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Review of I Miss My Mother  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello,

this is a touching verse on mother. Mother is such special person in our lives. It is difficult to imagine life without one's mother.

You have recorded your feelings for your mother very clearly. Emotion can be seen and felt. We should never take mom casually or for granted. It is death that shows the value of a person. She cannot be replaced.

"Leaving me so broken hearted
I miss my Mother"

Memories of a beloved mother cannot be erased. They are so fresh that the memory never fails to draw tears.

A well-written poem in memory of the poet's mother.

Sadness is palpable.

It flows well.

Write on!
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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Lou,

I am attracted by this "little piece" in your folder. I try to review it for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on being creatively active for one more year at the WDC. Have a delightful day!

I see the sea and the rocks on which you stand and gaze at the wide blue expanse.

Consider this line:
"I was shaped by wind and tides,"

It could mean that your existence was ruled by elements or as you stand on the rocks your body follows the direction winds and attains shifting shape.As I read through, I can see that the rest of the poem is in present tense except for this one line, which is in the past. That means you are talking about your life.

Now, this line seems a little puzzling.
"Bare beach is exposes then hides."
could it be "Bare beach exposed"?

Your "Oceanic" domain is awesome and the Atlantic under your feet is a strong metaphor.

Imagery prompts me to feel the swirling salty air that surrounds the "riding sea".

Structured poem flows well.

Write on!
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Review of Tennessee Summers  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Memories find beautiful and simple expression. Tennessee summers are what we feel and see them before us.

Grandma's house in the countryside is very attractive. And for children it is a truly a blessing. Sweet memories of those summer days playing in the barn are well shown.

This rhyming poem is full of visual images of kids having a gala time. Their freedom is much envied by those under pressure of work and making money.

Simple word choices and line endings make the verse all the more fetching.

It flows well.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Iserio,

This poem speaks so well of how sadness slips away. I chose this verse to review for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing one more year with the WDC. Have a wonderful day!

The title is striking. It catches the essence of how finally grief makes an exit despite the person's unwillingness to let it go. In the long run tears dry and sorrow loses its sharp edge. Like any other emotion sorrow too is hollow.

" time is payed"
The use of nautical verb is refreshing.

So it is with the word "paradox" How appropriate to this situation of letting go! self contradictory is how I would describe the condition of a letting go despite the longing to cling on.

"Happy and sad is what you now know."

I came to know, now.

Thanks for the philosophical insight.

It flows well.

Write on!
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Review of Author  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi,
You have expressed your writer's block in an appealing way.
"For hours ideas swirl around,
but when I go to
write it down.......
The paper stares back, still blank."

It is true that writing, I mean putting your swirling stories on paper is not easy. The point I want to make is, you got to start somewhere, either the beginning, middle or end of the story. Like this poem for example.

Your imagery shows the poet thinking and forming ideas and then putting them to paper. Sometimes thinking too much can cause a block in expression.

Great poem.

Keep on writing.

Glorious and Joyful
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Review of Locked away Love  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Injured family relationships are brought to surface in this letter to daughter. Sometimes innocent children have to pay a heavy price for the love they ought to get from a parent.

I can see that your daughter became a scapegoat for the friction between the parents. She is not allowed to see her father for no fault of hers.

The father confesses to his helplessness in abandoning the girl. It is quite a bit moving. However, the reader's sympathy remains with the daughter.

Language and style are pretty much a draw. Sentences are well connected and the transformations take place quite smoothly.

Write on!
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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello jonblair,

I find this rather interesting note in your portfolio and decided to review it for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on the completion of one more year at the WDC. Have a lovely day!

Your analysis of the first, second and third marriages is done well. The complexion of marriage changes as it passes through different age levels and experience.

However, what I feel is that love must take the first priority. Some people I know marry the second time after being widowed for the sake of a culture norm. Among Mexicans I heard a woman needs to have a man with her if she is young and able.Its culture demands so.

That I aside, a number of women marry the second and third time for both financial and physical security.
A lone woman is an easy prey for the predatory males I guess.

I give top marks for the line,
"No matter where you find yourself on the marriage wheel, people would benefit far more by spending less time planning the wedding, and more time planning the marriage."

Meaning a marriage should be resting on warmth and loving togetherness first and foremost.

Great write.

Write on!
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Review of Why do I write?  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Madi,

It is a wonderful note on why you write. I enjoyed reading it and am offering this review for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on having completed another year with the WDC. Have a wonderful day!

I can see and say that writing ignites you in a way that you alone can experience.I understand that writing blesses both the reader and the writer. That, no doubt gives you immense pleasure.

Writing is an outlet for the thoughts, feelings and stories that vibrate in your mind. It is the best way to let them out.

You are indeed blessed because writing seems to be part and parcel of your existence. Your devotion to writing is worth emulating.

You told how you have been engaged in writing diaries and stories. Writing a diary is a rare experience, which I too enjoy. I value it because it gives me chance to look inside to pen down how I have spent the day.

Thank you for sharing thoughts on writing and reading.

I love the language and style of this article. It is smooth and spontaneous.

Write on!
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Review by jaya
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
In the depth of heart lie dreams.
Everyone has an inner sanctum, one's own private world. some dreams and desires that we cannot express are found here.

In this rhyming poem I find a beautiful world full of vernal charm. Imagery shows the glorious green canopy of trees, golden sun, angels and mermaids. What a youthful world full of dreamscapes!

Imagery has appeal to eye and heart.

Unfulfilled wishes too rest here.

It flows well.

Write on!
Glorious and Joyful
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Review of Simple  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Remembering Levi Dickenson makes the poem special. Like his corn broom, this poem too is simple and it has a nice flow.

Brooms have changed their shape and quality and there are a great variety now in the market.

"Knowing his wonderful idea

Grew up to be synthetic..."

The difference between the synthetic and natural is like the difference between artificial and natural flowers.
Anything natural is simple and useful. Sometimes, synthetic could be allergic too.

Free style poem appeals to me with its visual imagery.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there,

The free style poem is attractively composed. I can see that it is well constructed and shows the comprehensive picture of the pandemic as the lines scroll down the page.

You have brought out all the important features of this virus, which has now become a threat to our global community.

Your images paint the frightening visuals of patients struggling and and many dying helplessly. What a fate!

Precautions to avoid corona are well embedded into the body of the poem.

It flows well.

Write on!
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Review of After hours  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Lusha

I am attracted to this poem because I can relate to the subject. Bringing up children is a real challenge indeed. Yet, a mother loves them more than anyone in the world. No wonder moms are referred to as "Supreme Mother."

Imagery shows what a drag a job it is to take care of kids. Their energy is difficult to deal with. A mother needs to extremely creative and patient while handling her children. Their curiosity is endless and the spirit of adventure terrifying. A mother is constantly nervous of their safety.
No wonder the grey in the hair makes an early appearance.

The second half of the poem shows her manner of relaxation. Now she assumes her role as a queen of her own world.
"Your sweet scent of tobacco and strong coffee enveloping ..."

Sounds exciting.

Happy WDC Account Anniversary!
Have a wonderful day!

Write on!
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Review by jaya
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Roxanna,

this poem that deals with computers and real life sounds interesting. I am reviewing it for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations and have a lovely day.

It is difficult to mix personal pleasure and business. I mean a job. But being human, I think we do use the freedom to click on what interests us more than the deadlines set by the job concerns.

"There’s a deadline this afternoon
How will I ever make it through."

Checking email is the first thing any computer buff would do and then according to priorities we move on.
An important factor you highlighted is the slipping away of time. The computer is one of the most absorbing diversions the human intellect had ever invented. Hours pass and we still keep on clicking away.

" What, is it lunch time already?"

Great poem with a realistic touch and appealing imagery.

It flows well.

Write on!
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Review of Love found me  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello ridinghood,

I found this poem with a great appeal in your portfolio and am reviewing it for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations for being creatively active for one more year at the WDC. Have a wonderful day!

One single line illuminates the whole poem like a beacon light that lights up a whole dark sea.

"We are all immigrant souls."

This thoughtfully used metaphor brings out the spiritual meaning of our life on earth. We are all immigrants on earth. None can claim a place of earth as their own. We have no rights on anything. The moment we use up the gift of life we leave.
I feel that living with detachment can make us happy and hassle-free.

This awareness at the end of the poem is the result of a glorious summer night filled with the memories of "stories and prayers" gifted to you by grandmothers.

To me, prayer for the welfare of "migrants" could be read as prayer for all living beings on earth.

It flows well.

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Review of Caged  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Built on a web of metaphors your prose-poem caught me in the thick of it and I have no way to get out. You spun the words in a way that paint the picture of a single person in a cage freed by the hand of love, aggressively.

You had shown and experienced that the deepest dark and the brightest of light are not exclusive. They blend with love and touch the shores of joy forever.

With the literary adornments like metaphor, image and imagination in place it flows well.

Keep on writing.

Glorious and Joyful




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Review of May Angels Watch  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Victoria,

this is a great poem of blessing, which I picked from your port. I am reviewing it for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing another year with the WDC. Have a lovely day!

This poem full of blessings is an effective one. It certainly uplifted my drooping spirits. When darkness surrounds me, poems of this kind soothe my mind and heart. They tell me that life is yet to be. It tells me that never think too much of past and become tearful. I am also warned not to entertain too many dreams about future, for it might make me fearful. So I conclude that living in the present is the best way to use gift of life, in a way that makes me cheerful.

"May Angels steer you into morning dew,
May they warm you and live in your heart,"

This structured verse has a number of telling images that appeal to my eye and mind as well.

Spiritual to the core it flows well.

Write on!
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Review of Wheels  
Review by jaya
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
The detective found the killer but how would she chase him and prove him the killer of nineteen people in the neighborhood?

Now her own life is at risk. The wheel-chair-bound man can target her as he did with others.

I like the way you let in clues ever so smoothly over the story. It is not easy to find them and connect them with the murders.

This story sounds original and well planned.

I wonder if Dan knows of his wife's new findings.

Engaging!

Write on!
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Review of My Hearts Choice  
Review by jaya
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
The couple that was meant to unite were separated for unknown reasons. The lyrics trace the beginning, the middle and the end of an appealing romance. Their love nipped even as it tried to blossom.

This theme is well set to music. A romance shadowed by death and sadness.

Imagery shows the growing romance with its ups and downs on the road of life. It proves that things happen, especially the tragic things happen without warning and it is like the smiling sun is overcast with sudden grey clouds.

Imagery is visual and it appeals to me.

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Review of Narcissistic Lure  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Riot,

I am reviewing this poem for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing yet another year at the WDC. Have a wonderful Anniversary.

It looks as though you have decided to affirm love for the child, the love that was denied to you.

Young mothers often have no time for the babies they give birth to. There could be many reasons. In this case however, you talked about "narcissistic lure" entertained by the mother. This attraction is strange and dangerous enough to cause a breach between the mother and child. The delicate bond between the two could be severed due to over indulgence or complete absorption in self.

".. years passed by
and turned into never"

It takes a brave child to wait for someone that never comes. Rather a helpless situation. The decision you made is perfect and to the point.

Imagery works like magic. It is visual and appeals to my heart.

Structured verse flows well.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Enthusiasm to learn art from an unexpected section of students is beautifully shown in this poem.
The poem starts on a note of mystery. The artist had no idea who his apprentices would be. His puzzlement comes to fore agreeably, when he meets them.

"About fifty children running, laughing, and aged about eight or ten,"

Instead of shouting and drawing attention from the playful kids, the poet unfurls his canvas and starts the painting. It proved to be the right move. Children loved the drawing and were attracted to it. Its effect is shown in their total attention to the painting with various scenes from nature.

"Silent, wide eyed, and frozen still as if each were a statue of a child."

What better compliment can an artist expect from his students? Helping them learn the art of painting certainly gives the reward of satisfaction to the teacher.

This perfectly rhyming poem is well penned with visual imagery and it has a great flow.

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Review of Lyrical Minds  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Writing to kindle hope in millions of minds is certainly possible for poets like you, Brenda.
One of my most favored themes is, hope. This poem breathes a fresh fragrance into the spirit of hope.

Title is especially charming. "Lyrical minds" certainly suit the poets. It describes the heart and soul of a poet with a song of love displayed in his or her verses.

"The sweet notes that make life go round."

This rhyming verse is made of sweet thoughts of aspirations and songs of love and hope. Words used ring in the way poets sail through their poems with their immortal lyricism. Music is not only food of love but of hope too.

My favorite lines;
"Some people live with a song in their heart,
And an anthem of hope in their soul,"

It flows well.

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Review of Changing Seasons  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
The poet's idea of keeping hope alive takes a novel expression. Changing seasons keep the glow of hope burning. The parching heat somewhat dries it but the thought of future rain and cool winds brings solace to soul.

"The parching heat of summer
To the cool winds of autumn"

Similarly, winter, a season with killing cold and discomfort soon gives way to spring and once again the hope's glow.

"the icy hand of winter
Only to awaken again in the spring"

Oh yes. We definitely need hope whatever be the season. With hope we feel energized and inspired.

Imagery from nature is attractive to the eye and mind.

It flows well.

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Review of With Love  
Review by jaya
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This story is way outside the box. I have never read any supernatural story as new and different as this. It is a love story told on both spheres, i.e. this world and "the life after death".

Dreams play a major role in this story. The intensity of attachment shows up in it. We dream of things which we cannot reach out to in normal life. The case of Harry and his girl friend seem more realistic in the dream she had.

The content apart, this story, told in first person point of view is narrated in a convincing manner. By the end of the story you come to believe in the events. It leaves you thinking of reasons why such things happen.

"I was totally confused; my senses abandoned me, I did not know what to do."

It is quite brilliant, I mean the technique the writer used in penning the story.

On the one hand, we see the reality, how the girl checks the room suspecting someone's presence, and on the other, unseen she feels the intimate touch and presence of that someone right in her bed. Naturally, she was confused.

Of course, the psychologists would come up with a well proved theory of the behavior of the mind in its subconscious state.
Yet, certain things cannot be explained or their existence shown.

Too good not to be true.

Prose style flows like a poem and the sentence structure, the smooth transformations win my praise.

Write on!
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Review of Imprisoned  
Review by jaya
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
That, words can be deadly is shown in this poem graphically. Harsh and unfair words seem to cause the fall, both physically and mentally. The first two stanzas elaborate what wasn't the reason for the hurt feelings. It is a fine way of heightening my curiosity to know exactly what went by.
It is revealed in the shape of a fall and then the clear description of the effect of those accusative or abusive words.

It is the effect that catches my visual attention. But the cause behind plays on my imagination and keeps me guessing.

"with no remorse
he tore it apart."

You wouldn't know how to react too.

I appreciate economy of words used with great depth. Poetic to the core.

With touching imagery, it flows well.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Megan,

this poem on precious memories appeals to me. I am reviewing this for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing one more fruitful year with the WDC. Have a lovely day!

This verse, as it scrolls down the page is filled with pleasant memories of child hood days spent on grand parents'farm and the charm and joy of festive seasons like Christmas and Thanksgiving. Memories are surely a treasure box, which we can open any time and get lost happily as they wash over us.

"Autumn, winter, spring and fall.
Halloween, Christmas, Easter and Thanksgiving."

Poet's background details make interesting reading. Airplanes and dad's job as the pilot are very appealing.

Life moves forward and time teaches us how to enjoy the memories of loving people, who played key role in shaping our own destinies.

With visual and appealing imagery, this free-style poem flows well.

Write on!
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