It is a lovely story! I was completely absorbed while reading it.
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This sensitive story proves that love fills the sad hearts with its light. Where love is, there is joy. Helena and Sam just proved it.
There is a lyrical quality about the narrative style and flow. It as if you are taking us on a beautiful journey starting at the point of their love just blossoming.
The idea of not revealing the infertility issue is wonderful and novel. It is such a healthy practice not to let it out.
The story sounds credible because of the way in which your characters live close to reality.
Hello Stella,
this prose poem convinces me of life being beautiful and that there is nothing tiring about it.
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Hope is in the view we have of the world. It changes mood, state and vibe.
Future is something we can pin our hopes on.
I agree. There’s no rhyme or reason to feel “tired” of life.
I have enjoyed reading this appealing vignette.
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The short effective conversation between mother and child establishes the affinity and understanding between the two.
Dialog and description have an admirable balance that shows the end result with clarity.
The mother was puzzled at the thought-provoking question of the child. It is understandable because no one knows for sure if there is heaven. It exists in our imagination basing on belief.
I like the tone, the content and the compact composition of this poem on life.
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You made it quite clear that life is a fair game. Success or loss reflect the character of the player.
I can see the aspects that are of importance in playing the game of life.
A person’s background, values he /she is nurtured on and the strength and substance of his own self, determine the way he decides to play the game.
“Play the rules and you can win
Cheat and you are sure to lose.”
Personally, I prefer to play with rules intact.
“It’s up to you to choose.”
The above refrain certainly serves like a warning that one should think before throwing in the dice.
In this particular game, there are no exceptions. I appreciate that inherent truth.
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The misery of missing home and entering someone else’s is graphically and engagingly.
I gladly suspend my disbelief because anything happen returning after a hard day’s work.
The use of emoticons is special and apt to this poem.
Kudos to you for a sustaining sense of humour.
The welcome transition at the end from hell to heaven is smooth, natural and in keeping with the mood and tone of the rest of the poem.
It flows well with visual imagery and perfect rhyming.
Hello benji,
a very realistic account of the pain and misery of a writer feeling helpless before his keyboard.
No, definitely not hilarious to find one’s self delivered impotent by a fly, sweat and a lack of right rage to get the story to speak.
Even with a successful book on the shelf, writing seems a challenge.
If I face the question as to why this happens, a few things come to my mind.
A writer becomes unduly complacent after the first success.
Perhaps the interval is too long. Hence the laziness.
What I like-
The different excuses he finds to avoid facing the computer screen.
Attractive turn of speech and a style that draws me in.
Magdalene was one interesting and impressive character in the Holy Bible.
Her story tells us that nothing is changed as far as public women are concerned. Yet, her life and time has a lot to tell the present generation. Stamped as sinner, she wasn't responsible for the role she was given. It was her honesty that saved her from misery when Jesus showed her mercy and compassion. Hence her transformation.
Her place was pivotal to the Gardner.
Her belief in Him was immovable and so waited by the tomb. Then she saw Him after Lent having risen new and bright like the Sun that just rose.
You showed the whole episode in a new dimension and from the point of view of Mary Magdalene.
It flows well.
Kindly correct me if I haven't understood the poem properly.
Your strong belief and trust in God comes through clear and assuring.
The very title reflects it.
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The way you described your journey with God is both enlightening and inspiring.
Few have such strong conviction regarding faith in God.
Reading Sacred texts can be beloved beacon lights to help us know how to cope with everyday problems and improve the quality of word, thought and action.
“I have found that my life changes and gets better.”
Hello Isola,
Glad you coped with an early baby and that she is her own person now.
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A mother’s love is endless and matchless. This is a widely known fact. Yet each mother is unique. The way you cared for a child born so early is impressive and honest.
You cared for her like she is your second skin.
This well composed poem brings that out.
Now, your daughter has a right way to show her love.
I have enjoyed reading through your rhyming verse.
It flows well with visual imagery.
The truth of Jesus's crucifixion and rebirth come to us with a force of their own. Your poem made me visualize the whole episode.
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No torture on earth equals the torture inflicted on Jesus Christ. Your lines in this regard are as moving as the original we find in the Bible.
"Prepared for burial, the Savior is nailed
To the cruel cross, blood drips down, He exhaled."
This rhyming poem states the eternal truth of the Bible in a style at once arresting. It certainly moves the reader emotionally and spiritually.
this is a thoughtful and a realistic poem regarding the concerns of in-laws.
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It seems the kind of mental preparedness before meeting the daughter-in-law and her kith and kin are same whether it is in the west or east.
“Did I meet her with a smile?”
It is also an occasion to welcome new relationships, thus widening the family circle.
“But this lady means a lot to me.”
The simple way in which you expressed the son’s concerns is remarkable.
“That his mother and the new wife will be friends.”
A compact rhyming and a suitable rhythm enable the poem to flow well.
this poem shows extreme suffering that sounds physical.
"I'm shredded
raw
open"
Each line throbs with feeling reflected in short and powerful words, images,description and figures.
The person's confusion is clearly projected through frank admission of the state of mind.
"can't remember what it is
I want
or what..."
Many of us suffer, but we never know how to bring it out in language. This poem does it so well.
It flows well,with necessary pauses and descriptive images.
What an anticlimax!
But there is an unexpected twist in the tale at the end.
I like the way Carly took the disappointing news from Scott. The story reflects a chunk of human psychology, especially with regard to taking advantage of situations.
Her enthusiasm could freeze a lying man like Scott.
But the end is truly interesting. It proves her mind is not ready to give up the trip planned with effort. Great! To Australia it is whether he belonged there or not.
""I'll be back from Australia in three weeks. Feed the cat while I'm gone.""
this is the kind of story that tells me how simple things can bring out profound values of life.
I couldn't resist a review for this sweet short story.
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The entire story came via a clothespin, which involved love, friendship and family bonds.
The change in clothes show the change from childhood to a mature age.
A mother's love-
clothes may change from small to big size, but the mother's affection remains the same. A house is a home only because of her presence and service with love.
"The clothes fill the line. The sunlight streams across the wide swath of yard behind our home. It infuses the clothes with warmth as my work infuses them with love."
The style and transitions used in the story are worth winning accolades.
The dark shadow of drugs is on the family, one brother already the victim and another worrying day and night for him.
The misery and fear and the change for worse resulted by addiction to drugs are clearly brought out by the author so the rest could open their eyes to this wide spread evil of intoxication.
"You're going to lose every thing you've ever had.
Even your baby girl called me saying she wants you to go to rehab"
A man-made evil should be eradicated by man himself.
Hello Teresa,
It feels really marvelous to review a poem of yours, titled, "My Best Friend".
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This free style poem describes the way partners in wedlock ought to live during their journey together. The elements of love, equality, sharing of tasks and facing joys and obstacles together are well highlighted.
I can see this is the best way to a successful marriage.
"We shall divide our chores so that we may enjoy the fruits of our labor."
I love the idea of absence of male domination in the house. Understanding is more important than proving superiority.
Style-
This is a prose poem, each line bringing out the features of a sound marriage poetically.
Imagery appeals to my eye and mind as I picture them leading a harmonious life.
The meaning and the making of music is briefly, yet beautifully explained in this contest entry. Congratulations on a deserving Awardicon decorating this poem.
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This poem is a winner on several counts.
Imagery-
The very basis of this poem is a well explored device of imagery.
You showed how the teacher explains the subject of music to a group of kids. I can see them paying you an attentive ear. Great preamble to a class on music.
Every single vital element of music is given its due place of vital importance.
"And then there dynamics
How soft or how LOUD"
A great point.
Refrain-
Another winning point is the way you used the refrain to bring our attention back to the basics that music is a source of beauty and joy.
"Oh music oh music
You bring joy to the world"
This is the kind of lesson meant for all, not just kids.
Although there is a lot more to write about, I suppose I too should
"stop now
Before you think I'm a bore."
your poem on death and loss as presented from the point of view of the dead is appealing and hopeful.
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This rhyming verse assures me that there is nothing fearful about death and that we should let in a feeling of freedom into our spirit at the final hour.
"Our spirits long ago have soared
We are free to go home"
No amount of mourning and sadness will bring back the departed soul. It is true as observed by all of us. Yet we feel extremely sad and in many cases, heartbroken, when someone close is no more.
It is energizing to read.
"Now we live through you
Fear not death, for it is just the beginning"
It flows well, ringing in hope.
Imagery is visual and appeals to my mind and heart.
facts and fears that we entertain in this short life are well aired here. It is so true that we do worry over small things and forget to leave it to God.
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This rhyming poem sounds soothing and makes me see we do worry too much about tomorrow while the present is wasted. You are so right about other things like a missing phone or bills to clear.
I think we can attend to these existential needs without anxiety.
What we cannot repair like broken vase should be left alone. No use crying over spilt milk.
Rhyming appeals to me. So does the content of this poem.
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