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571 Public Reviews Given
586 Total Reviews Given
Review Style
I try to give comprehensive reviews.
I'm good at...
I like reviewing poetry and short stories.
Favorite Item Types
I really love structured poems with good rhythm and rhyme.
Least Favorite Item Types
I don't enjoy reading long stories riddled with grammar or spelling mistakes because these distract me.
I will not review...
If I don't enjoy reading it on some level, then I won't review it. So if you got a review from me, even one with a low rating, I enjoyed the read.
Public Reviews
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Review of Darkness wins  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a sad poem about the disorienting grief after a loss.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found a couple of typos,
- what my bodies like - you meant body's,
- now way to get them out - I think you meant no way,

The repeated phrase "I don't know how to feel" is strange because the feelings are so strong and so clear.

Well done writing a poem to express the sadness.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (2.0)

You wrote How To advice for writing interactive stories.

Grammar and spelling are okay and seldom distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found some typos,
- who actually want tot write - you meant to,
- to try their luck, writers are drawn - as writers are drawn....
- your on the same page - you're,
- the expletive doesn't add to your writing,
- what your going for - you're,

Your points are repetitive so by item 5 I was bored of reading the same thing.

Well done writing How To advice.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of A Car's Life  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.5)

You wrote a free verse poem about a car's life and perspective.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image of a car would be great and really suit your writing.

I found "My swinging windshields," is a weird image. Maybe you meant windshield wipers, and it needs no comma.
- "While I dedicate you my entire life." - while I dedicate to you....

Well done writing a good poem from an interesting perspective.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Look at Me!  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (5.0)

You wrote a fun poem about a car that makes dreams come true.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and is essential for your writing.

I found I was trying to make sense of the poem being about a magical person until I saw your cover image.

Well done writing a really fun and awesome poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Beware the Dream  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a free verse poem about how deeply our daydreams affect our lives.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found, because of the suddenly appearing wand, did you mean the daydreams drove someone crazy?

Well done writing a pretty verse.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
General Comments

You wrote a sad goodbye to a lost fur baby.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found the little you shared about the cause of death made me want to read more about it.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Most of the story is the goodbye letter. It's okay.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Not really, although she does start to heal.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

There is none and that's okay.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a great goodbye letter and putting it in a short story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (5.0)

You wrote a poem about a forgotten, overlooked and lonely girl.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found the rhythm and rhyme scheme pleasing.

Well done writing such a haunting poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a letter to a love who passed away. Your letter invites the question, is it better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all?

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me. Your use of 'albeit' is unusual.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found I could really relate to the ache of lost love that feels like drug withdrawal, even years later. And I could relate to the lack of purpose in living.

You're missing an article in " I write letter every day" - a letter.

Well done writing a moving letter and thanks for sharing it.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of At two  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a cute poem about life with a two year old.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found your poem captures the age nicely.

Well done writing a good free verse poem about moments worth remembering.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
General Comments

You wrote a gripping Halloween story about friends on a party boat with events gone wrong.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found Beth's story the most gripping.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a good read.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)

You wrote an explicit memo to all employees at a place where language doesn't matter.

Grammar and spelling are okay and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found
- "can only get AIDS" - delete only because it means those RAPED are limited to 2 options, which isn't the intent of the memo.
- "please bring to the" - add this, as in, please bring this to the....

Well done writing an entertaining memo.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Walking Past  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a really sad poem about losing a friend and adjusting slowly, day by day.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are mostly well-chosen but Writing.Com isn't a topic in your writing.
The cover image is good and suits your writing.

I found you expressed the feelings really well. When we lose someone, it feels like a drug withdrawal - it's a very painful process.

"A friend, an argument, and a loss." is a fine description. You don't need the rest.

Well done writing a good poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Forever Dark  
Review by Zhen
Rated: ASR | (3.5)

You wrote a free verse poem based on the idea of an eternal eclipse.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image of an eclipse would be great and really suit your writing.

I found the war following the bad crops didn't make sense to me.

Well done writing a good idea and making the scene so vivid.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a book review and pitch for the free book titled 70 POLICIES THAT SHAPED INDIA -1947 to 2017, Independence to $2.5 Trillion.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image of the book cover would be great and really suit your writing.

I found book titles should be underlined instead of in quotes.

Well done writing a good pitch for a book on an interesting topic. It was a bit dense to read.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (5.0)

You wrote a beautiful poem about peace.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found nothing to distract me while I was reading.

Well done writing such a good poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)

You wrote an essay on causes of and solutions for domestic violence. I don't think it's purely role model; I think the character of the individual has a lot to do with it.

Grammar and spelling are okay and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found a few typos caught my attention.
- straightforward is one word (you typed it as two words).
- can and does become a recipe... - start with this, as in, this can and does....
- or are equipped with the tools... you meant aren't.

Well done writing an interesting essay.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of A Faraway Land  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a poem celebrating the pure environment in the north.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image of the region would be great and really suit your writing.

I found the ending is crisper, so suits your poem more, if ending with a period instead of ellipses.

Well done writing a good, clear poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.0)


You wrote a poem about making a wish upon a butterfly's kiss.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me. I like the font and the layout.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found use of itinerant confusing in
- Wish to also do some fun itinerant, because it sounds like
- Wish to also do some fun person. The intended meaning is not clear.

Well done writing an inspirational poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Un-PUN-ctilious  
Review by Zhen
Rated: 13+ | (2.0)
General Comments

You wrote a short story filled with bad puns.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

They don't develop.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

There is the challenge of the flood but nothing interesting happens.

Does the action rise to a climax?

No, the puns simply stop.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

It doesn't sound natural.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a bunch of puns into a story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Mystery Woman.  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a poem about a beautiful woman you once knew.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found the line "she'll never tweet" a little hard to understand.

Well done writing a good poem about an important memory.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
General Comments

You wrote a story about a vampire who wanted to be vegetarian.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found I expected Reginald to be too impatient the second time as well.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a good short story with a sad ending.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

You wrote a free verse poem with a rhyme scheme you included in your comments. The poem is well laid out and the fonts are easy to read.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found your poem uplifting and inspirational.

Well done writing a good poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Hank's Flower  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Comments

You wrote a story about a girl's worries in the rain.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres aren't chosen. For example, Drama could be a good choice.

I found I really liked the ending.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing writing a great short story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Time Capsule  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote an interesting and entertaining poem about the pandemic in 2020, but you left out some of the things that went wrong in 2020. For example, we were almost hit by an asteroid.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found I liked your rhyme scheme but I missed the punctuation at the end of the lines.

Well done writing an entertaining poem about what grandparents will be telling their grandchildren about the pandemic.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of PINK WILD  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a free verse poem about a thorn and its blossom.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image of a rose with a thorn would be great and really suit your writing.

I found I wasn't sure if you were referencing the Thorn Birds who are said to sing their sweetest song as they impale themselves on thorns.

Well done writing a good poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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