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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings, sir!

I found this a fairly easy story to follow, once I settled myself into the mythical universe. There's an established (human?) religion, and then there's magic, and the creatures thereof. The boy knows both too much and not enough, simultaneously... His befuddled innocence bounces off against the wisdom of the elf girl fellow student who saves him from disaster.

The scholastic setting was amusing and relatable; it reminded me of Harry Potter, of which I know nothing except that it's a school of magic *Pthb*

Overall, the theme comes through of someone who's in over their head. I'm wondering if Moll is really Oliver's blood brother and if so, how they ended up in such vastly different spheres. There's potential here for themes akin to the Arcane (League of Legends) storyline... Something else I know nearly nothing of except from the Imagine Dragons song Enemy.

I don't quite understand where the "day elf," Fihvyx, comes from. It's obvious by the time we get to the school that she's a spider elf like the others, but how is she also a day elf? Is she the only one at the school? How do all the characters at the school relate? Why is such a thing allowed in a land where it's looked down upon? Who are the beings held back by the dragon? Is the land under the thrall of a dragon pretending to be the light? I noticed the idea of serpents, too.

There's a lot you can do with this; it feels like a vignette, a scene from a larger work, but it could also stand by itself, with a little polish as you mentioned.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings, Sonali!

I'm here for I Write in 2025 *Smile*

Well... If I were Soldier Mike, I would tease apart your poetic form to see if you did it correctly! As it is, my eyes glaze over and I refrain from counting syllables in this weather!

Seriously, I love your theme. We all need at least one person in our lives who is kind and loving and creates a safe space for us to express ourselves in all our messy feelings. It's an important part of growth and gaining maturity.

I love the big cheerful grape-candy colored font you've used, it's engaging and emotive.

Glancing over the rules for the poem, I get an instinctive feel that you've succeeded in creating it correctly. At any rate, the expression of love and appreciation is sincere and heartfelt. I do hope you share these feelings with your aunt and let her know how much of a positive impact she makes in the lives of you and her family.

I don't say this often, because it usually comes to mind when I've run out of ideas for a sensible review, but would you consider setting this out in fancy script and printing it as a gift? You don't have to write it by hand; word processors can make gorgeous things these days. Your aunt would love it.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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for entry "Mama's hands" Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings, Sox!

I'm here as a fellow member of the PPC5 challenge - soon to be PPC6 *Delight* I'm also here to deliver the 100th review on your poetry folder *Party*

Wow, what a clear and concise way of putting it. It's a haiku, kind of. When I saw the prompt, I assumed Lilli meant a poem of precisely 25 words. I didn't realize it could be fewer. You've captured so much here: decades of hard work, the cycle of life, raising kids, the finality and inevitability of old age, the way we think we're immortal until one day we realize we aren't, the difficulties of motherhood and the importance of gratitude, the commonality of the human experience... Probably a million more things neither of us realized.

What can I say? Well, the font could stand to be a bit bigger... You know I always say Size 4 Verdana *Laugh* it's ok if we blame Jack of Diamonds Author Icon for the advice *Wink* If there was a haiku contest or something similar, I'd recommend you drop this off there. As it is, I'm happy to find it.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Review of Finally  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings, Marigold, and welcome to writing.com!

I found this on the Read a Newbie sidebar and thought it looked like an interesting read. Around here, one never knows what kind of dark twists lurk beneath seemingly charming stories, but yours is comfortably cozy throughout. The storyline has lots of fun descriptions, warmth and prettiness that will delight any soft soul.

I would recommend tightening up the prose a little, because the flow was rather tedious. I can see you took a lot of time with this and poured lots of details into it, but it feels like just a tiny bit too plodding. I found myself skimming over, looking for the unexpected disaster. What I might suggest, is to try working within a tight word limit. I popped the story into a word counter and it came out over 3200 words. In order to submit to one of the Official WdC Contests, at the top of "Writing Contests @ Writing.Com" Open in new Window., your story needs to be under 2k words. If you're forced to keep within a limit, you'll look at your writing style in a whole new light, asking yourself what exactly needs to be included to give the readers what they need to know to move the story forward.

You can start with a summarization: big wedding, excited families, rainstorm, happily ever after. That's all. How much meat do you want to add to those bones?

Instead of describing every single detail, you can give just enough details to paint the picture. Instead of naming every single person in the family, focus on three or four or five and use their interactions and dialogues to fill us in on the hustle and bustle.

Also, I would sincerely recommend you use a larger font size. Simply add {size:4}{font:Verdana} at the beginning of your text block, and that will adjust it, using our proprietary markup language.

This is overall a super cute story, with loveable characters, a happy ending, and the inevitable unexpected weather outburst. I love learning more about how weddings work, because I've never attended one. The beauty and excitement and dreams and love is palpable here. You just need to streamline it a bit so our eyes don't glaze over *Hug1**Smile**Hug2*

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings!

I found this by using the Random Read and Review button.

I always like coming across a poem that flows like song lyrics; I spent a lot of time listening to and "studying" music, and I've developed a feel for what makes a good lyrical poem. You have the repetitions, the choral parts, the verses, the buildup of tension, a downturn and a final upturn as we see you hoping and praying for restoration and peace. It has a balanced flow and is easy to read without being overly tedious, as some lyrics can be.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Review of Wealth Untold  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings, sir, and thank you for requesting a review *Smile*

For some reason I assumed you were a newbie when I saw this request... Then I remembered I'd fanned you a few days ago and saw you've been around since 2018, which is quite a bit longer than I have.

The first thing I thought of when I read this poem is... Don't feel like I'm trying to cheapen your work in any way; I respect Dan Reynolds as a songwriter, and for me to say this is a compliment. Your poem about the danger of wealth brought this to mind:

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So... I really appreciate the concepts and themes behind this poem. I think perhaps you should consider what you intended to convey with the repeated use of the word "bare." Did you by any chance mean to use "bear" instead? Also, when you say "A visionary to the wast future," I'm reminded of Sam Weller in Charles Dickens. Perhaps you meant to say "vast?" Or "wasted?" Also, where you say "For those who in need" towards the end, I think you've left off a word, "are in need." These little things pull one out of focus when reading because we wonder what it's supposed to mean and whether it's a mistake.

You have a nice flow here, sort of like a rap or a spoken word poem, with casual rhymes and repetitions that create a rhythm, bringing us down through the poem. The theme is strong, warning us of the temptations and responsibilities that come with great wealth, and the fact that we can't take it with us and we all become dust in the end. Perhaps a cover image would help this piece be more easily noticed among the drifts of poetry that flow through WdC. You can probably pull a good one from the stock collection they offer.

Perhaps, too, you might want to emphasize in the subtitle exactly what the theme is about, instead of wasting words expressing a certain carelessness about the product. Be loud and proud! How is your poem about wealth different from the next one? What makes your approach unique? Let us know before we read it!

Overall, this is an excellent poem with a memorable message, well formatted to stand out with bold font. I believe it could stand a bit of proofreading, which honestly I don't usually say about poetry because of artistic license and such. Other than that, it's great. You even have three suitable genres to help people find it when browsing.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Review of Too Much Blue  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings, Jeff, and welcome to writing.com!

This review is long overdue *Laugh*

I should start with the basic proofreading stuff and get it out of the way. At the word "overview" right on top of Earth's report card, you have an extra curly bracket. Further down, where Zuzu thinks "almost time for lunch," there's a cutoff sentence opening. You've used "their" instead of "there" several times, which is kinda jarring. And while you're there, the three "taps" of Todd's quill pen should be separated by spaces. Ok, nothing else particularly worth mentioning except for a stray bit of markup language at the very last sentence.

If you want, I would highly recommend using a larger font size. My WdC favorite is Size 4 Verdana. Since you've bolded and italicized, I assume you know the basics of WML...

The story is amusingly desultory... What we think of heaven is not what it feels like to those responsible for maintaining the universe *Rolling* *Angelic* I really enjoyed the way it was ultimately so lighthearted; I expected something dark and depressing, especially when rocks were added to the mix *Shock2* Analytically, I'm not especially good at reading, writing or reviewing satire or comedy; I have this peculiar tendency to take everything at face value, and implausible situations either confuse or annoy me. I do appreciate the tongue in cheek approach here, though I wonder which contest you entered it into.

Which brings me to genres: you may want to add a third more relevant genre than "contest entry." Perhaps Entertainment or Philosophy or Mythology or even Spirituality would be great.

As a whole, this was a cute read, giving the heavenly realm a sort of "The Office" flavor, with relatable, infinitely boring jobs and even more dull interaction! Makes one wish for a villain to make it interesting... I'm not sure I trust that Cosmo fellow *Sly* Maybe that could be your sequel *Ha*

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings!

I'm here for I Write 2025 *Smile*

What an exhausting month... Are you glad it's almost over? I sure am!

You have taken a serious and thoughtful approach to the subject, keeping the prompt questions at the top of your essay to guide and maintain focus. I might suggest setting the prompt off in italics to emphasize they are not your words.

You begin by pointing out how the issue has been dealt with already, citing an author who considered it by writing a story. I find that quite interesting because I also chose to approach the prompt fictionally.

I observed you didn't quite offer any discussion of whether humans are capable of living beyond the earth. Physically speaking, I personally don't think humans are designed for outer space... Well, that's pretty obvious. It would take a huge amount of effort to create a stable environment for people to thrive, and that's assuming you could find a planet that wasn't too close or too far away from a star of similar size to the sun. The odds of finding a planet safe to colonize are such that it seems as if God didn't want us going far afield.

I should remember I'm not here to answer the questions but to review your answers. As such, I found the essay easy to read and understand, though perhaps a bit rambling, but no more than I would have if I'd chosen to write an essay *Laugh*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings, Rick!

What a heartwarming story *HappyCry* I found this a few days ago on the sidebar and thought I couldn't possibly let it go without a review.

I've had a difficult month, between the summer heat and mental health, technology and bad news, projects running on the edges of deadlines, lack of motivation and sheer exhaustion. I spend most of the day floundering, it seems.

Everything about this story is like a Hallmark movie, with vivid, relatable details and a warm balance of love and reality. It shows us what can happen when people reach out to their neighbors with love and kindness. It doesn't have to be a big gift or an eloquent speech, just being there for someone when they need it, steadfast and loyal.

Job interviews... Ugh. I know that intensely. Every one seems worse than the last, without any end in sight. I need someone like Cal in my life, to keep me grounded and optimistic.

Spirituality is a delicate and subtle thing. Simple humanity can do more for the soul than all the pomp and circumstance of an elaborate ceremony. I'm in gentle tears, considering the theme of this story and how it plays into what I've been ruminating on the last few days.

I'll try to give some points of what I liked about the story so this isn't all fluffy unicorns... The characters are relatable and real, rooted in the city streets and apartments of their community. The narration is sympathetic, telling what needs to be told and showing what needs to be shown with a balance that's neither too preachy nor too cryptic. The storyline is simple: an old man and a young woman strike up a conversation and form a deep bond that draws a community together even in tiny ways. The theme is timeless, one we all need to know and consider. I see no errors of grammar or other issues that pull me out of the story. It is well-written and bears the unique mark of genuine humanity.

In other words, it's nearly perfect. Have you considered entering it at "Senior Center Forum" Open in new Window. for an opportunity to receive an award? All you would have to do is add a word count at top or bottom.

Also, I see you have only two genres selected. Three is always recommended for Quill nominations, and I think Writing is not considered one of the nominating genres, though we'd have to check on that. I would suggest Drama, Relationship, Community, Philosophy, Emotional, Family, or Career.

Take care, thank you very much for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Review of WLTM IRL  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Greetings, Jeff *Smile*

I discovered this fun piece via the Random Read and Review button.

Being a softie, I kinda skimmed lightly through it, looking for the "punchline" which I suspected was in there somewhere towards the end. Knowing your style, I found the ending to be satisfying and amusing. (There wouldn't have been much point to the story otherwise, imho... *Think*)

I would recommend using a larger font size, and perhaps adding a cover art to give it a little pizzazz, but aside from that I can't think of anything to improve this straightforward yarn. I can almost see Anton's obnoxious smirk as he fishes for prey. I'm a little confused by the combination of both "urban camo" and "vampire hunting regalia," but that's my own cultural aversion to the subject *Laugh*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings, Sue.

I'm here for I Write 2025 *Smile*

You paint here a bleary picture indeed... I can almost feel the coal dust staining everything, and the sense of despair is palpable.

The one spark of hope we see is when Russell stops to help a fellow man and regains some of his humanity by reconnecting with those who are also struggling. He resolves, not to attempt to overthrow the unjust government, but simply to stand by his neighbors and be a man worthy of respect.

You present an angle of English history I had not specifically heard of before. Like you, I lean economically left and am aware that Margaret Thatcher was a rather awful prime minister. This is a quick glimpse of the havoc wreaked on society's poorest by the callousness of those in power.

I would note, this is likely not rated E by WdC standards because of the word "sh*t" at one point. Also, you have several extra quotation marks scattered throughout at the beginning and end of paragraphs. Other simple typos such as "it's" for "its" and "principal" instead of "principle" could stand to be tidied up.

I learned a new word: "flannelette," a soft fabric made not from the wool of flannel but of cheaper, coarser cotton.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings, Tim!

It's been a while since I've reviewed you. I found this by using the Random Read and Review button.

Hands - we all need them! Especially, as humans, we need those opposable thumbs. I enjoy reading your cheerful rhyming poems about everyday life. Something about your tone always gives them a fanciful air.

Since it's about sports, I understand the reward of drinking alcohol at game's end, but since I know you're a Christian and write poetry about your faith, it might be nice to have a more spiritual perspective at the end to set our sights on higher things.

Other than that, it was a fun and thought-provoking read *Smile*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Review of Wheel of Fortune  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Greetings *Dove*

I'm here as a fellow member of the PPC5 challenge *Smile*

I have a storied and awkward relationship with music, being both totally obsessed with it and at the same time woefully unaware of some of the best of it. Perhaps my neurodivergency makes it harder to step out of my auditory comfort zone. Thank you for making me aware of a piece of classical music; I shall have to hear it for myself.

"Rises and falls" - oh, I get that. I often consider the different elements of my favorite music, and marvel at how some songs are composed with "the same energy throughout," at a high level of audibility. Other songs have low-pitched, low-key verses that sink into the background, and sometimes the only way I can recognize them in a crowded space is by one or two hooks that rise above the din.

Ooh, two new words for the folds of the brain *Delight* How ever did I miss these in my biology textbooks? I was just remembering the xylem and phloem yesterday... *Tree2* *Brain*

I don't think I would have thought of rhyming "mission" and "contrition." That's ingenious. In my head I think of "contrite" and pronounce it accordingly *Laugh*

Thank you as always for a well-crafted and thought-provoking poem. I'm glad I found it; I learned several new things.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Review of Different Crowns  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings!

I'm here for I Write 2025.

I really enjoyed this story. It speaks about seeking after peace in a relatable way, set in the real world among young people of today dealing with today's issues, and draws in Christianity to address it in a spiritually satisfying way, rather than presenting some sort of wishy-washy secular attitude.

I would suggest you add an item link at the bottom to show what contest you have written it for. I also noticed a couple of typos... I detest trying to scroll back through an item and find the typos again - I wish I would take note as I'm reading *Laugh* Oh, here's one: where Evelyn says "What does that have to us?" It should be "to do with us." Other than that, nothing which majorly tripped me up.

I'm glad you entered this contest... I need to gather my overheated, summer-slump wits and put something together for it myself. I have plans to write something combining it with "Merit Badge Magic" Open in new Window., which oughta be fun. Good luck to you!

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Review of Broken English  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Greetings, Jack!

So, what kind of a name is Kitfox anyway *Rolling*

It's been almost a year since I first had access to this novel, and I feel funny admitting I hadn't gotten around to actually reading the whole thing until yesterday evening...

Once I sat down and caught up the threads of where I'd left off at the first few sections, I quite literally couldn't put it down. I never seem to have a spare moment, and I knew if I didn't read the whole thing at once it might sit for another six months. This was well worth missing a bit of sleep over... I haven't read an exciting and imaginative spy adventure since the Hardy Boys about fifteen years ago *Laugh* Remember, I haven't read a "professional" grownup novel since The Martian in 2019, so I'm probably easily impressed.

I really liked the way the protagonists' relationship developed over the course of the book; that was a creative and humorous, even relieving way to deal with what could have gotten them in trouble and made things hopelessly trite, complicated and tedious. I've thought a lot about such a dynamic myself over the years; it may show up in one of my stories someday.

That sneaky trick... I love how you hinted it right at the beginning when she arrived at work and it went totally over my head; I wondered what the point of that peculiar restroom conversation was! Everything tied up so well by the end. This is a fun premise to work with, and when venturing into a sort of scifi realm, it's easy to ignore potential logic or logistics loopholes as we get swept up in the drama and tension. I was at the edge of my seat as things unfolded ever so slowly, seeing glimpses of what was going on and wondering how many people would be dead by the end of it. I really expected one of the protagonists would be eliminated; those were some insane odds. It reminded me of the wild stuff people wrote during the 2023 WdC Anniversary Masquerade party... Long story *Pthb*

Your writing style is always appreciated, with amusing, wry conversations thrown in as characters with vastly different attitudes and backgrounds interact. I chuckled at the funny parts and grimaced at the "ouchies..." How did Kitfox remain conscious through all that? A side note on the "hand piercing:" the nerves could have been severed, rendering the thumb folded uselessly across the palm. I learned that from reading about the Shroud of Turin. I'm glad they don't use those office spike things anymore *Shock2* Which reminds me, the agonizing slowness and clumsiness of long-distance communication back then added to the tension... Faxes from Mexico! Satellite phones! A blast from the past, indeed.

Am I supposed to make some suggestions for improvement here? Can't think of any. I thoroughly enjoyed it. All the little realistic details and the ins and outs of law enforcement... Well done.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Greetings *Smile*

I'm here as a fellow member of the PPC5 challenge.

Ah, the 7 syllable, 7 line poem. You've written a circular bit of philosophy here, using the prompt perfectly... except for the opening line. I'm pretty sure that only has 6 syllables. You can say "they say live for the questions" and that would make it flow better.

As for the philosophy here, it reminds me of some of the lyricism of Dan Reynolds, lead singer and songwriter for Imagine Dragons. It reminds us that life is meant to be lived and questions are meant to be asked... Whatever that means *Laugh*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Review of Weighty Thoughts  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings, Fyn!

I'm here as a fellow member of the PPC5 challenge *Smile*

Ooh, I love a good surrealist poem. This feels like Tim Cantor's artwork... In fact, the one for ID's Dream shows a little girl floating through an abyss, perhaps reminiscent of Alice... I should see what his website looks like since Reflections dropped... *Think* Don't mind me, I'm a born rambler *Bird*

You've captured the moodiness of waiting for something, we're not even sure what, but it must be quite important. Nervousness, jitters, imagining things, and a general sense of unease prevails here. I caught the "where in the hole..." *Laugh* did you do that on purpose?

Yep, not much to say here. You know I don't like to pick at poetry, and this is really good free verse, painting a picture of - ooh, "slideways!" A new word! Love it *Cool*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings, Sox!

I’m here as a fellow member of the PPC5 challenge *Smile*

This is a super fun and inviting poem, bringing up memories of parties and family. I’m not a celebratory person by any means… my 4th of July was spent running around getting a new used tire for my old minivan. Would you believe someone wanted to sell us a tire that was fifteen years old?! *Shock2* *Angry*

So yeah, I rarely celebrate anything, and indeed almost forgot why this prompt image was chosen, but I do love fruit salad and fruity everything *Hungry* Publix sells the best fruit salad and fruit on the bottom yogurt…

Is there anything I can actually say about this poem? *Laugh* You’ve captured the essence of a hot summer holiday meal, from the paper dinnerware to the burgers and hot dogs. Need I say more? Well done *ThumbsUpGreen*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Greetings, Ned *Smile*

I'm here as a fellow member of the PPC5 challenge.

Wow, this is something. You've captured that picturesque sense of seashore and salt air and showed us how it lives in your soul and enlivens you. And your use of iambic pentameter is admirable. I also misread the prompt and had to stop myself like "wait, they didn't specify a particular meter form...?" *Confused*

I love how you've saved both versions for us to read and appreciate here. It makes it double the value. Perhaps a couple of strategically placed dropnotes would improve the sense of tidiness. Other than that, what an enjoyable piece. It feels like a true poem, like Emily Dickinson or someone from the 1800's.

In fact, I'll give the compliment I save for the extra special poetry: it's elegant enough to write out in fancy script and hang on the wall *Heartt*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *Writer*


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Greetings... Rather somberly.

Everyone's upset about the way this country is going, of course. Even the Rhythms and Writing song choice is revolutionary minded... Suitable for July, except I'm afraid I won't be able to write a compelling story that's not either "too timely" or not really saying anything at all. Social relevance is something I'm not experienced in putting into my writing.

So, yeah. This is a compelling visual, clearly expressing what we're all afraid of and can see happening in front of us. The Statue of Liberty might as well be sent to China and melted down for scrap, at this rate. Didn't she say "we welcome your tired, your poor, your huddled masses yearning to breathe free?" No, now we're sending them to the alligators.

As always, I appreciate how you've drawn a tarot card and applied it to what the topic is. Your perspective is appreciated in a world where I never know what to say to who because I might offend them.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Greetings, Sonali!

I discovered this using the Random Read and Review button.

What a fun little story; when I first started reading I assumed they were little kids. It was a fun twist to discover they were all hard working teachers who were upset about "too much honesty" *Laugh*

I like how it ended, with friendship overriding what could have been super awkward for the rest of their lives! This was a great read, with large clear font and good formatting.

I would suggest adding a third relevant genre other than "contest entry;" you can say Melodrama, or Comedy, or Educational, or Friendship. You might also... Never mind, seeing how old it is, no one expects to be reminded of the prompt!

Congrats on your third place in What a Character! Glad to see you there *Hug1**Smile**Hug2*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Greetings, Sue!

I'm here for I Write 2025... And good grief, I almost forgot *Shock2* Would've had to apologize to Annette...

Aw, what a tearjerker. I remember stories like Old Yeller, from my childhood. I've always understood that pets have a shorter lifespan than humans, and adoption means heartbreak somewhere down the line. That's a large part of the reason I didn't grow up with animals in the household.

You've written with loving care, showing us a boy and his dog as they part ways on that final journey. With no corny promises of the Rainbow Bridge or whatever they call it, you focus on the beauty of appreciating the here and now, steeped in the natural rhythms of life in the bush.

I love the way you've used your local setting to show us something we may not always see. I'll have to look up the little Donkey Orchids. I grew up in a garden, so I know how enjoyable it is to go flower hunting and steep oneself in nature.

These are formative moments, and you've done a memorable job creating a situation which tugs on our heartstrings and offers us a reminder to treasure what we have while it is still with us.

I can't think of anything to suggest for improvement here.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Greetings, sir!

I found this by using the Random Read and Review button.

I love the super quick and simple thought you’ve put out here for us: strength in weakness, building up by removing one’s flaws and repairing the cracks. It’s memorable enough to scribble out by hand and pin to a bulletin board.

I can’t think of anything that might be improved here, so consider this a kindly and encouraging note as I reach today’s 7 badge goals *Smile*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Greetings, Kazi!

I'm here for I Write 2025. This is such a wonderful writing and reviewing opportunity they've provided for us. I need to work on my last three blog entries for the Bard's Hall this week.

You're a gifted storyteller, with a poetic voice giving us comfort in what we see. You share a moment of love and joy, showing us how the smallest pleasures in life are the most precious. Capturing these little moments in a narrative form is something special. It reminds me to treasure the little blessings that might fall by the wayside.

I have an affinity for micro stories, myself; we call a story under 100 words a "drabble." In fact, I need to write seven of them this week for a project. Thankfully, I can usually dash off four in one evening *Laugh*

In all thoughts of the future, we must remember to say Inshallah, or God willing. Everything is in His hands. I tend to get so tense about deadlines sometimes.

Take care, thanks for sharing this beautiful snapshot with us, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Greetings, Beholden!

I'm here as a fellow member of the PPC5 challenge.

Ah, the sense of touch. So many nice sensory experiences there are in life: the fur of a cat or a stuffed animal, the roughness of firewood, the cold tile of a floor or the warmth of a thermos of soup.

You've captured some memorable sensory moments here; each one leads to the other in a gradual shift from miniscule to grand, all connected to wind and how it interacts with us in some way. I like the symmetry of it, the balanced line lengths, and the nature metaphors that add more to it than just the bare and simple feelings of "feeling."

I remember one time my mom borrowed a Nat Geo DVD from the library for us to watch, on the sense of touch. I was excited to find out more about the nervous system and perception and whatnot, but we didn't get past the first few minutes of it, because it started off by showing two people snuggling with too much skin showing... *Shock2* Since then, I've been wary of the subject of "touch" *Pthb*

You've made something quite picturesque and respectable here. It's greatly appreciated *ThumbsUpGreen*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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