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Review Style
I try to give comprehensive reviews.
I'm good at...
I like reviewing poetry and short stories.
Favorite Item Types
I really love structured poems with good rhythm and rhyme.
Least Favorite Item Types
I don't enjoy reading long stories riddled with grammar or spelling mistakes because these distract me.
I will not review...
If I don't enjoy reading it on some level, then I won't review it. So if you got a review from me, even one with a low rating, I enjoyed the read.
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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.5)
General Comments

You wrote a fun poem inspiring writers to have hope. I like that you made the poem easy to read - thank you.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

Your poem sort of tells a story, so...
Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

The writing is engaging.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

The tempo and unfolding images are compelling.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a great poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: ASR | (5.0)

You wrote a beautiful poem about a dangerous sea path.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
A cover image would be great and would really suit your writing - for example, the photo that inspired it.

I found your link to religion interesting.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a nice poem about being inspired by nature.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found your idea of learning from the stars really interesting.


Well done writing a moving poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (1.0)
General Comments

You wrote what seems to be Harry Potter fan fiction.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The description is a run on sentence.

I found your opening sentences are a run on sentence.
- an hard is incorrect, it's a hard.
- at least is two words,
- fighted is fought.
- standed is stood.
- Dialogue should be punctuated properly. See how in any fiction book.
- enterance is entrance.
- The author's note can be a dropnote.
- an chapter is a chapter.


Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

No.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

No.

Does the action rise to a climax?

No.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

No.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

No.

In your story, you need to show, don't tell.


Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: ASR | (4.0)

You wrote a nice poem about the later years in life.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.
The description is about you, but not about the piece.

I found you give a nice feeling to the final years and a nice interpretation of burial.

Well done writing a great poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Good Mourning  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (5.0)
General Comments

You wrote a great story about the crowded subways. I've lived in Taipei and Beijing and your story made me feel I was in Tokyo.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found myself absorbed in your tale.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes. The description of the subway crowd is especially good.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Yes.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a really good story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (2.5)

You wrote a few paragraphs about faith.

Grammar and spelling are okay and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found a few typos,
- save you?Suppose - needs a space,
- "od bless you! - God,
- life> So it is - question mark,
- that god would save him. - God,
- some body - somebody is alive and some body is dead,

Well done writing your brief sermon,

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (1.0)

You wrote your encouragement for yourself while you are going through a hard time.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
You meant patience, not patients, in your title.

I found some punctuation errors - the period goes at the end of a sentence with a space after, not before. I is capitalized, but you have a couple of i.

Dealing with the loss of a loved one (it sounds like a death) and the loss of a boyfriend, is worthy of two separate paragraphs. Or, rephrase it so it doesn't sound like someone died if they didn't.

Well done writing through the difficulties of healing.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Icy Hand  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.0)
General Comments

You wrote a poem about surviving winter well.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found I wish it rhymed.

Story Comments

Your poem tells a story about home life.

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a good free form poem. A cover image of snow would suit your writing well.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Civil Warriors  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)
General Comments

You wrote a touching poem about war.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are chosen... it's not really inspirational though, is it?

I found I like how you ended it, with the change from the future to my future.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes, although you could develop the setting more if you feel like editing.

Well done writing a good poem about a hard battle.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Ennui  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)
General Comments

You wrote a good poem about giving up on love.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found I could relate to the experience. But the last line? "why the beat poets" doesn't make sense to me.

Well done writing a great poem that captures why stay single.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (5.0)
General Comments

You wrote a funny poem or song very well.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
The cover image is great and really suits your writing.

I found I had to laugh a few times. Also, one comma seems out of place to me:
- Now my cows, graze in a travelin’ band. (no comma needed)

Well done writing a great poem. I see why it won the Cramp.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of SCARS OF THE SOUL  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.5)
You wrote a touching free form poem.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen. The genre Drama could work, too.

I found your heavy emphasis on scares moving, especially when I reread the description.

Well done writing a thoughtful poem.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.0)
You wrote a poem about the living, and the sun and the moon.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found I liked how you included all the creatures. However, you don't connect the sun, the moon and the living with the idea that the world is getting smaller.

The world is smaller in the sense of transportation time, connectivity, ability to communicate, and the world is bigger in terms of the economy. Also, the world is smaller in terms of renewable resources. You could include some of these or related ideas in your poem.

Well done writing a poem about how we all see the sun and the moon.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)

You wrote a good essay on a topic I care about. The font is too small to read comfortably.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found opinions and debates are best when solutions are presented. We can use paper instead of plastic grocery bags, but demand has to be within renewable supply capacity limits. Some jobs are dependent on plastic so maybe compostable plastic would work for those messy tasks. Although plastic is a major problem, deforestation is a bigger problem combined with global warming, and we need reforestation. By presenting solutions and priorities, your opinion piece sounds better.

Well done writing a great opinion piece.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Fools  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.0)

You wrote a free form poem about lost love, and the reactions.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found I don't know why Flower is capitalized. "Was so lighten up for me" has a grammar error so it's hard to parse. starring has one r.

Well done writing a poem about lost love.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (2.0)

You wrote what could be a great diary entry on your personal reaction to the pandemic.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres could be better chosen. This is more your personal reaction to the news than news itself.

I found the piece didn't build. There isn't a story. Again, this is fine if it is a diary entry. Also "how often i should" should be capital I.

Well done writing your personal reflections so clearly.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Darkling  
Review by Zhen
Rated: 13+ | (2.5)

General Comments
You wrote an encouraging poem meant to lift someone out of dark feelings.

Grammar and spelling are mostly good and seldom distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found a few spelling and grammar errors distracted me while I was reading,
- "times a healer" - apostrophe s,
- "that it always has" that or it,
- "Easy said when you're heart whole" - easily, and heart's,

Story Comments
Are the characters engaging?

Yes. It's a story about a caregiver encouraging a depressed person.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

No.

Well done writing about the light and the dark.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)

General Comments
You wrote a funny story.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen. You could also list it as comedy.

I found the name Jonathan, whichever way you choose to spell it, should be consistent in the story. I think you prefer Johnathon, but I'm not sure.

Story Comments
Are the characters engaging?

Yes, it's a perplexing, funny story.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

It's reasonable because the characters are so silly.

Does the action rise to a climax?

Not really.

Does the dialogue sound natural and does it advance the plot?

Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?

Yes.

Well done writing a funny story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of A Hopeful Longing  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (3.5)

You wrote a free form poem about a craving for something.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found I wanted to know more about what the craving was for. Also, this line is awkward:
- An ecstasy of somewhat kind,
And it's not clear why there is a twister.

Well done writing about the routine of work and life, and in our mind is a craving.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Writer's Block  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (5.0)

General Comments
You wrote a double acrostic with your name.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

Story Comments
Are the characters engaging?
Yes.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?
Yes.

Is the setting clear in the reader's mind?
Yes.

Well done writing a double acrostic that tells a story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (2.0)
You wrote encouragement to parents to raise their daughters well.

Grammar and spelling are mostly good and seldom distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

I found a few mistakes that would be easy to correct,
- Punctuation is missing from the first few points.
- You shift from 3rd to 2nd person. It's awkward.
- "but it is proved by what. that we do" - no that.
- "Babies should set goals in life..." - babies in diapers have the goal of walking after crawling, so they may be too underdeveloped for this. Children, instead of babies.
- "school clubs, gifted classes" - and gifted classes,
- In the same sentence, end it with a period instead of ellipses.
- "Parents don't frame them" - needs a comma after Parents.
- The next sentence says he, but this is about daughters, so she is appropriate.

Well done writing some heartening advice.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of AUDREY  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)

General Comments

You wrote a song that tells a story about growing up.

Grammar and spelling are good and mostly don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
You could add a cover image that is great and really suits your writing.

I found one typo distracting:
- Now that sweet baby girls (no -s),
is in the 2nd chorus.

Story Comments

Are the characters engaging?

Yes, growing up is one of the great mysteries that is always engaging.

Is there enough conflict? Is the plot compelling?

Yes.

Does the action rise to a climax?

No, in the versus she could grow up all the way into adulthood.

Well done writing a song/poem that tells an important story.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review by Zhen
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
You wrote a poem that starts with a rhyme scheme but that ends as a freeform poem. I would like your poem more if you stuck to the rhyme scheme and syllable count.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.

Only the title says this is about a foreign boyfriend.

Well done writing a poem that communicates love.

Write on! *BigSmile*


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Review of Oh Canada  
Review by Zhen
Rated: E | (4.0)
You wrote a nice poem about Canada.

Grammar and spelling are good and don't distract me.
Genres are well-chosen.
You could choose a cover image that is great and really suits your writing, like a maple leaf.

I found it a little strange that fireworks are taboo and that seaplane is the only access.

Well done writing a good poem!

Write on! *BigSmile*


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