I am giving this piece of writing, named The Marshal. written by Elle Cyre numbered 2149190. This author shows good promise and has a future ahead of her. The main character Sam is a strong lady that is well-written and you can tell she is independent. The side characters are also well written. I would recommend this to anyone to read and look forward to the next piece she shows us all.
Dblameck(David) your item here, #1856918 entitled: Blood in the dust. Is well written and short and sweet. Straight to the subject as they say. The character of the Marshal is convincing in the turmoil he is going through as he must face down his friend and eventually kill him. This short story could be expanded and make a full length book.One I would love to read. I am awarding you five stars. Keep up the good work and Keep On Writing! Jeff
Brick Chicken, your item here entitled, Elf Team Six #2105013 is a well written Christmas story. It keeps you entertained from the beginning to the end. Great characters.I would recommend this to anyone. I am awarding you five stars for a well-done job. Keep exploring your talent and most of all, Keep On Writing!
Cupadraig, your item here #2058818 entitled: Prompt#24 Murder Mystery is a well written piece with well defined strong characters and storyline. This would be a great longer piece. Have you ever thought of expanding this? I am awarding you five stars for an excellant job. Keep exploring your talent . But, most of all Keep On Writing! Jeff
Brina, your item here #1684432 entitled: Through the Portal is an interesting piece of writing. Strong characters and storyline. I will not nit pick about grammer mistakes. We all do make mistakes. Your main character, Olivia, portray's the strong Motherly instincts that are normal with all Mothers. Thinking about the welfare of her child before her own. Nicely done I am awarding you four and a half stars. Keep exploring your talent. But, most of all Keep On Writing! jeff
Tyler, wow! Your item here #2062526 entitled: Max The BullDog is a well written story with strong well defined characters and storyline. This sounds like it might have been a childhood memory of yours. Was it? For, an excellent job I am awarding you five stars. Keep exploring your talent ans most of all, Keep On Writing! Jeff
Kelsey, your item here #2062532 is an interesting little tidbit of hopefully, a much large piece of work from you. Great start! I am awarding you four stars. Keep exploring your talent and most of all, Keep On Writing! Jeff
Zanadile, your item here #2062545 entitled: The Dark Is a well written and interesting piece of work. I would love to have you take this as the beginning to a much larger story.With a strong, well defined charcter you have a great start. Keep it up. Keep exploring your talent. I am awarding you five stars. keep On Writing! Jeff
Nathan, your item here # 2061499 A Twist In Time...Chapter 2 is once again well written. The continuation of strong well defined characters and storyline makes this worth reading. I am looking forward to reading the entire piece after it is finished.I am awarding you four and a half stars again. Keep exploring your talent and Keep On Writing! Jeff
Nathan, your item here # 2060725 entitled: A Twist In Time..Chapter One is a well written piece with strong well defined characters and storyline. You take the readers along on an enjoyable ride through time. Keep exploring your talent and most of all, Keep On Writing! Jeff
Maldakir, your item here # 2058620 entitled: Awakening is an interesting piece. Strong characters and storyline. I would, however like to see this piece expanded. It would make a much better story. I am awarding you four stars. Well done. Keep exploring your talent and most of all, Keep On Writing! Jeff
ItsASecret, your item here #2053853 entitled: The Runner and The Dethroned is not bad. A prety good start of a longer piece. Good characters that are strong and well defined. The storyline is well thought out so far at this point of the story.
The only things I can see wrong is a few missed grammer issues, but that is nothing to worry about. We all still forget to put into place comma's and such. I know I do.
A couple places you have words that in my opion do not need to be there and taking them out does not delete anything from the story.
Examples::
Not wasting a second I snatch up my bag and tear through the door and outside into the pouring rain..... take out the word (and) before outside.
Example two::
Behind me I hear angry voices followed by footsteps, meaning I'm being chased..... try this> Behind me I hear angry voices and footsteps following, I am being chased.
Whatever you choose. The main thing is to write.I am awarding you four stars. Keep On Writing! Jeff
C.D.Franz, your item here # 2051891 entitled: New Life is a well written piece. Strong well defined characters and storyline. If the main character is dead I think more should have been explained a little on how he died.Over all this is a good story. I am awarding you fouor and a half stars. Keep exploring your talent, but most of all, Keep On Writing! Jeff
CreativelyWritingNovels22, your item here # 2051954 entitled: Alter Sacrifice is a well written piece of work. The storyline can be telling the sotry of either a Vampire or a Serial Killer. Which one or maybe something else? This small piece is very good and I would like to read more of this. I am awarding you four and a half stars. Keep exploring your talent, but most of all, Keep On Writing! Jeff
Dave, your item here # 1331145 entitled: Dunmoore Castle is a well written piece. I like how you told the story in the form of a diary. Very interesting. I awarding you four stars. Keep exploring your talent, but most of all Keep ON Writing! Jeff
Tinman, your item here # 2051462 entitled: Of Love and Caste is a well written piece. Strong characters and storyline. Informative to those readers who may not have known anything about the caste system in history. Over all I liked this. An award of five stars are giving for a well done job. Keep exploring your talent and most of all, Keep On Writing! Jeff
Horsewoman, your item here # 758444 entitled: Night Ride I foound to be a well written and thought out poem. You delve into the pyschy of thge old cowboy. Good job. The poem flows along nicely through out. I am awarding you five stars for a well done job. Keep exploring your talent and most of all, Keep ON Writing! Jeff
Well done Oldwarrior-Wounded Vetern. You are quite correct unfortunately that many do not care. Seems only those who have faced war care about the dead anymore.Five stars my friend. Keep On Writing! Jeff
Kiara Green, your item here # 2050534 entiteld: Blue (1) is an well written interesting piece. With strong characters and storyline. It is up to date with the time and social media happening around the country. Well done. Could have been a little longer. You leave the reader hanging as to what happens next. I am awarding you four and a half stars. Keep exploring your talent and most of all, Keep On Writing! Jeff
TheVexingFox, your item here # 2050614 entitled: The Forest Of Chivalry is a well written piece. Overall my opion is one of liking it. You have strong well defined characters and storyline. My onlu concern is the smallness of the letters nad all those A's at the beginning of each paragraph makes it hard for the reader to read and enjoy this. Nevertheless I am awarding you four stars. Keep exploring your talent and most of all, Keep On Writing! Jeff.
MsMasquerade, your item here # 2050903 entitled: MsMasquerade is an interesting bit of writing. It looks into the deep inner thoughts of someone who cuts themselves. having dealt with that on a personal basis with family members I can relate to this piece. Sounds like you have as well. I am awasrding you four stars. Keep exploring your talent and Keep On Writing! Jeff
Jules Lewis, your item here # 2050991 entitled: The Moon is an interesting well written monolog of your thoughts on Earth's satellite. Well done! I am awarding you four and a half stars. Keep exploring your talent, but most of all Keep On Writing! Jeff
Specter, your item here # 1858684 entitled: Old Boots is a well written piece. With strong well defined characters and storyline. The story flows along and brings the reader along on the ride. Yoour descriptions of old boots brings them to life that you can ppicture them flopping as he runs. Good job! I am awarding you four and a half stars. Keep exploring yoour talent, but most of all, Keep On Writing! Jeff
Tonganknight, your item here # 2050376 entitled: Sawdust Parker could be a really good story. You have the basic storyline down here. But it does not flow along well enough for the reader to understand just what is going on. A rewrite is in order. Just tell the story. You do not have to put a description in on every thing happening sentence by sentence. This is what causes the story not to flow. Keep trying. An award of three stars for effort. Keep On Writing! Jeff
Leeghwater, your item here # 2050509 ewntitled: On The Plains. Well, it is an interesting story. It isn't bad. I think it should have been expanded overall. The storyline does not flow over all and seems to be patchy, like you had different ideas for stories and decided to bring them all together to try to make one story. It is just my opion though. Remember that. This has the makings of a better story with rewriting. Keep exploring your talent. I am awarding three and a half stars. Keep On Writing! Jeff
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