|I really want to love this poem, but the "mouth agape" line kept coming back to me as I read on. A lot of your works rely on realism, even at your most gory, there's still rather realistic threads. I'm not suggesting you ever watch what happened when someone's burnt, but rather you might read up on this. There's screams for sure, at the very beginning, but within a few seconds, the mouth generally shuts as the person's epidermis is melted off, killing any pain receptors. Teeth generally stay in tact too.
Style is on point. As always, I love your gothic works. I'm probably not the best to review this specific work, just because what I've loved about your works is their keeping a metaphorical reality. That isn't what this work gives, so I don't like it quite as much.
Still! Keep writing, because I do love your work.