Well done on such a great item. Even though it is short, I really enjoyed reading it. At first I thought it was a Harry Potter related item! But after reading through again it is something completely different.
I liked the way you built up the transformation Sam experienced. It seemed to me the coat had a spell or other such influence on it. Well done on such an excellent read!
Nice puzzle! I almost got every answer. I got one wrong: the inventor suit one! This one is the most fun crossword I have ever done. It seems like you did your research with this one. There are many superheroes on the internet, so I hope there will be more of these.
You have definitely done your research into the ways of the Roman Empire. Great world building is evident in this chapter. Plus we learn more concerning the Reapers. Slavery was very much a fact of everyday life. In fact, slaves were treated rather harshly. I really enjoyed the glimpse you gave into the past of Articus.
Plus the research into last names was brilliantly done. In fact, last names in the UK only came into use in the past few centuries, not sure when.
Oohh is this upload based on the works of Talking Heads by Alan Bennet? I studied him at college in my late teens! I really enjoyed reading how the various types of flowers have their own unique voice. The way the dandelion had its lines is fantastic. Since that flower does mature rapidly, it makes perfect sense its voice is more old world in nature/style!
Another fine upload! I am beginning to enjoy the world building present so far in this chapter and the pervious one I read and reviewed. The denial of Articus is plain to see, as he denies the role fate has apparently laid out for him.
Plus I like the explanation of the Reapers you have created to combat a threat also mentioned in this chapter.
First of all, well done on writing and uploading this chapter for me to read and review here today. I enjoy the glimpse of the main character Ruri I have here. A young woman determined to help her family survive, even though it has to be done by slightly nefarious means. It is obvious she has dark events in her recent past.
One point though: try to separate the sentences in the chapter into paragraphs. This will enable easier reading. Apart from that, no complaints here!
I must say this is a most excellent chapter. There aren't many books concerning Grim Reapers, if that is what the main character is, on the internet. Unless I haven't been looking hard enough! Is the novel set in ancient Rome? It seems to me it is, as there are certain terms indicate this may be so. Or perhaps a Roman like civilization set in a modern world?
Thank you for writing this chapter. I am looking forward to reading on how the trainee Reaper begins his journey!
Sounds like Christmas is fun for this family. The comedy throughout this piece was subtly written. I really enjoyed the dynamic between the twin daughters as they pranked their ever loving, but exasperated dad with a very special cup of whatever is was made me chuckle. What was even funnier, dad got his own back!
A rather lovely little poem you have written here. Thank you for post it here on WDC for me to read and enjoy. Whilst reading through this, it seemed to me that life is a journey, full of unexpected events, meeting various types of people. I concur with the lesson you have written here. Sometimes in life we teach others and in turn, we receive tutelage in return.
To me, a day well spent is when I have learned something new! Nicely written, well done!
This is brilliant, full of nonsense, and quite fun! The monologue of the main, albeit rather grumpy character is very well written and actually made laugh as I read through it. This short chapter could actually be material for a longer piece, a novella or novel perhaps? Now that could be a fantastic read!
And we see more of daily life in parts of Dinotopia. I do remember the a bit of the Codes that are part of daily life for all races of Dinotopians. Plus the World Beneath is mentioned. It is always brilliant to see parts of the original lore mentioned.
It seems a hint of trouble is slowly creeping into the idyllic life with a scarcity of fish. Another finely crafted chapter. It was a most enjoyable one to read.
This poem is fantastic! Even though this has been written about your Dad's collection of neckties, I feel the other members of your family are present in your poem! Mum, ever wise and making sure everything is all correct within the family. What I enjoyed most about this set of finely crafted verses:
Your Dad considering his neckties as a badge of honour, a sign he was able to provide for his family, even though he despised wearing them!
Even though I have never been snowboarding, I can see the joy you take in the sport through the verses I have just read through. The imagery is fantastic and through your expressive writing, a disabled person like me can share in that pleasure you take in this sport. I could clearly picture in my mind everything you wrote about!
I must say I don't think I have ever heard of a vampire like this! I have read a few vampire novels and most of them like blood, villainy and mayhem! I like the fact Stacy is trying to make amends for biting someone she really shouldn't have. Her ability really is unique, yet a great way to feed herself/heal someone. I think also, there is spot of unintentional comedy in this, especially towards the end. I believe you have potential for a novel with this!
Very nice puzzle you thought up here! It has been a while since I have done one of these! I had to use the Solve Puzzle button after not being able to find about 6 words! I am used to word searches on paper, yet this one was fun!
Reading this brings back memories of my younger days. Mentions of Canyon City, Treetown definitely bring back feelings of nostalgia. Kind of makes me want to read the book/watch the TV movie/series again. It seems to me, this chapter indicates a period of calm, before everything goes absolutely crazy. From a long term Dinotopia fan, thank you for writing this.
First of all, thank you for writing this Dinotopia fanfiction. This might sound odd, but I have always wondered if Dinotopia fanfiction existed and here it is! The first opening chapter is fantastic! Kind of reminds me of the amazing TV series I have, somewhere at home, on DVD! My favourite part of this chapter?
Your description of Eddie, a non magical version of Hagrid. Large in appearance, kind, honest in nature!
I enjoyed reading this short adventure piece you uploaded here! As I read this, I happened to be reminded of a scene from an Indiana Jones movie! I can totally picture this taking place in some remote part pf our planet. Are you planning on making this longer? I think you have a good idea for a novel here!
a\\\DS Sorry about the random characters! My cat Gizzmo decided to assist with this review. This informative article should be handed out to all young women as they venture off into college or university! For the part about safeguarding a drink, I believe there are strips available on various sites that can give an indication as to whether a drink has been tampered with. Very well written piece you have here!
Even though I know most of this history already, this article is still very informative! I especially agree with the last two points concerning female sovereigns. I did spot a mistake in the eighth paragraph I believe. Thrown - instead of the word throne! Easily done. I just ignored the error and carried on reading a very good article.
Plus fun fact about some of the various wives of Henry VIII, scientists believe the lack of boys could be down to the rhesus positive/negative factor in the differing blood groups of Henry and the ladies he married. This has occurred in my family.
A very good beginning you have going on here. There is just enough to entice the reader into wanting more. I like the description of the main female protagonist. From the phrasing used, I guess she is a type of immortal?
I was going to ask if the inspiration for this was from the Eternals? Then again, there are various myths and legends pertaining to immortal guardians from every culture on the planet. Well done on a very well crafted prologue. Please continue writing this novel, I'll definitely read all the chappters.
I enjoyed this very much! Imagine the fun you could have playing around with this for hours! Plus doing this might spark a story idea or two! Well done for creating such an entertaining item!
First of all, welcome to WDC! As soon as I saw this story involved a dragon, I had to read this. I am a sucker for dragons! I just had to ask, did you base Mohng on the draconic chracter Draco from the movie DragonHeart?
The scene with Kieran as a sacrifice, the sarcastic character of Mohng made me smile with delight. This is very well crafted and written. If you EVER decide to write a full novel with these two, I'd love to read it, if only to see Lazy Eye get his comeuppance. Plus the friendship between Kieran and Mohng would be a delight to see develop too! I could already see glimpses of of it.
Rather apt description of a rainstorm. I really like the first part where you put the rain is the earth crying in its tears. What I feel is missing, are the impressions of the smell of wet earth and the sting of the wind as the storm rages on. Apart from that, well done for a good effort.
As soon as I read about the dwarven priest Vasmoik, dragons and magic, I was hooked. As I read through this, I could see you have something wonderful here. To me, at least, this prologue has it all. Magic, conflict, several fantasy races, did I mention dragons? Just one question were you possibly inspired by the Lord of the Rings? It has that feel to it. If you would like reader who will plough through the whole novel, well I DO love fantasy, so bring it on!
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