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Review of The Mental Melee  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
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Rated: E | (5.0)

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Dear MFrederick. – I am delighted to offer my review in honor of your Writing.com account anniversary this month. I enjoyed reading your Poem  "The Mental Melee  and would like to share a few of my thoughts.

 
*Coffeer*  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
It starts when he misses the mark. I get a little angry. Then there is the inevitable defense which begins the argument, until we both have our fist raised to inflict harm and pain. The words sting and I am no match for his wit and venom, but he's in me, with me, a river of soulish delight within me. We don't make up necessarily. We go to our individual corners and listen more to those we love than we do to each other. But with new resolve we'll take up this war tomorrow and the day after that.
 
*Coffeer*  THEME
 
My greatest enemy can be the one I see in the mirror each day. I have contended with my demons and have triumphed over many now. Mostly I find myself smiling in the mirror, but there was a time when the encounter was vicious and deadly.
 

*Coffeer**Coffeer*  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
Everything in the images and sounds of this work rings true and this was my favorite, moment:

Animal instincts arrive, teeth are visible.
He does the same as if he can read my thoughts.
Blows are exchanged, one after another. I fight until I have nothing left.

 
How else can we possibly come to the end of ourselves. And maybe in the end, we are better for the battle for at long last we may step outside and confront the real enemy and die a hero's death.
 


*Coffeer*  IN SUMMARY
 
"The Mental Meleeseems bleak and hopeless at first, but there is something about the battle that is so familiar, I am able to let the images carry me over the ground I have gained but at a bloody price. It's like watching a blow by blow documentary of World War II, only I'm the center of the violence. Well done! *Smile*
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
*MugR*
 
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Review of Shadow Kiss  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Dear sadorose – I am delighted to offer my review in honor of your Writing.com account anniversary this month. I enjoyed reading your Poem  "Shadow Kiss  and would like to share a few of my thoughts.

 
*Coffeer*  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
Passions bring me through the moments of the day where light engages objects, lingers and then fades away. To have a love who inner mixes with the intensity of the light and remains as the light forgets to linger is an intense mystery of this life that deserves a touch of the lips when the soul expresses its greatest desire. Here I am about to find a union with the one who completes me.
 
*Coffeer*  THEME
 
Love does not stand alone forever. Even in the dance between darkness and light there is a surrender to the one who completes us; fulfills our hopes and dreams with a whisper and an embrace.
 

*Coffeer**Coffeer*  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
I love the title of this poem. It challenges my mind to embrace the loving dance of light and dark and this was my favorite, moment:

The gentle caress of growing shadow
As a gentle kiss upon my lips
As the shadow becomes one with the light

 
Feed the kids, pay the bills, listen to the day's events, wonder about the emotion, the lack of emotion, each day could be mundane if left to the engine of survival. But experiencing the natural movements of how light and dark work together, inspire a joy to live at another level. How sweet to live out this revelatory vision.
 


*Coffeer*  IN SUMMARY
 
"Shadow KissOpens my heart and soul to the wonder of living in a world of extreme contrasts that if observed carefully begin to speak of a higher love. When I cease to be. When I am lost in the smile of the one who is ever devoted to me. I witness a miracle and I know something about love I could never have imagined. What started out unyielding and small has opened to a wondrous life of endless possibilities when the shadows of this life kissed me. Thanks for writing with imagination and inspiration! *Smile*
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
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Review of Thorn Tower  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Dear Early – I am delighted to offer my review in honor of your Writing.com account anniversary this month. I enjoyed reading your story  "Thorn Tower  and would like to share a few of my thoughts.

 
*Coffeer*  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
The classic quest to seek the sweet woman of the young man's dreams, turns a bit dark as the forces that draw him to undying love are nothing compared to the immense cruelty that would compel him to stay.
 
*Coffeer*  THEME
 
A bit of a fairy tale with great detail and development provoke the reader to rethink, not just Repunzel's wonderous story, but maybe all of the other wonderful tales we are told as children as well.
 

*Coffeer**Coffeer*  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
The combination of verse and narrative are a delight. The power of the narrative is in the language used by the author. The plot is central and moves with an amazing cadence and this moment stands out completely:

Theodorick crashed to his knees and wept. He had failed her. When his brothers came they would see what a fool he was. No doubt they would have brought along something useful instead of rushing off like a madman. They would rescue her and win her heart.
 
The point of crisis is defined so wonderfully and sets up the shocking conclusion to the story perfectly. The irony is that he is destined to be the rescuer. There is no other. And one cannot always escape one's destiny, especially if destiny is more relentless than the one on the quest to find it.
 


*Coffeer*  IN SUMMARY
 
"Thorn Tower is a marevlous tale, wonderfully told with vivid details, action and dialogue. I enjoyed the verse integrated in the story, that brings a feeling of the old oral tradition from which most fairy tales emerged. Stew is off my diet for a while though.*Wink* Write On! *Smile*
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
*MugR*
 
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Review of Ode to us  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Dear Xiea – I am delighted to offer my review in honor of your Writing.com account anniversary this month. I enjoyed reading your Poem  "Ode to us  and would like to share a few of my thoughts.

 
*Coffeer*  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
All around the rules are the feelings charged with the reality of how powerless we are to please other people, do the “right” thing and keep the masses from turning on us. In a world that is constantly at war, making more rules, changing the rules to fit a few who are chosen and exclude those who are not – I am under a cloud of constant apprehension.
 
*Coffeer*  THEME
 
If one could only know how the rest of the world wants one to be, maybe there would be an everlasting peace and contentment. But rules evolve. Some ignored others enforced. Even I confuse me – cookies good this week – but they were so bad last week. Don't eat the cookies.
 

*Coffeer**Coffeer*  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
The poem leads the reader to embrace the anxiety of a a world where rules are the bubbles we live in and this was my favorite, moment:

Set me up; what's ethically right?
Set me up, I'm not looking for a fight,
Set me up for the screwed up world,
Make me numb like the rest of us.

 
When my rules collide with the rules of the rest of the world, there is going to be a fight. Some Serbian in 1914 takes the life of an Austrian duke and some peasant from Minsk is wondering how in the world it is suddenly his fight – but suddenly the whole world is at war, because one man broke a rule – do no murder.
 


*Coffeer*  IN SUMMARY
 
"Ode to us gives me a moment to linger over the internal struggle to do what is right. But it can't just be about what I think is right. Conceptually laws say that I have free speech, but on the other hand I had better watch what I say. Nicely said and beautifully written! Write On! *Smile*
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
*MugR*
 

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Review of Sermons  
for entry "Unity
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with Inspirational Writers Guild  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you for sharing the words of Wisdom given to you by the Holy Spirit.

I appreciate your insight into how the scripture is so relevant in this world today. In every Christ led community we are under the weight shared by our pastors, teachers, preachers and elders to find a way to be unified as the days before the Lord's return steadily decrease.

It is good to be reminded that while we have done "good works" in the past several months because of the deprivation faced by many of our families, we still must look to our Lord and Savior Jesus Christ as our example, motivator, and inspiration to keep on doing more and more. And where the doors have been closed off to the church because of quarantines and decreased funding, we still must respond to the compelling of the Holy Spirit to find more ways to be a help to those in need.

One of Jesus' blessings before leaving this earth was spoken of in John 14:27. "Peace I leave with you, my peace I give to you, not as the world gives do I give to you. Let not your heart be troubled, neither let them be afraid." As you say, everything Jesus came to give His people was counter to the culture, and so it remains to this day. He challenged the rich and powerful to humble themselves. He challenged His disciples to rely on Him to find peace in the midst of chaos.

Your sermon has given me both encouragement and inspiration as I prepare to minister to others today. May you be blessed and strengthened in peace to prosper in the mission God has called you to.*Smile*



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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hi  Kåre Enga, P.O. 22, Blogville
 
I am delighted to offer my review in honor of your Writing.com account anniversary this month.
I enjoyed reading your Poem  "You dreamed this path  and would like to share a few of my thoughts.

 
*Coffeer*  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
There is sadness in the world where humanity seems to be spent for so little coin. And then there is my melancholy where it may seem sad to the rest of the world but I am only locked into a memory that casts a shadow on my usual joy.

There is no tragedy, only a dream of a moment when nature reminded me of my state of unfullfillment. I'm not the rose, or the hydrangea, or even the sunny pansy. I'm something sprung up that while chipper and willowy, doesn't belong with the prized Peonies and Dahlias. The weed I even now experience reminds me that while not extracted from the beautiful, my choices have planted me with the ignored, under-priviledged and disenfranchised who are more my people some days than I care to admit.

*Coffeer*  THEME
 
In just a moment the lover and keeper of a beautiful garden looks away and a weed grows within the well tended boundaries and a relationship is broken by the very choice that should have kept the garden beautiful.
 
*Coffeer*  STRUCTURE
 
With an amazingly vibrant and easy flow the poem is written in a free form that begs the audience to go casually along with each image and take a breath. Nice.
 
*Coffeer**Coffeer*  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
The poem is rich with images and one of my favorites was:

“It looked a bit like me,
neglected, sad
among that overwhelming beauty,”


I'm not exactly clear when or why the love stopped. Why had we not perceived that we would each give the other a choice to be bound to something else this life had to offer? While she chose the roses whose petals I had bathed with hope and song, I longed for the thorny briers across the way and was gone.
 
*Coffeer*  SUGGESTIONS
 
Only more time to enjoy the pathos arising in my soul over the wonder in these words...but then that is a suggestion for me. Everything in “You Dreamed This Path,” is perfect for me. Thank You.

*Coffeer*  IN SUMMARY
 
"You dreamed this path opened a different way for me to think of an affair that should not have happened but could not have been avoided because of what we always chose. She and I were meant to be, but I was drawn to the one weed that would separate us forever. Thank you for sharing your gift. *Smile*
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
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Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Dear Ruth Draves I am delighted to offer a review of your work for the June 2020 Power Reviewer Raiders weekend review raid. I enjoyed "Peachy Cheesy Cake and I am glad to offer a few thoughts I had while reading your story.

 
*Coffeer*  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
In the ever present memories of our past the conscious self can't quite slip the overshadowing influence of a parent or a teacher or a friend. The feelings and emotions that can arise from the simple actions of creating a dessert from the days when mom's ways of doing things may have made for kitchen magic have now been eclipsed by swift, efficient technology and more advanced ways of making tasty magic.
 
*Coffeer*  THEME
 
Two sisters remember their mother's Peachy Cheesy cake and attempt to recreate the wonder of that special dessert. Along the way, memories of mom gain a place in the process of putting the ingredients together.
 
*Coffeer*  STRUCTURE
 
The story is written in the first person past tense from the perspective of the main character.
It is a well balanced story with a fine mixture of dialogue, scene setting and plot development.
 
*Coffeer**Coffeer*  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
The story builds with a lot of fine nuances about mom and grandma's habits and character and this was one of my favorite moments:

“Wait, didn’t we just do that?” Marie asked.

I double-checked the card. “Yes, but these are the directions for the filling now,” I said. “Grandma must have had a thing for beating things for two minutes.”

“At medium speed,” Marie snorted.



Some of the amusements of life is to see instructions given from ages gone by on everything from polishing one's shoes to using an appliance. If the moments are right one can find some serious comic relief in some of the most mundane activities. Why are some things like brushing one's teeth up and down so critical, when instructions to lighting a gas stove (which can blow up) seem boringly simple with so little attention paid to the finer details? Who the author of these great revelations of how to do things is more important than we can ever imagine.
 
 
*Coffeer*  SUGGESTIONS
 

I enjoyed the story just the way it is written. Very nicely done.

*Coffeer*  IN SUMMARY
 
"Peachy Cheesy Cake reveals the attitude of sisters towards their mother and grandmother who have past down to them a recipe for one of their favorite desserts. Memories help to bring a cheese cake to life and the bonding of two siblings continues despite an order to remain in isolation. I really enjoyed reading this story. Thank you for sharing your gift. *Smile*
 
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
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Joy Journey Journal  (ASR)
Walking In The Love Of The Lord; Casting All My Cares On Him!
#2179217 by ♫~ Kenword~♫


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Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Dear Joylife I am delighted to offer a review of your work for the June 2020 Power Reviewer Raiders weekend review raid. I enjoyed "Fudge So Smooth and I am glad to offer a few thoughts I had while reading your poem

 
*Coffeer*  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
It was two Christmases ago that my wife perfected the Advent Fudge. It is a beautiful blend of heavy cream, four varieties of chocolate and a bit of processed coffee. The poem, “Fudge So Smooth,” describes in scintillating detail the first experience of biting into that divine confection. It is glorious to relive that moment!

 
*Coffeer*  THEME
 
What would it be like to experience the fragrance, taste and feel of exquisite an exceptional fudge in one's mouth? The words of "A Fudge So Smooth" inspire a montage of memories and future expectations. Will I have to wait until next Christmas? O Mercy!
 
*Coffeer*  STRUCTURE
 
The poem is seven lines of free form imagery focusing on sensory perceptions to elicit one's participation in a bite of yummy heaven.
 
*Coffeer**Coffeer*  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
The joy of the words call to memory many fudgy indulgences over the years and this was my favorite line:

rubbing its velvet texture


In the act of eating anything, how much do I ever consider what texture my mouth is experiencing at the moment? But in the wonder of Advent Fudge that we make as part of our Christmas celebration, there is this moment where one's dire need to consume is interrupted by this desire to just feel the velvet texture that a heavy cream and dark chocolate mixture creates. It is a huge part of the bliss of eating a finally crafted candy.
 
 
*Coffeer*  SUGGESTIONS
 

I enjoyed every word. Practically perfect in every way.

*Coffeer*  IN SUMMARY
 
"Fudge So Smooth invites one to relive a moment when everything about what one is eating plays on the sense of smell, touch, sight and taste. The words go beyond the norms of what “tasty” might be in one's imagination creating an intimate scene where an amazing pleasurable moment begins. Well done! Thank you for sharing your gift. *Smile*
 
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
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Walking In The Love Of The Lord; Casting All My Cares On Him!
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Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Dear I Love WDC! Cissy❤ I am delighted to offer a review of your work for the June 2020 Power Reviewer Raiders weekend review raid. I enjoyed "Fudgy Chocolate Cake and I am glad to offer a few thoughts I had while reading your tasty recipe from “A Little Southern Comfort.”

 
*Coffeer*  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
First of all let me tell you that you had me at “Fudgy.” One of the first words I learned as a toddler, it has remained one of my favorite words for over 70 years. It is descriptive, enticing and yummy at so many levels it puts my senses in a whirl whenever I encounter the word. Put fudgy in the title of any confectionery delight and I will buy it!

Many scholars study Greek and Hebrew and Latin to search out the deeper meaning of words in the English language, perhaps in the hopes of giving them a better pedigree, but I mean fudgy? There is no other way to say it and there is no need of any pedigree. Fudgy just means it is the best chocolate experience you can ever give your taste buds and you should do it right now.

From there of course, my heart sang as I learned that one does not need Duncan Hines, Pillsbury or Betty Crocker to whip up the best dessert in the universe: Chocolate Cake. Yummm!

 
*Coffeer*  THEME
 
Some recipes are mere premonitions of what one might do if they had some skill in the kitchen. Others beg to be tried no matter what one's expertise. This one is fudgy, with several different chocolates and just 7 ingredients to blend and is so simple it is begging for everyone to get up and go make it. Seriously. I certainly know I will.
 
*Coffeer*  STRUCTURE
 
The article is written in an easy to follow, three section format that while traditional, does maintain the author's voice. So while the article focuses on a recipe, we are able to enjoy the author's personal kitchen instead of an industrial laboratory.
 
*Coffeer**Coffeer*  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
From the list of ingredients through each stage of the baked cake's coming to life I enjoyed this piece and this was my favorite part:

4. Meanwhile, heat heavy cream just to boil. Break chocolate into pieces;
add cream and stir until melted. Let cool; chill for 30 minutes, then whisk
until thickened to a spreadable consistency.


The cakes are cooling and everything has been a true sensory delight to this point. I have the complete process in hand having mastered every cake mix ever invented, but now comes the fudgy! Good Golly Miss Molly! – This is exactly how we make fudge at Christmas time but had never considered putting it on a cake! Frosting a cake with heavy cream fudge? What genius. O this is going to take will power.
 
 
*Coffeer*  SUGGESTIONS
 
I enjoyed and will continue to enjoy your recipe. Nicely done.


*Coffeer*  IN SUMMARY
 
"Fudgy Chocolate Cake takes a consummate baker's imagination past the complex into the realm of daringly simple to invite his palate to journey into the land of simply delicious. If the chocolate doesn't inspire a rush to the kitchen to create a masterpiece certainly the fudgy will. See you there! *Smile*
 
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
*MugR*
 

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Walking In The Love Of The Lord; Casting All My Cares On Him!
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Review of Cookies  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Dear Ashes I am delighted to offer a review of your work for the June 2020 Power Reviewer Raiders weekend review raid. I enjoyed "Cookies and I am glad to offer a few thoughts I had while reading your poem.

 
*Coffeer*  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
I had a saying when I worked for a travel firm in Seattle, “I'll do anything for a cookie.” It always got a small chuckle from my coworkers, but after awhile I would arrive at my cubicle some mornings and find a cookie waiting for me. Those were amazing days. I'm much larger now, and many cookies later enjoy other people's tales of how temptation works in their life. The image of one being drawn to an actual cookie jar is priceless to one who prefers for his wife to bake only once a month unless she is giving the tempting treats to someone else.

 
*Coffeer*  THEME
 
It is important to not only walk away from temptation but to some times actually close the lid on it. But what if someone (not you of course) has hid the lid? And you can't find your glasses? And there at the bottom of an innocent looking jar are two cute plate sized cookies with mint chip eyes beckoning you: “eat me!” As the poet says: “Consume one.” Could one actually let the chips fall where they may?
 
*Coffeer*  STRUCTURE
 
The poem is written with a wonderful flow in free form style. Its short sentences offer a quick rhythm that takes the reader along a wonderful journey to the cookie jar.

 
*Coffeer**Coffeer*  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
I like the build up of images that speak to my own journeys down temptation's road and this was one of my favorites:

Through framed eyes,
You peer,
Trying to process
Trying to cope.


I sense that the eye gates in this scene are trying themselves to confuse the brain. Why are they just “peering” at the situation? Shouldn't they help in the resistance? At least signal some false information: “They're old cookies, stale, minty (eeeewwwwe!) they've got to be gross by now.” But no, the brain is not getting any help, it only remembers cookies in generic form, sweet, tasty, fulfilling.” And then there is nothing left but to do what one has trained the will-power to do: “give in!”
 
 
*Coffeer*  SUGGESTIONS
 
I enjoyed the form and the way the poem flows is perfect for my senses until one particular couplet that seemed to close off the rhythm a bit. This is my own preference in writing and reading poetry of course, but I felt that the lines

“For your glasses,
Knocking over a glass.”


put the brakes on the flow.

Up to this point the syllable count for each line of the poem was generally three to four. I think the six syllable line draws everything to a close. I'm not exactly sure how to keep the flow open other than to go a different direction with the couplet. Maybe: “smudging your lenses,” for instance. The line would still be a bit long, but the sound of the last syllable of that line would have a softer sound to complement the soft syllable sound of “glasses.” Any way something to consider. Thanks for letting me play with your words a bit.

In every other way the flow and images of the poem, for me, are spot on.


*Coffeer*  IN SUMMARY
 
"Cookiesexposes the passions of the hungry heart to have something succulent, sweet and tempting to bring one's life a generous dose of joy. The problem of course is guilt and calories. If only my devotion to snacks, treats and sweet confections wouldn't show up on my sleek athletic frame! Thank you for sharing your gift. *Smile*
 
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
*MugR*
 

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BOOK
Joy Journey Journal  (ASR)
Walking In The Love Of The Lord; Casting All My Cares On Him!
#2179217 by ♫~ Kenword~♫


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Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Dear bubblegumjones I am delighted to offer a review of your work for the June 2020 Power Reviewer Raiders weekend review raid. I enjoyed "Tasty Treats & Delightful Desserts and I am glad to offer a few thoughts I had while reading your official collection of unofficial state desserts.

 
*Coffeer*  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
For one who does indeed habitually eat dessert first, this comprehensive, detailed compendium adds some tasty treats to my ever increasing diet of sugary concoctions. This is not only an exhaustive list of incredible eats, it is a ready reference for use in a fictional piece that needs some added flavors for tastes, smells and textures.

 
*Coffeer*  THEME
 
State by state America enjoys some imaginative ways to blend chocolate, nuts, fruits and pastries into life giving snacks and muli-course dessert buffets. I grew up in the hallowed halls of church pot-lucks and the church ladies hailed from many different parts of the country stuffing growing boys with brownies, muffins, pies, cakes and home made ice cream. But seriously, Party Night at church could not hold a candle to this complete encyclopedia of this country's finest desserts! Yumm!
 
*Coffeer*  STRUCTURE
 
The article is written in a narrative style listing the desserts that are most famously enjoyed in each of the United States and Washington D.C.

 
*Coffeer**Coffeer*  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
Every dessert on the list is my favorite and certainly a draw to the state in which it is found to be the favorite, but my ultimate favorite was:

43. Texas - Pecan pie - It's only right that pecan pie is Texas' unofficial dessert since the pecan tree is Texas’ official state tree, the native pecan is Texas’ official state nut, and San Saba, Texas is the pecan capital of the world.

I have always wanted to go to Texas and now here is a new and most worthy reason to go. An associate of mine at work was from Texas and each year he baked his version of this amazing pie. The secret ingredient was Southern Comfort and wow! Was it amazing. I may see if Texas might just ship me a slice!
 
 
*Coffeer*  SUGGESTIONS
 
In every way this was nicely researched and well written. Great Job!


*Coffeer*  IN SUMMARY
 
"Tasty Treats & Delightful Desserts chronicles state to state, in alphabetical order for easy reference, the goodies each member of the Union is famous for. Though almost a dessert expert myself, I found this new and insightful journey through pastries, pies, cakes and confections most exhilarating. Sweet! *Smile*
 
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
*MugR*
 

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Joy Journey Journal  (ASR)
Walking In The Love Of The Lord; Casting All My Cares On Him!
#2179217 by ♫~ Kenword~♫


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Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Dear fat_hiker I am delighted to offer a review of your work for the June 2020 Power Reviewer Raiders weekend review raid. I enjoyed "Gigantia, Part One and I am glad to offer a few thoughts I had while reading your story.

 
*Coffeer*  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
Somewhere between parody, satire and out-right fantasy debunking an archaic notion that food is only fuel, the story of Gigantia is almost like a cross between an article for National Geographic and a satirical expose' by Mad Magazine. The premise of the story is so preposterous that I laughed immediately at the concept of such an outlandish historical piece of fiction. Then suddenly it hit me...my own history. Married at the age of 29 I was a sleek 5' 5” 119 pound otterish sort of fellow. Within five years of marriage, and truck loads of lasagna, cookies, cakes, pies, tamales, chips, beer and pasta I weighed in at 145 pounds. By the time I was sixty I had eclipsed 175 pounds and now many years later I'm close to 200. My wife has never adored me more. Hmmmm? I began to read the story again and suddenly the weighty world of Gigantia seemed to take on an ethereal reality. And way to plausible! All hail to the Fat Boys!

 
*Coffeer*  THEME
 
Food plus a good appetite and a low impact work regime equals: beauty, sexiness, maximum attraction, subservience, and Kingly, studly positions of reverence and one might say, “the ultimate ideal male.” The theme of the piece proclaims the wonders of a nation literally built on having a good appetite and a pride in fat male bodies. I'm sorry. I just looked down at my belly and I can't stop laughing. I'm going to take a muffin break!
 
*Coffeer*  STRUCTURE
 
The story is written in a narrative, historical style, presenting in article form a fictional world replete with some nice personal accounts.
 
*Coffeer**Coffeer*  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
As the history of Gigantia unfolds the absurdity of a matriarchal society obsessed with the largeness of its male population suddenly becomes incredibly believable and my favorite moment was:

This trend to having a really fat man in a family as a sign of status and wealth slowly spread to other well-off city dwellers - professional artisans, administrators, religious officials - and gradually out into the richer areas of the countryside. Richer farmers, eager to prove their wealth by city standards, also started to spare a favoured son or husband from heavier physical labour, and feed them more, encouraging them to fatten up as a status symbol. Having a very fat husband or son - one too fat for general farm labour - became a proof of the wealth and success of the farm. The fatter this special man, the more successful the farm would be seen to be. Whenever the farmer would travel into the city, she would take her ‘fattened man' along, as tangible proof of her farm's wealth and stability.

This is a stunning moment in the narrative that explains the metamorphosis of an agricultural society with a medium amount of wealth into a rich, consumer and status driven multi dimensional economy where food is as central to the plan of material development as mineral and oil.
 
 
*Coffeer*  SUGGESTIONS
 
I enjoyed the premise, narrative and creative thought that went into this story. It mimics well the historical studies provided in text books and geographical periodicals. Well done.


*Coffeer*  IN SUMMARY
 
"Gigantia, Part One is a serious work of tongue-in-cheek historical fantasy fiction that pokes a good dose of re-thinking into the America “be-skinny-is-best” model of body beauty. Nicely done and well written. Thank you for sharing your gift. *Smile*
 
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
*MugR*
 

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BOOK
Joy Journey Journal  (ASR)
Walking In The Love Of The Lord; Casting All My Cares On Him!
#2179217 by ♫~ Kenword~♫


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Review of In His Presence  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)

*CakeB* HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews*CakeP*



Hi  Jolly Ol' Sum1
 
I am delighted to offer my review in honor of your Writing.com account anniversary this month.
I was enjoyed reading your Poem  "In His Presence  and would like to share a few of my thoughts.

 
*Coffeer*  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
Today the world nations are shaming America because one policeman, who may be a racist, (seems he had a reputation for violence without regard to race) kills a person, I mean seriously accusing America of human rights violations, I mean we probably do have a ton to our record…but China? Seriously? Anyway it was great getting lost in the words and images of your poem. A solace and a sanctuary away from the evils of this world. Nicely done.

*Coffeer*  THEME
 
Being one with God by feeling, hearing and seeing His presence is the theme of this evocative poem. Learning more about his touch and the tone of His expressions can bring one to the end of self. To be enveloped by His loving spirit is a joy nearly incomprehensible. I am able through the images of this poem able to embrace fully the experience of being near the Creator.
 
*Coffeer*  STRUCTURE
 
The poem follows a traditional couplet rhyming scheme. The lines are written in free form with a nice easy flow in rhythm and tone.
 
*Coffeer**Coffeer*  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
There is a story within the images of this poem and my favorite moment was:

“I saw the world around me as never before,
This place we take for granted, but nevermore.
Everything near, so surreal, so serene,
I could feel the love that covered this scene."


There is love in the creation that rises up around us, from the icy moon ascending over a snow covered glade, or the robin bouncing across a Kelly green fairway pulling at the turf. Plans, tasks, labors and play can mask the wonder of God’s touch, but not if I stop, observe, listen and replay in my mind the wonders I have experienced today.
 
*Coffeer*  SUGGESTIONS
 
I enjoyed everything about this poem and have no suggestions for improvement.

*Coffeer*  IN SUMMARY
 
"In His Presence awakens a song in my heart that draws me nearer to the One who has created everything. I am reminded to linger with views of creation that I often overlook or take for granted. Truly an inspirational read. Well done! *Smile*
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
*MugR*
 


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Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi  Lou-Here By His Grace
 
I am delighted to offer my review in honor of your Writing.com account anniversary this month.
I was enjoyed reading your poem  "If I Were The Autumn Leaves  and would like to share a few of my thoughts.

 
*Coffeer*  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
I love the images that inspire my heart and mind to wander down past lanes where the leaves are at play under the full force of autumn winds. I might have a kite in one hand and the hand of my grandson in the other, but we are rushing to add our own color to the kaleidoscopic art opening up before us. The wonder of the season where transition and transformation are at full throttle seems to have its delicate moment too, where a girl and a grandma sing and wonder at the leaves tangled in their hair.
 
*Coffeer*  THEME
 
Nature takes a moment to reflect on the way it engages with us mortals. Nothing is static as nature knows all too well, but it can slow a moment down so that every ounce of joy can be gathered up and savored with song and whimsy.  

*Coffeer*  STRUCTURE
 
The poem is written in free form with a beautiful flow that helps one appreciate the images being captured. The words capture the essence of a real scene both pastoral and nostalgic.
 
*Coffeer**Coffeer*  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
The poem expresses well the view autumn leaves might have of their last standing mission and this was my favorite moment:

“If I were the autumn leaves
I would clap and dance
at the chance to be
tangled in hair and serenaded
by a sweet child"


I live where the autumn leaves take flight for weeks. Every tree holds back a few no matter how blustery the pacific winds become. As they tumble from their summer home to their last resting place I will find these words of the poet to be an inspiration to wonder at the last expression the leaves will have to amuse me, speak to me and dance with me.
 
*Coffeer*  SUGGESTIONS
 
I appreciate every word and image of this poem and love it just as it has been created.

*Coffeer*  IN SUMMARY
 
"If I Were The Autumn Leaves is a delight to read and meditate on. There is a story within the images of this poem that illuminate what humanity might well be if it understood more clearly the wonder leaves might experience when engaged with us. Maybe their last acts of love are to adorn the earth at our feet as we contemplate a life well lived. Thank you for sharing your gift! *Smile*
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
*MugR*
 


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Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi  Beholden
 
I am delighted to offer my review in honor of your Writing.com account anniversary this month.
I was enjoyed reading your story  "Mordecai's Problem  and would like to share a few of my thoughts.

 
*Coffeer*  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
The simple life of a farmer. Friends with nature and horse with compassion for the needs of his wife, Mordecai’s life seems to sit in a crease where what is "now" may not be a reality for many decades or perhaps in a whole century to come. What? The result is a great infusion of joyous fun and a good hearty laugh. Thank you.
 
*Coffeer*  THEME
 
A farmer comes in from a day of ploughing the fields. His life is serene and unspoiled by the trappings of a harried society. His hard work done for the day, only one challenge faces him before supper and a nice rest by the fire.
 
*Coffeer*  STRUCTURE
 
The story is written in the third person from the viewpoint of Mordecai. The scene setting and narrative are excellent and the flow of the story makes reading a pleasure.
 
*Coffeer**Coffeer*  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
My favorite scene in the story is the opening where tone and texture are set in place:

“Old Mordecai stood up slowly, brushing the dirt from his hands. The westering sun had brushed the tops of the trees forming Aldeburgh Wood and the light was beginning to fade towards dusk. It had been a hard day’s work and now it was time for the farmer to return to his tied cottage and the rest from his labours it promised."

The language used to set up the story is succinct, pleasant to the ear and gives me a blissful image to meditate on, as though I had been to Mordecai’s place a hundred times. Hmmmm…maybe I have.
 
*Coffeer*  SUGGESTIONS
 
I enjoyed everything about your story and was glad to be able read it through several times.

*Coffeer*  IN SUMMARY
 
"Mordecai's Problem contrasts the pastoral life with the life to come using a brilliant twist of the wit that takes a quick sharp poke at the nature of humanity. We sometimes do spend an inordinate amount of time mourning and grieving for the things that are broken that have not even been invented yet. I know I do! Well done! *Smile*
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
*MugR*
 


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Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
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Rated: E | (4.0)
*LeafO*  Welcome to WdC from the "Newbie Welcome Wagon *LeafO*


Dear Neil Clair – Welcome to Writing.com. I am glad you are a part of this amazing writing community now. I enjoyed reading "This Is Hope (Chapter One) and as you have requested it is my pleasure to give your story a bit of a review.

 
*Coffeer*  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
A child is born and her life is linked to the life of the Great Magician Harry Houdini because she was born on the day the famous artist of mystery died. The story of Harrly is quick and smart in its own illusions and mysteries. Harrly misses her mother but is content to honor her father and build a life together with the wonderful man God has given her. Her hopes for giving a great surprise to her father are crushed when she is accused of staying beyond school hours with boys. She is grounded, and is hurt more than she can imagine until the big hurt drives up in a Mercedes. As her father’s esteem diminishes in her eyes she turns the pages of a book that may open the dark channels of her Houdini legacy.
 
*Coffeer*  THEME
 
Harrly Houdini Hope’s life is altered by tragic circumstances that leave her abandoned ironically, to the one hope that is her dark legacy: magic.

*Coffeer*  STRUCTURE
 
The story is told in the third person past tense, from the viewpoint of the main character Harrly Hope. There is an excellent blend of narrative, action and dialogue that gives the story an excellent flow and a tantalizing flavor. The scenes are vivid and clearly express the violent swings of Harrly’s mental and emotional state.

*Coffeer**Coffeer*  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
Each character, and scene sequence truly kept my interest and this was one of my favorite moments:

"Go ahead and help yourself with some leftover Mac n' Cheese. Just put it on the stove for two minutes. That's if you know how to even use a stove. Pans are in the cupboards. By the way, I would choke you for your coat. Literally. I hate it. Does that lipstick rub off? Is that a wig? It's way too bright for your skin. I'm gonna put your stuff away now. They stink. Have fun...doing..stuff..with my dad," I jabbered with sarcasm.
 
Harrly’s rant punches into a ludicrous moment some exquisite humor when an innocent child accused of immoral actions, finds her father to be extremely flawed, probably with the same immorality of which he has accused his daughter. The scene is great too in that it reveals beautifully Harrly’s age and temperament and how this point in time could be the defining moment for a future magician.
 
*Coffeer*  SUGGESTIONS
 
There are quite a few minor word choice and syntax errors in the piece such as

My mother's final words stuck with me for the rest of my growing life and I couldn't figure out what she meant. I didn't bother to ask my dad about it because he was already going through a lot. On top of that, couple months after the funeral, my dad and I had a fall out. It all started when I came home late after school. My dad accused me of being with a boy and he forbade me to never come home after four again. He told me to go to my room for two days and think about what I had done.

Some of the re-writes I would suggest would be to eliminate the word growing . In context of that sentence “growing” seems redundant. I would suggest a re-write to the the third sentence to read: On top of that, [a] couple of months after the funeral, my dad and I had a fall[ing] out.

In the fifth sentence re-write, I would suggest this change: My dad accused me of being with a boy and he forbade me to never come ever be home after four again.

During your next draft of the story I’m sure you will be able to make the edits necessary to polish up this marvelous beginning to your novel.


*Coffeer*  IN SUMMARY
 
"This Is Hope (Chapter One) is a dramatic first chapter to a story that is told through the eyes of a wonderful main character. Her view of life and her journey into the world of magic make her a beautiful child to get to know. I will look forward to reading more about Harrly’s life. Write On! *Smile*
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
*MugR*
 


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Review of Heart Over Head  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with The Rockin' Reviewers  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Dear Storm Grey – Welcome to Writing.com. I am glad you are a part of this amazing writing community now. I enjoyed reading "Heart Over Head and thought I would give your story a bit of a review.

 
*Coffeer*  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
Can a person truly hate love? Is it possible that the feelings, emotions, bio-physical reactions that pass for love in a society that embraces so much hate, are nothing more than false alarms about things a damaged heart and soul should not care about? If so then why do circumstances keep pushing humans together to become more needier of the other, more compassionate about others and even more sweetly adoring of others? The author writes clearly and passionately about a journey of a heroine who is convinced that love is the death of all things and before proving she is right, discovers other, incomprehensible truths about love
 
*Coffeer*  THEME
 
Hattie hates love. She finds solace in places where coffee is sold (mmmm…I like that) where she can watch people and “scribble” in a journal about the misery of life where love is touted as the be all and end all to a blissful life. In the middle of her endless pursuit of justifying her lone existence she meets Emme who immediately challenges Hattie’s perceptions about love. 

*Coffeer*  STRUCTURE
 
The story is told in a first person narrative style from the protagonist’s point of view. The balance between narrative, dialogue, scene setting and plot management is well done generating a continual draw to keep reading the story. 

*Coffeer**Coffeer*  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
Each character, and scene sequence truly kept my interest and this was one of my favorite moments:

Why did she even sit next to me in the first place! If she hadn't, I wouldn't be here, but at home in my room waiting for Mom to come home. So maybe this situation I'm in is better than the one I would be in if I was at home. But so what!? I'm losing my mind in a bathroom where right outside is a beautiful girl. Could this get any worse? Oh wait, it already has. We're SNOWED in.

 
Up to this point in the story, I am starting to like Hattie. To me she is easy to relate to. How many times does one give up on love? And why isn’t it always the end of things? Clean with not regrets? It is all part of the human drama and has made song writers wealthy for centuries. But then, someone with tenacity comes across all barriers and POW! We’re snowed in with them, (in my case riding home from school on a bus with them) and then, I don’t know….charm, humor, beauty, chemistry…what…suddenly love doesn’t seem so bad anymore.
 
*Coffeer*  SUGGESTIONS
 
I was completely charmed by your story. Good intro, good close. I’m thinking all this story needs is a bit of polish to be market ready.

*Coffeer*  IN SUMMARY
 
"Heart Over Head challenges the reader to recall the rocks we found our relationships broken on and to relate to a young woman who is determined to chronicle her downward spiral into a loveless life. Before she gets to the point of renting a small apartment in which to dwell with an ever increasing number of cats, she meets a major interruption. They begin their conversation where many people often end theirs and their relationship. Why is love so desperately hard? Thank you for sharing your gift. Write On! *Smile*
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
*MugR*
 


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Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
In affiliation with WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group  
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Dear Whiskerfaceatthefireplace I am delighted to offer my review in honor of your Writing.com account anniversary this month. I enjoyed reading "Questions from Charlie and I am glad to offer a few thoughts I had while reading your story.

 
*Coffeer*  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
Great “Cramp” entry. It suits the challenge to come at the contest with a pure dialogue simple scene that enlightens the reader to a few elements of human nature and concludes with a humorous and because the reader is kept in the dark about Charlie’s marital status, quite the surprise ending.
 
*Coffeer*  THEME
 
Two friends share a moment of frivolity deciphering the deeper meaning behind a list of odd questions.
 
*Coffeer*  STRUCTURE
 
The story consist of a dialogue between two characters written in a first person narrative style from the point of view of Clare. The narrative style gives the reader an occasional glimpse of Charlie, and some of the scenery around them. The narration also reveals the importance of Charlie in Clare's life.  
 
*Coffeer**Coffeer*  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
The dialogue develops nicely between the two friends and this was my favorite moment:

“ Well, not exactly. I’ve always wanted to know things, and now I have the chance to investigate my questions. Some of what I’m curious about doesn’t appear to have answers. So, I started this list. I’m up to page fifty-three, single spaced.” He radiated pride in this accomplishment.

I love getting to the motivation of a story. It is shortly revealed in narration the kind of neighbor Charlie is. But what would send him on a futile search for questions that can’t be answered? When one retires, maybe there are more questions than answers, but there is time now to ponder and develop the great philosophy that will shape his life. Or…keep him away from the house for a few hours each day. I think I’ve had coffee with this guy at least once.
 
 
*Coffeer*  SUGGESTIONS
 
Your story fits perfectly the style and parameters of the “Writers Cramp” contest. But I think it is a good core for a more expansive story. Those who ask good, amusing, ridiculous and probing questions make good detectives. Maybe the retired goes investigator. It might be worthwhile to fill in some of the scenes with more description and sensory stuff and see where it goes. Just a thought. Well done.

*Coffeer*  IN SUMMARY
 
"Questions from Charlie is a story that probes some of the least important questions pending investigation. Some of the engagement requires patience and tolerance from the other, but it demonstrates the power of friendship in a vibrant creative way. A nice story for such a lovely afternoon in the garden. Thanks for sharing your gift. Write on! *Smile*
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
*MugR*
 
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Review of This Craziness  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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Dear Pat ~ starting a new journey I am delighted to offer my review in honor of your Writing.com account anniversary this month. I enjoyed reading "This Craziness and I am glad to offer a few thoughts I had while reading your article.

 
*Coffeer*  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
There are some powerful insights explored in this account of an adoptive mom’s struggles with two extremely wounded children brought into her household of love. What can prepare one to minister constant companionship, parental love, and spiritual counsel to the children born into abusive environments? The words blaze off the screen reminding me of a brother who went through identical warfare with two of his adoptive children. Two questions come up for me out of both irregular situations. Is there within our social welfare system ways to better prepare adopted children and their future parents to live together in harmony? The other is, can the children even be expected to engage in the “normal”social structures of our society before they are whole? In other words, shouldn’t there be another path that these children enter into that does not include challenges like school until they have received enough love intervention that they can fully trust and return love to others? What we have seen in our system is a school system that tries to embrace all strata of emotional brutality. One of my friends has a classroom full of the children described in this article. She is only the “teacher” of the class because two former teachers were injured so badly that they had to step away from teaching for a season. My friend is attacked daily. Is there a better option for these children? There is actually, but to many it would sound more crazy than the world we have already planted these children in.
 
*Coffeer*  THEME
 
A mom with mountains of love to give to the already born children of this world adopts several children who are so “damaged” that her world comes apart. The article looks at the answer to the problems the author faces and speaks well of a form of therapy that is known to work, but is too often not followed up on: “Cuddle Therapy.” Within the author’s household is the contrast between one who did not receive the therapy and went into total rebellion, and one who did and is now developing in a mature manner.
 
*Coffeer*  STRUCTURE
 
The article is written from the first person point of view with a narrative style. It is broken up into two parts giving the reader a foundation of the challenges faced by the author and a later five year update on how life has progressed for her two adopted children.
 
*Coffeer**Coffeer*  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
The challenges of raising two abused children is a gripping story and this was my favorite moment:

Believe it or not, this was a turning moment in our lives. Over time, he began to bond with me and feel a genuine affection for me as his mother. We learned from the specialist how to handle his behavior, and he learned how to be "responsible, respectful, and easy to be around." That was the motto she taught him. That was the goal he aimed for. And he made it too.

Turning points are great. They are the essence for why these articles are so powerful. As a reader I like to know that there is hope for those facing monumental challenges. The author goes beyond the prayer that there is always hope, to give us the satisfaction that her efforts did indeed champion the healing of a boy out of his emotional dungeon.
 
 
*Coffeer*  SUGGESTIONS
 
Everything about this article is powerful. A key point is that everyone who is going the adoption route should know the potential challenges and the specific prices they are going to need to pay to overcome those challenges. Perhaps when you are on the other side of your own healing you would consider a rewrite of your article with some quotes from professionals, and experiences of others who have faced the same challenges and look to have your article published. I think there is a great market for your writing and your hope filled perspective on life.

*Coffeer*  IN SUMMARY
 
"This Craziness chronicles the challenges of adopting two children with undiagnosed mental issues that ultimately throw a loving family into chaos. The trauma of the parent is described in chilling detail. But in the end finds the hope that is possible for anyone who adopts children and finds themselves bound to a hopeless situation. Through good therapy, a strong support system and faith in a loving God, there is a great hope that many children from abusive situations in life may be rescued. Thanks for sharing your story of hope. Write on! *Smile*
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
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♫~ Kenword~♫
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Dear ShiShad I am delighted to offer my review in honor of your Writing.com account anniversary this month. I enjoyed reading "The Legend Of The Phantom Of The Hallows and I am glad to offer a few thoughts I had while reading your story.

 
*Coffeer*  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
We got ourselves a wee bit of lore here and I like it. Villains of the worst sort are identified and nearly convicted of assault, rape and who knows what all, except for their earnest charges against their Baron. How can this be? Except we are in this writing experiencing an age when all manner of mayhem went unpunished according to true justice because of bribery, extortion, blackmail and fake reports. Thank goodness we don’t live in that age now. Imagine the dark curses that would be at work in the courts of America.
 
*Coffeer*  THEME
 
Two rapists testify in a court of medieval law against their Baron accusing him of the assaults they have committed. The Baron is found guilty in the dark court and hanged for “his crimes.” He is executed according to the law of the land at the time, but not before pronouncing a curse on the false witnesses.
 
*Coffeer*  STRUCTURE
 
The story is told in a narrative style in the past tense from the view point of the narrator.
 
*Coffeer**Coffeer*  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
The dark story has an Edwardian undercurrent in its power to illicit mixed emotions and this was my favorite moment:

When the council got news of these rapes, the men turned on Jack, and convinced the court it was he the Baron, or tenant in chief, as he was called who committed the crimes against the King. Both men proclaiming:

“Spare us, it is Jack’s duty to hold power over his clansmen, he is the legal head of the Barony!” they shouted out at the council.


What audacious acting. What amazing talent to lie so convincingly with no remorse for their works of evil, that the council is persuaded of their innocence? A whole tribe of future nobility persuaded to execute judgement on an innocent man. Is there a curse appropriate? Surely it had to have fallen on the deceived as well as the deceivers and bring down the whole community in a touch of hell on earth. Good Golly!  
 
*Coffeer*  SUGGESTIONS
 
The story is a good one. It has all the elements of a truly fine Gothic tale. I would suggest that the story needs more actual action at the front end with vivid scenes to set the tale in motion. I think I would have begun the story with the curse scene and worked back to the point of when the Baron is falsely accused of the crime. It is a powerful opening scene that would really grab the reader. It would also do the story good to showcase some of the more minor actions of Jamie and Nathan to show their evil disregard for their neighbors and then build a scene where they brutally attack an innocent. Their false testimony is obviously treacherous, but to me they could be shown to be murderous as well so that sending a man to the gallows would be absolutely expected of them. Just some thoughts.

*Coffeer*  IN SUMMARY
 
"The Legend Of The Phantom Of The Hallows is a fine tale of injustice in medieval Scotland that provokes a curse to be pronounced on two lads of questionable moral fiber. Then the hanging, brutal and mysterious still haunts the land, even as the curse continues to do its work. One dark soul chasing two others until…well who knows when. Thanks for sharing your gift for story telling. Write on! *Smile*
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Dear jaya I am delighted to offer my review in honor of your Writing.com account anniversary this month. I enjoyed reading ""Be of good courage....." and I am glad to offer a few thoughts I had while reading your poem.

 
*Coffeer*  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
How deeply we can indeed suffer. Sometimes our own malady takes us down a woeful path, but it is especially hard walking that path with one we love. Thank you for sharing your faith that has worked a beautiful way of expressing the new strength you find in your Father God.
 
*Coffeer*  THEME
 
Be of good courage is the theme and admonition of this poem. There is good reason to shrink back from facing each day’s challenge, but there are even greater reasons to overcome the trials and wearisome pains of the day to live life as a testimony of God’s great goodness. So the words of the poem rally us to the call - “Be of good courage…”
 
*Coffeer*  STRUCTURE
 
The poem is written in a free verse narrative style in a mix of present and past tenses. The view of the narration is from the author’s perspective. The form gives the author the liberty to put the words into the universe in a “stream of consciousness” way that is both prayerful and meditative.
 
*Coffeer**Coffeer*  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
The sensory elements in you poem are rich and this was a favorite moment:

I know He ever walks by my side,
His eyes full of mercy and sympathy,


It is wonderful to experience God’s mercy and grace, but these lines remind me that God is also sympathetic. He knows our sufferings all too well. He hears our cries and has a place for our tears in heaven. What a precious reminder of how much He loves us.  
 
*Coffeer*  SUGGESTIONS
 
I appreciate your writing and the thoughts you have conveyed in your piece or inspirational. Well done. My only suggestion - keep writing!

*Coffeer*  IN SUMMARY
 
""Be of good courage....." reminds us that we have a Creator who is sympathetic to our suffering, but knows that within we have a heart that can be courageous enough to go through terrifying times and not be afraid, sorrowful times and not succumb to perpetual grief. How beautiful are those who write the words that inspire us to look to the Father of Lights who does not withhold any good thing from our lives. Thank you for sharing your gift. Write on! *Smile*
 
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♫~ Kenword~♫
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Dear Sarah Rae I am delighted to offer my review in honor of your Writing.com account anniversary this month. I enjoyed reading "I must write, I must write! and I am glad to offer a few thoughts I had while reading your poem.

 
*Coffeer*  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
I love the form of this poem. The meter and tone are absolutely wonderful and the form offers a framework that includes enough repetition of thought and words to explore microscopically one’s compulsion to write. Or as we say in my household: My obsession.
 
*Coffeer*  THEME
 
Writing as an obsession. There is no reason for it…love of words? Love for the images words can create? What is it? There is no reason, but bless those who give into their deepest desires to give us something beautiful to meditate on. Oh yes, bless them.
 
*Coffeer*  STRUCTURE
 
The form of the poem is a pantoum. Thank you for the link. I did not know the form you used was a thing. But I love it. The liberty you take with the form to make the craft of writing action packed instead of the studious labor often associated with this most private process. Wonderful.
 
*Coffeer**Coffeer*  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
Everything about your writing rings absolutely true and this was my favorite moment:

A lullaby to soothe the muse's demands
lest she leech from me the last of my strength.
I must write, I must write,


The frenetic activity that writing demands at the beginning of the day, whether it is 3, 4, 5, or 6 in the morning. It doesn’t matter. The demand to get the words out strains the heart, constricts the veins in the brain until on the verge of a stroke the fingers work to keep from exploding. But then, a humanitarian effort is made with the inner voice until at last it is a fervent command “Just Shut-Up!” Please let us rest until tomorrow. Because we know if there is a tomorrow, we will be overwhelmed by the whole process again. Good Golly!  
 
*Coffeer*  SUGGESTIONS
 
I love the poem as written. You followed the form perfectly . And you said a ton! Thank you.

*Coffeer*  IN SUMMARY
 
"I must write, I must write! describes the urge to write in terms so volatile that it begs the question: why aren’t all writers consumed with over-medication? But even with a stout dose of adult beverage from midnight to dawn, wouldn’t we still have to get a pen? Even if it was to scribble something profound on our cocktail napkin? Oh Yes. Yes we would. Write on! *Smile*
 
I hope my thoughts and impressions have been a help. Let me know if you have any questions about my review.
 
Kind Regards,

♫~ Kenword~♫
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Review of THE EMPTY CHAIR  
Review by ♫~ Kenword~♫
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Dear Indrani – Welcome to Writing.com. I am glad you are a part of this amazing writing community now. I enjoyed reading "THE EMPTY CHAIR and I am glad to offer a few of the thoughts I had while reading your poem.

 
*Coffeer*  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
Between the time when parents, school, peers, scholars and friends tell us what “it is all about,” and the time we, leaning on our walking frames and gulping down 11 life sustaining medications, know more about what life has been about, there is a wonder. It brings on to many a depression, anxiety and fear that won’t allow one to actually explore with gusto the boundaries of life. Life becomes an endless wave of stuff that happens to us. But there is more and not a bore, isn’t there?

 
*Coffeer*  THEME
 
Life seems to slip by with moments of thrill followed by endless days of seeming nothingness. What is the way? What is the meaning? Is there a book from which I can receive knowledge of the way? Within me I know my answer…now. But there were times. Dark times.
 
*Coffeer*  STRUCTURE
 
The poem has four stanzas written in free form. The images center around an empty chair, where we are to imagine what is significant about the one who will not return.
 
*Coffeer**Coffeer*  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
The poem, with its lonely feel opens the mind to a mystery and this was my favorite moment:

The chair will not be filling up
But the presence will linger
And the memories will guide me further.


The end of the poem speaks of why we have lingered so long before the chair wondering about its emptiness. Whoever is missing from the scene will be remembered and those memories may be what will guide us into all truth and wisdom. A time of meditation.
 
 
*Coffeer*  SUGGESTIONS
 
Your poem is written well enough to convey the message you wish your readers to entertain and I is well written that way you have created it.

*Coffeer*  IN SUMMARY
 
"THE EMPTY CHAIR sets before us a wonder about how we gain true wisdom. We can meditate on the past, consider our future and align our thoughts with those who have walked the path thousands of times before us. It is there we choose to believe what is, not by what we experience or what others have said, but by our own faith. I have chosen to believe the Bible as the one true resource for discerning what is. And in the end, my righteous Companion is coming back. Thanks for sharing your gift. Write On! *Smile*
 
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♫~ Kenword~♫
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Review of Our New World  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Dear ellenraes – Welcome to Writing.com. I am glad you are a part of this amazing writing community now. I enjoyed reading "Our New World and I am glad to offer a few of the thoughts I had while reading your poem.

 
*Coffeer*  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
The prose suggests setting one’s mind on the Savior and not the cause. The eternal message of God it seems is not who is responsible; from the time of the Garden we know all too well who and what is responsible for sin and death, but beyond our own responsibility every day, who will we look to as the one and only one who can save? Maybe there is more to our new world than we can imagine. What we have taken for granted in the past is a good place to begin our prayers of today for repentance before the Almighty.
 
*Coffeer*  THEME
 
There is a raging disease unleashed on a lost and dying world that shines the light on just how lost and dying the world indeed is. The light in the midst of what many people see as their darkest hour is Jesus. Every child in my Good News Club knows the answer to every question: Jesus!
 
*Coffeer*  STRUCTURE
 
The poem is written in free form narrative prose style that focuses most of its energy in the flow of thought as though in prayer and intercession with God imparting the big answers to the most mortal of questions: What will be “Our New World.”
 
*Coffeer**Coffeer*  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
The poem builds with superb narrative of concern that there may be a solution to an epidemic and this was my favorite moment:

Why the protests, the anger, the fear of life, blaming whom ever and whatever we please for this pandemic.

We should be on our knees and praying to the true God, the Lord Jesus Christ, to help us now and to find
us and antibiotic.


Oddly I’ve not thought to pray for an actual antibiotic, but I think this prayer is being answered as an old method of inoculation used for small pox is being introduced into the US and many other countries. Prayers for those who are giving their bodies and strength to care for the sick and dying are upper most in my prayers right now, but I will take your admonition to heart. I will also pray for the peace of “Our New World” to come.
 
 
*Coffeer*  SUGGESTIONS
 
As a prose piece that has the singular purpose of challenging and encouraging a specific alliance with God, I believe you hit the mark straight on. My one suggestion would be introduce some imagery either Biblically or naturally to draw in more of a reader’s senses. Jesus approached many of the untouchable lepers and those with various other diseases to show the nature of His Father a thousand different ways and in the end preached a Kingdom of love that transformed so many corrupted lives. Anyway. Just a thought.

*Coffeer*  IN SUMMARY
 
"Our New World takes the way of one’s thinking about the current pandemic of COVID 19 to give readers an admonition to seek the one true God for deliverance. The power is in the words of life. No word spoken or written in this hour will lose its power to resonate when the one true “New World” is revealed and many are left behind. Jesus is the answer. Thanks for sharing your gift. Write On! *Smile*
 
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♫~ Kenword~♫
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Review of Say My Name  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Dear Blake River – Welcome to Writing.com. I am glad you are a part of this amazing writing community now. I enjoyed reading "Say My Name and I am glad to offer a few of the thoughts I had while reading your poem.

 
*Coffeer*  FIRST IMPRESSION
 
I have never experienced a reflection quite like this one. The exposition is absolutely clear and forceful and brightly opens a thought I positively, absolutely should have had myself. But…not! From the science of speech to a firm clear discussion of “power”, this poem’s range astounds my senses.
 
*Coffeer*  THEME
 
Say a name. Any name, well at least in the presence of that person, what happens? Amazing isn’t it? A simple act and the ramifications are suddenly huge. Reminds me of the ages gone by when one dared not invoke the name of their god for fear that power would be unleashed to their demise. Woah!
 
*Coffeer*  STRUCTURE
 
The poem is written in free form narrative (reasoning) style that moves along at a lightning quick pace.
 
*Coffeer**Coffeer*  MY FAVORITE MOMENT
 
The poem builds with superb tension and narrative thought and this was my favorite moment:

A sound with a power
I gave to you, so
You can use it,
Abuse it,
Whatever you want,
Just call me, I'll look,
Whether I want to or not.


I have never thought seriously about what it means to give another the keys to my life. I used to wait tables for a living. I would let the customer know my name. Some invoked it. My whole economic structure was based on how I responded to them when they called my name. I never once thought about the power I was giving them. I will never look at that interaction in the same way again. Thanks?
 
 
*Coffeer*  SUGGESTIONS
 
I liked and enjoyed everything about the way you crafted your poem. Well done.

*Coffeer*  IN SUMMARY
 
"Say My Name makes us think about the power unleashed when one uses our name. What power we have if we call another by their name. Maybe that is why some people respond in ire and anger when I say their name…they don’t want me to have the power! I’ll try not to abuse it. Thanks for sharing your gift. Write On! *Smile*
 
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♫~ Kenword~♫
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