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Review of INSPIRATION  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Overview:  A short item about how encouraging words can help people through difficult times.


Strengths:  You develop your subject well. You describe your subject so everyone can understand and relate, and you finish with a good example of how everyone has to deal with life, it's how we do it that makes the difference.


Questions: The opening sentence is a bit difficult. You open with challenges and difficulties, move into words of encouragement, but finish with getting out of a rut. Perhaps just rearranging it a bit, "Challenges and difficulties are a part of life and sometimes trap us in a rut, words of encouragement can often help you get back out." Also, watch spacing; "...encouragement can help.Words can have a powerful...." needs a space after the period.


Summary:  Just some little things to look at and consider, otherwise this is well written. Good Job.




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Rated: E | (2.5)
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Overview:  Listed as other, history, and by the title, it sounds like instructions.


Strengths:  The title does grab a persons attention, and your subject does sound interesting.


Questions: This is a little confusing to read, and I don't fully understand if this is a statement or a question of how.


Summary:  The title suggests instructions on writing, and the description also indicates that there is some instruction for someone trying to seriously write a story. The body, however, does not seem to really make sense to me. Perhaps if you add more to this, and develop it further, so the reader can understand it easier. I hope this assists you some.




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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Overview:  A freestyle poem about good habits in tournament bowling.


Strengths:  great language and strong descriptive sentences. You make good use of punctuation and structure.


Questions: I found this kind of difficult to read and follow in this format. Where is the flow and rhythm? I understand freestyle poetry can include anything written in verse, but is this the best structure for something like this?


Summary:  You have wonderful vocabulary and are very descriptive. The verses, however, tend to be a bit long and difficult to follow; a matter of opinion, not error.


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Overview:  A prose about time.


Strengths:  Nice form, descriptive and well structured. this item is easy to read, understand, and relate to.


Questions: The line, "It is without color,taste... nor seen, But is never...." should you join these with "but" or with "and"? In the line, "Sometimes, it passes ever so slowly taking an eternity for the something...." Does "the" need to proceed something?


Summary:  A nicely written item about time and how it is the master of us all. There are a couple of areas I question, however, this is very well written. I question more the subject, is time our master, or do we enslave ourselves to it? Perhaps it's both.

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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Overview:  A short item on Bella, the Cockatiel.


Strengths:  This is very descriptive and gives a detailed look at a few minutes in time. You create a nice image for the reader.


Questions: In the third sentence, does clips need to be plural? Also, do they clip you in or on the head? Towards the end of the first paragraph, "She is grips ...", is isn't needed. In the second paragraph at, "'please scratch my head', and", I believe the comma should be right after head. In the last paragraph, third sentence, "I will than ....", I believe you meant then. Just a few typos that I noticed.


Summary:  This is a well written item, it is very descriptive, and gives a nice picture of this flying friend. Well done.




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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Overview:  A tale in the form of a poem that asks a question of life.


Strengths:  Nice rhythm and great work with rhyme. The flow is good through most of the verses. The language is descriptive and vivid.


Questions: In verse two, the fourth line seems a bit long and awkward as does line four in the last verse. Could these two lines be shortened a bit? For example:
"So now I walk away from here,
 Away from all the dead.
 I look up and shed a single tear,
 As the mourning sky glows brilliant red."

Just a suggestion, of course. I didn't understand the line, "This feral creature ... guarded by a kindly diatribe." In looking up diatribe, I see it is, Noun: diatribe a thunderous verbal attack, which had me wondering about it's intended meaning.


Summary:  I enjoyed reading this item. It is well written, good job.


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Review of Moments  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Overview:  A short poem about living in the present.


Strengths:  Nice form and rhythm. Written in a simple two line per verse form, it flows along nicely and has a nice sense of rhyme.


Questions: I had no questions with the poem as I read it. I understand the context of the title, "Moments", but was thrown off a bit by the description of "Living in the present." The poem, it seems, tells of never living in the moment, but of banking on tomorrow.


Summary:  I enjoyed reading this, and I can relate to it, as well. A nice flowing poem, well done.


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Rated: E | (2.5)
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Overview:  A story book about a kid who's a werewolf. I believe it is book 1 titled, "The Beginning", and is part of a series.


Strengths:  It sounds like an interesting twist to the werewolf story, to be a brother to a vampire.


Questions: In the title, I believe you mean story and beginning. Also, Its should be It's. Again, in the body, its should be It's.


Summary:  This sounds like an interesting idea, but needs more detail included.


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Review of I Will Rise Above  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Overview:  This is a short item about breaking free from abuse and rising up from the pain and subjectivity of such a relationship.


Strengths:  This is very clear and concise, it describes the situation, and what is needed to be free from an abusive relationship.


Questions: As I looked this over, I found very little to question except some minor mechanics. One is spacing between the paragraphs. In the second sentence, towards the end, you have Yet with a capital, but it does not need one. In paragraph two, the second sentence, you may want a comma after difficult. Also in this paragraph, the third sentence, you may want to replace the ellipsis after monster with a dash for the pause. In the last sentence of this paragraph, you have "knight and shinning armor" and it should be "knight in ..." instead. In the third paragraph, first sentence, you have, "only cause more pain" and it should be "caused" instead. After, "beside the hospital bed", you could replace the period with a semi colon and combine this and the next sentence, "beside the hospital bed; telling doctors ...."


Summary:  I found this well written and easy to understand. You say a lot in a very small amount of space. I think something like this will be well well received by others who are in similar circumstances. Good job.




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Review of Toe  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Overview:  This is a short item titled, "Toe" and described as random writing.


Strengths:  This item has nice form, and reads well. It is descriptive and flows well. Although described as random, it explains how a toe could be used to test the water, and it could be a parable to a person feeling their way into a relationship.


Questions: In line two, you use and between each item. Although this adds substance, it seems a bit redundant. Commas are the typical punctuation between items in a list, but if you want a bit of flare or pause between them, you could use a dash (--) instead.


Summary:  I enjoyed reading this and found it to be a bit deeper in meaning than it appears. Well, unless it is common for sharks, jellyfish, and undertows in swimming pools. Well done.


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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Overview:  A seven verse poem about a day at the grandparents, from the toddler's perspective.


Strengths:  This poem has a nice rhythm and flow to it. The rhythm is complimented by a wonderful rhyming pattern throughout. The language is colorful and lively.


Questions: A thought, about the first line in verse two. "Her dentures flip and flop ...." creates a nice image, but I remember my grandmas dentures would make sound when she was excited and talking rapidly and loudly. I read this and thought right away of that, and found myself thinking, "Her dentures click and clack about ...." Just something I wanted to share, an opinion only. Other than this, I found nothing to question.


Summary:  I enjoyed reading this and found it created an image as I read through the lines. A very descriptive, and fitting poem. This is very well done.


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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Overview:  A short flash story about children and what they want to be when they grow up.


Strengths:  The story stays true to it's name and description with a nice twist of an ending. the language and dialog add to the story and give it credibility.


Questions: In paragraph three, "girl with her hail in twin ....", should be corrected to hair. In the last sentence, towards the end, you have, "a a gardening spade.", another slight typo that should be corrected.


Summary:  Except for a couple of slight typos, this is well written and enjoyable reading. I did have to look up "weeaboo", but other than that, this was easily understood. Well done.


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Review of Lornda, My Friend  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Overview:  An Acrostic poem for Lornda's fifth anniversary at Writing dot Com.


Strengths:  This short poem is filled to overflowing with positiveness. You do a wonderful jog of showing you care and want to honor and compliment Lornda.


Questions: I didn't find anything to question.


Summary:  This is well written, has a nice form, and I enjoyed the way you start and end with Lornda. A great poem.


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Review of Perfume  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Overview:  A poetic piece of writing that tells of how little things like perfume can tell more than expected.


Strengths:  This poem has a nice rhythm and smooth flow. The rhyming is good and the form is interesting, adding to the flow of the poem.


Questions: I find the idea of a pause of some sort after the line, "To those whose flesh you loved" would add to this, but I have no suggestions of how to create it. Other than this bit of pondering, I have no questions.


Summary:  A very moving poem, especially to someone who can relate to this. You create an image with your words, you stir up emotions, and you leave the reader to fill in the rest. Very well done!


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Review of Having it Too  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Overview:  A fun, short poem about having your cake and eating it, too.


Strengths:  Nice form throughout the four verses. You have nice rhythm and flow and did a wonderful job with rhyme.


Questions: I didn't find any with the mechanics of this item. I did have one on one particular line that caught my attention. In verse three, line four you mention, "use it as pastry ammo" which has a nice sound to it, it fits the rhyme and works great, but what is pastry ammo? It sounds like you would of liked to use this small cake as a projectile?


Summary:  I enjoyed reading this and found it very well written and very well done. Even though I didn't understand the pastry ammo, it doesn't take away from the poem, only struck my curiosity a bit. Good job!


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Review of Mom's Poem  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Overview:  A short poem that depicts a lot of feeling and admiration in three, four line verses.


Strengths:  Wonderful work with rhyme, nice flow throughout, and a nice rhythm. Good description, easy to relate to, and enjoyable to read.


Questions: Do you notice the catch in verse two, the third and fourth lines, when you read this out loud? Maybe something like, "Happiness you bring to me, Making sadness always flee." I know, not so good; just an idea of how much better this verse would flow if these two rhymed as well as the rest does. This was the only thing I questioned.


Summary:  This is wonderful, well written and very easy to relate to. Terrific job, well done!


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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Overview:  A very moving poem about loss and despair, of being dead while still alive.


Strengths:  Nice form and verse, good rhythm and flow, good descriptive wording.


Questions: In verse three and seven, the first line, would "I am alive but dead" be a bit smoother? In verse six, line three, "Hearing goodbye from the all day", should the be them? In verse seven, the fourth line there is a typo after the the comma, it needs a space. Other than a couple of typographic errors, just a few suggestions for you to consider.


Summary:  This is a wonderfully written poem, very emotional and moving. You did a wonderful job.


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Review of DREAM UNFULFILLED  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Overview:  A short story about the fiascoes of a family whose dreams are hijacked by dark fate.


Strengths:  This is a good story, it is emotionally moving, and shows how sometimes life seems to be for naught.


Questions: There are many areas that need some attention. To ease reading, a space between paragraphs would help. There are many typographic errors: words run together, punctuation missing, capitalization, and general sentence structure.


Summary:  This is a nice short story, it tells a story of adversity and despair, and how sometimes life has a sad ending. Good job.


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Review of I feel... I want  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Overview:  A poem that depicts the need to sets words in motion.


Strengths:  Great work with Rhyme, nice rhythm and flow, very colorful language.


Questions: In your use of the dash, --- I see three in use with no space. It's usually two dashes -- with a space before and after. The ellipsis is three dots and is sometimes used the same. I find myself wondering why the capitalization of Oceans and Math? With Oceans, I thought for added emphasis, but then why with math?


Summary:  Very nice poem, lots of feeling and very well written. Great job!


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Review of Little Girl  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Overview:  A short and simple, yet touching poem on little girls growing up.


Strengths:  Nice rhythm, good flow, and nice form. This has a nice bit of rhyme in no particular pattern, which adds to the flow.


Questions: Would a semicolon work better in the first line? In line 6, "You are my world to me." Would this sound better written, "You are the world to me"? My reasoning is, my world is within, while the world is the world I'm in.


Summary:  I enjoyed reading this, found it easy to relate to, and touching. Well done.


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Overview:  A short prose about a typical nightly adventure.


Strengths:  Good form, detailed, and colorful. Everything is described very well, so that the reader can visualize the adventure.


Questions: Shouldn't dvd be DVD? "Each step felt like I was so far away as a mixture of stiffness and...", is a bit confusing. Would a comma after "away" help? The light "attacked" and my eyes "retracted" doesn't seem to make clear sense. It gives the image of physical contact with the light and that the eyes pulled back into the head. Would a different choice of words work better? It seems that the tense switches a few times throughout this, from past to present, you may want to look through and ensure it's consistent.


Summary:  This is a good item, it is easy to relate to; for me it's more when I'm in a foreign place or after rearranging the furniture. I found this well written, good job.


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Review of HOMELESS  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Overview:  A poem written as a class assignment about homelessness.


Strengths:  Nice rhythm and flow, good job with rhyme.


Questions: No questions. I found no errors or typos.


Summary:  This is well written. I enjoyed reading this, I enjoyed the rhythm and rhyme sequence, and the words ring very true. Well done.


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Overview:  The introduction to a book on poetic form, with more to be added.


Strengths:  Strong introduction, both to the project and to the author's interest in poetry, especially form.


Questions: In the second paragraph, "got" is not needed. In paragraph three, are the parenthesis needed? Paragraph five, "...interest in writing, and poetry especially, than..." Would "and" need to be here? Perhaps just, "...writing, especially poetry, than..." One particular class... to think of as more..." I think you need "of" in here. About midway through this paragraph you have "poems'" and I think you wanted "poem's".


Summary:  I found this a very good introduction, well written and interesting. Well done, keep on writing.


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Review of The Elevator  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Overview:  A short poem on the workings of the mind, putting the complex action of thought into something we can all understand.


Strengths:  Nice format, short and to the point, nice rhythm and good rhyme.


Questions: Line 2 ends with floors while line 4 is just singular door. since many elevators have both an inside and outside door, would doors work to match the plural?


Summary:  This poem does a great job of describing what many of us experience, especially in creative thinking. It has been my observation that even when I choose a specific "floor", my "elevator" sometimes carries me to levels unanticipated. Good job!


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Review of What am I  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Overview:  A short fun poem that also is a bit of a riddle.


Strengths:  Nice wording and format. Great job with rhyme.


Questions: No questions in mechanics. I do wonder about the final line starting with, "And", I don't think it's really needed. Also, I noted that your rhyme and flow kind of catch at mid poem. Nothing really other than a matter of opinion, but if you switched line 4 and 5 you would have a nice flow of rhyme;
a (shine)
b (enlighten)
a (whine)
b (frighten)
c (way)
c (day)
Just a couple of suggestions/opinions I wish to share. You are the author, and you know how you want it to flow and sound; your judgment is best.


Summary:   A very fun poem. This is well written and well presented. I enjoy how it presents a bit of a riddle. Well done.


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