Interesting storyline. You have a good concept here. I think it could have been expanded a little better and that would have made it stronger. Keep exploring your talent and keep on writing. Jeff
Basing anything, story or poem on something by the great Johnny Cash can not be a bad choice. The character James Robert Cole reminds me of an old time brimstone and fire Bapist Minister riding the circuit. A good strong character. Nicely done. I can see that you have talent. Keep up the good work and keep on writing! Jeff
I like your poem here. One can tel by reading it that you have a love and deep respect for the american cowboy. Your choice of words were well done. The four men Gene, Roy, Wayne and Eastwood are four of the biggest and best in the business. Nice choice. Keep exploring your talent and never stop writing! Jeff
I got caught right up into this world you created. I liked your story and it's characters. You need to expand this. I am looking forward to reading it. Keep on writing! Jeff
Very nicely done. This well written story catches the reader and draws you into the universe where this takes place. With it's strong characters and well thought out paragraphs. You are compelled to read onward, least you lose track of the characters. I am very impressed. It reminds me of the works of Heinlen and that's not bad comparison. Keep up the good work and keep on writing! Jeff
Oh my, my , my. I can not express in mere words the enjoyment I got out of reading this. All your charaqcters are strong and could stand on their own. If you do not finish this completely, the world will be at a lost to not be able to read and enjoy this. You must realize you will be compared to the two authors I mention in the review of chapter one, Dan Brown and Clive Cussler. Keep on writng! Jeff, a fan.
Are you a reader and fan of Dan Brown or Clive Cussler? I mention these two authors as that is what your writing reminds me of. You are very good and talented. Jericho is a strong believeable character. I really hope you finish this out to full book length and try to get it published. Many more will enjoy it just as much as I did. Keep on writing! Jeff
So far so good. I like this. The reading flowed across the page drawing the reader along with the the storyline. The characters are so life like it making you feel as if you know them from your neighborhood. The young man though you are happy is not from anywhere near you. Nicely done. I will read onward. Keep on writing! Jeff
Wow. Great storyline. Both of the characters are pyschopaths and each one are in desperate need of help. Your talent captured each of theirs point of views and made me want to read on until the end to see how it would turn out. I can see the Dean Koontz and Stephen King influences whether they were meant to be in here or not. I liked this and look forward to reading more from you in the future. Keep on writing! Jeff
Very well written. I enjoyed it. I can see influences from the greats of Science Fiction here in your story. You are well read and talented. Look forward with relish to more from you in the future. Keep on writing. Jeff
Very cleaver. This should be expanded into a longer piece. Imagine an entire garden of like flowers and or plants. Would people pay to visit it? What happens if someone finds out it is all fake? Blackmail? Imagine after years of bunking people the managers find a real one? Interesting ! You have talent. Explore and run with it. Keep on writing! Jeff
This has all the makings of a full length book. I would definately buy and read it. Who were your influnances while growing up? I am so looking forward to more of your work being posted. Keep up the great work and keep on writing! Jeff
Nice concept for a story. It is one I would read. You should expand this. Well written by a talented writer. Keep up the good work. But, most of all keep on writing! Jeff
Wow! Someone sure gave this a lot of thought. Have you used any of thesse names for a story? I caould see a few that would make interesting titles. Would you have objection if someone did? I really would like to know. Good job and keep on writing! Jeff
Talk about a badass main character and a lady. I love it. The entire story concept is a fantastic idea. I really think you should consider expanding this character into a full length book or maybe yet a series of books? What is your thoughts on that. Your talent shined through on this piece. Keep up the good work, but most of all keep on writing! Jeff
Nice job Inkwell. I love mythology and your use of it here in the poem shows through. It is an old classic tale and as they say, every myth has some form of truth in it. Those old sailors sure believed enough. You have the talent to go places and I am looking forward to more from you. I applaud your choice. Keep on writing! Jeff
The basic idea is good and I would want to read it when finished. Even in your rough idea of the story here. You must use punctuation. It makes the piece easier to read and understand. I am one of those who just write, write, write and then goes back later and put in punctuations where they belong. I did like your idea. Keep on writing! Jeff
Very well done Harry. I enjoyed this free verse of poetry. You put across the tale of the old Indian Chief and his views, on the coming of white settlers into what had always been his tribes land. I enjoyed the way you weaved your tale. Your talent is there and must be expanded. Great job. Keep on writing! Jeff
Very ,Very cool. A time traveling Hitler trying to escape justice. But, tracked down and shot by a bounty hunter. I really liked this. I wish you would use this character and expand the story into a full length book. One, which I would read. Great job. You have talent. Keep on writing! Jeff
Very interesting. You make the reader wonder what the secret could be at the end of your poem. I liked what I read and I would for sure read more of your offerings. Your talent shows through in the story telling. Keep exploring all that comes before in your writing. But, most of all! Keep on writing! Jeff
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