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Review by Acme
Rated: E | (3.0)
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This rate and review is offered in the spirit of assistance. Please feel free to ignore any, or all suggestions. This is your work, and I'm just happy to have had the chance to review it! *Smile*


What are my overall impressions?
This has the potential to be a very good essay, but there is simply not enough reference to sources to back up your arguments. Taking the time to do so will add more weight to your words and will make this a better essay. Please let me know if you make any changes to this essay and I will gladly come back to re-rate/review.

What are my favourite parts?
It is time our education system, community leaders, and parents become more concerned with education of all, and not ideology of black versus white. We are brought into this world with equal capabilities. We must demand equal fostering of these capabilities regardless of race. Well expressed, strong closing argument *Thumbsup*

What are my suggestions?
Always quote your sources in an Essay. If you want you can use the sites facility for footnotes. Simply write the quote and, directly after it type: {footnote:#}"everthing you want to say"{/footnote}. It will look like this:

"I have a cunning plan..."1

Quoting sources is not just about quoting quotes! If you are informing your readership about any data, or indications drawn from data then you must list those sources. Likewise, don't leave unqualified statements hanging:
Which race has the highest rate of expulsions and suspensions? Which race receives the fewer promotions? Which race has the highest risk of criminal convictions? Reportedly, African-Americans, more specifically African-American males.
Who is reports this?

Many people are proposing that due to a lack of successful male African-American role models, African-American boys are becoming an endangered species.
Are African-Americans seeing a reduction in the male birthrate? Who are the 'Many people'?

You are clearly opposed to 'segregation by the back door', and so shocking is the idea of its proposal you may want to look at your title and brief description as a place to hook your readership. Essays can be objective, but they are also a good way of arguing a well throughout particular point of view, and I think this essay has every chance of being a well delivered argument with a little attention and polish to your delivery.

There is a fabulous contest/challenge on WDC which is similar to a writing Olympics. Teams are made up of writers from their part of the globe and they are given prompts to work with as a team and deliver and essay, a poem, a short story. I am sure you would make a valuable asset to your country's team and would encourage you to sign up for the next round:
FORUM
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A celebration of writers and their distinct cultures to bring us all together.
#1254279 by iKïyå§ama


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1  Catchphrase of Tony Robinson's character in the TV comedy series Blackadder http://www.bbc.co.uk/comedy/blackadder/
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Review by Acme
Rated: E | (4.5)
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This rate and review is offered in the spirit of assistance. Please feel free to ignore any, or all suggestions. This is your work, and I'm just happy to have had the chance to review it! *Smile*

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What are my overall impressions?
Being a fan of comedy I had to stop by here first *Smile* This is a lovely romantic comedy and you should reflect that in one of your genre choice fields. This feel good piece had me smiling throughout and I loved the ending. We written and presented, I can see why it wears a lovely ribbon *Smile*

What are my favourite parts?
In her mind Edi was plotting a spell, not on Mark, but on the makers of the dating website. Mark was thinking it’s okay to be the single, fun Uncle Mark for the rest of his life. Nate the Duck was wondering how long he could survive out of water.
- lovely example of comedy trio and well delivered punchline *Thumbsup*

What are my suggestions?
He is a by the book detective by-the-book: this may be a Brit thing, but similar to other phrases like none-the-less, because they work as a full combination of words hyphens are commonly used to link them.

should be inducted into sainthood
beatified?

He’s hilarious to tease[, with] because he doesn’t get it


*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care *Star*

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Review of Cold and Empty  
Review by Acme
Rated: E | (4.0)
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What are my overall impressions?
Welcome to WDC *Smile* I think there are many who will be able to relate to the subject matter of this poem.

What are my favourite parts?
You really do convey those two emotions felt in grief very well and manage to convey the broken nature of the narrator *Thumbsup*

What are my suggestions?
The brief description and the title encouraged me to read this item, but you may want to increase your prospective audience by adding 'death' and 'tragedy' to your genre item field choices.

This may well just be personal preference, but I don't think there is any neccesity to highlight the words 'cold' and 'empty with mid-line capitalisation, as you have already stressed their importance in the title and by using them as line leaders in two other lines.

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care *Star*
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Review by Acme
Rated: E | (5.0)
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What are my overall impressions?
Nostalgic, vivid imagery deliver a narrative poem which not only celebrates the memory of you teenage years through fashion, but gives the reader lots of insight into the relationship between mother and daughter in the life of a dress - it is a great devise to use *Thumbsup*

What are my favourite parts?
It has to be all that isn't directly said, but is conveys so well, especially the relationship between mother and daughter. Learning to sew gave you more than a skill; it gave you a lasting experience as a fashionable teen *Smile*

What are my suggestions?
None at all. Quite my favourite poem of all the gems I've read today. Thank you!

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care *Star*

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Review by Acme
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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What are my overall impressions?
I think we have all been demoralised by a poor rate/review. It is hard not to take reviews personally, because we, as writers, have taken time to craft and create. This poem is a good reminder not to take it too seriously. Sure, there are comments and suggestions which help us improve our writing and technical skills, but when we get the subjective 'I don't like...' is up to us as writers to use or ignore.

What are my favourite parts?
So when you get a low, low rate
Don't worry any longer.
If it doesn't really kill you,
It will surely make you stronger.


What are my suggestions?
No suggestions for improvement, but I have to say, on a personal note, that my two one stars blow your 2.5 out of the water *Laugh*. Write on, Meg, write on!

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care *Star*

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Review by Acme
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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What are my overall impressions?
You make rhyming poetry look so easy, especially in this patriotic narrative which beautifully incorporates some wonderful aspects which evoke that unique Australian flavour.

What are my favourite parts?
A lovely mix of humour and tribute, well executed:
We welcome newcomers with a flag unfurled,
From countries all around the world.
They have chosen to live in this land so great,
And become a dinkum Aussie mate.


What are my suggestions?
None - Write on!

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care *Star*

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Review by Acme
Rated: E | (4.5)
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What are my overall impressions?
This must have taken you a long time to write! I saw Kathy's scavenger hunt and thought all those who entered it were taking on a HUGE challenge.

What are my favourite parts?
It would have been easy to make this more of a list than a coherent poem, but this is a good poem in its own right, and the use of AABB rhyming quatrains worked really well *Thumbsup*

What are my suggestions?
You have one 'invalid item' in the poem's third stanza which throws the scheme.

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care *Star*

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Review by Acme
Rated: E | (3.5)
I've re-rated because the syllabic count is definitely better, but there are still a couple of places where it falters slightly. Let me know if you make any more changes and I will happily return to re-rate accordingly *Smile*

So - I'm - leav - ing - not - giv - ing - it - an - oth - er - shot 12 syllables

So - long - a - go - it - seems,- since - when - we - both - were - young 12 syllables

Stok - ed - stu - por - high - on - lea - ther, - steel, - and - shi - ny - chrome 12 syllables

"Send - my - bel - ong - ings", - you'll - hear - when - I've - rung 10 syllables

Sea - rching - for - ev -er - more - the - ways - out - of - dan - ger 12 syllables

I know many people have their own internal accent, but a good rule of thumb, in English, is to see a syllable as a 'beat' which contains a vowel, or 'y' in it:
"Syll - a - ble"

I hope this helps *Thumbsup*
Write on and take care,
Acme *Heart*
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Review by Acme
Rated: E | (3.0)
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This rate and review is offered in the spirit of assistance. Please feel free to ignore any, or all suggestions. This is your work, and I'm just happy to have had the chance to review it!
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What are my overall impressions?
Hi there, ShiShad *Smile* Good use of the picture prompt, but your syllabic counts mean that you don't hit the hendecasyllabic requirement for Round 7 of the Pond Poetry contest.

What are my favourite parts?
I liked the 's' letter start to every line. I also enjoyed the narrative story telling and use of colourful text.

What are my suggestions?
So now I'm leavin we're not givin it another shot - 14 syllables

Sometimes I wonder why I ever left my home. - 12 syllables

So long ago it seems, since when we both were so young. - 12 syllables

Starry-eyed and stoked high on leather, steel, and shiny chrome - 14 syllables

"Send me my belongings", you'll hear when I've rung - 12 syllables

Soon some lonely trucker will stop to give me a ride. - 13 syllables

Surely he'll listen to a heart you did betray - 12 syllables

Spilling secrets openly to a caring stranger - 13 syllables

So far away from home, so tired and so upset - 12 syllables

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care *Star*

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Review by Acme
Rated: E | (4.5)
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What are my overall impressions?
What a fine addition to the poems of Project Write World *Delight* Good Luck! I love the way you used the picture prompt to build a narrative encompassing the pioneer spirit of the outback. I was introduced to the 'swagman' in Waltzing Matilda and particularly enjoyed the musical quality your rhyme and rhythm conveyed.

What are my favourite parts?
That resilient nature of the human spirit, and the tidal description of human migrations between city and country was well explored in this poem *Thumbsup*

What are my suggestions?
Please remember, should you wish to act on any of these suggestions, DO NOT DO SO until after the judging for this round has finished.
shirt all torn and trousers baggie
- baggy
When the Gods above decide that the...
- lower case for 'gods'

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care *Star*

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Review of If...  
Review by Acme
Rated: E | (4.5)
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What are my overall impressions?
Thoughtful poem, and it got me philosophising. Timing really is everything. I think this poem will resonate with many readers, as it did with me *Smile*

What are my favourite parts?
Again, this is just me, but I do think you wield power when you use a more rigid structure and the triple lines with ABA rhyme work really well here.

What are my suggestions?
If we [had] met on a different date,
In another time and place,
Would we have [had an] altered fate?


*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care *Star*

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Review by Acme
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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What are my overall impressions?
I love that little angry emoticon *Delight*! I thought the addition of an author's note really added to my overall enjoyment of this poem.

What are my favourite parts?
The emotions leap off the page! And there is a twist of dark humour here (aimed at the self, but still valid) which the final line of the first stanza conveyed well in the form of an emotional punchline *Thumbsup*

What are my suggestions?
Your rhyme scheme jumped from ABAB in the first two stanzas to AABB in the third and then everywhere in the final stanza. As you have managed to separate yourself from the event, why not go back and tinker with it a little? I only suggest this as a personal preference because I am a big fan of form used well (yes, my Free Verse is shockingly repressed *Blush*) Rather like Basil Fawlty, whose humour comes from barely restraining his anger, if there's nothing funnier than a person on the edge of losing control, there is nothing more powerful than poetry staining against its bonds; poetry can harness unimaginable power to illuminate just how potent it is!

Gawsh, sorry about the sermon *Laugh*

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care *Star*

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Review of Infinite Feelings  
Review by Acme
Rated: E | (5.0)
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What are my overall impressions?
The brief description hooked me to read this one! This is well conveyed poetry with heart and I loved the way you drew me into your pace/rhythm with the way you displayed the text.

What are my favourite parts?
I often find weak areas in my poem, whether it's beginning, middle or end. Here ever stanza is strong and adds to the impact of your subject delivery. Excellently written and a pleasure to read, and re-read *Thumbsup*

What are my suggestions?
None - Write on!

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care *Star*

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Review of I Cry Silently  
Review by Acme
Rated: E | (4.5)
It seems to read much more smoothly now. In fact the alliteration of the 's' words in the second stanza pop out a little more to me. Thanks for the opportunity to be able to come back and re-read/review, ShiShad *Smile*
Write on and take care,
Acme
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Review of Writing  
Review by Acme
Rated: E | (5.0)
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What are my overall impressions?
Please put this in your highlighted items of a week or so? The sentiments expressed are so fresh to read and I'm sure their are many who may have missed this when discovering your writing more recently. It is a very good example of particular form of poetry done well *Thumbsup*

What are my favourite parts?
I won't be the only one on WDC who can relate to this poem. I note this was created two days after you joined, and you have caught the tone of nervous excitement which comes with posting work for the first time *Delight*

What are my suggestions?
As this is a fine example of Pleiades poetry, why not advertise the fact with an author's note, or perhaps a link to Bianca's explanation here *Right* "Pleiades" 

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care *Star*

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Review of I Cry Silently  
Review by Acme
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Overall Impressions
This is such a difficult subject to write about and you have done so with great care and sensitivity.

Favourite Parts
I love that other author's on this site have inspired you to write such heartfelt poetry. I can understand how reading some items on WDC have compelled you to write such a tender tribute to those who have suffered abuse.

Suggestions
I really don't know how to put this better, but beware of 'Yoda Moments':
forgive you I could


Also, you may want to think of widening you vocabulary and this simile stood out to me:
robbing like theft


Write on and take care!
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Review of At the Mall  
Review by Acme
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Overall Impressions
This was a good snapshot of an event but felt as if it were a little unfinished as a story. You may want to develop it further as I think you have made an interesting character in the Young Woman.

Favourite Parts
You built the tension well and the action/chase scene was creepy! *Thumbsup*

Suggestions
She'd come to the mall for the sole purpose of getting something to eat at the food court and killing the hour and a half between work and her evening class.
I realise details can be important, but some of them are not needed to develop plot, setting, or character. If you use the loose rule of "one 'and' per sentence" you can make your writing a say as much with fewer words. Also look at 'had' as an opportunity to cut out unnecessary words, or use a more descriptive word, eg:
She came to the mall to kill time between work and her evening class.

Brandy glanced at her watch. Six-thirty...
...Brandy looked at her watch. "It's six-thirty . . ." - try to avoid repetition


Write on and take care!
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Review by Acme
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Overall Impressions
It is hard to read this poem and remain emotionally separate, so my thoughts are with the observational narrator. There are some poignant images here and the metaphor of the ticking clock is well used to explore many different aspects of time, and whose time is ticking by in this scenario - well written

Favourite Parts
I thought the inclusion of the author's note was a great addition. I'm sure many people who read it will connect to the poem on its own strength, but this addition gives your readers an opportunity to explore the subject further.

Suggestions
None - write on!

Write on and take care!
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Review by Acme
Rated: E | (5.0)
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What are my overall impressions?
The title and the brief description caught my attention with this write and I am so very glad I stopped here, and think this is one of the best advertisements for the positive impact this site has on its membership. It's a wonderful overview of the benefits of joining this writing community.

What are my favourite parts?
I highlighted a memorable excerpt to copy... and then found another... and then another... *Laugh* Suffice to say, I found so much was well done, and the extended metaphor of 'treasure' was a wonderfully explored thread which gave me rich imagery as I read *Thumbsup*

What are my suggestions?
None - Write on!

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care *Star*

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Review by Acme
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Workshops are a great way to hone our talents and skills and it's great to see you creating a folder to store the results of your writing exercises in, Jewel *Delight* Folders are a sign to me that a writer is well organised and wants to present their work in the easiest way for a visitor to locate.

*Star*Thank you for sharing. Write on and take care! *Star*
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Review by Acme
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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What are my overall impressions?
Hey there, beautiful *Delight*! I wanted to stop by your port and celebrate your rising stars with a review to each of them. However, it would be rude not to stop by your fine portfolio first and experience a poem *Bigsmile*

The title of this one intrigued me, but it was the brief description which really hooked me! I love 'light bulb' moments and wanted to be a part of yours, so I had to read, rate and review this poem.

What are my favourite parts?
I think every writer can relate to the feelings conveyed in your narrative (well, I know I can). Your use of simile to express the frustration of writer's block was very well done, your imagery is vivid and I loved the cyclical nature of the narrative. My favourite line has to be the 'light bulb' moment:
Inspiration for writing
is found in the commitment of time

In fact, I recently experienced this myself when I realised it had been too long since inspiration struck, and I signed up for Legerdemain 's 15 for 15 *Bigsmile*

What are my suggestions?
None - Write ON!

*Star* Thank you for sharing your work! Write on and take care *Star*

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Review of Once Upon A Dream  
Review by Acme
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Stan, you know I love the power you possess when it comes to delivering your imagery. Well, this poem is no exception; suns explode, granite ledges are lips, and Africa bursts forth in my imagination. Thank you, Stan, you are a true poet who always manages to capture the intangible so beautifully. Good use of the prompt too! *Thumbsup*

*Star*Thank you for sharing. Write on and take care! *Star*
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Review of I Was A Tiger  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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I was brought up in a seaside town called Blackpool and it had a famous poem about Albert and a lion:
http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/albert-and-the-lion...
I remember visiting the tigers in the zoo and thinking they looked so sad and despondent; not like nature intended at all. Now, I know zoos do a lot to protect endangered species, and they have come along way from some of the torturous institutions they were once were, but a gilded cage is still a cage, and your poem evoked real emotion in me. The narrative POV also added to the impact. Thoughtful and thought-provoking, Harry *Smile*

*Star*Thank you for sharing. Write on and take care! *Star*
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Review by Acme
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Oh, I cringed for you *Blush* This is a well written account of an embarrassing moment and your informal tone really created intimacy and drew me into your narrative. Well expressed comedy (it is just a shame you were at the centre of it).

*Star*Thank you for sharing. Write on and take care! *Star*
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Review of The Calling  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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What are my overall impressions?
Powerful words again and unsettling imagery which adds to another satisfying reading experience. You really do have a talent for drawing me into your narrative.

What are my favourite parts?
To answer the eternal question
For what will be worn
Now we battle for dreams
And I dread any form of regression
- I enjoyed the personal touch to a philosophical query, as well as the and the extended metaphor through out.

What are my suggestions?
Look at using your genre fields. I would suggest 'philosophy' and 'cultural'

No 'e' on 'metaphor' in your brief description.

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