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Review of Who can say?  
Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | (4.5)
I love coming across someone who ponders, someone whose mind wanders hither and yon, much like when one traverses the internet, and wonders, "how in the world did I get here?"

Thanks for sharing your pondering. Should I be confused or enlightened?

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love how that can work, that something can inspire both a photographer and a writer.

Reading this aloud (which I always do), it flowed well. Your rhymes made sense.

Thanks for sharing your work of heart. And welcome to Writing.com.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | (4.0)
Thanks for sharing your thoughts. I do have one question, though. Are you supposed to be eating bear or drinking beer?

If it's the first, it might need a bit of explanation. If the second, you'll need to change bear to beer.

I enjoyed reading this.

Blessings,
Kenzie

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Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thanks for sharing about this wonderful women. Hers is a piece of history that every child should read, no matter their color.

It always saddens me when Black History Month comes along, and everyone revisits the same people over and over again. Of course they are important, but so are the thousands upon thousands of others.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | (5.0)
Even without going into every detail, you explained very well what someone with undiagnosed autism might have experienced. It's sad that one would have to turn to drinking for comfort that wasn't available otherwise. I know someone dear to me that had similar problems. When help was nearly available for him at 17, it was snatched away. They wanted him to wait without a friend or relative beside him in a room of 25 other potential patients with a myriad of problems, symptoms and diagnoses. Can you imagine how frightening even the thought of that was?

Thanks for sharing this work of heart.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review of Preparation  
Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | (4.5)
Is there ever a way to explain the last moments? You did it well in poetic form.

Words like yours are probably why so many of us believe in life ever after. Abandment? Forever?
That seems horrible. Living in Heaven sounds so much better.

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie

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Review of YOURS!  
Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Wonderful poem. I remember the moment when I first realized how much love Jesus had to have for us to die in such an excruciating way. Only the love of a parent can come close, and even then not very close.

Thanks for sharing. Faith matters.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review of River's End  
Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | (5.0)
I found this because another person reviewed it publically. As I read it aloud (I read all poems aloud to see how they flow and how the word choices and rhymes work), it fairly bounced.

Like the other reviewer, I am glad that your poem promises that even through sorrow, you will keep going.

Thanks for sharing. I thought about my own dad as I read this. He's been gone now since 2005.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | (5.0)
I love this,Prosperous Snow Valentine . I think that my favorite line is: I exhale
verses of gratitude and thanksgiving... it reminds me of a seminar that I attended decades ago where the leader suggested that we all learn to do "breath prayers" as we go about our daily lives.

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review of Haze  
Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | (4.5)
You followed the prompts and provided an excellent story. My son, who was in a coma, would tell you that the story is believable. His was a medically induced coma and although it only lasted 4 days, he lived a long time in his mind - marrying one of the nurses, living with one of the janitors. Obviously, he was aware of them even in a coma.

I won't say that I enjoyed your story because who can enjoy the trauma of others, even if it's fictional? But, as I said, you told the story well and with fewer words than I probably could have. *Smile* My reviews often show that I am verbose.

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings
Kenzie
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Review of Nurse not there  
Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, Bill. Welcome to Writing.com.

My son had a few stories like this about his hospital stays. Perhaps you had an angel help you?

Some suggestions:

I was hospitalities for a broken leg,
the stay was to be brief overnight.

Should be "hospitalized".


About 2 am a nurse comes into my room and ask if I needed to use the bathroom.

Here, I would change comes to came and change ask to asked. It's best to keep your verb tenses the same.

He reach and picked me up like a baby.

Should be reached.

Who Is John she ask?

Should be: "Who is John?" she asked.

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie



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Review of A Golf Hazard  
Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | (4.5)
You followed the prompt, and wrote quite an amusing poem. It flows well and the rhymes make sense. I truly enjoyed reading this aloud - something that I always do because it gives one a better idea about the flow.

Thanks for sharing your latest work of heart.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review of Tick Tock  
Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | (4.5)
What an interesting way to tell the story of the world in which we live. Time ticks away.

As I read this aloud - something I always do with poetry - if flowed well and the rhymes made sense.

Perhaps it needs an explanation of what happened between the line about man and his stock and the one about the resources being gone.

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie

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Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | (5.0)
And here is your poem, so wonderfully
and honestly made as well.

I have to admit that poetry is the one thing that I have trouble reviewing. I've been writing poetry myself since I was a mere child, about 63 years, in fact. And my favorite class as a senior in high school many long years ago was a poetry class that I took on addition to the required English class. Throughout the years, I've also had friendships with people who earned their living creating poetry and/or lyrics. But this form of creative works 9f heart are, for me, the most difficult to review.

That being said, I loved your poem. It reminded me of so many people. People who stood tall and endured.

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review of The Music Man  
Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed reading your poem. It reminded me of some epic poems that my mother read to me as a child. As often is the case with poetic works of heart, the only advice that I can offer is to always read your own poetry aloud. That allows us to see (or rather hear) for ourselves if anything needs tweaking.

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie

P.S. As a senior citizen, I can understand how playing an instrument can cause one to be able to temporarily dance like a youth again.
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Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | (4.5)
You hit the many reasons why cell phone users are irritating and intrusive. As for people saying, "I love you. Bye", I'm not sure that alone makes cell phones valuable. Frankly, the words tumble out making them seem meaningless. Besides, before cell phones, we spent more time with family, face to face, where our actions showed how much we cared.

Anyway...

If this were my work of heart, I would probably read it aloud. Doing so would probably show that there are a few too lengthy sentences. And I would put some space between paragraphs to make it easier to read.

Other than that, I have no suggestions.

Thanks for sharing and welcome to Writing.com.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thanks for the excellent reminder that in the western world, the poorest among us is richer than so many others. And the reminder that stuff is not that important.

I've always enjoyed the verse in the Bible that tells us to give thanks in all things. In all things, not because of them.

You wrote beautifully. I didn't see a thing that I would change.

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review of WHEN I LOST YOU  
Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | (5.0)
I found this on the public review page. That reviewer was correct to say that you have created a poem with the amount of syllables that you indicated. But for me, reading it aloud showed a few lines that appeared awkward. If it were mine. I would probably change at least 2, maybe 3 lines, making them 8 syllables, just because that would read aloud better. (I'm sure that I have mentioned before that a gentleman that I "met" on another writing website was a poet who supported his family writing poetry, publishing it in books, and having poetry readings. He told me that all poems should be read aloud. Doing that has shown me quite a few places in my own poetry that needed tweaking.)

Of course you can ignore that suggestion. I did love your word choices. And the topic was one most of us have probably experienced.

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review of For Granted  
Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | (5.0)
Your poetry format is quite interesting, the words impactful. Anyone who has experienced abuse (mine was spousal abuse years ago) can relate. I teared up.

I believe that it needs one quick fix.

I was to young to understand

Should be:
I was too young to understand

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review of Aura Of Authority  
Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | (5.0)
That's a fantastic story, James. I've never experienced living near a lake, but can envision it now based upon your descriptions.

Perhaps I might change this sentenc: She was on the summer league swim teams and both of her older brothers had played on the water polo team in High School, so Melanie tried out for the girls’ water polo team, too.

To me, it's a bit unwieldy. Read it aloud and you'll see that knowing where to breathe is confusing.

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review of Sweet Teeth  
Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a delightful read. I had completely forgotten that my grandmother always had a bowl of sugar cubes on the table.

At one point you used sweet tooth as the plural and another you used sweet teeth. They both sound awkward, don't they?

Thanks for brightening my day.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review of Reality of Words.  
Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | (4.5)
You are absolutely right. That is what words are and what they do. Words can cut like a knife, or soothe the soul. They can be kind or cruel. Your poem reminds us of the many kinds of words and how they can be used as weapons.

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | (4.5)
You have shared some great households hints. I like the idea of putting everything belonging in one room in a bag. Great idea... as long as someone doesn't get helpful and decide to throw the bag away.

I'm probably the only person around who hates getting into a bed that has been made. I truly do prefer the unmade bed.

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | (5.0)
You've done it again. As I read your poem aloud, I admit that I looked for something to criticize. Alas, I found nothing. It flows well and has perfect rhymes.

It's even a tad frightening. Definitely fits the "mystery" genre.

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie


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Review of Bathtub Dilemma  
Review by Kenzie
Rated: E | (5.0)
Excellent job, {user: sm1ffyj}. This is the kind of poem that is fun to read aloud. The words just bounce from your mouth. *Smile*


This is a dilemma that many of have probably had.

Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,
Kenzie
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