I came across your poem as I was browsing through the static items. I started reading it and was struck by the words and feeling that it expressed.
It is a beautiful poem.
Write on!
~Sue~
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I love haikus and good ones have the ability to say so much in such a few syllables. These are beautiful and inspirational.
There is nothing I would alter, I see no way to improve them, they are perfect.
Write on!
~Sue~
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Malice Intended (ASR) Who is the slapdash, foolish criminal behind a crime scene in a hotel? #445131 by Joy
I enjoyed your story very much. I wouldn't make a detective as I never guessed who the culprit was till you revealled all !
I noticed no errors but could you please educate this poor Brit as to what 'Fluff'' is?
I thought it was what you found under the bed - lol !
What a delightful essay and I love the picture that goes with it. You obviously love cats very much and it shows.
I like the way you introduced a piece about the history of cats, it made reading both entertaining and informational.
Write on!
~Sue~
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Your story touched my heart. Abuse is something that is happening all too often and no matter how we try, it is impossible to imagine what it it must be like for sufferers. Thank you for sharing your thoughts with us; I wish you well.
Write on!
~Sue~
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What great words of wisdom. Instead of wasting energy, losing sleep and worrying about how John, or Susan, or Melissa "thinks", far more importantly, we need to ACCEPT them for who they are and work with the "positives" that they do possess.
This is so true. Your item is succinct, knowledgeable and to the point! It certainly does give one 'Something to Think About'
Write on!
~Sue~
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Memories, they are wonderful things. My husband of fourty two years and I met when we worked for the same company and I still remember our first meeting.
Your lovely story brought it all zinging back
Write on!
~Sue~
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Haikus (E) When there's nothin' to do #1357259 by Eiji
I love haikus. It is not easy to say something meaningfull in just seventeen syllables but you have done it perfectly. Each one is a gem, together they sparkle.
Dead End (ASR) The investigator for defense has amorous hopes concerning the pretty defendant. #504839 by Joy
I found this to be an interesting and enjoyable story and the ending was not what I guessed it would be.
I always think it is hard to write in the first person but you have done it very well.
I saw no spelling or grammatical errors.
The content of this short story was excellent. I was hooked from the beginning. The plot was good and by the time I reached the end you had me paranoid about using the net.
I noted no mechanical errors. It was a great read.
Write on!
~Sue~
I am returning the auto-reward - I enjoyed reading your work.
I love these short verses, I think it is so much harder to write poetry in this style but you have done it well. Each part would stand alone quite well. Together they make up a lovely poem.
I love haiku. It is not easy trying to say something in just seventeen syllables but you have managed it very well.
Number five only has six syllables in the last line but apart from that they are all well done especially as they are your first attempt. I enjoyed reading them.
I love the humour in your poem. It's the eternal mystery isn't it? "Darling, where's the sock to match this one?" For the past two years (due to problems) my husband has only been able to wear a sock on one foot, sheer bliss. No matching up to do . Now he's back to wearing two and we're back to the "darling......" again. Oh well! I loved your poem.
Welcome to WDC. Im sure you're going to enjoy it here.
Your poem is so full of all the fun of the fair I enjoyed reading it.
I loved the verses where you used internal rhyme as well as end rhyme, they helped the poem to flow. Verse five was my favourite! I'll be back to read more.
I Wonder (13+) One decision can last a lifetime. #968674 by Diane
What an impact this poem has. How often we all must have questioned a decision and then wondered about the consequences of our actions. An excellent, thought provoking poem.
Fairgrey the Furious (13+) A Pirate story started for a contest. Deadline long passed, but will finish one day ... #1432754 by Roari ∞
I love a swashbuckling story I really think that your idea of expanding this one is the way to go. There are so many things happening that a short story cannot do justice to your ideas. There is so much scope for expansion here.
Just a though that crossed my mind - if I was on my third pint you would be picking me up from under the table!
I love haiku and these are good. They would stand alone quite well but together they make a delightful chain haiku. If I were pressed for a choice then I think the last one one would be my favourite. A lovely start to your portfolio.
The Tree (E) A short poem on rememberance and regret. Do we ever know the one we lost? #1455103 by Junglejack
First let me say 'Welcome to WDC'. It's a wonderful place and I'm sure you'll enjoy being here.
Now to your first posting. A short poem but it spoke volumes. A good poem doesn't always need lots of verses, all it needs is something to say.
Your rhyme was good and I noticed no outstanding errors. A good start, I look forward to reading more.
Write on!
As I read through your poem there were so many great lines that it would be impossible to say which ones I liked the best. You summed up the heartache of living with an alcoholic so well.
Thank you for sharing
What a wonderful dream you have related to us. It's impact was all the more so because I have just been watching a video (sent to me by a friend in the USA) all about I.B.C. and how little we ordinary folk know about it or how to recognise it. Thank you for sharing your story with us.
What a wonderful way to display patriotism. I only wish there was more of it in Britain. We should all be proud of our National Flag not afraid to display it in case it causes offence!
I loved your poem, it is so descriptive it speaks volumes and will always be relevent.
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