It is never easy to lose the people or pets we love. They become so much a part of our daily lives. Your poem tells of the love you shared with Jess. One critique: The rhythm in the first stanza seems diffrent to me than the other stanzas. Other than that, a beautiful tribute to a beloved pet.
What a great little poem on forgetting. Absolutley loved this stanza: " can't remember what to buy
When I go to the store. So I just start to fill the cart, Hoping that's what I came for." Maybe because I've been there and done just that!!! Thanks for the much needed chucle after all the sad poems I've been reading.
You tell a sad story with a lot of heart. The only line I would remove from this poem is: "with you not at all." It just doesn't seem to fit into the rest of the poem. Good work, keep it up.
Another nice poem from you. Your work comes from your heart. You captured how people feel when they first meet, nothing is absolute, there are trials and tribulations. Nicely done.
Lots of symbolism used here and all done with nature. And the nature of the poem is something we all deal with every day, do we pick the good or the bad? Sometimes I think it depends on the day!
I have read a few of your poems and they always come stright from the heart. This one is very good. The words are strong and the flow and rhymes work very well.
This piece certainly let's the reader know the feelings of the poet, this comes very much from the heart, I can feel the longing and the hope come through in just a small paragraph. Hope your dream comes true!
The poem shows strong emotion. The first stanza has the best rhythm the second falls a little short, the third has good rhythm maybe could have been four lines instead of two. However, the poem has a story to tell and the message of the writer is clear to the reader.
I'm not sure if I understand all the sybolism of your piece. I do however, feel almost melancholy as I read your words. I know there is a sadness coming from the poet, but I am not quite sure what what each line is saying to me. Poetry has to come from the heart of the writter and is very personal, so it is sometimes hard to critique other works. I am still glad to have read your work.
Nice and too the point. Very gentle peom. Liked this line from your poem the best: "falling in love is when a girl lays in your arms… and wakes up in your dreams"
Loved the possitive feel of this piece. Too often we hold back hoping for more or feeling we don't deserve any more. I don't know how many times I have been told
"go for it all they can say is no thanks". Really liked the lines: "Don't question the why or the when
Do you really wanna know the answerIf the answer is never again". Nice work.
Loved your theme, a tribute to a microwave, never thought of that one. Your line: No longer proud, a paper taped to you says Rest in Peace gave me a nice chuckle.
Lots of feeling in the piece. Tells of a strong woman, with an even tougher mission "Go foward now. Speak and defend his life". I like how you begin and end the poem with "Don't look back" and have two diffrent means to the line. Nice job.
The poem is happy and light. Flowers make me happy too! There are a few spelling and capitilzation errors. But this is a nice poem to dedicate to your sister.
I loved the story your wove with this cute poem of a child and fairies.
My critic would be that some of the lines don't flow as in Stanza 5, it is a little choppy and the last line
is off a litte too. I did like the way stanza 7&8 was written and came together. All in all I liked the poem and it's message.
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