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Review of Fallen  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review. I don't believe I have reviewed your work

Overall impression of piece I come from a similar vintage. My wife and I have bee marriied 44 years

Grammatical and spelling errors: Seems like there are more pauses when I read this. May need more punctuation. Bed-bound I believe has a hyphen

What I liked?*Smile* You have told this through images and feelings. Anyone with these kin of experiences can feel them too.

What I disliked*Idea* Can't think of much

How the piece made me feel Loved your bio material. You did tell us a lot. I know about "Changes."

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Review of Am I an artist?  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece

Overall impression of piece. This certainly hit all the categoris in which you wrote this

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* I see a lot of painful poetry on WDC. I get some of the feelings behind this. There is a lot of good imagery in this.

What I disliked*Idea* You ask questons but neve given a definitive answer. Are we to feel your pain or go somewhere else? We kind of need to know where you are going.

How the piece made me feel I wonder about who you are. You haven't given m much to go on in your bio. I look at that when I review and hopefully, dialogue. You ask som great questions, like "Why do we write?" I feel writing is bridge to another person

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Review of To do list  
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review and it interested me. I know what it is to wrestle with this.

Overall impression of piece Great advice. It is all there. In Hamlet, one of the characters suggests, "To thy own self be true

Grammatical and spelling errors. Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile*I can't go against any of the steps. Every step closer makes a beiver out of most.

What I disliked*Idea* There is a whole lot of telling in this. The questions ecomes, "What does this feel like?" Hamlets quote belongs to a character that is pretty much an idiot.

How the piece made me feel Most people want to know how to get here emotionally. I stuggle here, too.

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Review of Growing up  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Saw this advertised in the Newbie section. Welcome to WDC

Overall impression of piece: Made me a little nostalgic. Sometimes location has a lot to do with decisions

Grammatical and spelling errors: seems intact

What I liked?*Smile* I grew up in small town America. Often we are a compelation of everywhere we have been. The earliest roots are often the most permanent

What I disliked*Idea* You spend much of the piece describing the town and its people. As a reader, I am not sure how this applies to me. Your intro gives me a clue why you wrote this. I would expand that thought

How the piece made me feel This is really aboutmaking decisions. Often they are very hard. Please write something about youself in your bio. It helps us as reviewers.

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Review of Psalm of praise  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I bookmarked this as interesting

Overall impression of piece: This is pretty close to a lot of the ancient psalms

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile*I can not argue a single point in here. They are part of all of God's universal truths. Many come write out of the text itself.

What I disliked*Idea* None of this is new stuff. I'd like to see more of your personal spin on things. Perhaps some I statements would help

How the piece made me feelA lot of this is directly biblical. God's word is new every morning. Great is His faithfulness

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.0)
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Why I chose this piece I wonder about stuff like this too. I bookmarked it as interesting

Overall impression of piece: Definitely a valid argument

Grammatical and spelling errors: Narcissus is a person and needs a capital. Antibullying is one word. This is written in block formatting as need a line in between paragraphs. It is had to read on screen

What I liked?*Smile* We are crying out for heroes, but I amnot sure if we trust anyone. What you say is logical, but I am still looking for answers

What I disliked*Idea* You have kind of spoke about this generally and not given anything personally. It feels like you are invested in this, but you kind of hold back. You have what you feel, but you don't do much showo back it up

How the piece made me feel: We haven't stormed anything since Viet Nam and those folks were hardly welcomed as heroes. Maybe we kind of don't like heroes. I suspect as much

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Review of Not Alone  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Welcome to WDC. Returning a review

Overall impression of piece This is pretty good

Grammatical and spelling errors> Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* You have thrown in some interesting rhymes. It is pretty personal. I believe you really think this.

What I disliked*Idea* Kind of older thoughts like "What a friend we have in Jesus." This could have been written in prose as easy as poetry. Poetry uses images to get the reader to feel like you feel. There is a lot of telling andnot much showing

How the piece made me feel The great ideas never get old. This is definitely an example

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of the spiritual newsletter. I write this kind of stuff.

Overall impression of piece Almost prosy in its construction

Grammatical and spelling errors No overt errors.

What I liked?*Smile* This is beautiful. I thinka lot of folks are wretling with simlar things. It is a goomary of the way things are.

What I disliked*Idea* What you have here is of a treatise on life .I beIieve in brevity but but this gives me a clear ideaI that I want to see more. It is hard to evrything in a paragraph

How the piece made me feel I am wrestling with similar is in my life. You have a very weighty topic. Go with it.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece Bookmarked this one too.

Overall impression of piece: You obviously wrote this for this generaton

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors

What I liked?*Smile*Maybe it does pay to advertise. an you abuse on facebook. Great formatting and dialogue

What I disliked*Idea* It sounds lik this is Phys Ed. Homework seems a little off

How the piece made me feelI had a chemistry teacher who would have been like this. He wrote the textbook. Anyon who didn't do homework went to the principal office. Imidation and spur to excellence arind of the same thing

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece I saw some of your work and was intrigued. I bookmarked it for later

Overall impression of piece: I like this. It catches the ambience as a garbageman. We all hopes and ambitions

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Obviously words were at a premium. You did pretty well with what you had to work with. I believed this could have happened. It seems believable and I can se the relationship of characters. This is well set up and the format makes it easy to read.

What I disliked*Idea*

How the piece made me feel Everyone has dreams. We think garbagemen are exempt, but they are not.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece Definitely a slic of life piece. Welcome to WDC. A review raid

Overall impression of piece. The thngs we do as kids would pobably chill the heart of any reasonable parent and make them much less so

Grammatical and spelling errors Numbers need to be spelled out, Periods and commas are immediately after the sentence or claue--no spaces. Block formatting means there isa lin in between each argraph. Much easier to read on the screen

What I liked?*Smile* I get the enthusiasm of youth. It didn't have to be founded on reality. I like the look ahead. Nothing appens in a vacumn. I fet I was there with you.

What I disliked*Idea* Mainly grammar flaws as above.

How the piece made me feel> I think we al have some stories tell. Thanks for this one.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on random review. A raid review

Overall impression of piece Why do we do what wdo? What is our response to heroism?

Grammatical and spelling errors: None seen.. o errors.

What I liked?*Smile* What a great picture. I sense it probably came before the poem

What I disliked*Idea* How do youreresent the Lord of all creation? It is a question as old as time The frmat and the picture doesn't give the relationship of Jesus being alive.

How the piece made me feel Jesus is like a statue in this one. Probably because He is. Your rhymes kind of give this some continuity and make it like a song.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was on a plug page. I am spiritual writer too and I fee obligated to revew a fellow author's work

Overall impression of piece: There are so many dangers on planet earth. There is a 5+ earthquake on Earth ever day

Grammatical and spelling errors: Well crafted. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* I loe the formatting on this. It is easy to follow. Itis a definite plus to write ut scriptues. People don't lok them up. It is pretty logically written. If there is a devil, then it means something.

What I disliked*Idea* I do know all these scriptures. They are well used and make sense. Your audience seems a bit obscure. It looks like it is written to othr Christians. I guess I need to know what this means in real time in your life, so I can translate it to mine

How the piece made me feelChistianity is losing ts power because it is losing it spiritual base.. We are meant to be powerful. I am not surethat we are.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review.

Overall impression of piece: This is definitely pertinent to much of the writing

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors seen

What I liked?*Smile* Many peole do not have a clue on this. I love that you had permission to share all this. It gives more validity, besides bein the right thing to do. Well organized and easy to follow.

What I disliked*Idea*: Can't think of anything

How the piece made me feel We all need reference if we are to say something relevant to our world. Many things look copied from Wikepedia

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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays

Overall impression of piece This is a pesonal vignette about what it means to be an Amerian.

Grammatical and spelling errors You really have a lot of sentence fragments in this. Sentence two and three are fragments and could be more powerful written out. We need to know what you are thinking

What I liked?*Smile* I like the shwing of the flag. It still is important. We are different, but ou origins are very important

What I disliked*Idea* Just throwing in capitals to start wds doesn't do anything for me.

How the piece made me feel I too, am an unabaashed patriot. I think tere is a story on Mom that could come out.

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Review of Sisceal  
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Why I chose this piece This came up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: This is pretty cool. I suspect most of us are at least a bit Irish

Grammatical and spelling errors No errors seen

What I liked?*Smile* Irish syntax seems about right. Dialects are good and believable. This is very graphic. I do believe that people can swirl like leaves. Names seem to work

What I disliked*Idea* You have a different reality with all kinds of weird names. Perhaps footnotes would be in order.. As this is a preference than anything hardline, it works either way

How the piece made me feel We do give a lot of evidence what we are like by how we move. Moving like another helps build rapporte

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This came up in essays, but intrigued me. I do volunteer in an aquarium

Overall impression of piece: There is always more here than meets the eye

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Our aquarium is in a Mountain State (Idaho) Many have never even thought of this tuff.. Kids come into this with amzement. They do everything but dive in and sometimes, accidents do happen

What I disliked*Idea* Why is the sea shore lost? It seems to know where it is.

How the piece made me feel We do create our own worlds when we are young.. We kind of lose the ability later.

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Review of Firefly  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This cane up on a random review

Overall impression of piece: There is magic here. I remember seeing these in our home in Nebraska. My story, The Prince has them figuring prominently

Grammatical and spelling errors: Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* About and shout rhyme kind of gives cause and effect.I like that your rhyme pattern varies

What I disliked*Idea* Small insect seems to go beyond child perceptions and adds little magic. Winged spectacle. Purveyor of summer?

How the piece made me feel I think we all miss being a child. I think they had the most fun. Now we train them on video games

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece I came accrossed this and was interested. I did live through these times

Overall impression of pieceL Why not a false interview. It kind of works for me

Grammatical and spelling errors: NO appreciable errors

What I liked?*Smile* You asked some relevant questions in this review. I found it entertaining. I guess this never bothered me.

What I disliked*Idea* I am kind of missing why this is important and why you wrote about this. If you look at the original tapes, it would have been amzing that we got anything about this write/

How the piece made me feel I have a history section on my port. I love the story of wrong way Corrigan. They really don't have anyway of knowing what really happened

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This was part of the spiritual newsletter.

Overall impression of piece: There is obviously a lot of truth in this. Most great and perfect truths are spoke to our inner person. Otherwise, we don't really hear them

Grammatical and spelling errors" Seems intact. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* This is pretty believable and I believe, heartfelt. It is the God I know too.

What I disliked*Idea*
There isn't a lot new here. Fast paced life is almost a cliche. Kind of coming from a we perspective kind of makes this impersonal. I would be better. but you continue to race about is really part of the sentence before

How the piece made me feel Proabably should footnote his work, if available.

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Why I chose this piece This was part of the spiritual newsletter

Overall impression of piece: I can identify with your handle

Grammatical and spelling errors Reads well. No errors

What I liked?*Smile* You have this snow thing down pretty good. I can tell you have watched what goes on

What I disliked*Idea* I very rarely go into flights of fancy while in a snowstorm driving. It probably has to do with a Canadian upbringing. Seems a bit over the top and not easy to identify with. Obstacles to my visual delight seems contradictory to the storm itself. I truly believe it is like being lost at sea.

How the piece made me feel Usually my wife starts screaming when I daydream

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece I like essays. I write them and review many of them

Overall impression of piece

Grammatical and spelling errors Dashes are two hyphens together--then the parathetical thought. A tiny greek girl really isn't parenthetical. I would just use a comma

What I liked?*Smile* I believe this to be honest and forthright. The language of interaction is strong. I am not sure how to piece the events together.

What I disliked*Idea* You go in with a seizure and it looks like you had a heart blockage. This doesn't make sense to me, I need some filling in from your hospital room to visiting other

How the piece made me feel You were encorporated into another family group. That is incredible. Most folks aren't like that.

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Review of Stuck  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Why I chose this piece This was interesting so I bookmarked it

Overall impression of piece: Everyone has a thing about being a cog in the machine

Grammatical and spelling errors: No errors

What I liked?*Smile* Crushing and stretching are really quite visceral. Hopefully, that doesn't happen to me before noon. Heart pumping and lungs are all quite visceral

What I disliked*Idea* The purpose of this is... I am not sure if just being crushed does anything for me as a reader. Being caught in the cogs of the machine isn't too new

How the piece made me feel I feel we need to feel we can make some sense out of things. Noone really gets off on helplessness

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Review of FROZEN FLAME  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece I was looking at another piece (on winter) and saw this portion of your port. It seems like a good idea and deserving of a review

Overall impression of piece Cool piece. Elderly are people too.

Grammatical and spelling errors Maybe a comma after youth and a period after prime

What I liked?*Smile* This is personal and sensual. These feelings don't go away. A frozen flame is quie an image. I get that.

What I disliked*Idea* I had to look at quell. There is an element of overpowering to submission. It is kind of an old word. Burst upon may be better.

How the piece made me feel I get this. I am within a decade of you, but I am sure my fire has not gone out

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MichaelFrom Mountains
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Why I chose this piece This is part of a newbie newsletter

Overall impression of piece: This is quite good. I have never had a parade follow me home either

Grammatical and spelling errors None seen. Reads well

What I liked?*Smile* We do live our life in pieces. It can see this and feel it too. Who doesn't want more? It is part of the human condition

What I disliked*Idea* Sparkling momments and still scared of the dark seem a little bit at counter purposes

How the piece made me feel: There is a mystery to life. We are all waiting for the big revea. Speaking of reveal, be sure and fill out your bio. It really helps us as reviewers.

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Peace and beauty in freefall
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