Your piece really got to me emotionally because my father was one of those men. Too any people today don't realize what those men saved us from. The world we live in is as free as it is because of them. Accomplishing the poem structurally is faultless.
Great piece. The imagery catches the feeling of late summer perfectly. You evoked the mood as well as the appearance of the tale end of summer. Keep writing.
Great poem. I liked the rhythm of the piece drawing the reader down the work. We never feel worthy of them do we? To me it is a start of what real love is all about.
This is a great poem. One of the best definitions of real love, not passion or sacrifice but sharing of peace because that is what it comes to in the end for those of us who have experienced it. I had it for 49 years and it's this that I miss most. Keep writing.
I really liked this piece. It evokes the feeling of a long very dark night. As one who has spent too many long dark nights, I felt this one. Keep writing.
I really liked this piece. The description of music was executed extremely well. You evoked the music like a virtual portrait and the reactions to the song. The closing in traffic carrying own music was a natural closing because we all have something we call 'our music' Keep writing.
I really liked this piece. The description of children's paradise very evocative of my own childhood. My sister and I playing some wandering through whatever book or movie most recently. The flight into stories increasingly imaginative places is well drawn. Keep writing.
Great piece. I liked the building nature of the poem explaining this phenomenon as gaining access anywhere to provide the touch inside us wherever we are. I especially liked the ending. Keep writing.
I really like this piece. You successfully evoke the pain created by such an ending of a relationship which is what poetry is all about showing an emotion. Keep writing.
I enjoyed your piece. It reflects all the aspects of procrastination and all that occur to a new graduate. My graduation was more than fifty years ago but I remember the catering of fears and ambitions. Good luck to you as you make your decisions.
I like this piece especially about the caffeine which I really don't need it and you're right it's too expensive. Smoking I manage to quit smoking after second round of pneumonia with my COPD. My decision I felt was forced on me but it scared me enough to do it. Good luck.
I can really relate to this poem as I am also of an age when failures come to me too. The accomplishment of a house and other gains seem less significant. Learning to live with the negative things in life that seem closer in retrospect especially with health concerns. Structure of the work is good drawing the eye down. A great piece in expressing senior concerns with the past.
I really like this poem. I can relate especially to the last stanza. It expresses deep grief succinctly, which is primary in poetry to me. Keep writing.
interesting read. It begs the question of what water represents -- The attempt to go with the flow made physical? But your conclusion shows that the writer is afraid of becoming lost inescapably by thinking of the vast sea where all water ends up caught and afraid of the flow. A thoughtful poem. Keep writing.
I really liked this piece. It touches my heart because I had 47 years with my wife and expresses things I deeply understand. Mechanically the construction of content and form are well done. Keep writing.
My wife and son did a lot of hiking. and you've caught the feeling of the woods beautifully. Mechanically it works well and your rhymes and structure work throughout. Overall the poem does what poetry is supposed to pull the reader into what you have to say Keep writing.
I love this piece. At 70 I can appreciate the emotion f the piece. I have come to the feeling it not the years it's the milage. A great description of aging. Keep writing.
A great piece. It's a statement of the beginning of hard-earned wisdom. A battle I've seen woman relatives and friends go through over 45 years working in Nursing. The steps are finely drawn. The conclusion is a great statement of freedom. Keep sharing your writing.
Interesting Haiku. I know how tough they are to hold to the formula. It sounds like a Martian which will be cryptic if you haven't read Heinen's Stranger in a Strange Land (an interesting book though a little dated (written in the 60s). Good work and keep on writing.
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