When you are reading a poem written from the heart you see many things.Sweet expressions, pictures of thoughts and so on. I think one thing I really like about this poem is that your heart is tunned into the authors soul, as you read their writings. Your words flow nicely and your rhyming is excellent. I find no fault with this poem.
You have expressed your emotions here nicely. I found the poem sad, as I think of you going from walking on roses to walking on throns. You inspire me becaause you try to hide what is deep within by always being a clown. What ever has happened to make you feel the way you do, I hope it will let you escape and set you free. Nice!
Another heartfelt poem. Your writings are a pleasure to read. I can feel sadness when people walk by the cage you are in and do not even speak. How alone one must feel. Sometimes it takes but a smile to brighten anothers day.It is something I try hard to do everyday.
Jesus is indeed your sword and shield. I bet we would be so surprised if we knew the battles he has taken care for us, and the protections he has shield us from. You have done a wonderful poem here about Jesus and what He has done for you and what he is waiting to do for all that has Him as their sword and shield.
I have never seen a poem like this where you use the last letter from the the first row and use it as the first letter in the next row. I read this in your brief description and was drawn to read this poem. The poem is nicely written but a bit sad, sad that no body asked to read or see your work. I think when I get settled after the holidays I will try to write one. Nicely done.
How very alone and sad you must be to have your best friend take her life. I can just picture how you feel.What heartache and pain this poor young girl must have been going through to go to such extreames. I am so sorry for your loss, and I am so please that you are writing about her. You relly CARED!
Now That's Cool indeed.What a perfect ending to a life that you felt made you a geek. It is good that you never gave up the pursuit of being cool. Think of the beautiful family you are now.I so enjoy your writing and your humor.Congratulations on the high awardicon.
Very short, and very sweet. To seek loves desires is nice, but to seek it on a cold winter's afternoons is perfect. I like your expressing of soft eternity!Love"s desire will always return to you. A lovely job, and I see no place for improvement.Is there a name for three line poetry like this?
I like your title here, Your brief description grabbed my attention. Your opening told us what arachnophobic was. You took us through a journey of you riding your self/ or home from the dreadful insects. Your writing has humor in it, and yes I do feel your fears. I like the tale of the shower, and the yelling that brought your Mother running to see what is the matter.Your plot strong throughout, and your ending is fitting to such a nice story. It makesme want to check my bedroom walls before I crawl in bed for the night.
Rain star this is a sweet story although I had tears in my eyes as I read this. To think of a young fellow of 20 dying of a stroke is hard to believe. He was now over the pain of cancer. I feel sorry for the woman who gave her love and faithfulness for all these years to her true love.
A nice story, you have a catchy title. your opening paragraph told us who was the main characters in this love/mystery story. Your plot is well developed. I like the way you have used Vic here in this story. Good use of dialogue. A super ending. I can picture how upset Eddy would be if she knew Sly still missed Vic. I see nothing that needs working on here.
Beautiful. It is so nice to read works about a member of ones family. You have wrote an excellent one here, describing in fine details the pros and cons of having an older brother. I think that littlwe girls adore their older brothers. I like how you told us how things has reversed now you are grown. I esp. like that he now locks you in a room when his friends come over to keep them away from you. I feel your love for your brother in the words of this static item. I see no errors.
I read this story the other night and didn't get a chance to rate it. I wanted to come back and let you I really like it.I like how you began the story with the cowboy needing a web site, and how you went on to describe what happened between the cowboy and the web designer. I enjoyed the way you built your plot, a true account of what a woman wanting the cowboy would be like..jealous,tongued tied and so on. Love your ending. A good strong story.
What an awesome job you have done here.You have a true sense of humor, which I enjoyed thoughtout "Wasn't Me"
To take each month of the year and tell things that occured, things I found comical, and applied to every one else was super. Those thing that happened couldn't have been by you or why would you admit in December to being the one.
A super beginning to this letter. Many people especially wants to see the world, and the forces is a nice way of doing so. I like the answer given about what Linda wanted to do when through studing. Linda's reply was daring, and I admit funny. My heart felt heavy that she couldn't find Neil. Wouldn't it be beautiful if she would get in touch with him, now that she received this letter from Neil.. Your ending is brilliant!
I remember coming on this site and the gentleman was one of the first to encourage me. Thank you for writing this glowing story about someone that has encouraged, inspired you and yes, has awarded you as well with the awardicons. I feel happy when I see another exhaulted, especially when they are so deserving.
A nice job here writing about human sufferings.There is nothing as devasting as some of the diseases that so many suffer from. Along with the pain,and stress's is all the afflictions that comes along when one is stricken down. I know what disease can do..my husband as MS. Welcome here to Writing.com.If I can help in any way just let me know. I am but an e-mail away.
Hello and welcome to Writing.com. We are happy to have you with us. I read "Lady In Red" and I enjoyed it. I could picture your frustations with the lady who felt that she was overcharged. I don't think I would discuss this at the checkout but would go off to the manager. I like how you sensed that there was a pending robbery, actually you had me feel shivers. I can see how you would help the lady after she was shot. I think you could make this story much stronger if you proof read it. I noicted many typing errors such as what should be an ' is something elseHe didn=t . Good suspense and drama.
A nice title for this short story. A nice beginning, and you continued on strongly with the rest of your story. I like how you used your five senses here. I have never seen that done in any story here. Your ending is lovely. Good job here, and I see nothing I can tell you that will help you improve it. Welcome to Writing.com. We are happy to have you with us. If I can help in any way, please just e-mail me.
Hi, I like your title. It is a subject I hear my grand daughter talk about as she changes her clothes a few time each morning, while preparing for school. Very good descriptive writing as you take us through the many different looks you may wish to achieve. I can actually picture in my minds eye, each one of the fashions you took us through. Overall I think you have done quite a nice job with this monologue.
Some say their is no greater love than that of a brother, and after reading this poem, I feel it must be true. I am sorry your brother was what he was and did his own thing, but he just didn't realize how precious your love was for him. Your last five lines in this lament, touches my heart.
I feel your hurt and your pain. Nothing can cause us more worry or frustations than that of our children when they feel they are old enough to do what they want to do.. I have raised five so I know the heartache they can cause, even when they are doing nothing really wrong. I will pray for your son. I know he is really a good kid, just starting to really grow up. I will ask God to place his angels around him, and keep him from harm. It is hard for kids.
Congratulations for writing this award winning poem. You have painted a wonderful picture with your words of the many things that writing, poetry, music can do.How it can lift one, how it brings laughter, tears, encourage and etc. Your rhyming is beautiful. Simply a lovely poem.
Heart touching. I have felt like that so many times. I can sympatize with you. It is a horrible way to feel. You have express how you feel through your words. Alone in the spotlight, Alone in the crowds.How sad you must feel at times to feel no matter whom your with you are Alone.
How exciting to be asked to work as a stage hand on the "Fiddler On The Roof."Nice descriptive writing about George and his cigar. How frightening it would be to be accused of stealing the yellow forklft, and have the guns of the police pointing at you. A nice ending, but I did have to smile when I read the other chuckie had taken it for a drive. Good work throught out.
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