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Review Style
I try to give comprehensive reviews.
I'm good at...
I like reviewing poetry and short stories.
Favorite Item Types
I really love structured poems with good rhythm and rhyme.
Least Favorite Item Types
I don't enjoy reading long stories riddled with grammar or spelling mistakes because these distract me.
I will not review...
If I don't enjoy reading it on some level, then I won't review it. So if you got a review from me, even one with a low rating, I enjoyed the read.
Public Reviews
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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.5)

You wrote a poem for encouraging yourself, but it could encourage anyone facing a challenge. I found your poem encouraged me (I want to write a movie, that's my impossible mountain to climb).

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found 'instil' is spelled instill.

Well done writing an important message in your inspirational poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (5.0)

You wrote an entertaining poem about a game of chess and how much it is like life.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen. I wouldn't have guessed romance/love might apply.
A cover image of chess pieces would be great and really suit your writing.

I found your insights true to life: often the one with a lot of bravado loses.

Well done writing an interesting poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Little Jamey  
Review by Zhen
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
General Comments

You wrote a touching story about a broken-hearted woman who struggles to recover after losing her family.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found you chose a difficult subject because broken hearts can take longer to heal than physical injuries.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Not as expected.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

It seems like she is in group councelling then in her imagination.

Well done writing a good short story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of The resort  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (2.5)
General Comments

You wrote a free verse poem about living on an island.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes, I wondered all the way through what was going to happen next.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Not really. It's flat.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

It's not clear though, how the choice of being eaten or returning to work happens - is the character on the island rescued?


Well done writing a good poem with an interesting choice.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.5)

You wrote good copy about how to reduce stress.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found the lack of paragraphs disconcerting. You have some paragraph breaks in the middle of a sentence. Also, 'get' doesn't need to be capitalized in "email and Get a copy ".

I understand it's your first post but still, I would lose the PS if I were you.

Well done writing a good essay (that reads like copy) on an important topic.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: ASR | (4.0)

You wrote a beautiful eulogy for your grandpa.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found a few small typos caught my attention,
- As he went, grandpa would - his name is capitalized,
- about this one" he'd - needs a comma: about this one," he'd
- styrophone is spelled styrofoam,
- windows needs to be capitalized,

Well done writing a touching eulogy that captures important memories.

Write on! *BigSmile*
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Review by Zhen
Rated: ASR | (4.0)

You wrote good lyrics and while I was reading I found I wanted to listen to the tune.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found the opening harsh, but that could be mitigated with the tune. Later in the song, the same approach doesn't sound too harsh anymore.

Well done writing a good song.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Lust  
Review by Zhen
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)


You wrote a free verse poem about wanting a new and deeper relationship with a mentor.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found you asked why the urge, and I can only say it's really common to want the mentor relationship to develop into something more.

Well done writing a good poem that describes the ache of wanting to develop with a mentor.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Creationism 101  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)
General Comments

You wrote a short story about the debate about evolution.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found at the end of the story, when you wrote "and left there statements", you meant their.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes, Muzzy is a funny prof.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

It's okay.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes. Good job having an event happen that few would believe.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)

You wrote a free verse poem about the constructs of modern man.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are mostly well-chosen. But it isn't an essay and it isn't nonsense.

I found you raised some really good points: transcend (or do the opposite?), and live in the confines of the work schedule.

Well done writing a thoughtful poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.5)

You wrote a poem about God's role in our relationships.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen, except romance.

I found your poem reminded me that a couple who loves God first is helped by that through many difficulties.

Well done writing about the importance of faith.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.0)

You wrote a poem about leaves covered with snow in winter.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me, except for the last line where leaves can be read two ways, and one way is a grammar error.
Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image of snow would be great and really suit your writing.

Well done writing a nice poem that captured the sleepy cold and the outdoor fun of winter.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (2.5)

You wrote a prayer noting harps can be used to worship God.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me. Your capitalization is distracting.
Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image of a harp would be great and really suit your writing.

I found the title in both places probably wants "of" to not be capitalized, to be consistent with your writing.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Jesse  
Review by Zhen
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

You wrote about a lynching.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found the quotes can be removed from a couple of words,
- unable to ‘tell’ their stories - tell is fine.
- witch is fine without quotes, too.

Well done writing a chilling story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Battles Within  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a free verse poem about the importance of companionship.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found it's not clear whether the companion is another person or is God.

Well done writing a poem that shows why it's important we not be alone.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of HASANA  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.5)
General Comments

You wrote a good story about the origins of happiness.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found a couple of mistakes in
- A HUGE STONES FALLING ON HER TRACK, SHE FALL DOWN
- a huge stone... she fell down.
- ON A FEW MOMENTS
- in a few


Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a good story. Remember to punctuate each sentence.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Hyperbole  
Review by Zhen
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

You wrote a fun poem about hyperboles.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found I laughed at your couplet
- And though my feet are killing me,
- I won't be a fatality.

Well done writing a fun and educational poem! Thanks for making me laugh today.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a free verse poem describing the bliss and challenges of long-term love.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found your poem reads more as prose.

Well done writing about a difficult topic and capturing it well.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Service Dog  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote an arkquain about a dog in good health.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen, but maybe the genre animal would be good.

I found your poem has a self-referencing bitem. Is this part of the form of the poem?

Well done writing according to this difficult form.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of VACILLATION  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Comments

You wrote an interesting poem about the possible end of a love story.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found some of the rhymes strained because the words have many syllables yet rhyme in only the last syllable.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes. It's a good way to end it, leaving the choice with the other.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

No, presumambly they are in a private place, maybe indoors or outdoors.

Well done writing an interesting poem with a fresh take on the issue.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a free verse poem about sharing an experience with the moon.

Grammar and spelling are mostly good and seldom distract me. However, ellipses are like this.... It's 3 in the middle of a sentence and 4 at the end.

Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image of the moon would be great and really suit your writing.

I found I liked that the moon cried back and what she said.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of the toe incident  
Review by Zhen
Rated: 13+ | (2.0)
General Comments

You wrote a horror story about a possessed watermelon.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me. You need some paragraph breaks though.
Genres are not well-chosen. This isn't comedy.

I found in " i felt a presence in the back of my mind it was saying "you"
- capital I,
- delete it was, add a comma after saying,
- capitalize You.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

No, it moves too fast to suspend disbelief.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes, but it needs proper punctuation (see examples in published fiction).

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

I guess it's in the kitchen but it should be out in the yard. No, I don't know where it is.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
General Comments

You wrote a free verse poem about a tragedy.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

Your poem tells a story -
Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a poignant insight into an important part of life.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of This Tainted Love  
Review by Zhen
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)

You wrote a free verse poem about tainted love.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me, but maybe you want to capitalize perfect at the start of line 5.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found many of the short phrases ending with periods aren't sentences.

Well done writing a poem that expresses hurt and frustration.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Her First Time  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.0)
General Comments

You wrote a preamble that could have been horror or erotica, but it turned out to be something simple.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres aren't well-chosen. I don't think it's comedy. Maybe drama.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

No, because we don't know what it is.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

No, because "it" is hidden for too long, and it doesn't sound natural.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

N/A.

Well done writing a short story that keeps the reader guessing.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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