A nice way to tell a good moral. Things do not always end as they start. Everything flows nicely, I just stumbled a little bit with the rhythm in the last line, still a really good piece of work.
Nice subject for the poem. The rhythm is a little uneven as you tried to get the poem to rhyme. The first line is very nice, good opening. Keep up the writing!
One critique: The rhytm is off in some places, it flows great in your second stanza you can feel the dancers twirling about, but, in some of the poem the rhythm gets lots as you seek your rhyme. Still loved the movement of this poem. I could feel a beat.
Some of the lines seemed a little forced in order to make each line rhyme and some of the stanzas don't flow as evenly as others, that being said, the writer still makes the reader feel the pain with the words that were chosen.
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