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Review of Christmas in July  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings, Beholden!

So this was your entry to the contest which was the very first one I entered upon joining... How nice to encounter it on Random Read and Review.

You incorporated the prompt words well, creating a quietly amusing little poem with a nice rhyme and meter. I chuckled about the socks; most people would like something fancy for a gift, and it's the great complaint of many a kid (including my mom) "all I got was underwear!" I hope you had generous Christmas gifts over the years.

As usual, I can't think of anything to suggest... Perhaps a more transcendent theme would add depth, but it's hardly needed.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Review of Sweet Sorrow  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings Ken!

A lovely poem we have here, full of feelings and memories which linger in the narrator's mind. I appreciate the attitude of moving on but still holding the love which once was. It matters little who was in the wrong or why they parted, only that there was something and it's gone.

It reminds me of... Well, surely you don't care to know about the lead singer of *Think* *DragonHead* *DragonHeadB*. The maturation of thought and perspective here is universal, and this would make a good song.

I love the flow of your meter and verse, but one thing bugs me enormously: "I'd of." Surely you know it's "I'd have!" It wouldn't change anything to correct that pesky error, which causes me to subtract a half star from your otherwise flawless rating.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings, Tim!

We meet again for another rollicking rhyming adventure via the Random Read and Review button.

This is hilarious. It reminds me of the type of story an old friend of mine would write: naive guy gets tricked by a clever pretty gal. You've put it into poetry in excellent fashion, giving us a tale which keeps us at the edge of our seats as we wonder what untoward thing might happen next.

Serves him right, for sure. I love how nothing nasty actually happened. You dealt with the subject humorously and tastefully, giving us a chuckle and a lesson on life.

Nothing to suggest here; I thoroughly enjoyed this one.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings, Tim!

As always, I found this through the Random Read and Review button. I love finding your tidy and thoughtful poetry.

This sporting theme which then relates to the grander contest of life and spirituality runs deep in biblical literature. St Paul used the ancient Greek sports culture to illustrate how important it is to strive for that which we desire, and to pour ourselves humbly into good works so we may be richly rewarded and honored.

Your meter is excellent, alternating rhymes in a way which is neither trite nor annoying. I have nothing to suggest. Great work *Smile*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Review of Arkansas  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings, Lou!

An amusing slice of life we have here, bringing us a vignette of a trip through Arkansas back to Texas. We see your disdain for what little you've seen of the state.

I have to disagree with your evaluation, as my mom likes to tell me of what a beautiful state it was when she was there thirty years ago. Little Rock was a fine, safe city, where she and my father could walk around in the wee hours delivering papers in perfect safety.

The free verse is conversational and chatty, leading us casually through your memory and nudging us quickly to the interstate before we have a chance to question your viewpoint or ask for proof. I sense a bit of humor, however *Smile*

I have nothing to suggest for improvement, unless asking for a better indication of why you didn't like Little Rock *Laugh*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings, Sunny!

I’m here as a fellow member of the PPC5 project.

A fun, honest and open free verse poem dealing with the subject at hand. You treat it almost as a journal entry, with a casual and chatty tone. We see you get excited about some of the foods you love, and by the end of it we can agree that yes, there are far too many delicious foods in the world to simply pick one.

I like the free flowing style you’ve chosen; it was easy to read. Where you say “from steak to Italian” you spelled “too” instead of “to.” The sentences kind of run together, but this is a whimsical stylistic choice and I wouldn’t critique it as such *Smile*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Greetings, Ned!

You've captured the essence of a cool rainy day here, with easy, conversational free verse which draws us invitingly along on the journey through foggy memories of the attempt to write something.

I was just thinking about the Mamas and Papas song Monday Monday, not in connection with this prompt, but rather for Jeff's "Resurrection Jukebox" Open in new Window. where I had to compile a list of (and write coherently about) song from eras I'm not that "into". I decided to write about "Creeque Alley" Open in new Window. instead of the Monday song.

Anyway, I enjoyed reading this poem. It reminded me of my own writing style, and it creates a comfortable picture in the mind.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Review of Cinnamon Toast  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings, Fyn!

Ah, the warmth and comfort you've captured here is delightful. All the little details come together to create that sense of hygge, from your grandma's spice shaker to the pets, the kids, munchies and books by the fireplace.

Everything's good here; I usually don't have anything to offer to improve on poetry, as I consider it an artistic and highly subjective art form. I enjoyed reading about the personal moments of love and memories associated with your favorite food.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Greetings, Ned!

I’m here as a fellow member of the PPC5 project.

Your poem checks off all the boxes perfectly: a snapshot moment, nature imagery, and the correct syllable counts. I’m having lots of fun reading everyone’s creations for this assignment, and yours is great. We all know the cats watching birds outside the window, and it becomes relatable and amusing here. You even added a different angle with the pun in the title.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Review of Promptly 4 and 5  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Greetings, Beholden!

I’m here as a fellow member of the PPC5 challenge, to review your work.

Has anyone else aside from me found it hard to settle on just one Kimo? I wrote not one but four. Once I got the hang of the syllables - honestly, syllable counting is getting easier for me each time I sit down and try. I used to say rather “proudly” in my reviews that I detest counting syllables and fussing over form, but practice makes better… now I’m considering trying my hand at a sonnet for "Poetic Traditions Poetry Contest " Open in new Window.. Why not?

Anyway, this hits the nail on the head, capturing a universal moment of sheer physics in a crisply photographic way and sticking to the requirements. I’ve watched many a water drop make the precipitous journey from the tip of the tap down into the sink. As a child I was fascinated by such simple things and learned a lot from them. On YouTube we can even watch cats playing with and staring at water drops.

Have fun with your project! I’m looking forward to reading and reviewing more of your work over the coming months.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings!

I’m here as a fellow member of the PPC5 challenge *Smile*

I like how you’ve captured your thoughts on a current and sensitive topic. It’s like a quick notebook scribble, a moment’s observation, without being overly dramatic or taking any particular side.

Now, I don’t know if you care or not, and I don’t usually fuss about poetry, but I do have a few humble suggestions here. It appears, according to my count, that your syllables are off from the form requirements. The first line is 11 syllables, the second is 7 (correctly) but the third is also 7. The initials J. D. should count for two syllables, as they are pronounced as two words. Also, your "Walz" autocorrected to "Waltz," which is understandable.

Other than that, it's fine. I used to detest counting syllables myself; with the help of this poetry project, I'm getting more patient with it.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Review of Pie charts  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

I see you’re off to a good start, with one item in your port. This looks like a school project, describing a pie chart which we don’t actually have access to on this site. If you want, you can use the chart in question as the cover for this item. Or if this is simply a requirement of posting publicly, assigned by your teacher, then you hardly need our advice.

You’ve described the chart well, pulling the stats from the image and sharing them with us along with simple interpretations. I have two suggestions: you should perhaps correct or take a second look at the subtitle, as it appears to have a typo in it. Second, you should perhaps change your selected genre from “Writing.com” to “Educational.”

Aside from that, it looks great! Best of luck around here. If you’re planning to stay and add more content, I would recommend writing a little something about yourself in your bio block.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings,

We meet again, this time with the help of the Random Read and Review button.

I enjoyed reading this vivid description of an adventure through the jungle. I appreciated the brevity of it. This would be considered a vignette, I believe, although there is some rise and fall of action as the man follows the trail. You made the experience come alive with specific details which engaged the senses, such as the scents of the environment and the sight of the beer cans stuck in the dried out riverbed. There’s enough here for a longer story; it feels like a sample of something quite exciting.

Perhaps a word count in the subtitle would be good so we know what we’re getting into. And again, I’ll remind you gently to add two relevant genres to the item, though your window for Quills is past with this one. You could use “Nature,” “Drama” or “Thriller/Suspense.” Other than that, I can’t think of any suggestions for improvement.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Review of Funny World  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Greetings,

I noticed this on my sidebar and thought it looked like a good read. You have proven me right *Smile*

Such a good story, quite realistic and indeed it feels like a true story, but I don’t suppose it is. On the other hand, things like this are quite possible. I love the hopeful ending and the wry humor of how the guy wants the cat to be safe even though he’s in such a precarious position himself. The moments of peace after everyone settled down on the side of the bridge were quite something.

I would suggest adding two more relevant genres for at least a couple good reasons. One, it will help people find your story when browsing through the site, and two, it gives us as many opportunities as possible to nominate your item for Quill Awards. I would recommend “Philosophy,” “Drama,” or “Emotional.” Another thing, I think the sentence about the statistic of people diving off the dark side got a little mixed up; you may want to rephrase it for clarity. The man finds it sad that the one person chose the dark side, not that everyone else did, right?

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Review of Emergency Escape  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings, Johnny, and thank you for requesting a review.

I really enjoyed this. I can see you put a good bit of thought into the three things Samson chose to take with him, and it looks like it would make not only a great flash fiction but also the introduction to an exciting series or longer story.

Now, the first thing I noticed is your title… I think the word “emergency” is misspelled.
Second, I noticed you used at least three different words to identify Samson’s mom: “mums,” “mama,” and “mother.” Also, in the second paragraph she’s named Amber and in the next one she’s Samantha. Is the “mama” his grandmother? I know people use a ton of different pet names for their grannies, and it gets confusing sometimes, “Nana” and “Nona” and “gran-gran” and all that. You need to specify who she is exactly.
Third, I didn’t quite catch what exactly the “hiking and hunting trips” were for if not for “hiking and hunting…” how exactly did Samson’s father misunderstand the purpose of them? I should think a sturdy knife would always be a good idea out in the wilderness (not that the Welsh wilderness is as threatening as the American version, I’m sure *Laugh*)

Aside from that, this was well written and an excellent little read.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Greetings! Thank you for requesting a review.

I’m finally here… phew, what a saga. I was dreading it all week because I don't really do longform fiction these days, but when I sat down and actually read it, it didn’t seem like 10,000 words at all by the time I was done. Perhaps that’s because it was such a dark and gripping tale, with the quickly changing scenes keeping me on my toes as I connected all the dots.

For me, it was quite readable for the most part; the different scenes and characters were fairly easy enough to keep straight. But I would recommend you avoid having two characters with the same first letter in their names, especially in such a tangled web: I had a hard time remembering who Milos and Maril were.

It's a dreary, heavy story, full of treachery and confusion, but with a glimmer of hope at the end. If you were looking for helpful advice, I'm not sure I have any. The moral ambiguity and inconclusive ending are quite hip and postmodern, and it would probably be the kind of thing people would like these days, as portraying reality in a more honest way than a simple black and white narrative.

You write well, with dialogue driven narration which reveals characters in bits and pieces. I felt bad for young Jode, struggling to cope with the reality of the demons he unleashes and denying that something so horrible could actually exist. It reminds me of myself...

In a way, the wild concept of the fireberries is a nerve-wracking metaphor for the depths of turmoil and rottenness inside ourselves that we all have to deal with at some point. Some people choose to embrace it and dive deeper into the treacheries of their dark side, like Milos, using magic against magic when the whole point of his career was to eliminate magic. Others wrestle with honor and morality and consequences, striving for what they think should be the right thing, only to wonder if it was worth bothering to stand up for it at all.

You've certainly given me something to think about... It reminds me of how I felt when I finished reading the original Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde story by Robert Louis Stevenson.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings, Tim!

I found this by using the Random Read and Review Button for my daily review.

Another beautiful poem, this one showcasing a special relationship in your life. I really appreciate your charming ways with words. This poem is nice because it almost feels like a spiritual meaning, as if you're speaking about your relationship with God and how He rescued you from your past.

I see the genres are Romance and Relationship,so I assume you're speaking either as a narrator or about your own personal significant other. Either way, the lofty heights of your appreciation for them and the way they came to your side and never left is well expressed.

We see how you view the loving relationship as a metaphor and example of the enduring love of a Higher Power. This depth of emotion is touching and heartwarming.

As usual, I don't have anything to suggest here. Your verses flow conversationally, and the lack of rhyme aids the reading and avoids a sense of "Hallmark Valentine's day card" triteness.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

I’ve discovered this essay by using the Random Read and Review button.

The first things I would bring to your attention are formatting issues. I always recommend Size 4 Verdana font for an open and engaging reading experience across devices, and this item comes across as dense and difficult to read even though it is fairly brief and well written. Also, on this site it’s nicer to have more paragraph breaks; I see you have a mere three paragraphs here, and it creates a blocky appearance which adds to the feeling of “is this worth reading?”

But perhaps you have only posted this as some sort of college writing assignment, judging by the header you’ve included. I would point out that the title of the item seems to imply a much longer and more in-depth study than what we have here. Perhaps a word count in the subtitle would be a good idea to help us know what we’re getting into.

As for the statements themselves, I find them to be fairly accurate, describing the basics of the Judeo-Christian faith and launching into a discussion of the opening lines of Genesis and how they relate to the overarching theme of Scripture. As one who has spent many years studying the three major monotheistic religions, I have come to the unsatisfactory feeling that none of them have it exactly right, but perhaps the Christian worldview is the most well-rounded and thoughtful in the concept of human rights and freedoms and the equality and dignity of all people.

I respect your studies and applaud your efforts. This was an interesting read. I don’t often come across nonfiction items here.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings, Tim!

Always a joy to find one of your poems on the Random Read and Review button.

This one is somewhat frivolous: lighthearted yet realistic, observing life's difficulties yet with a buoyant optimism as it sees summer approaching.

I'm not too much of a summer person myself; having lived in a warm state now for about five years or so, I'm sick of heat and humidity and would desperately like to see a change of seasons. Or so I would think... One has a tendency to romanticize whatever one is not currently experiencing, you know? If I went up north again and experienced a bitterly cold day with snow I probably wouldn't like it as much as I thought I would *Laugh*

As usual, I have nothing to suggest here with your poetry. It's well written, charming, with rhyme and meter and playful care, expressing a certain joy in life and an appreciation for all it has to offer, both tough days and fun times.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Greetings, sir. I found this using the Random Read and Review button.

An interesting interview, certainly, though I disagree with you on your worldview assumptions. You've posted this perhaps as a bit of self advertising, showing us yourself as you would like to be known and revealing some of your preferences and habits.

As an author, I find myself inspired by experience; sometimes I see something happen and it bugs me until I build a story around it. I enjoy crafting shorter works, and even Drabbles (100 words stories) are a fun challenge. But sometimes you need all the words you can get to tell it right.

Your formatting is excellent, and you've chosen three relevant genres. As a highly personal interview with your own thoughts and opinions and feelings, I have nothing to suggest here for improvement.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Greetings,

What an amusing and delightful way to honor your favorite coffee, by writing a poem within a story. I stand amused at everyone’s fascination with the brown stuff, being one who avoids caffeine and alcohol myself. I read your rollicking chain of words with a smile as I pictured this over the top cup of Joe your character so appreciates. I love the large font you’ve chosen. Formatting is great, and you’ve selected all three genres.

I don’t have any suggestions here; you’ve done well in expressing your unique perspective and writing style.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Review of The Dormouse Poem  Open in new Window.
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Greetings, Beholden!

I stumbled across this using the Random Read and Review button. I’m glad to find something from your past participation in the Alice in Wonderland activity, and I see you struggled with the acrostic poem to some extent (such as to tell us never to request such a feat from your pen again *Laugh*)
I must say, however, that you did an excellent job here of creating something with a rollicking meter and a jolly good theme, suitable for the required words it is built out of and of course great for the nonsensical Alice activity. You carry us along convincingly, sharing thoughts about the writing abilities of rodents and accidentally of cows as well… You even chose a perfectly adorable cover image. Who could resist paying attention to the wise words of such an endearing rodent?

It’s always fun to see what earlier prompts required. I have nothing to suggest here, of course; just stopping by to let you know I enjoyed reading it and applaud your efforts.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Review of The Renfaire  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

What an interesting and engaging vignette. I call it that because there isn’t any particular plot or development to speak of as we might expect in a full length story. It captures a moment with the clarity of a photo and shares the excitement of what’s taking place with us in vivid and appealing terms.

I have to admit I was truly terrified reading about the jester handstanding on a ball while holding a torch! It’s the kind of thing that could so easily turn horrifying, and I’ve read a few unhappy stories here about fire and clowns. I was relieved to watch the jester make their safe final flip, and felt like clapping and cheering along with everyone else. This level of engagement is a great sign for your writing skills, though I’m an easily impressed softie generally.

Ali seems like a quiet and sympathetic character who would make an interesting lead in a story of more depth. I noticed you used the word “something” twice in the fourth paragraph. I find it nifty you’ve chosen the gender neutral for the jester, leaving us to decide or not. Also, Size 4 Verdana font is preferred around here for a more open and easier reading experience. You can adjust the formatting by selecting your text and clicking on the various buttons lining the top of the text entry box.

A word count is highly recommended, so we know what we’re getting into and also to allow you to participate in contests around the site. I would also recommend adding a third relevant genre to the item to help it qualify for as many Quill Award nominations as possible (any questions about our annual Quill Awards, check out the portfolio of Lilli ☕ Author Icon!) You could choose “Drama,” “Community,” or even “Thriller/Suspense.”

Aside from these minor things, I found this to be quite an enjoyable little flash fiction.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Review of Pumpkin Pie  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings, Carly!

I found this via the Random Read and Review button.

Now I'm hungry for some homemade pumpkin pie *Hungry* This is an appetizing poem, describing your favorite part of Thanksgiving as it was in old days when things were slower and homier.

I love the phrase "piece de resistance;" my Mom and I were just discussing the origins of it the other day. I've hardly seen it used in my life, though it's fairly common.

Perhaps the naming of some spices which go into the classic pumpkin pie would add a nice touch: cinnamon, cloves, ginger, cardamom, etc. My mom insists on "hearty" pumpkin pie with all the aromatic spices, and the market researchers used to remind us "now remember, pumpkin spice flavor doesn't mean it actually has pumpkin in it!" Nowadays, I don't know how many pumpkin spice items really do have pumpkin in them... Maybe some do. Whatever!

An enjoyable poem, perfect for the time of year.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Review of The Shepard  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

I love the sad scene you’ve painted here, of a man seeking peace in the cool, embracing rain. His moment of bliss and escape from the painful futility of his life is shattered by the harsh realization that what he did to make himself feel better has only made his situation worse and potentially brought harm to others in his care.

This theme strikes home for me on a deep level, as it seems like everything I take pleasure in doing is only an illusory escape from reality. The more I try to run from the difficulties of my life, the more they bounce back at me more complicated than ever. The consequences of running away only add up over time.

The scenic imagery is beautiful, showing us the sweeping, misty meadows where the sheep roam with picturesque words. The free verse is perfectly balanced, providing an easy, conversational medium to move the narrative forward.

The first thing I would suggest to correct is the word "shepherd," which has been misspelled by more people than I care to remember over the years. When I see the dog breed spelled as "German Shepard" I cringe mightily. Aside from that, I highly recommend using Size 4 Verdana font for an open and engaging reading experience. You can click on the question mark in the toolbar over the text entry box for help with Writing.com markup language.

I really enjoyed this poem.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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