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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
If this is your random thinking then you need to take some time and share with us more of your thinking. PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Your detail of your life was interesting and I enjoyed reading it.
SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
spelling errors imagen should be imagine
never taught should be thought X
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Story about a boy who has a brother who seems to grow quickly to a large size with a very muscular build.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Two main characters are in this story.
Lance who has the tremendous growth and Kevin who becomes the narrator of this tale.
The entire tale seems to be centred on the growth of Lance.
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A short article on reaching your goals. the author states that traffics get in your way. He goes on to suggest that we may rely on god to assist us in reaching these goals.
STRUCTURE:
The first thing you need to do is change your font.
This one is very difficult to read.
Next the spacing of sentences and paragraphs is important.
That will also make the article easier to read.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
The poem seems to have an almost reverence for rain.
I found it hard to follow any substance in the phrases and there seemed to be ideas that went nowhere. One very clear thought was that rain falls on all the big and the small.
POETIC CONTENT:
Three verses of six lines each with lines four and six rhyming.
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A love poem where the beginning is a acknowledgement of meeting and then progresses to warmth and finally onto passion and a deepening faith
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Well done. Well said.
Many organizations have in their credo to live and change one day at a time.
The longest journey starts with a single step.
Great minds through the years have oft repeated this information and now you deliver in poetic form.
POETIC FORM:
Six verses of four lines written in iambic tetrametre
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Tea is the USA often means iced tea. Yet in the resat of the world tea is a beverage made my infusing some type of tea leaves in hot water.
PLOT:
this article expressed the feeling of the author about teas as well ad giving the information about several types of tea.
SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Share some of the other types and flavours of tea.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Can't go into the water. Stuck on the hot sand because of a cast.
POETIC STRUCTURE:
five verses of four lines each. There are two lines that repeat in each verse on line two and four
the hot sand is scorching my toes,
The bright sun is blistering my nose
FINAL THOUGHTS:
Write more this is good.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A short Haiku poem which meets the strict rules of the poetry form but has little informational content.
STRUCTURE:
The haiku is a Japanese verse in three lines. Line one has 5 syllables, line 2 has 7 syllables and line three has 5 syllables. Haiku is a mood poem and it doesn't use any metaphors or similes.
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I am so glad you are happy with your time on WDC. I also have spent years in delightful toil with words and thoughts.
I was away for a while but have recently returned and I understand exactly the feelings you are expressing.
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An Indian love story. A wise mother of the bride knows this couple will have good times and bad in the future. She tells them to make a deposit into an account everytime they celebrate. One day the couple are near splitting. the wise mother tells them to spend the money. They see the times in their lives when they were happy and reconcile.
SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Good story. It fits into any culture.
A wise thing to teach others.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
I like the general idea of your story but you have a few lessons to learn in the proper use of conversation.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
A hero is about to come out of his shell.
SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
The gist is here you just need to work on presentation.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
This poem is an acrostic. Using the letters of Happy Thanksgiving as a beginning of a phrase or sentence.
POETIC PATTERN:
The first verse has the rhyming scheme of A B B A A.
The second verse is A B B A A C D D C C E E
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I guess this feeling radiates every season. From the camps in the early spring to the last vestiges of baseball being played in the brisk October air the baseball fan is breathing and filled with the pomp and glory of this game.
This poem makes a valiant effort to highlight the feeling of victory and defeat in the sport of baseball.
POETIC STRUCTURE:
Five verses each with four rhyming lines.
SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
More work like this would be appreciated and read.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
i have read this several times and still do not understand what this story is about. Are these dead people who are somehow giving up some practical things?
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
It is hard to understand the heirarchy of the characters and positions which are mentioned in this item.
SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
I guess it is my responsibility to read more to understand about Pandora.
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A whimsical and silly poem about a mouse who invades a person's home and they so not seem to be able to get rid of it.
They become friends.
STRUCTURE:
Fourteen four line verses with a A B C B rhyming pattern.
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Outside today the show flurries are blowing but the words that I am reading are filled with images of the warmth of spring. It is free form poetry that is portraying the efforts of bees and birds seeking out the food for their springtime needs.
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You have to know the story of Odysseus (Ulysses) before you can understand or evaluate this story. The Goddess Athena is appealing to her father the mighty Zeus to assist this hero of the greek mythology.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Athena uses all her words to persuade her father to find ways to aid her hero and his kingdom and queen.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A simple poem depicting the love one has for another.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Three verses of three lines each.
Each verse has two rhyming lines and the third line ends with my
soul which connects the poem in an interesting manner. I read the poem several times but there is no lyrical feel to it.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Wow! you take the most loved character in Santa and tie him into the feared vampire.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
I read the poem several times and noticed it's short almost stacco pulse is like a short beat of a snare drum.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A letter to self before entering the navy.
I think back of what I was when I entered new entry training.
I was a mere boy and I am not sure that experience made me a man but the following years sure changed me.
Advice given with hindsight if always worthy.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
We should look back and see what advice we could give ourselves today.
SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
pick more details rather than just getting in shape.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A piece of flash fiction with a little twist at the end. Two boys with a treasure map go searching for that treasure in a cave.
they fine q chest and I will not share the rest so it will be a surprise.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
I am puzzled. What is this poem about? There does not seem to be an ongoing thought which I could grasp. I found several statements or phrases that provided hope some continuing thought might draw this together to make sense to me.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
A lot of starters but I could find no development that made sense to me.
SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:
Connect your thoughts because you definitely left me puzzled.
FINAL THOUGHTS:
Sorry for the poor review. The poem left me wanting something more.
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
A short poem that leaves the events to the reader.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
For me I am reminded of the farewell scene from "Casablanca" I see the trench coated figure of Llsa played by Ingrid Bergman.
Then comes Rick, Humphrey Bogart, rushes up to her and they embace. He utter the famous lines"Maybe not today, maybe not tomorrow, but soon and for the rest of your life."
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OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:
Almost too short to review. Here we have the forest pond.
We hear the croaking of the frogs as they bellow out their presence so that their mates may find them.
PLOT & CHARACTERS:
A question is asked. Do they croak also when it is raining? I guess it depends on how important it is for them to mate.
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