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Review of Healing Waters  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings,

This is an elegant poem that encompasses a broad theme, of life’s transitions as seen through the lens of nature and different bodies of water. The ideas build upon themselves, as the narrator matures from the laughing innocent playfulness of streams and brooks to the stern seriousness of the potentially dangerous river, and then into the peaceful solitude of the lake in old age, and from there to the final dissolution into the great unknown of the ocean.

I don’t have much to offer when it comes to poetry; I personally dislike counting syllables and measuring meter, preferring to go with either free verse or sheer instinct when building poems. So I’m not qualified to advise you on structure and form. But I do know a good poem when I see one. Your verses flow well, and the concepts are easy to grasp.

Formatting advice is easy to give around here; I always recommend using size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability across devices. Perhaps you can center and underline the title header, and include a line count at the bottom to prepare yourself in case you want to enter any poetry contests. You may enjoy experimenting with different font colors to enhance the theme and make it look prettier on the screen.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Review of Lost Umbrella  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

A warm and charming flash fiction, somewhat in the style of a magazine page, "Chicken Soup for the Soul" type of thing. I really enjoyed it.

A couple of suggestions for formatting on WdC: most text formatting options can be found in the line of boxes above the item entry space. First select your text that you desire to modify, and then click on the appropriate boxes. I always recommend using size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability across devices. I would also recommend a word count be added; it's a good habit to develop in case you want to enter contests down the road. Word count can be found by clicking the tiny gear at the top of your item.

I couldn't help wondering how she lost her umbrella without noticing, if it was raining steadily. But I suppose when she entered a shop and closed it up it could have gotten lost. Such things happen often in cities; in fact, my Mom often tells me how her umbrellas would keep getting lost in New York back in the 60's.

And I just heard Rihanna's Umbrella song this morning, too *Music1* Serendipity is a beautiful thing, just like how the stranger's kindness brightened Lily's rainy day and reminded her that there is light in the world.

I don't have a lot of suggestions here, in fact hardly any. You've painted the rainy city streets for us with clarity and feeling. The words come smoothly and the vignette is simple and understandable.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Review of Fugitive  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings, sir,

A nifty story you have here. You've taken all elements of the prompt image and carefully incorporated them into the tale, from the two shadowy figures to the weather and the lady's blue eyes.

I like how you've added the little details about going to Africa; knowing some of your background from your blog, I know it's personally true and adds a touch of realism (as if that's really you it happened to.)

The plot you've come up with is creative; to me it looks like the lady is walking her robotic owl down the street. I didn't feel like creating a cliche "damsel in distress" scenario, as I have an instinctive tendency towards, and eventually I stalled on this round and qualified for Jody's Contest Challenge by writing some limericks. I may yet enter it, if I can ever escape Wonderland *Laugh*

Can't think of anything to suggest here; it has a beginning, middle and end, goals, stakes and obstacles, and characters. Grammar is perfect.

Take care, thanks for sharing, good luck on the contest, and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

A painful and heartfelt free verse poem describing the difficulties of losing not one but two fathers to carelessness and neglect over the course of your young life. The repetition builds upon itself to reveal the loneliness of your situation, and the final lines reveal just how deeply the rift has been driven. This is simply written and memorable.

I would recommend using Size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability across devices, and also adding three relevant genres to the item. This gives your item more opportunities to be nominated for a Quill Award. Possible genres include “Experience,” “Personal,” and “Biographical.” Title rules usually suggest capitalizing each first letter and avoiding punctuation, but that’s a minor detail. It’s a clever title.

I don’t usually have much to criticize about poetry, especially free verse. I’m terrible at measuring meter and counting syllables, and barely know the difference between a sonnet and an elegy, so I’m not qualified to point out the errors in anyone else’s formal poetry. This one needs no criticism. It reads smoothly with the feel of a journal entry, and I admire your vulnerability in publishing it here.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

I love this image you’ve created for us of someone who has built a beautiful world within a world (within a world.) Alex is writing and creating stories within the warmth, solitude and safety of his apartment, nestled within the security and nearness of a bustling city. This is a vignette of the kind of life I dream of having, removed from the stresses of having to deal personally with others, yet near enough to be able to observe and partake in the multitude of human emotions which inspire me. My only desire would be to be more connected to nature, perhaps (in the context of the city) having a rooftop garden to retire to.

This item has no dialogue, but since it’s solely focused on Alex, there isn’t need for any. I am reminded of the Danish concept of hygge with stories like these: flash fictions with no particular drama or conflict, no “goals, stakes and obstacles” as is usually expected in storytelling. Instead we are presented with a vignette that elicits feelings of comfort and happiness. There’s nothing wrong with that; in fact, it’s quite poetic and creative.

I’ll make the usual recommendations for size 4 Verdana font, a word count in the subtitle or the top of the item, and perhaps a reconsideration of the chosen genres. “Dark” doesn’t seem to apply here. And “Technology” implies a sort of science fiction theme. Aside from that everything is perfect, almost suspiciously so *Laugh* *Martian*

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Review of The Guiding Light  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

An intriguing item, written with warmth and almost no dialogue. I enjoyed your careful use of words to paint pictures of Alex’s distress and the guidance he found in Mark. It feels a bit repetitive perhaps, as the same elements get used over many paragraphs, such as the streetlights and the emphasis on how significant the relationship became. But it is quite poetic, and there is no mistaking the theme by the time we reach the end of it. Although, I did wonder, when Mark finally spoke, if it was an exaggerated buildup to a joke about how stressful college math can be!

The “no dialogue” style can feel a bit monotonous, as we wait to see if there will be some action or drama to keep things exciting. It is very much a brief, lofty and removed story, elegantly described but all “tell” and no “show.” We are not told anything about Alex, his story or the specific struggles he and Mark faced together. The lack of conversation misses out on what some consider to be an important method of character development, bringing us down into the little minute ways people interact with and treat each other and allowing more room for specific details as to what is going on.

(I hesitate to say that it sounds almost AI generated, but in my personal experiments with such, I have noticed the AI avoids using dialogue and play-by-play showing techniques.)

But creative writing is a broad field, and there is room for contemplative studies such as this. If you wanted you could use this as a summary springboard to create a novel or a story story, building up Alex and Mark’s world and giving us a more exciting view of the situation. Or it can stand alone as a vignette of sorts, describing the impact of a fateful chance encounter in the dark of a city street.

Now for formatting. I always recommend using size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability across devices. The font and size and other tools can be found in the line of little boxes above the text box. It’s also a good idea to set off speech in quotation marks in a separate paragraph. Other than that it’s well written and easy to read.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

I found this poem to be quite relatable and interesting. The free verse is tidy and easy to read, with a subtle rhyme upon closer examination, and your biblical references are unique and creative. I’ve always been puzzled about the book of Job myself: it’s one of those things that no one really understands. And the quietly antisocial sentiment expressed in your final three lines might as well have been written by me *Laugh*

I would suggest using size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability across devices and to make the poem look more “interesting” on the page. You may also want to see how it looks centered. I also noticed you end it with a quotation mark, which doesn’t appear to connect to anything. Another tip is to add three relevant genres to the item so that it’s easier to find when browsing. This allows for more opportunities to be nominated for a Quill Award. I would suggest “Spiritual,” “Philosophical,” and “Experience.”

Did you choose to make it 13 lines on purpose? The second line hints at rebellion, or perhaps you speak sarcastically. The struggle to remain spiritual and keep one’s head on one’s shoulders in the hectic, backbiting world is well expressed here.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Review of Adam's Hands  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings and welcome to writing.com *HeartRate2*

I've been seeing this on the Read a Newbie sidebar for a while and finally had a chance to read it.

This is a touching and heartfelt story with an important message about holding onto your life for the sake of the ones that love you. Even the most difficult day is not worth inflicting such pain on them.

Your flow is good and simple enough to understand. I have a couple of minor formatting suggestions: one, this is in need of spaces between paragraphs. If I was using my iPad it would be pretty much one long block of text. Also, since I'm on mobile I can't tell what size font you've used, but I'll make the standard recommendation for size 4 Verdana.

Perhaps the title could be different, as we assume from combining it with the subtitle that it's referring to the questionable actions of Adam. We are somewhat surprised to learn that Adam was her son who is now her spirit guide in the other world.

I need to be sure to say to anyone who sees this: your life is worth living.
If you or someone you know is considering suicide, please call or text the 24/7 US suicide prevention hotline at 988.


Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *Smile* *HeartBroken*


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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Greetings,

I enjoyed this quick and amusing read. The absurdity and irony of the situation is well portrayed.

If it's an entry for a contest, as I assume from the highlighted keywords, I would recommend adding the word count to the top or bottom of the item. Also, it's handy to include the list of prompt words or the general idea they gave you, for later reference. That way you know why you wrote such a funny story *BigSmile*

On mobile I can't tell what font style you've chosen: Size 4 Verdana is the best to ensure readability across devices.

I noticed a couple of slipups in the agent's name: he's either Peters or Peterson. Also, one thing I learned when writing Green Dragon (remember the spy story you advised me on?) Is that they're never called "agents." Don't ask me what they are called - operatives? *Laugh*

I don't see anything else to correct or adjust here. You've done well in creating an anticlimactic parody of alien stories.

At the ending, it would be funny to tie in Peters's lack of words with the unknown language on the sign, somehow. Like "he had as much of a clue about how to explain this to his superiors as he did what the sign said..." No, that doesn't sound very good. I can't think of how to say it. Do you know what I mean?

Just ignore me... *Rolling*

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *AlienG*


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Review of Whirring  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

I enjoyed this rambling examination of the desultory reality of the workaday world. When I saw your item in the Read a Newbie sidebar, I assumed it was a story and thought perhaps it was a thriller type of thing (ie, did the day suddenly twist and end in a totally unexpected way?)

Contrary to my expectations, it’s a free verse poem dealing with feelings of boredom, burnout and lack of motivation. The narrator feels as though they are just a cog in the wheel of the uncaring and money-grubbing business empire that they are slaving to build without proper recompense or credit. I know that feeling of having too much time on my hands at a dull and un-engaging job, allowing my mind to wander sourly as the little noises and idiosyncrasies of others get on my nerves. Perhaps it’s time to strike out on one’s own and become an entrepreneur, building an independent lifestyle free from the trappings of working for someone else.

Your free verse flows well and is engaging to work our way through, though I would suggest using size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability across devices on this site. You strike a pleasant balance between long lines and shorter ones, and since it’s not a structured poem and most likely a rather personal one, I’m not going to make any suggestions as to syllables or word choice. A line count would be a good idea in case you want to enter any contests.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings,

A useful reminder to all of us to avoid falling for cheap internet scams. I don’t encounter those very often, as my internet browsing habits are extremely limited. But I remember being quite alarmed and annoyed by those ads that take over your screen and shout “congratulations, you are the 5 billionth person to visit this page!! Click here to receive your free iPad!!” They actually use the Google logo to pretend that it’s something official and authentic. I always make sure to clean my caches and cookies and run scans after one of those.

I noticed that this item would be improved by a quick run through Grammarly. And you know what we like to say around here: size 4 Verdana font. And come to think of it, your points could probably use a quick update, as this was just exactly ten years ago. The internet has changed since then, although the scams are still rampant.

Have you had time to check out Wonderland this year? Jeremy has a really excellent cyberpunk story going on. (Your rant reminded me…) We’re all looking for support, and you’re welcome to drop down the rabbit hole for a visit!

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *Computer*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings,

What a beautiful story of mother and son. I’m so glad I found your port; you are sharing such deeply personal and inspiring stories and memories with us. You’re so blessed to have a wonderful son and family who loves you that way.

The closing moment at the wedding is enough to bring tears to our eyes as we see the close connection you share with Jeffrey and how far you’ve come through your trials.

I will make the same suggestion again for size 4 Verdana font, but otherwise I don’t have anything to offer to improve on your story. It reads perfectly from beginning to end. Sending good wishes your way for health and wellness *HeartT*

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *Butterfly2B*


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Review of Angel on the Cape  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings and happy account anniversary!

A wonderful story within a story about how one angel who had such a profound impact on your own life went on to help two other people as well by your sharing your story with them. It was a little confusing at first because I read this in your port before I read the original miracle story, but one can easily understand it without having to read the other one.

I’m happy to have met you while doing Anniversary Reviews and I hope you’re doing well lately.

I would suggest you use Size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability across devices. Also you can add three relevant genres to make it easier for others to find your story. I would suggest “Personal,” “Experience” and “Spiritual.”

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *Pray*


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Review of Mr. Green Eyes  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings and happy account anniversary month!

This is a nifty story, one that catches us up in a teeny bopper human interest saga that is both universal and special.

You describe the details clearly and with sincerity; is this biographical or simply fictional? Whose picture is that? You have placed us firmly in a certain era, which is easy to visualize.

You've already heeded the usual suggestions for genre selection and large clear font. My only issue might be that the end isn't quite clear enough. Did she continue the relationship by asking him for an explanation, or was that her way of cutting it off?

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *Heartb*



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Review of THUNDERSTORM  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings,

Another great poem. I would have loved your portfolio as a kid. You have captured the essence of a thunderstorm in words, from the ferocity of the lightning and roar of thunder to the cool peace of the sudden rain.

If you wrote this for a contest, it would be useful to link to the contest page on your item for future reference, and you can also list the prompt you were writing to.

If this is purely spontaneous, then just ignore me *Laugh*

Your meter is eye-catching as it flows from structure down to a chaotic line of descriptive words and then settles back into structure at the end.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *Lightning3*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings and happy account anniversary!

I love a good rhyming poem, and this is splendid. I would perhaps have memorized it when I was a kid. It would look quaint written out in fancy script and tacked to the wall on an old scroll.

It's perfect for kids, telling a classic tale of a fiery dragon and its defeat by the cold of winter. Your meter is free flowing and enjoyable to read, and the story has a beginning, middle and end that doesn't feel constrained by the rhymes.

I don't usually have much to criticize about poetry, and I can't find anything here. As someone who doesn't bother with counting syllables or knowing the difference between trochees and iambic pentameter, I am perfectly unqualified to tell you how to measure your meter *Laugh*

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *DragonHeadR*


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Greetings,

Wow, that’s quite a poem you’ve created with the image prompt. I love the final punchline of her being a writer. It means a lot to me, because I know how it is to plumb the scary depths of places in search of something. It may not even have been connected to writing at the time, but when the time comes to write, I am well equipped. I strive for objectivity and try to be nonjudgmental as I see the struggles of others. I also have to try hard to not let anything bother me, and writing is a good way to filter stressful experiences.

Anyway… I don’t have much to criticize here. The poetry flows smoothly and paints an unforgettable picture better than the prompt image. You’ve formatted it well and added all the appropriate context for it. I would suggest adding three relevant genres now that it’s no longer a contest entry. “Death,” “Supernatural” and “Fantasy” would be suitable.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile*


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Greetings,

I really enjoyed reading this snapshot from your novel. It paints a clear and fascinating portrait of the family and their interactions and hints at amazing adventures to come. I don’t usually read much fantasy, but this urban style one sounds good enough for me to seek out the rest of it.

The descriptions are great and there was plenty of showing rather than telling. My only suggestion, other than running it through Grammarly for some minor errors, would be to use size 4 Verdana font to make it easier to read.

I liked how it stands on its own yet builds up what’s already there in your novel. It makes a good story for the contest.

Thanks for sharing , take care and keep writing *Smile* *Heartb*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings,

A fascinating concept is given breath here, as we contemplate the possibility of civilized society without language. I doubt life would be possible as we know it now. If we all lost the ability to communicate with words nowadays, the world would crash down. If it was something that happened a long time ago, it would set history on a very different path.

I don’t usually have much to criticize about poetry. You’ve formatted it well and such as that. It flows smoothly and is easy to read.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *Heartb*


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings and happy account anniversary month!

I enjoyed reading this piece of affectionate fan fiction. The two different perspectives are engaging; I guessed right away that it was probably Alessia Cara (a Canadian) escaping to the beautiful Canadian countryside in the beginning. I can tell you’re a Canada resident as well; your appreciation for your land’s natural beauty shines through. (That and the maple leaf on your blue case *Laugh*)

Your descriptions are apt and paint the different scenes well, from the peace and stillness of the country to the crowded, noisy, slightly bawdy bar. Dani’s hopes and dreams are evident as she pours herself into her creations, and we cheer for her as she meets her role model, who grants her a miraculous opportunity.

I would suggest using size 4 Verdana font for your items to ensure readability across devices.

I am not exactly a fan of Alessia Cara, but I do appreciate her style and commitment to writing her own songs for the most part. I can usually tell when someone writes their own lyrics… that one about the party is so relatable. (Here.)

Thanks for sharing, good luck on the contest *Wink* take care and keep writing *Smile* *Music2*


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Review of Crash  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings and thank you for requesting a review.

This is a heartfelt and realistic portrayal of a man struggling to reach sobriety, determined to do so for the sake of his family. I feel at turns slightly scornful and then sorry for him as he begins the long journey to put himself back together.

The little showing details you’ve included (as he wakes up, etc) go a long way to making a lasting impression. As a quick reminder, rather than simply saying “he woke up in a drunken hangover” you describe exactly how that feels. That’s good writing.

I don’t know how much of this is biographical; if this is your story, I’m sending best wishes for peace and sobriety.

If I may digress, I’m a big fan of the band Imagine Dragons, and their lead singer Dan Reynolds has been open about his own struggles with addiction, though he had hidden it for years (a choice I won’t hold against him, though it was a great disappointment to find that his insistence on being a Straight Edge and wearing black X’s on the backs of his hands at every show as a symbol of sobriety and avoidance of substances… I think my sentence got derailed *Laugh*) Anyway, no one is completely immune from addiction, even to trivial things. I have an addiction to harmless fun online such as being here and helping people like you *BigSmile*

This was a good story with a hopeful ending. I liked it.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *X*


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Review of Shift  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings and thank you for requesting a review *HeartT*

A brief and striking glimpse into the lives of two people who left an impact on each other. You’ve described the young lady’s sordid origins and the role the former officer played in clear and memorable words. We see what feels to me a bit like the tables have turned, as if the man needed to see her happiness at that moment in the diner in order to rescue himself from a potential downward spiral.

This is grim yet optimistic, as we see that even the most hopeless case can be saved. We don’t see how much further interaction there had been between the two after he rescued her; was there any chance she recognized him at the diner and understood who he was? Or was it all on his end? This feels almost biographical.

I usually suggest using size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability across devices. Other than that simple formatting tip, I don’t see anything wrong with this piece. It stands as a powerful vignette of the positive influence one person can have on another, even with a fleeting encounter.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *Writing*


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Review of Juniper Park  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings and happy account anniversary month!

A funny read about your camping trip as a young person with a fear of spiders. I enjoyed it. The descriptions are deftly written and really it hardly felt exaggerated at all. I’ve seen highway rest stops that were in similar shape *Laugh*

I would suggest using size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability across devices. Also perhaps a bit of dialogue among the characters would help make it more interesting, rather than a journalistic monologue. But whatever you like, since it’s autobiographical.

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile*


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Greetings and happy account anniversary month!

Good grief, this was hilarious, heartwarming and so relatable. I know how it feels to be a total witch in a bad mood and make everyone around me miserable. I’m glad the husband was so patient and supportive (or just plain scared*Laugh*)

You incorporated the quotes smoothly, and since I never heard of any of them, it all went right over my head quite well. Your characters are well portrayed and amusing, and the story is rapid and rollicking. (Have you ever read Jack Prelutsky’s The Turkey Shot Out of the Oven?)

Overall I have nothing to offer except to use size 4 Verdana font, and to add a third genre such as “Family” rather than “Contest.”

Thanks for sharing, take care and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings, and thank you for requesting a review.

This is a touching and thoughtfully written story that brought me close to tears by the end. We are introduced to two men and shown their shabby, hopeless shared lives together in the city. The narrative slowly builds on itself until the end, when we understand at last that they are homeless, they mean no harm, and could very well die that night.

I was unsure of the direction this would take at first; dark twists are so common around here. I assumed Bruce and Rusty were street robbers planning to attack the wealthy man. This very assumption leads one to consider one’s own underlying stereotypes and what we expect from a story. Though this story has no plot, drama or development, it paints a powerful and memorable vignette of two friends who have nothing in the world but memories to call their own.

I appreciated the many small descriptive details scattered throughout, immersing us in a poignant, up close experience of the cold, darkening city streets as the men sit and watch the world leave them behind.

My only suggestion for improvement would be to use size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability across devices.

I find this story all too relatable, to be honest. I know firsthand the hopelessness of being one of the poorest of society, of sitting with an empty life and watching the world pass by, of trying to distract myself from the stark, painful reality of impossible struggles by observing others and imagining things about them, of wondering how I’ve gotten myself into this, of feeling like a passive viewer of my own life. Things get better when I take positive action for self improvement, but the complicated chain of obstacles often feels insurmountable, and the inevitability of a disastrous outcome looms large… ok, maybe I’m exaggerating. I speak in poetic generalities now because this story touched me deeply.

Take care, thank you very much for sharing, and keep writing *Smile* *Heartt*
So cute :)
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