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I love archaeology AND food, so your work is fascinating to me. Your introduction is especially good! Or maybe baaaad.
I have to question the brother story line, though. Unless you give the reason for his interest, or list the artifacts found, it doesn't seem logical. I've dug a hole or two, so with your indulgence...
First of all, few houses have enough artifacts in the backyard to keep one busy for a year. Even historic sites have been disturbed, for everytime you put in a sewer line or a driveway, you destroy, or at least alter, the evidence of former occupations.
Secondly, unless George Washington slept there, or there is an entire Native American village, (in PA either is possible), it would not keep a widely-traveled archaeologist's interest. Researching the sites found nearby gives a good clue as to what one will uncover before lifting a shovel. After that, he could survey the entire two acres in a day or two and determine whether an excavation was needed. If he is working for a year, then there is something really cool back there. Unless, of course, he is just crazy, or lazy.
Third, and this is not as important, a grave normally leaves a sunken area as the dirt settles. However, if he wasn't looking for historic graves in the backyard, it could easily be a random undulation.
I am not trying to be harsh, I just want to help you make this as realistic as possible. The tents and goat...and being eccentric...and having little common sense? Totally sounds like an archaeologist!
A pretty smooth read, although there are a few choppy areas, where you might want to vary your sentences. Excellent descriptions--the bakery scene literally made my mouth water. I especially like the way the character gives back to the community with a class for kids.
You inserted the back story very well; it seemed natural. I can see the individuality of each character, and the settings are clear also.
A shame that my college-educated, world-traveled brother wouldn’t know that you actually need to have a baby in order to make milk!
Although not unexpected, the ending was well done, and left me eager to turn the page! I hope you will post another chapter, and write on! I'm already invested in your unique characters, and I would love to read more of the story.
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