Your tale here really sounds pretty impossible however Im sure that implating the circuitry will become something of a normalicy one day..... hopefully it will be much later in our lives. Your tale really lets utopia to shame...lol
Keep on writing and I'll keep on reading!
Your friend John
This really paints a picture in my mind and It a very nice place you took me to here!
I enjoy reading others words! Many times i get ideas from what others perspectives. Thank you for posting this awesome poem!
Keep on writing and I'll keep on reading!
Your friend John
This speaks for itself and really says so much!
this to me shows a story that is told from experiences past (I hope). There is alot of insight within your words themselves!
Keep on writing and I'll keep on reading!
Your friend John
Well conveyed thoughts and aptly described are the emotions that I think alot of us have been through!
Keep on writing and Ill keep on reading!
Your friend John
This is really a deep look inside and you did it well!
Your writing really takes off in this peice!
keep on writing and ill keep on reading!
your friend John
I think you really hit the nail on the head here!
Wow the depths of insight for one so young amazes me!
keep on writing and ill keep reading!
your friend John
what a heartfelt write! I can completey and utterly feel your words and the emotions that lie within them.
keep on writing and ill keep on reading!!!
your friend John
wow this is so beautifully orchestrated! i hear your thoughts in this poem and they are well described too!
keep on writing and ill keep on reading
Your friend John
Im actually speechless.......ive been trying for quite some time to think of the depths of emotions that flow from this intensly written peice! Bravo!
Keep on writing and ill keep on reading!
John
Lexi sent me a link to your port and im glad she did!
the depths that you take us to on this wonderfully descriptive narrative really brings us to here and now!
Keep on writing and ill keep on reading!
your friend John
i seen your testamonial on the left side and thought id check out your port! im glad i did! this is a nice poem and an enjoyable read! feel free to pop in on my humble port anytime! thanks
your friend john
this is wonderfully written and exposes the world from a different point of view which is unique!
I might add that others here helped me to get into the rhythm of using meter when i write. the syllable count of each line is slightly off here. the meter helps us to say things in a kind of sing song style that helps the flow of our words. i hope this helps some....now you know as much as i do
your friend john
this is quite thought provoking in its substantial explanation of what life is to you! a deep look inside really reveals alot on paper(or screen)!
keep on writing!
your friend
emil
within these words is an excellent poem dying to explode onscreen! your message reflects feeling we have all been subject to. if it were I i would work perhaps with getting the meter (number of syllables per line) smoothed out and try to be alittle more consistant with the rhythm. I know that it is really work to get these varibles balanced but i believe its quite possible!
keep on writing
your friend emil
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