Welcome to W.D.C.! I am sure you will love it here. If there is any thing I can do to help you, just e-mail me. The poem "a Party Of Leaves" is really nice. I have never heard of leaves having a party. I like that line the young boy gave you. I like how you developed it in to a dance where the leaves are having so much fun, and you a wallflower uninvited at the autumn ball.Nice indeed. I see nothing that I can suggest to improve this poem} ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
Welcome to W.D.C.! I am sure you will love it here. If there is any thing I can do to help you, just e-mail me. This is a lovely poem full of emotions. You are frank, open and honest in your feelings. It is necessary in life to be able to share things, and I hope whoever this is written for will read it and be there for you! Nice work. I can not offer a suggestion to improve this writing. ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
Welcome to W.D.C.! I am sure you will love it here. If there is any thing I can do to help you, just e-mail me. I just read "To Tell You I Love You" Being a grandmother of five I know about the love you wrote about here in this poem. I love being a grandmother. I delight in my grandchildren. I know your grand daughter is a breath of fresh air, a bust of sunlight, a delight to your heart. What love you have for here. I see nothing I can suggest to improve this poem ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
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I am looking forward to reading this poem,"The Covered Bridge" as I live in the Province of New Brunswick Canada, which is the home to the most covered bridges. I wish you all the best writing this.
Unique! I don't think I have ever read about the inimical rose. You have sent an important lesson in this poem to be aware of the types of roses to stay a way from. I wish I had the widson to write a poem like this for my sons, but they did ok. Love the words herein this poem. {c:green: I see nothing I can suggest in this poem to make it better!. Welcome aboard here at W.d.C. I am sure you will enjoy your stay.. if there is anything I can help you with, I am just an e-mail away!
Some people are so talented. This signature is awesome. The horse rearing up on two legs with the others running looks very impressive.. as if these horses are royal wild stock. Background is nice as well and I like your signature. cattytaurus is talented and she did a nice job here.
Wow, this is such a beautiful poem dedicated to Sarah. In your first verse I love how you had"...On the web of W.D.C.! Your poem here is professionally written and rhymns well. The only suggestion I would offer is if you were to put Sarah's name as a user. Such as {user: username here} Then one just needs to click to go to her port. I don't know Sarah, or not by that name. I hope she got to read this poem!
Good morning Louis..Welcome to witing.com. I am sure you will enjoy your stay. If I can help you in any way or if you have a question please just e-mail me, and I will be happy to give or find out the answer for you!.I really enjoy your lyrics here, it is refreshing to read something that is fresh and unique using our Savior to strive to be like. Very inspiring.Thank you for caring enough for youth to write these lyrics.I see nothing I can suggest to improve this write. {image:1047557)
Good morning Adam.. Welcome to witing.com. I am sure you will enjoy your stay. If I can help you in any way or if you have a question please just e-mail me, and I will be happy to give or find out the answer for you!. I just read Montana. I have never heard of that name being used for a person, but I love it. Your writing is very descriptive and emotional. My heart ached for the angoy she was in when she heard someone call her name and ask her why she left..I'd like to know that to, but I am sure if she left behind kids, she felt she needed to go. You used your dialogue nicely here, revealing emotional tension. I see nothing to improve this write. ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
Good morning Squiggler and Welcome to witing.com. I am sure you will enjoy your stay. If I can help you in any way or if you have a question please just e-mail me, and I will be happy to give or find out the answer for you!. I just read your poem "Blur" and I am happy it is a confusing matter of being a dream..see I like your brief description. Well done but I must say it is sad. One thing I would suggest is on the nineth line from the bottom up that you add the word "to" between tried and getI could see someone falling like that, and dying. Nice work. ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
Welcome to witing.com. I am sure you will enjoy your stay. If I can help you in any way or if you have a question please just e-mail me, and I will be happy to give or find out the answer for you!.What a delightful poem Story Maker is. I love how you tell us that your Mother answers your questions with a story. I am sure you must find her stories intresting as she tells you of her good old days, meeting your Dad, tales about you.. What precious memories her stories will leave with you. I see nothing that I can suggest to improve this poem.
Welcome to witing.com. I am sure you will enjoy your stay. If I can help you in any way or if you have a question please just e-mail me, and I will be happy to give or find out the answer for you!. I just read your poem "I Could Say" and I must say it is a darling love poem. I like the way you compared her to all the geat things, roses, butterflies, diamonds or a twinkling star.These were all done nicely, but what appeals to me the most is of your last three verses. I see nothing I can suggest to inprove this poem.
Welcome to writing.com. I am sure you will love this site. If there is anything I can do to help you here or answer any questions just e-mail me. I found your poem here heart touching. I somehow feel one does not want to say good bye.. I know how that hurts. Saying goodbye is never easy. I never heard the expression, "a proper burial" when it come to departing love. I like the it Two lines that touched me are "Good bye old letters filled with love. Farwell clothes that holds your essence.Good poem and nice writing. One suggestion..in your brief description you have spelt ended wrong, probably a typo error.Keep Writing.
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Welcome king Tony Punch to writing.com. I am sure you will love this site. If there is anything I can do to help you here or answer any questions just e-mail me. I like your little poem. I encourage you to try to write everyday. You will find how quickly you will gain confidence, especially if you like writing. Your rhymning is great. I think you left a couple letters off the first word. This is simply a lovely little write. ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
Happy New Years! Welcome to writing.com. I am sure you will love this site. If there is anything I can do to help you here or answer any questions just e-mail me. What an inspiring poem "Live Your Life" is. It is so true there are good and bad days both, sad and happy days but your message to laugh and love and live each day is a sound one. Night soon falls and then we face a new tomorrow. I see no errors. I will be looking forward to reading more of your works.
Happy New Years! Welcome to writing.com. I am sure you will love this site. If there is anything I can do to help you here or answer any questions just e-mail me. I just read "Can You Teach Me To Speak? This poem is very upsetting. I hope this is just a poem, and it is not happening in your life. This heartwrenching poem leaves me worried and sad. A million hugs to draw on if and when you need them.
Happy New Years! Welcome to writing.com. I am sure you will love this site. If there is anything I can do to help you here or answer any questions just e-mail me.This is a nice poem you made with thought, and a fitting title. I like your opening lines. Trying to understand only brings pain and suffering from the past. Your writing is very descriptive ie' Chains of glittering jewels, and golden grip of the chain...and so on. I am happy to read your ending and I understand how you would WONDER WHY.I see no errors in this poem.
Happy New Years! Welcome to writing.com. I am sure you will love this site. If there is anything I can do to help you here or answer any questions just e-mail me.What a darling little love story. I like your opening paragraph as you told us how he wanted to take the big step but that it was frightening. I love the tenderness he had when he gave her his first kiss. "testing the ground" Her reply was nice and no rejection. A lovely ending. There is nothing that I see that would help improve this story any.I love it, it is a feel good story.
Happy New Years! Welcome to writing.com. I am sure you will love this site. If there is anything I can do to help you here or answer any questions just e-mail me. I just read your poem "Friendship Lost" I was drawn to it by the title and compelled to read it from your brief description. To lose a friendship because of lies and gossip is very hurtful. I am glad you have found solance in your Savior. Your rhymning is nicely done. A lovely job. I see no errors here!
Happy New Years! Welcome to writing.com. I am sure you will love this site. If there is anything I can do to help you here or answer any questions just e-mail me. I just read your poem "Have I". I am so sorry you have lost a friend to death. It is very sad, but always remember you do have memories that will keep her a live in your heart. Your poem touched me. I am sure you have cried many tears. I like how you expressed your emotions in this poem.It is heartfelt and I see no changes necessary or any errors. Hugs of comfort. From Funnyface
Isn't it amazing how many things depart from the silo of our minds, as we grow older. Yes even some of the most valuable lesson that we have been taught vanished as well.I like the expression "Lost in the cracks of Time's own hands". It is time's own hand that we do get losted in. I seenothing that needs to be changed here in this poem.Very Nice!
A wonderful message here for all that reads. A reminder to give worship and praise to Christ. To rejoice and give thanks to our Savior. To explain what Christman represents. What greater gift can any of mankind get than the one from our Savior the forgiveness of sin. A gift He gives to all mankind. I see no corrections needed here. Your work is professional.
So very true, children are not taught much about Christ and Christmas, nor are they taught very much about thankfulness. The other night we had a grandson, who JUST turned three with us. It was meal time and as we sat at the table our heads bowed my husband asked our granson if he would like to say the thanks. He said How Papa, my husband led him through the prayer of thanks. Later my daughter said, "I feel so stupid, not teaching him to give thanks.She said she felt he was to young..One is never to young to learn to talk to our Creator. I hope this poem will help one person to talk to their children. In yout brief description you have children spelt wrong.A typo error! Great write.
Simply outstanding. Very inspiring. I like what I would call a paryer at the end of this verse. You share with your Creator what your goal is, to continue life as a christian. You acknowledge that He shows you the way to avoid sins. You thank Him for the blessings you receive. You pray for others..everyone of these things is pleasing to the Creator. I find this poem uplifting and inspiring, and I see no errors in it.
So many do not think to give Christ a birthday gift, but I wonder if those that do, take the time to look around before they choose. I like how you said "my gift must be greater than all Wal-Mart holds." I am glad you took the time to look and think as you came up with the perfect present..your heart. This is nice. If I could suggest one thing, I think at the end of this poem where you have the review forum listed. I feel it would be less distractful if it was down one line. Only my opinion.
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