as others.

"In their place, a cold gray fog that hurts the eyes."
His limitations are out in the open.

It flows well.

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Review of A dream of a muse  
Review by jaya
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Someone in the dream catches his imagination and he actually tries to pursue the attractive blonde.
Sleep to dream appears to be his motive.

That's great theme for a story. He might in possibility find her in real life shocking him out of wits in a nice way.

The description of the woman of his dream seems worthy of his single minded concentration on knowing from close quarters. He might succeed in finding her in flesh and blood. I hope so.

It is fun to read this dream like story.

Language and style kept me to it and made me think about it.

Thank you for sharing talent.

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Congratulations! *Cake*

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I find this poem submitted to the Poetry Newsletter(December 11, 2012), quite inspiring.

It is true that life is full of blessings for which we need to be thankful and wish it so for others as well.

Hi, I am Jaya and my review of this appealing verse is for your WDC Account Anniversary.
Congratulations on this happy occasion that marks another year of creative activities at the WDC.
Have a wonderful day.

The number of things that bring pleasure to you are more or less similar to my own list of things of joy.

"I love my life, hate my job, could take or leave a shopping spree;
at the end of the day I'm just glad to be me."

You have rightly concluded that we need to be happy for what we are and who we are. The sense of contentedness comes through clearly.

The blessing of looking at self and feel happy at what it is, is granted to a few. To be satisfied with one's own's lot is so vital to leading a healthy life.

Pleasant rhyming and rhythm and smooth spontaneity help poem in flowing well.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This instant market place is interesting if also dubious.
You gave some information about the flats and the way streets confluence. Houses with common walls are now built all over the world. With a hike in city population, independent houses are no longer possible in cities and towns. In a big commercially significant city, getting living accommodation is more difficult than climbing the Everest if you don't mind the hyperbole.

Setting up a market place without the authorities permission is usually nonexistent. But in these days of "talking to the right persons" anything is possible at a cost. Perhaps, they will last as long as the authorities look the other side and do not object. Smart and streetwise.

Thank you for sharing information about Thailand.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A memory clings. The photo refuses you the freedom to live the future. The end of the poem is truly thought- provoking.

"And leave me, for I can no longer walk our path.

I am frozen in the past with you."

Hi Graham, I am Jaya. This humble review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on this nice occasion.*Cake*
Have a cheerful day,

This romantic poem is impressively composed.
The memory of a past love that is vitally and vibrantly present, is depicted effortlessly.

"Fragments of a life so short yet endless,
A dream lived by two hearts and two minds."

Beautiful memories made of love live forever on their minds. A photo on the dresser keeps it going despite the "ravages of time."

Imagery brings the two of them to my mind's eye. High imagination and perfect imagery, a potent mix, results in a telling verse.

It flows well.

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Review of Nature Haiku  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi,

the twilight play of light and colours is well depicted in this haiku.
Scenic beauty comes through in simple description.

My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary.
Congrats on this occasion. *Cake2*
Have a nice day.

Time of the day
Location
Season

are poetically and appealingly dealt with in this poem.
Perfect syllabic count.
5-7-5

Visual imagery takes me to a late evening in autumn or the beginning of winter.
Colour imagery is used while painting the setting sun.

“Orange sun”
A tree “cast in gold”

It flows well.
Appealing and attractive haiku.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Mage,
this poem rightly describes a mother's feelings confronting her just born baby. I appreciate your recollections of the event with clarity and vividness.

My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary.
Congratulations on a lovely occasion.*CakeB*
Hope you will have wonderful day.

"On the day you were born
I found timeless love
And infinite gratitude ---"

On the day of my son's birth,
time stood still
tears flowed when he cried
tenderness in my heart overflowed.

A woman becomes more kind when she becomes a mother. Feelings of love multiply.

Indeed, it was a fulfilling moment.

Thank you for sharing.
It flows well.

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Review of Just Believe  
Review by jaya
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi
it is a feel good story for the harassed housekeepers. No doubt, everything should be taken with a smile and cheer. I find that any complicated matter finds a solution when you deal with it pleasantly. That's the key. Few have that spirit, when faced with a difficult cooking range or fridge full of unwanted things. It happens.

"“Universe!” she lamented, “What have I done to deserve this?” Tears slid down her cheeks as she started to throw the defrosted contents of the freezer into a black bin bag."

Sure, leave it to the universe to take care of trouble shooting.
Solutions are found in unexpected quarters and voila! No more problems.

The good philosophy of sticking to the positive attitude pays off.

"“What did I tell you?! The universe takes care of us. Just believe!”"

Great story with appropriate dialog and scenario.

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Review of Interloper  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A telling poem on the destruction of beauty. This applies to the ancient buildings around my town, which are still strong and capable of facing the test of time. But they are brought down and replaced with tall structures where live a hundred or more. Obviously, we need space for the growing population. Now beauty is in memory.

This dandelion you found is being cut down because it is redundant among roses and lilies. Nobody spares even a single glance at the dandelions. Like a mother's love they spread everywhere and being cut down when not needed.
"Why? Is the question
Why is this beauty destroyed?"

You drew the right conclusion.
"Even beauty must be gone
If it does not fit"

Written in tercets, this poem provides fodder to think of the way certain things happen.

It flows well.

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Review of Like the Tide  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Indeed, when the battles lost causes and when despair and desolation engulf, a person seeks solace only in prayer and only on leaning on His mercy, which never fails.

"Then in the midst of the storm,
The wind did cease,"

My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary.
Congratulations as you go on to the next wonderful year at the WDC.
Have a wonderful day1

I appreciate the wonderful word play you challenged yourself with paying off.

"Washing me away.
Away, away, away, away,
Washing me away,"

You depicted a tormented soul impressively with fine imagery of the sea. The rage inside and out is connected logically.

It flows well.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
The tragic story of a woman who failed in securing love is truly well narrated.
My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary.
Congratulations on this nice occasion.*Cake*
Have a nice day.

The young woman standing on the edge of a cliff is visually described. Her thoughts are tragic yet the surrounds are beautiful. The sea, the breeze and the evening sky.

I can see that love failure can be traumatic and it drives a person crazy to the extent of committing suicide.

But the spirit drifts still crying for fulfilment. That could never be.

The description of the woman's churning thoughts and her sudden fall into the chasm is impressively shown. It is so heart breaking.

Well written.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
You are so right about the sea being your sole company.
I enjoy the sea more when I am alone gazing and contemplating its beauty and mysterious movements through out day and night.
It is eternal with no stopping the ebb and tide.
The moon and the stars seem to attain extra glory as they shine on the sea.

"It’s an experience like nowhere else on earth, just me and the sea"

These lines make me aware of my blessings.
I live in this coastal town, where for many, the sea is taken for granted. That is not the way I view it. However number of times I sit on the sand looking at the endless blue ocean rushing to shore, I am forever mesmerized. So I come back again and again, either alone or with family.

Indeed, the white foam brings many things ashore. Shells are the best gifts of the sea. My mom used to collect them and turn them into beautiful people and attractive things.

It flows well.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
I like the first two varieties of sandwiches for their special touch.
A sandwich with greens and a bit of mayo helps enjoying eating it. It is also healthful as it has plenty of nutrients and protein. The addition of ham appeals to me. Of course as an alternative I might add salmon instead of ham. It gives me vitamin A too.

I love the crispy bread of multigrain kind.
The second sandwich made of bagel has mouth watering ingredients cleverly spread with cheese, salmon, lemon and onion with capers is equally appealing.

Attention to health in the details is a plus point in all the three sandwiches. More so in the first two.
I am going to try them on a relaxed day.

Description is what makes it so attractive.

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for entry "Prayer request
Review by jaya
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Dear Kenzie,
this is the time to keep up your courage and cheer.

I know this kind of situation when being alone and with no help whatever.

You are right about the power of prayer.

We in India believe in it like no other.

I am making your family an intrinsic part of my prayer from now on.

Remember we all love you and your family. Let us hope things will get better in the near future.

Love and regards
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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Nice moral story to read and understand the implications.
My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary.
Congratulations! *CakeB*
Have a wonderful day!

An inanimate thing like a little roller coaster is perfect in its human role. It learnt the lesson in a hard way and regained its lost friends.

Life's lesson is taught well. It is not fair to please a person and ignore the others. Better to have more honest and loving friends than lose your worth for the sake of vanity.

Dialog and description are appropriate and descriptive section is just adequate.
Language and style are fine.

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