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Review of Oh My Aching Back  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I love essays. I am married to one with back pains. Occasionally I havae a pain in my neck, metaphysical and otherwise.

Overall impression of piece: This is open and honest. It is obvious you know about this

Grammatical and spelling errors: Back pin might be pain? Most would spell out ten to twelve.

What I liked?*Smile* There are a lot of true confessions here. I too have a lot of clothes. The perceptions are always the key

What I disliked*Idea* You have dog dirt and then, it hurts to lay here. It seems like a logical non-sequitur. I need more tie in

How the piece made me feel Obviously you can be open and honest about all of this. Getting older is not for wimps. I write almost exclusively essays. You might drop by and have a look

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Review of Grateful  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I was intrigued by this piece and bookmarked it. An inspirational short story is kind of unusual

Overall impression of piece: This is a pretty tight little piece.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems intact.

What I liked?*Smile* This seems real and thought out with both the emotions and the intellect. There are a lot of visceral and emotional elements in this

What I disliked*Idea* I don't get cause and effect as powerfully as I might. It is hard to identify the person in paragraph one and the ending as the same person. Maybe first person narrator would help? First person might be a little bit preachy, but it could give more detail

How the piece made me feel It is all pretty small potatoes when you get right down to it. The things we consider astronomically important are not. I am not absolutely sure why she is grateful

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Review of Asylum  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as interesting. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: Bedlam was the name of an insane asylum and that is where we get the word. It was so bad in 1914, that Quakers were volunteered to take over and instituted reforms

Grammatical and spelling errors: After 1914, way too many spaces after the period. Were should be where. Contained would be probably better as detained.. You could probably even leave the clause out.

What I liked?*Smile* This is chaotic but kind of follows the insane motif. One's person's crazy may be kind of normal

What I disliked*Idea* I wasn't sure about funnily. I kind of cringed. It has about 6 different meanings

How the piece made me feel I think children really will make you crazy of sorts. I am not 100% sure what normal even is.

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Review of I'm So Thankful!  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the spiritual newsletter.


Overall impression of piece: Pretty comprehensive list. We should all be able to do this. Most of us don't take the time

Grammatical and spelling errors: I am thankful for good spelling and grammar.

What I liked?*Smile* I can see the various revisions in this. It gives this a particular flavor. Some of these are mixed, like flying. Many have a visceral component to them. Thankful makes us feel something.

What I disliked*Idea* There is a process in Thankfulness. It is something we must work at.

How the piece made me feel Why not Arby's sandwiches. I love the gyro. The list is exhaustive. We had a wild winter here in Idaho. We are still flooding in June. Pretty amazing for a desert.

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Review of Remnants  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I thought this open and honest and worthy of a comment. I bookmarked it for later review.

Overall impression of piece This uses visual and visceral imagery to tell the story

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* I love that you did very little telling in this. It is my number one critique of most pieces.. I saw this. I felt it. It was quite good

What I disliked*Idea*You have mixed imagery. Machines kind of tend toward an organised chaos planned and premeditated. I don't think most human things are quite that way. We are horrible in relationships and quite wanton in our destructiveness

How the piece made me feel The Way we were is a famous Barbara Streisand movie. That never worked out because no one really changed. For the male protagonist, Hubbell, things came to easy. I am not sure how you felt about all of this.

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Review of I pray  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the spiritual newsletter.

Overall impression of piece I can see where you get your pen name. This pretty much describes most of the human foibles of our world today. It isn't pretty. Believers should be shedding light. They're not

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Scripture says "Pray without ceasing." We certainly have a boat load of things to pray for. We get kind of a myopia about things. Scripture says to pray about those in charge. People wonder about that. Hate has not disappeared from our culture--not by a long shot.

What I disliked*Idea* Scripture has a good model about praying in John chapter 17. Jesus is about to be condemned by corrupt men. Jesus prays for himself. He prays for his followers. He prays for future followers. We don't really have the power to know what to pray for and certainly to follow through without divine guidance

How the piece made me feel I can't disagree with anything you have said. I could probably give you a scripture on each. God needs to direct prayer himself. We need him to direct us.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. I don't think I have reviewed you before. I have reviewed a lot of folks

Overall impression of piece: Every tragedy has a human face.

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* This is well punctuated. I know exactly how you want this read. There is a lot of detail in this. There is rhyming here that varies, but is not too overt or contrived> I felt I was there. You wouldn't think death was so matter of fact, but we all do it--at least once.

What I disliked*Idea* I am not sure what I am supposed to feel and how I am supposed to understand. It seems she was drunk

How the piece made me feel This seems so wasteful. We don't even learn how to be ourselves before we perish.

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Review of Bad Decisions  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I was looking through inspirational pieces and found your piece. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: I see the drama in this. It hits some of the themes of Les Miserables. Sometimes forgiveness in the only way, even if it is undeserved.

Grammatical and spelling errors No errors seen.

What I liked?*Smile* This is very visceral in its descriptions. I feel that you understand what this is all about

What I disliked*Idea* I need more on who she is. I realise that this is a letter, and the recipient may know more and not need an explanation, but I do. I feel a little in the dark

How the piece made me feel The unpardonable sin is against the Holy Spirit of God, not people. People try to play God and they aren't very good at it. Write something about yourself on your port. It makes reviewing quite a bit harder. Fantine in Les Miserables is driven out of town because she has a baby out of wedlock. The mayor was imprisoned in his past for stealing bread and an abbot gives him the silver in his house to make a new start. Great story--read the abridged version.

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Review of My dream  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece I like spiritual pieces. I found this of note

Overall impression of piece: Most of our successes and our overcoming of obstacles come from our spiritual dimension

Grammatical and spelling errors A comma between me and encouraged. Commas and periods come immediately after the clause or sentence--no spaces. Same with your exclamation point. First sentence is definitely a run-on sentence
My capitalised makes no sense. It isn't a proper noun.

What I liked?*Smile* God kept me. We don't hear that much but I am aa firm believer too.

What I disliked*Idea* I am not sure what invisible joy and invisible success looks like

How the piece made me feel I think our lives are those presented to us and we have to respond to them. That is nice and profound comment. I am ready for poetic liberties in this kind of piece, but it is a little over the top.

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Review of Striving  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece

Overall impression of piece Music ability and knowledge does transfer. I remember being in a choral group and although I was singing bass cleft and I had played treble, at least I knew what notes were for

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* I believe we are all to have our own songs. I think probably they should change, over time. The sound resonates through us and becomes us.

What I disliked*Idea* This sounds like a goal oriented process. I am not sure it would be for me. I would probably be tormented by the violin string sound. Somehow students (and their parents) work through this

How the piece made me feel I get this. We often are not a society of strivers and then wonder where the greatness has gone. We are more natural at many more things than we realize. A tribe in Northern Mexico runs 50 miles just for fun. We call it nuts.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: You have put everything I needed to know like the contest and the poetry form

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* I thought a lot about what this might look like. Haiku's are kind of mysteries and are evocative. I have been places like this. They haven't changed anytime in our remembered history

What I disliked*Idea* I am not sure if stones should bear a mandate or mark it. If they bear the mandate then they have authority. Speed signs bear a mandate. Police write tickets.

How the piece made me feel Do stones have a mandate? I have been in places where I am pretty sure that time has not passed

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece A cow saves the world!!! From you, I would have expected nothing less. Bookmarked for later review

Overall impression of piece: I always like a heroic story, especially from unsuspected heroes

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well No errors

What I liked?*Smile* I think this can be read by anyone from 6 to 106. That is quite an accomplishment. The general story is always the same--an unpretentious hero saves the day. I think using quotes gives this more of a story form

What I disliked*Idea* snipe and type is kind of weak. I doubt if the cow looked like a bird.

How the piece made me feel: What can I say? Hooray for cows?

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as interesting for later review.

Overall impression of piece: I am pretty well aware of the demise of dinosaurs and this definitely is innovative and fun

Grammatical and spelling errors: Piles of ash has three complete sentences in it; it is a run-on sentence. One dinosaur sentence is also a run on. A delayed quote should start with a capital

What I liked?*Smile* This is picturesque with lots of details. I could see a comet collision through a dinosaur's eye. These weren't Rhode's Scholars

What I disliked*Idea* Dinosaurs are carbon. Sand is silica. There is kind of a disconnect here.

How the piece made me feel Flash fiction is so very difficult, especially Dinosaur armageddon. Books have been written on the subject. This is at least interesting and fun

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece Wow! You do have varied interests. I saw this in the spiritual newsletter.

Overall impression of piece: The sonnet format is extremely impressive. It takes a very disciplined mind to do this

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* I like the use of first person. Observation poetry gets pretty pale without it. Rhyme scheme is probably dictated by format, but it is not forced or artificial. I like the varied rhymes. It is not predictable. (again probably the format)/ Great rhyming couplet on the end

What I disliked*Idea*: We kind of sneaks up on me here. It had been an "I" poem

How the piece made me feel All that is there is beyond what we see. There are whinnies in the fog.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I love the essays. You certainly have dwelt in the controversial

Overall impression of piece This pretty much hits all the various possible arguments

Grammatical and spelling errors In a split quote, the second part of the quote generally starts with a capital. What is human life?

What I liked?*Smile* You start out with your own prejudice first. We all have them. Then you systematically go through the issues as they have been seen through the ages. If thinking were the major issue, I am afraid most of our leaders would be relegated to a death sentence. I really like going back and looking at Plato who was medical knowlege for a great time.

What I disliked*Idea* This is a typical argument of morality versus ethics. Morality asks what is being done and ethics asks what should be done. Great societies have ethical standards that define who we are as people and what we do. If there is no higher standard than what you or I might think, any kind of ethical norms get watered down pretty quickly

How the piece made me feel Ethics help us to do the right things. Man's natural stance is the easiest thing and not the right thing.

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Review of Veron  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I love essays. I love history. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: This is a classic story that pertains to much of our world today

Grammatical and spelling errors: I think Book titles should be underlined. You have piercing her family back together. Did you mean piecing?

What I liked?*Smile* Good summary of apparently a famous character. Her have several heroes in our culture who moved beyond personal circumstances. Read about young Abraham Lincoln in the US for one.

What I disliked*Idea* I need a little more of a back story to figure out more of what this is about. You know about Armenia. Americans, I can say, not as much. I know they have the oldest Christian church there. I have no idea what a four-hour winter guard rehearsal. I would give some details. I think you kind of skirt around why she did what she did. I would assume faith. If she said that, I would put that in, even if you don't understand it

How the piece made me feel You never said anything of your background in your port. It would help. We all have faith in something. It is what drives everything.

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the Newbie newsletter

Overall impression of piece: This is a big piece of literature. You are seeing things beyond what most see, and that is excellent

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* This has almost a cosmic feel to it. I think and feel that we have an inner universe that is quite complex and beautiful. There is depth that most don't want to reach into. Your imagery is big and evocative.

What I disliked*Idea* I am not really sure what to do with this. I am not sure if even you know what you have seen. You have set yourself up as a guide, but I am not sure about where you are going

How the piece made me feel Definitely put something in your website to help us, reviewers, know who you are. It is difficult to know how to phrase things when we don't know who you are and what you are interested in

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Review of Tribulation  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This kind of struck at my heart and I bookmarked it for later. Part of a power reviewers raid

Overall impression of piece: I wondered how purity gets expressed in a human heart. I looked up diamonds in the New Testament. It isn't there. They probably didn't know about them

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* This is superbly crafted. I appreciate the format for a diatelle. Not even my spell check knows what it is (but that is ok) You have internal rhyme in here. You have softness and strength in one line. That is real life.

What I disliked*Idea* Can't think of anything.

How the piece made me feel I can hardly imagine the rigor to do something like this. I am not geared that way. Why are we geared the way we are? It is complicated.

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Review of Freedom of Speech  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is right in my wheelhouse for interest so I bookmarked it for later. Part of the Power reviewers raid

Overall impression of piece: This is what the country is based on. It is our strength

Grammatical and spelling errors: No discernable errors

What I liked?*Smile*I love that you took on a topic that is so near and dear to us all. It is well organized and with references and links to them. I like how you highlighted newspapers rights to protect their sources.

What I disliked*Idea* We could use some backstory to the quote. I also believe this became part of the constitution in the bill of rights in the first set of 8 amendments. However, this has evolved into our known way of life. I believe Adams passed the Sedition act where those who opposed him could be thrown in prison. This was later rescinded. This isn't just law. It is a way of life. During war years, free speech was often revoked; Lincoln years was a prime example

How the piece made me feel: Did free speech allow women to vote or was public just ready to do this? This happened during WW 1, and Wilson was quoted that he didn't want to fight another war at home. Free speech obviously helped and they were quite vocal

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Review of Out Of The Dark  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Part of the power raiders review raid. Welcome to WDC. I liked this so I bookmarked it.

Overall impression of piece: This piece seems honest. It is well crafted.

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads very well.

What I liked?*Smile* First line has internal rhyme. Rhyme is not too strained and makes sense in the overall meaning

What I disliked*Idea* This kind of gives the feeling that this is all man-centered. I am not sure what drives all this. If we were offered ultimate wealth, would we take it? I am not sure we can choose to come to God. He has chosen us. Will we let him in?

How the piece made me feel This got me wondering in my spirit about ultimate issues. I appreciate your time and attention in this well-crafted piece.

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Review of Growing  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I found this interesting and it made me think of my life. Power raids raid piece.

Overall impression of piece: You put a lot of thought and heart into this.

Grammatical and spelling errors Two spaces after a period. Your sentences appear a little crowded.

What I liked?*Smile* You communicate simply and logically. I like the concept of being ok. I think we all know what that is. All these areas do imply growth which is life

What I disliked*Idea* Formating has some issues. I would underline all your headings. You can do this through WDC or cut and paste it in from Word. You indent some paragraphs and some you leave as block style. Block style generally has a line in between them. More specific about superficial meat

How the piece made me feel: Put something down about yourself. It really helps us as reviewers to know something about who you are. We have people from all over the world. I like the idea of enduring most unpropitious trials. They will come.

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Why I chose this piece I thought this interesting, so I bookmarked for later review

Overall impression of piece: You only hit the highlights of our instant "information" age. Almost everything has a Wikipedia page of somewhat dubious integrity. Most don't deserve one.

Grammatical and spelling errors: Block formatting requires a line in between paragraphs. It makes it very hard to read on screen. Don't is missing it's apostrophe. Last sentence has two semicolons

What I liked?*Smile* You have definitely captured the presence of our technological information age. It is easier to lie, because sensation kind of rules over truth. Gossip is a way of life. It is a major money producer. This is simple and direct.

What I disliked*Idea* Mainly format and grammar as listed above.

How the piece made me feel We do have access to the world. We have yet to wonder what that world really looks like. Put something on your site about yourself. It is harder to evaluate someone that you know nothing about

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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in essays. I kind of hang out here. I read your port and think we have a similar background. I am a practising Quaker.

Overall impression of piece You are right to keep this short.


Grammatical and spelling errors. Too many sentences start with a conjuction. It really doesn't help the writing at all

What I liked?*Smile* You have packed a lot of stuff in here. All the basic facts are here and well discussed. We do have to make a choice.

What I disliked*Idea* I would kind of change this from writing to an evil society--and it is evil--to how to deal with such a society. I don't think folks get as much out of their world as they think they do. This comes off kind of preachy and not coming along side and establishing a dialogue

How the piece made me feel Your picture looks like a cam on a computer. Definitely no hat. I am a photographer and I have very few pictures of me. I have a lot of ties to the zoo and aquarium so I use an animal as my alter ego.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is a requested review. I have had some of these bosses. You seem to know of which you speak

Overall impression of piece: Your background definitely goes into this piece. In essence, you are saying to reprogram your boss

Grammatical and spelling errors

What I liked?*Smile* The workplace is a jungle and we do have to make efforts not to be eaten. The humor in this is pretty first rate, and just the fact that everything is not straighforward kind of makes the piece. Every good movie and life have plot twists.

What I disliked*Idea* Ann Darrow reference might not be universal. I could pick it up. It has a lot of potential for a laugh line as you explain things

How the piece made me feel I think the end of the movie they send in the airplanes. The work day world is not for the faint of heart. Probably is not for the ones without a sense of humor.

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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I saw this in the spiritual newsletter. I have been married 43 years. I feel the same way about my wife. It is my job to love her as Christ loved the church (eph 5: 23?) Also look at Malachi 2 about covenant. It is a big deal

Overall impression of piece: This is very pertinent to today's life. I am surprised that 9% of portrayed sexuality is within marriage. It is pretty perfect.

Grammatical and spelling errors No errors

What I liked?*Smile* I am not sure if I am giving you the rating or the pastor. Either way, it is stellar. I guess I wonder if you are doing this for your congregation. Rating is good for the content, although most people under 18 would understand this(although their parents may not). Song of Solomon even goes so far as saying thou shalt enjoy it with the wife of your youth.

What I disliked*Idea* If you have a place where your std stats come from you might list it. Even in our church sermon notes, often the verses are printed out. People are incredibly lazy

How the piece made me feel It is important information. Divorce rates in the church are pretty much the same as society

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