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#3106868

Review of All To You

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "All To You"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

A truly awe-inspiring poem. I can sympathize with your feelings on this; finding the man that you love and clawing your way from depression. It just goes to show that one person truly can make a difference. I see your words on the screen and grin, I'm so happy for you. Internally, I'm so happy with myself too because I can relate. My favorite stanza was stanza 4, I like how you mention him 'giving back' your smile that others had lost. Superb writing, it's no wonder your so famous on this site. Thank you so much for sharing.

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#3106864

Review of Crimson Teardrops

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Crimson Teardrops"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Thank you for sharing this piece with the community. Child abuse is never an easy thing to write about, believe me I know this to be true. I like how this has a light rhyme to it, and structurally it is sound. I can find no errors and can offer no room for improvement. The imagery in here was great: jagged edges, crimson, bruise this life - it was all great. Of course, in it's greatness, I have to point out how incredibly sad and touching it is. It is definitely deserving of the beautiful ribbon that adorns it. Thank you once again for gracing us with your ability to write.

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#3106736

Review of Tentacle

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

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Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

I found this to be a highly creative poem. I liked the title and I thought it was fitting of the piece and how you cleverly spaced out the words to make a shape. The imagery was great, as you can see with some of your word choices: coincidental illusion, rusty metal bars, slime, marrow of yer bones, etc. I especially liked the voice in this and the slang. Overall I feel you did an excellent job with this. I could find no room for improvement and spotted no errors. Keep up the excellent work, and welcome to WDC!

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#3106280

Review of My Long Journey to Freedom

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "My Long Journey to Freedom"

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I found this to be an extremely touching piece. I couldn't find any errors in spelling or grammar and I can find no room for improvement. My opinion of this is that you are a very strong person. When many would have given up, you prevailed. I know how it can feel to be stuck and helpless while the world around you goes living without you, completely unaware of your predicament. While I can't offer you any advice on rewording or rewriting (because I think it's perfect the way it is) I am able to say that I am touched by this read. Not only is some of the stuff you've written heart breaking, but it's also incredibly inspiring. You lead us with an example to never give up and this piece you've written is a gift to anyone willing to take a few minutes to read it. Thank you very much for sharing this with us.

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#3106040

Review of My Teacher's Dog Ate My Homework

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "My Teacher's Dog Ate My Homework"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

This is an extremely cute poem and very creative. I loved the punch line at the ending, it made me laugh out loud. I think many children would love this poem, it sort of reminds me of Shel Silverstein. I could find nothing wrong with the structure, and can offer no room for improvement. Thank you for sharing this wonderful poem with us, keep up the excellent writing!

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#3105902

Review of Devils Dance in the Moonlight

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Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Devils Dance in the Moonlight"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

The image at the top of this poem is excellent. There's so much I could say about it alone, hehe. I really like the couplet form you have here. The rhyming was spot on and I didn't feel the flow was disrupted at all. I thought it was particularly clever how you have the dialog in red and how it's repeated again at the end. Overall I felt this was a chilling and grizzly read - just the kind I like!

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#3105897

Review of Knock, Knock

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Knock, Knock"

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Wow, this poem put me in awe. I think you did an excellent job conveying emotions throughout this, playing on our fears. The bold text in this poem did it a lot of justice, they pop out of the screen. What's really clever is if you take the bold portions out the poem stands alone very well. You can even put all the bold stuff together and it stands alone too. It's like we got two poems for the price of one, I love it. Thanks as always for sharing your wonderful poetry, it's clear you're very gifted!

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#3105886

Review of Time is Brief

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Time is Brief"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

I have never seen a poem with this structure before, not that I ever noticed anyways. You're right though, it does drive a point home and the words you've used in this are strong and powerful. I noticed one small thing, in line three of the first stanza, it felt like the comma was needed there just like in line 1. I'm not sure if this was done on purpose or not. As for the rest, I think you did an outstanding job. Stanza 4 and 5 were especially powerful and you drove the point home in stanza 5 with the repeating lines and powerful words. Keep up the excellent work, and Happy WDC Anniversary once again!

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#3105879

Review of A Shallow Soul

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Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "A Shallow Soul"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

This is an excellent free-verse poem. I like how it has a fantasy feel to it, though anyone could easily feel the same way you've described. Many words struck me as my eyes fell down this poem, but I especially liked the descriptions in the first two stanzas. The galloping prince, the tiara resting upon your head. The words were almost whimsical and they were so strikingly sad. Thank you for sharing this with us, I look forward to reading more in your port. This poem is well deserving of the lovely ribbon that adorns it. Happy WDC Anniversary!

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#3105870

Review of Darkness

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

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Grim, sad, dark. Everything I'm sure you intended. What I liked most about this was the great descriptions because it made me feel enveloped in the darkness you must've been feeling when writing this. You used great examples of just how dark it is inside, from the theater's without lights, to the cave's inner chambers, and the desert with no moon. Excellent job, I hope to see more from you soon. Happy WDC Anniversary once again!

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#3105867

Review of Alone

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Alone"

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Another great couplet. I think your rhyming is really good. I especially like how you used completely alternate spelling on some of the rhymes, instead of finding a perfect match. Like with vase/space. I've been exploring the poems in your darker poetry folder. You were right, some of them are really heart wrenching. Thank you once again for sharing these, I've been having a great time exploring your port. I think you should do more!

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#3105865

Review of Broken Glass

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Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Broken Glass"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

I love the couplets here. My only suggestion is that perhaps you could put each couplet in their own stanza. Since the poem is not that long, I don't think it's a huge deal. For your word choice, this is excellent. Many powerful words float through your poem, telling us about this sad story: shattered, fragile organ, figure falling - Great job! Thank you for sharing this with us, I'm having fun looking through your port and excellent poetry. Happy WDC Anniversary!

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#3105369

Review of Children In Costumes-Acrostic

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Children In Costumes-Acrostic"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

I can't believe some of your stuff hasn't been rated or reviewed yet. As with the rest, I enjoyed reading this one and am glad that I have. I noticed with your others that you've used color to illustrate the vertical words, but you didn't with this one. However, you did bold it. I like the wording in this and how you've incorporated all the goodies of Halloween. Dracula, licorice, chocolate goodness treats, etc. A delightful read, thank you for sharing it with us!

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#3105364

Review of A Winter Wonderland

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "A Winter Wonderland"

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Another great Acrostic poem, I'm glad I stumbled upon this folder. I like especially how the blue jumps out at me, it was a really great choice. My favorite imagery of this was the penguins gliding on icicle sleds. How it turned darker with the orca strike was a good contrast of the real elements within a community in the wild. It turned dark fast, just like in real life. Thank you for sharing this with us. I hope you have a wonderful WDC Anniversary.

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#3105355

Review of Only My Shadow Moved

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Only My Shadow Moved"

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I think the title (and vertical lettering) of your poem is great. Your word choice was also really good and I didn't feel like any of them were out of place or overly fanciful. I also enjoyed the way each 'stanza' fit each vertical word perfectly and that you kept same-like thoughts in each one. Overall, I feel this was a good read and it got me thinking. Thank you for sharing this with us and I hope you have a Happy WDC Anniversary!

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#3105289

Review of Midnight Walk

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Midnight Walk"

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I love everything about this. From the title, to the great word choice, to the way it was tied together to your voice shining through with every stanza. Your punctuation was great, I loved the structure, and can find no room for improvement. My favorite part of this would have to be the last stanza, but the entire thing was great. Keep up the excellent work and thank you once again for gracing me with your words. Happy WDC Anniversary!

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#3105284

Review of REFLECTIONS

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "REFLECTIONS"

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I can say nothing bad about this poem. You did a killer job with punctuation, just reading the punctuation made my head spin. My only criticism is the title. I don't personally care for capitalized titles or titles that end with a period. Other than that, I thought this was superb. I really thought you expressed emotion well in this and used the poem to speak of reflections. Not just the physical sense, either. It's clear from looking through your port and reading this that you are a talented writer and everything is well deserving of the ribbons that adorn your port. Keep up the excellent work and have a great WDC anniversary!

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#3105223

Review of The Archer

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Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "The Archer"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

I found this poem to be cleverly spaced out, I thoroughly think it does your poem justice. Great job on that aspect! For the words, I think they were meaningful and imagery-filled. I particularly liked: pulsing, rush of blood, and voice of birds. Overall I think you did a good job and I highly enjoyed this read, thank you for sharing it with us. I'm having a lot of fun peaking through your port. You're a very talented writer and it shows through with your remarkable gift at wording things. No subject seems too tough for you. Happy WDC Anniversary once again.

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#3105084

Review of Secret Keeper

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Secret Keeper"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Thank you for sharing this with us, I think you should keep up the good work. I thought your voice was consistant through the entire piece. Writing it from a first person point of view, you've managed to capture slang and good dialogue. Well done. My only thought on the technicality side of this is to watch your punctuation, paragraphing, and spacing. Other than that I'm not sure if I have much else to offer. Again, thank you for sharing this with us. If you decide to add anything to this please drop me an email as I would be interested in re-reading it.

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#3105060

Review of Freedom

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Rated: ASR

| (4.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Freedom"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: The title's definitely fitting to the poem.

Word Choice: Your word choice here was superb. I like how you told this story and posed questions to keep the reader interested.

Structure and Form: This free-verse was well worded. I didn't feel the flow was disrupted.

Overall Opinion: Overall, I felt this was a pretty good poem. Thanks for sharing it with us, and keep up the excellent work!

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#3104957

Review of Sheep in Wolf's Clothing

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Rated: E

| (5.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Sheep in Wolf's Clothing"

Word Choice: I loved your word choice. Some that struck me in particular: wild eyes, ovine miles, hypnotic silver.

Structure and Form: Sonnet's are a very difficult creature to tame, well done.

Imagery: It's packed with it. Every line, every part.

Overall Opinion: I can find no room for improvement. Thank you for sharing this with us, and keep up the good work. Welcome to WDC!

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#3104955

Review of Scared Stiff

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Scared Stiff"

Style & Voice: Your voice showed through with this. I liked his slang, and the way he spoke throughout the story.

Scene/Setting: A perfect setting for a thrilling story.

Characters: Both characters were well played.

Technical: Some things I noticed:

Paragraph 5, I think the screaming should be in its own dialogue.

In some places you capitalize God, in others you don't. If you capitalize it through the entire piece, consider capitalizing Hell too.

Overall Opinion: I thought this was a pretty good story. It was more exciting in the beginning when we didn't know what it was, hehe. Thanks for sharing this with us, and keep up the good work.

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#3104931

Review of 'The Incident'

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Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "'The Incident'"

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title/Plot: Appropriate title, for this well written piece.

Style & Voice: You told this story very well and I felt your voice showing through your words.

Scene/Setting: I thought you did an excellent job, especially for dialogue only, describing scenery through conversation.

Characters: I felt like I knew more of Ms. Marsh because of the descriptions she gave to 'the men' - Good job here!

Technical:

Ms Marsh

Ms. Marsh (missed a few times)

Does 'The Incident' need to be capitalized?

Overall Opinion: Overall, I thought this was a very well written piece of dialogue. Good job!

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Review of An experiment in short stories!*NEW*

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Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "An experiment in short stories!*NEW* "

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title/Plot: Well, I can't really comment on this, yet. ;)

Style & Voice: I think you did a good job with voice and style. I like how you're unfolding this story.

Characters: I've never seen the spelling of 'Abby' done this way, is it pronounced the same? -- Well anyways, I really like the characters here, how they speak and interact with each other. Great job!

Overall Opinion: Overall, a pretty good read. Please let me know when you add more to this.

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Review of Forever friend.

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Rated: E

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Hello, I'm Justine, known here as Riot

. This review is in response to your entry "Forever friend."

Please note that this is just a review and my personal opinion of what I read. It is not intended to be rude, hurtful, or in any way discouraging. Like all free advice you can take it or leave it as you please.

Title: The title's alright, but I think it could use some proper capitalization. It also doesn't need a period at the end being it's a title and not a sentence. Forever Friend

Word Choice: Simple words, in a simply short bite sized poem. I think you picked your words just fine.

Structure and Form:

Keep watch on your punctuation.

Overall Opinion: Overall, I feel this could've been nicely expanded upon. With some careful watch of punctuation, this could be better. I honestly didn't feel very moved by this, despite the end. I was surprised to read the end, though, I didn't see it coming. If you decide to edit this any further, please drop me an email and let me know. I'd like to come back and re-read it. That being said, keep plugging.

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