Indent your paragraph starts. It makes the reading much more easy. You have the basis for a longer story. One , which I would definately read in the future. You have talent. Keep on with your writng. The more you do it the easier it is supposed to become. I don't know it that is actually true or not...yet. But I am giving it a try. Keep on writing! Jeff
Not a bad outing. I enjoyed the way you took the main character and even though not an angel by any means, gave him a concious about his treatment from the other members of the gang. I admit the concious was more thana likely very, very small and did not stick around for long. It was there never the less. Good job. Keep on writing! Jeff
This piec is very nicely written. It reminds of an old Western song played ona tinney piano in some run down dusty street Western town. You have talent and it shows as your poem here flows. I read on wondering where this would lead. At the end I wanted more. You need to explore your talent more. Looking forward to it. Keep on writing! Jeff
NIce job of taking two different genre of writing and combinding them into something wonderful. The character of Luther, shows how his concious finally got the better of him and made rebeling his dead Father all that much more appealing. You have talent that you need to explore more. Look forward to reading more from you. Keep on writing! Jeff
You have wrote about on e of my favorite Western heroes of all time. I rank Hickok alongside of Cody And Earp. Sounds from the words that maybe he is one of your favorites as well? Am I correct? You captured the game as I have read of it in some history books. Once again well done. Keep on writing! Jeff
Once again you lived up to my expectations. If hearing your poem read out loud, the picture the words make draws you into the scene. I easily feel as if I am standing there watching or lending a helping hand. Is there anything more I couold say to praise your work? Not until next time. Keep on writing! Jeff
Your first two paragraphs depicts a city to the max. All concrete, steel, brick and glass reaching into the sky. And the noise, loudness blaring all the time. When you got into describing your home in the country. I began to relax immediately. The words paint a picture of nature's beauty. Well done as usual. Keep on writing! Jeff
I myself have often wondered that same thing. If there is none can we choose not to go? It would be interesting to find out way before that time comes.I liked this as much as any other poem you have written on this website.You never cease to amaze me each and every time. Keep on writing! Jeff
Great job. I fondly remember the days of my youth of wanting to be a cowboy. I guess that is something that does not outgrow many of us. I wear my cowboy boots when I go out to town. And what is a campfire without cowboy boots. Have you ever been in a Rodeo? Never had that oppertunity here and that is probaly for the best. Your poem flows and takes the reader along with you. Keep it up and keep on writing! Jeff
Once again you have impressed me with your poem. Your words flow like water over a set of falls. Where do you come up with the ideas for your writings? A lot of my writings have come from dreams, but something heard, or seen, or even read can bring forth an idea. I have a only a few things here online. I am finally starting to get over the feeling of being scared to show my writings.Keep on writing! Jeff
Fantastic. I pictured the sight before and was impressed how you made it all seem so clear. I enjoyed this piece. I look forward to reading more from you in the future. Keep up the great work and Keep on writing! Jeff
Wow. You got right to it. I can see why Jeb wanted to get the hell away from Isaiah. Things happened that had gotten many innocent men into trouble and I imagine that they would have also wished they had done what Jeb did to save themselves. Would you have? I know I would have. Very nicely done for such a short piece. Keep it up and keep on writing! Jeff
Nice. You said it straight forward and stood up to salute the flag, so to speak. I really enjoyed reading this.You are talented. No one can deny that. I have read other things of yours and everytime I read something i am more impressed. Keep up the good work you have started. Keep on writing! Jeff
What kind of dog is Skeet? Nice rhyming. It moved the poem along and that makes for a reader to better enjoy what the author is trying to say. I liked this piece. Sounds like old Skeet meet his match with the Liamas. I can see Skeet running around driving the cattle to and fro. Well written. Keep it up. Looking forward to reading more from you in the future. Keep on writing! Jeff
Where to begin? I liked the story. I really did. Have you ever heard the saying of show not tell or the other way around. I get confused sometimes. You have the basis of a fantastic story here. I admit that. But, you tend to run on with too much description that during places in the story does not need to be there. Over all I enjoyed it. You have talent. No one can say otherwise. Explore it more. Keep on writing! Jeff
Oh man. After all that trouble he went throough and finally gets his reward of the rabbit. Then to have the Hawk divebombs and takes it away. You can just imagine how disappointment and pissed he must have felt. Well written. Keep on writing! Jeff
Not bad. I like how you had McCade come flying back down teh trail to chase off the cougar. You have raw talent, which you need to explore more. Keep on writing! Jeff
Wow. This picture of John Wayne was not what I was expecting to see when I started reading this. What you wrote was well written. But, I honestly have to say that most direhard fans of the duke would find this offensive. I found this strangely funny. I am one of those direhard fans. Jeff
NIcely done. Your imaging gives the reader the picture of a cattle drive trying to get them stubborn cattle to move without water. I liked this a lot. Just recently I am getting back into poetry. What was the idea for this piece? Was it an actual cattle drive or the lack of rain? I know many parts of this great country of ours is in dire need of water. You have talent. Explore it. Keep on writing! Jeff
You hit the nail on the head here. Your choice of words paint a vivid picture of a Texas drought. I liked this very much. This piece was well written. Good job. This happened alot back in the days of the old West. Just as much as it does today. You have talent and need to explore that more. Keep on writing! Jeff
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