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Review of Cat  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings! I found this by using the Random Read and Review button, which I haven’t utilized in a while. I’m very happy I did this evening.

A lovely, brief and simple poem about an alley cat that becomes a member of the family. I love the picturesque descriptions that bring it all to life in a few words, showing us just how black the cat’s fur is. I assumed at first it was a tale of a fleeting encounter, and the words at the end were heartwarming.

You should submit this to the two poetry contests I know of that take old entries: "First and Second Chance Poetry Contest"  and "Shadows and Light Poetry Contest" . As free verse it would qualify for both of them.

Thanks for sharing, take care, and keep writing *Smile* *Cat*


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Review of My Life  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings, and I apologize for almost forgetting about your review request! Thank you for asking for it.

I’ll get the boring formatting suggestions out of the way first… size 4 Verdana font, perhaps centered text, and possibly a line count at the bottom in case you would like to enter it into "First and Second Chance Poetry Contest"  or "Shadows and Light Poetry Contest" . Two more genres might also be added; I would suggest “Personal” and “Relationship” or “Family.”

Your poetic structure is a little confusing, as I didn’t feel a clearly measured “beat,” yet some of the lines ended in rhymes… oh, I see now upon closer examination: alternate lines throughout end in an approximate “old” sound, which ties the poem together well, is appropriate for the subject matter and perhaps hints at the deeper meaning.

Lines vary in length but are mostly pretty long, which is why I suggest centering the font to balance them out across the page.

Your theme is relatable, as we all wonder about the significance of the paths we’ve chosen in life and what would have happened if we’d gone a different route. Overall it’s an interesting and well expressed item, with some sadness at the end as we see the narrator realizing that his choices may not have been the best and wondering how to correct course.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

I say again, welcome *Hug1**Smile**Hug2* This online writing community is big enough for you, and there are many options to interact with others, build friendships, or request reviews if you write anything like standard fiction or poetry.

This is an excellent, honest and heartfelt monologue, explaining your feelings about the important role writing plays in your life. I relate so much to a lot of what you say here, about how one has to work through the adversities and create what one has a desire to see created, even though it feels impossible to accomplish with so much else happening in the “real world.” I know personally how hard it appears to be to reserve time for one’s “unimportant” pursuits such as creative writing or journaling. In fact, while working through Covid I fell completely out of the habit of writing anything at all, and by the time the year was over I couldn’t put two coherent sentences together on paper, I was so stressed out. It took another year to gather my senses and resume my writing journey.

Refocusing on your piece of writing here, I would suggest using size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability across devices, and also to make it more visually appealing. Perhaps a couple more paragraph breaks would help to lead the eye along. Also, if you plan to enter any contests, it’s a good idea to start the habit of including a word count in every item.

As a general rule I don’t like to make specific critiques of personal items; your choice of words is your own. Your grammar and punctuation are good. If you want to get back into writing, you can set goals and participate in the various activities around here. To begin your exploration of WdC, you can check out "Activities @ Writing.Com"  or "Writing Contests @ Writing.Com"  for fun stuff to join. "Question of the Day!"  is a wonderful spot to chat and meet the most active members of the community.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Review of Wonderland 2024  
for entry "I-1. The Jury" 
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Greetings!

I’m just passing through while completing my own Wonderland tasks. Your book looks exciting, and I’ll probably catch up on some other entries. For now I have a fascination with the jurors, so I went straight to this.

A realistic set of jurors here, which lead us to wonder how they would settle the case among themselves. I remember reading the script for Twelve Angry Men in my literature books, and someday I might attempt to write one myself. These juror lists are good practice.

Keep going, you’re so close to your crown! This is a community project, and we’re in it together. It’s wonderful being able to follow others’ responses to the prompts and enjoy everyone’s creativity.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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for entry "I1:The Jury" 
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Greetings!

I'll be transparent up front: I'm only taking the time to stop by other people's Wonderland stories because it's required for continuing *Laugh*

But since I'm here, I'll do my best. I went straight to see who you picked for jury duty, and oh boy, what a fine selection. The characters are quite realistic, serious and relatable, and I could easily see it as a rundown for a sort of Twelve Angry Men type of legal drama. You've labored over the details of their lives in an admirable way that I doubt anyone else did.

I would suggest using size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability across devices, and to bold, underline and number each name so it looks tidier and not like an interminable laundry list. It looks like a lot more than 1000 words, but you kept within the limit.

Keep on going Through the Looking Glass! I'm cheering for you *Delight* This is a big project, and you've come far along in it.

Thanks for sharing, take care and have fun *Smile* *HeartT*


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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
*PartyHatBl* Happy Birthday Greetings! *PartyHatBl*


A useful and helpful article about setting up a webpage on WdC. As someone who was recently gifted a Premium membership, I shall sooner or later most likely be investigating the possibilities of building a webpage of my own. Although truth be told, I know nothing whatsoever about HTML *Laugh* I do see parallels with what I’ve learned about Writing ML, so it shouldn't be too much of a jump.

I notice you spend about half of the article discussing how to create tables, which I'm not sure are that important to most writers on here. As someone inexperienced in HTML, I wouldn't know which things would be more useful to discuss... Perhaps I shouldn't have chosen this item to review *Laugh* *Blush*

But now I know where to begin! You've listed sites to go to and learn about web building. I'm excited about the opportunity to make one of my own.

Thanks for sharing, take care, and keep writing *Smile* *HeartO*


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Review of Me, Myself and I  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
*PartyHatR* Happy Birthday Greetings! *PartyHatR*


A thoughtful poem that raises important questions one should consider in relationships. Such questions illustrate the double standard between men and women, as the men expect to be waited on hand and foot when they get home, even when the woman has a job of her own. And men often have attitudes of arrogance and unrealistic expectations for the way a woman should behave, look or speak.

Your free verse flows well and is easy to read. The formatting is attractive. Perhaps a line count would be a good idea just out of habit.

I don’t usually have much to criticize about poetry, especially free verse. Since I dislike measuring meter and counting syllables, I’m hardly qualified to offer advice on structure or form. As long as it expresses sincere feelings, it counts. I view poetry as a highly subjective vehicle to say things which can’t always be expressed easily in cold hard prose.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *Heart*


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Review of Tommy's Rainbow  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
*PartyHatY*Happy Birthday Greetings!*PartyHatY*

Ah, now here’s a story that’s perfect for the day; heartfelt and ultimately happy as Tommy learns his lesson on love and obedience. I like nothing better than good children’s stories, and you’ve made a charming one here. Those seven rainbow fairies with their lovely voices - why, it could be a Disney movie.

The font’s a bit small on this one; I always recommend Size 4 Verdana around here. Other than that, there isn’t anything I can see to change. Descriptions are warmly visual, and we can see and feel everything quite well. The backdrop of wartime adds a historical feel and some depth to the fairytale.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *HeartRainbow* *4leaf*


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Review of Kalamity  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
*PartyHatB* Happy Birthday Greetings *PartyHatB*


Oh dear, this was a painful one to read. I was hoping there would be some hope for survival, but it was a hopeless endeavor. If Edmund had only listened to Sarah…

Which reminds me, if this was set in the usual Victorian steampunk era, the two of them wouldn’t have been sleeping in the same bed while engaged. Just a small thought from a fussbudget.

Your showing details are all too vivid, bringing the scenes to life with the clarity of a movie. It’s grimly realistic in that tragic accidents of the sort do actually happen even nowadays.(have you heard about the people who dived down to see the Titanic?)

This is a cautionary tale of sorts, reminding one of the fragile hubris of mankind and the great risks that are involved in any technological advances. One wonders if we weren’t all better off living a quiet agrarian lifestyle…

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *Gear*


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Review of Hope  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

Hope is a theme oft spoken of in poetry. One quickly thinks of Emily Dickinson’s “Hope is the thing with feathers,” that famously uses the metaphor of a bird to describe how hope feels.

You have chosen to illustrate the elusive nature of hope with the classic metaphor of light shining in the darkness. This simple and memorable theme is well used. The words are chosen carefully, and the rhymes are sensible without being overly trite.

I would ask why you have chosen the genre of “Fanfiction” for this item; fan fiction is a highly specific category of writing which uses characters and settings of someone else’s work. Perhaps “Emotional” and “Philosophical” would be better. It’s always recommended to select three relevant genres to ensure you have as many opportunities as possible to qualify for a Quill Award.

A poem of this type would perhaps look its best with centered text. I always recommend size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability across devices. You may also enjoy experimenting with different font colors to enhance the theme and look more engaging. Also, it’s always good to develop the habit of adding a line count to your poetry items here in case you would like to enter a contest later on.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Review of Healing Waters  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings,

This is an elegant poem that encompasses a broad theme, of life’s transitions as seen through the lens of nature and different bodies of water. The ideas build upon themselves, as the narrator matures from the laughing innocent playfulness of streams and brooks to the stern seriousness of the potentially dangerous river, and then into the peaceful solitude of the lake in old age, and from there to the final dissolution into the great unknown of the ocean.

I don’t have much to offer when it comes to poetry; I personally dislike counting syllables and measuring meter, preferring to go with either free verse or sheer instinct when building poems. So I’m not qualified to advise you on structure and form. But I do know a good poem when I see one. Your verses flow well, and the concepts are easy to grasp.

Formatting advice is easy to give around here; I always recommend using size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability across devices. Perhaps you can center and underline the title header, and include a line count at the bottom to prepare yourself in case you want to enter any poetry contests. You may enjoy experimenting with different font colors to enhance the theme and make it look prettier on the screen.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Review of Lost Umbrella  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

A warm and charming flash fiction, somewhat in the style of a magazine page, "Chicken Soup for the Soul" type of thing. I really enjoyed it.

A couple of suggestions for formatting on WdC: most text formatting options can be found in the line of boxes above the item entry space. First select your text that you desire to modify, and then click on the appropriate boxes. I always recommend using size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability across devices. I would also recommend a word count be added; it's a good habit to develop in case you want to enter contests down the road. Word count can be found by clicking the tiny gear at the top of your item.

I couldn't help wondering how she lost her umbrella without noticing, if it was raining steadily. But I suppose when she entered a shop and closed it up it could have gotten lost. Such things happen often in cities; in fact, my Mom often tells me how her umbrellas would keep getting lost in New York back in the 60's.

And I just heard Rihanna's Umbrella song this morning, too *Music1* Serendipity is a beautiful thing, just like how the stranger's kindness brightened Lily's rainy day and reminded her that there is light in the world.

I don't have a lot of suggestions here, in fact hardly any. You've painted the rainy city streets for us with clarity and feeling. The words come smoothly and the vignette is simple and understandable.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Review of Fugitive  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings, sir,

A nifty story you have here. You've taken all elements of the prompt image and carefully incorporated them into the tale, from the two shadowy figures to the weather and the lady's blue eyes.

I like how you've added the little details about going to Africa; knowing some of your background from your blog, I know it's personally true and adds a touch of realism (as if that's really you it happened to.)

The plot you've come up with is creative; to me it looks like the lady is walking her robotic owl down the street. I didn't feel like creating a cliche "damsel in distress" scenario, as I have an instinctive tendency towards, and eventually I stalled on this round and qualified for Jody's Contest Challenge by writing some limericks. I may yet enter it, if I can ever escape Wonderland *Laugh*

Can't think of anything to suggest here; it has a beginning, middle and end, goals, stakes and obstacles, and characters. Grammar is perfect.

Take care, thanks for sharing, good luck on the contest, and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

A painful and heartfelt free verse poem describing the difficulties of losing not one but two fathers to carelessness and neglect over the course of your young life. The repetition builds upon itself to reveal the loneliness of your situation, and the final lines reveal just how deeply the rift has been driven. This is simply written and memorable.

I would recommend using Size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability across devices, and also adding three relevant genres to the item. This gives your item more opportunities to be nominated for a Quill Award. Possible genres include “Experience,” “Personal,” and “Biographical.” Title rules usually suggest capitalizing each first letter and avoiding punctuation, but that’s a minor detail. It’s a clever title.

I don’t usually have much to criticize about poetry, especially free verse. I’m terrible at measuring meter and counting syllables, and barely know the difference between a sonnet and an elegy, so I’m not qualified to point out the errors in anyone else’s formal poetry. This one needs no criticism. It reads smoothly with the feel of a journal entry, and I admire your vulnerability in publishing it here.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

I love this image you’ve created for us of someone who has built a beautiful world within a world (within a world.) Alex is writing and creating stories within the warmth, solitude and safety of his apartment, nestled within the security and nearness of a bustling city. This is a vignette of the kind of life I dream of having, removed from the stresses of having to deal personally with others, yet near enough to be able to observe and partake in the multitude of human emotions which inspire me. My only desire would be to be more connected to nature, perhaps (in the context of the city) having a rooftop garden to retire to.

This item has no dialogue, but since it’s solely focused on Alex, there isn’t need for any. I am reminded of the Danish concept of hygge with stories like these: flash fictions with no particular drama or conflict, no “goals, stakes and obstacles” as is usually expected in storytelling. Instead we are presented with a vignette that elicits feelings of comfort and happiness. There’s nothing wrong with that; in fact, it’s quite poetic and creative.

I’ll make the usual recommendations for size 4 Verdana font, a word count in the subtitle or the top of the item, and perhaps a reconsideration of the chosen genres. “Dark” doesn’t seem to apply here. And “Technology” implies a sort of science fiction theme. Aside from that everything is perfect, almost suspiciously so *Laugh* *Martian*

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Review of The Guiding Light  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

An intriguing item, written with warmth and almost no dialogue. I enjoyed your careful use of words to paint pictures of Alex’s distress and the guidance he found in Mark. It feels a bit repetitive perhaps, as the same elements get used over many paragraphs, such as the streetlights and the emphasis on how significant the relationship became. But it is quite poetic, and there is no mistaking the theme by the time we reach the end of it. Although, I did wonder, when Mark finally spoke, if it was an exaggerated buildup to a joke about how stressful college math can be!

The “no dialogue” style can feel a bit monotonous, as we wait to see if there will be some action or drama to keep things exciting. It is very much a brief, lofty and removed story, elegantly described but all “tell” and no “show.” We are not told anything about Alex, his story or the specific struggles he and Mark faced together. The lack of conversation misses out on what some consider to be an important method of character development, bringing us down into the little minute ways people interact with and treat each other and allowing more room for specific details as to what is going on.

(I hesitate to say that it sounds almost AI generated, but in my personal experiments with such, I have noticed the AI avoids using dialogue and play-by-play showing techniques.)

But creative writing is a broad field, and there is room for contemplative studies such as this. If you wanted you could use this as a summary springboard to create a novel or a story story, building up Alex and Mark’s world and giving us a more exciting view of the situation. Or it can stand alone as a vignette of sorts, describing the impact of a fateful chance encounter in the dark of a city street.

Now for formatting. I always recommend using size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability across devices. The font and size and other tools can be found in the line of little boxes above the text box. It’s also a good idea to set off speech in quotation marks in a separate paragraph. Other than that it’s well written and easy to read.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

I found this poem to be quite relatable and interesting. The free verse is tidy and easy to read, with a subtle rhyme upon closer examination, and your biblical references are unique and creative. I’ve always been puzzled about the book of Job myself: it’s one of those things that no one really understands. And the quietly antisocial sentiment expressed in your final three lines might as well have been written by me *Laugh*

I would suggest using size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability across devices and to make the poem look more “interesting” on the page. You may also want to see how it looks centered. I also noticed you end it with a quotation mark, which doesn’t appear to connect to anything. Another tip is to add three relevant genres to the item so that it’s easier to find when browsing. This allows for more opportunities to be nominated for a Quill Award. I would suggest “Spiritual,” “Philosophical,” and “Experience.”

Did you choose to make it 13 lines on purpose? The second line hints at rebellion, or perhaps you speak sarcastically. The struggle to remain spiritual and keep one’s head on one’s shoulders in the hectic, backbiting world is well expressed here.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Review of Adam's Hands  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings and welcome to writing.com *HeartRate2*

I've been seeing this on the Read a Newbie sidebar for a while and finally had a chance to read it.

This is a touching and heartfelt story with an important message about holding onto your life for the sake of the ones that love you. Even the most difficult day is not worth inflicting such pain on them.

Your flow is good and simple enough to understand. I have a couple of minor formatting suggestions: one, this is in need of spaces between paragraphs. If I was using my iPad it would be pretty much one long block of text. Also, since I'm on mobile I can't tell what size font you've used, but I'll make the standard recommendation for size 4 Verdana.

Perhaps the title could be different, as we assume from combining it with the subtitle that it's referring to the questionable actions of Adam. We are somewhat surprised to learn that Adam was her son who is now her spirit guide in the other world.

I need to be sure to say to anyone who sees this: your life is worth living.
If you or someone you know is considering suicide, please call or text the 24/7 US suicide prevention hotline at 988.


Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *Smile* *HeartBroken*


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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Greetings,

I enjoyed this quick and amusing read. The absurdity and irony of the situation is well portrayed.

If it's an entry for a contest, as I assume from the highlighted keywords, I would recommend adding the word count to the top or bottom of the item. Also, it's handy to include the list of prompt words or the general idea they gave you, for later reference. That way you know why you wrote such a funny story *BigSmile*

On mobile I can't tell what font style you've chosen: Size 4 Verdana is the best to ensure readability across devices.

I noticed a couple of slipups in the agent's name: he's either Peters or Peterson. Also, one thing I learned when writing Green Dragon (remember the spy story you advised me on?) Is that they're never called "agents." Don't ask me what they are called - operatives? *Laugh*

I don't see anything else to correct or adjust here. You've done well in creating an anticlimactic parody of alien stories.

At the ending, it would be funny to tie in Peters's lack of words with the unknown language on the sign, somehow. Like "he had as much of a clue about how to explain this to his superiors as he did what the sign said..." No, that doesn't sound very good. I can't think of how to say it. Do you know what I mean?

Just ignore me... *Rolling*

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *AlienG*


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Review of Whirring  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

I enjoyed this rambling examination of the desultory reality of the workaday world. When I saw your item in the Read a Newbie sidebar, I assumed it was a story and thought perhaps it was a thriller type of thing (ie, did the day suddenly twist and end in a totally unexpected way?)

Contrary to my expectations, it’s a free verse poem dealing with feelings of boredom, burnout and lack of motivation. The narrator feels as though they are just a cog in the wheel of the uncaring and money-grubbing business empire that they are slaving to build without proper recompense or credit. I know that feeling of having too much time on my hands at a dull and un-engaging job, allowing my mind to wander sourly as the little noises and idiosyncrasies of others get on my nerves. Perhaps it’s time to strike out on one’s own and become an entrepreneur, building an independent lifestyle free from the trappings of working for someone else.

Your free verse flows well and is engaging to work our way through, though I would suggest using size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability across devices on this site. You strike a pleasant balance between long lines and shorter ones, and since it’s not a structured poem and most likely a rather personal one, I’m not going to make any suggestions as to syllables or word choice. A line count would be a good idea in case you want to enter any contests.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings,

A useful reminder to all of us to avoid falling for cheap internet scams. I don’t encounter those very often, as my internet browsing habits are extremely limited. But I remember being quite alarmed and annoyed by those ads that take over your screen and shout “congratulations, you are the 5 billionth person to visit this page!! Click here to receive your free iPad!!” They actually use the Google logo to pretend that it’s something official and authentic. I always make sure to clean my caches and cookies and run scans after one of those.

I noticed that this item would be improved by a quick run through Grammarly. And you know what we like to say around here: size 4 Verdana font. And come to think of it, your points could probably use a quick update, as this was just exactly ten years ago. The internet has changed since then, although the scams are still rampant.

Have you had time to check out Wonderland this year? Jeremy has a really excellent cyberpunk story going on. (Your rant reminded me…) We’re all looking for support, and you’re welcome to drop down the rabbit hole for a visit!

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *Computer*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings,

What a beautiful story of mother and son. I’m so glad I found your port; you are sharing such deeply personal and inspiring stories and memories with us. You’re so blessed to have a wonderful son and family who loves you that way.

The closing moment at the wedding is enough to bring tears to our eyes as we see the close connection you share with Jeffrey and how far you’ve come through your trials.

I will make the same suggestion again for size 4 Verdana font, but otherwise I don’t have anything to offer to improve on your story. It reads perfectly from beginning to end. Sending good wishes your way for health and wellness *HeartT*

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *Butterfly2B*


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Review of Angel on the Cape  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings and happy account anniversary!

A wonderful story within a story about how one angel who had such a profound impact on your own life went on to help two other people as well by your sharing your story with them. It was a little confusing at first because I read this in your port before I read the original miracle story, but one can easily understand it without having to read the other one.

I’m happy to have met you while doing Anniversary Reviews and I hope you’re doing well lately.

I would suggest you use Size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability across devices. Also you can add three relevant genres to make it easier for others to find your story. I would suggest “Personal,” “Experience” and “Spiritual.”

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *Pray*


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Review of Mr. Green Eyes  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings and happy account anniversary month!

This is a nifty story, one that catches us up in a teeny bopper human interest saga that is both universal and special.

You describe the details clearly and with sincerity; is this biographical or simply fictional? Whose picture is that? You have placed us firmly in a certain era, which is easy to visualize.

You've already heeded the usual suggestions for genre selection and large clear font. My only issue might be that the end isn't quite clear enough. Did she continue the relationship by asking him for an explanation, or was that her way of cutting it off?

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *Heartb*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings,

Another great poem. I would have loved your portfolio as a kid. You have captured the essence of a thunderstorm in words, from the ferocity of the lightning and roar of thunder to the cool peace of the sudden rain.

If you wrote this for a contest, it would be useful to link to the contest page on your item for future reference, and you can also list the prompt you were writing to.

If this is purely spontaneous, then just ignore me *Laugh*

Your meter is eye-catching as it flows from structure down to a chaotic line of descriptive words and then settles back into structure at the end.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *Lightning3*


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