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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi The Writing Hall
This is quite a good good start to a children's fantasy novel. I found it quite interesting and wanted to find more about it. Your flow is good , as is the command over language. Only two suggestions, I have for you. In the second line "sat" should be replaced by laid , otherwise it sounds awkward and perhaps you wanted to say "startling" instead of "starting". Overall, you did a nice job. Keep writing.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Title
A very appealing one and it instantly looked my attention.


Style and Voice
I simply love your style and the humorous note of this poem.


Word Choice
Simple but profound.


Figurative Language
Great usage of metaphors.


Rhyme and Rhythm
Creative usage of rhyme. The rhyme scheme of this poem is aabb and you have accomplished it well. Wonderful rhythm of this poem.



Structure and Form
The couplet form has been executed perfectly.


Imagery
Expressive and extraordinary.


Theme and Meaning
The theme of this poem is unique. The meaning has been conveyed to the readers nicely.


Personal Opinion
You did an excellent job with this poem. I love your work. You are a treasure to this site. Keep writing!

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Review of Uncut Diamond  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Title
The title is appealing and very appropriate for the story.


Plot
Well-constructed, based on the theme that Indian women face mostly.


Style and Voice
Simple but profound. The voice of the protagonist is stong.


Referencing
This is an emotional story based on the scenario that takes place before arranged marriages.


Scene/Setting
Saima's house


Characters
The protagonist Saima moved me as I too am an Indian girl .


Grammar
There are no mistakes in spelling, grammar or punctuation.


Just My Personal Opinion
You did a nice job with this story. Only I think that the pace of the story was a bit too fast. You could have slowed it down so that the readers could savor the emotions more. Also , I have never heard of the word "Rat-a-tat-tat" as being used for the sound of a ceiling fan. Maybe, you are right. Good job, on the whole.
Keep writing.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is really a lovely story. I am impressed by your writing expertise. You are a master at fantasy genre, I think. I hope you will be willing help me in writing such stories. Actually I am not good at writing stories. There are no mistakes in spelling, grammar or punctuation. You did an excellent job!
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Review of Broken Promises  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Title
The title is very appropriate but not something which will instantly grab your attention.


Style and Voice
Your style is unique and voice is clear and strong.


Word Choice
Simple but profound.


Figurative Language
I did not notice any usage of metaphors, similes, irony or any other figurative language.


Rhyme and Rhythm
In this sestina, rhyme is not needed. The rhythm faltered a lot . Good rhythm depends on the syllable count per line and it should be close enough. In this case it differs widely.


Structure and Form
You have executed the sestina well.


Imagery
Nothing impressive.



Theme and Meaning
The theme is common and the pangs of a broken heart is revealed.


Personal Opinion
You did a nice job with this. With a little polish, this will sparkle even more. Keep writing and posting.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is an excellent story in the fantasy and romance/love genre. Your imagination is commendable. I could not find any error. No suggestions for spelling, grammar and punctuation. The plot is well-constructed and has been successfully established. Keep up the great work.
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Review of Not so Sweet  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Title
The title is very appropriate and it urged me to read forward.


Plot
Very well -constructed plot.


Style and Voice
The style and voice is clear and strong.


Referencing
This modern-day story is about two school girls.


Scene/Setting
School


Characters
The characters Delcine and Mae are really moving.


Grammar
No suggestions for grammar, spelling and punctuation.


Just My Personal Opinion
You did a wonderful job with this story. Kudos to you. I think this should have been included in the friendship genre and not romance/love . Maybe I am wrong but I did not understand this. Overall, a great work. Keep writing!
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Title
The title is captivating and it instantly hooked my attention.


Plot
The plot has been successfully established.You did not wait too long to bring the plot/ conflict forward.


Style and Voice
The voice of the characters is clear and strong.


Referencing
This is a biographical story of a man reminiscing his school days.


Scene/Setting
The setting is clear. Your approach to sight, sound and smell was wonderful.


Characters
The protagonist really moved me. The characters are believable and your words have breathed life into them.


Grammar
No suggestions for grammar. I noticed two spelling mistakes, "ensconsed" should be "ensconced" and "diety" should be "deity".


Just My Personal Opinion
I liked this story but I thought a bit more emotions in it would make the story perfect. Just a thought. Keep writing and posting!
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Review of Reflections  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Title
The title is very catchy. It instantly grabbed my attention.


Style and Voice
Your style and voice is unique, clear and strong.


Word Choice
Splendid. Words like gossamer, rainbows, shimmer paint very colorful and vivid images.


Figurative Language
Great usage of metaphors.


Rhyme and Rhythm
The rhyme scheme employed in this villanelle has been executed perfectly. The rhythm is wonderful too.


Structure and Form
You have nailed the villanelle form.


Imagery
Pretty


Theme and Meaning
Your reflections have been portrayed beautifully.


Personal Opinion
I think you did a splendid job. No suggestions for improvement. Write on !
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Review of Like a Thief  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Title
The title is not catchy. After reading the poem I thought it was a bit ridiculous too.


Style and Voice
Nice style and a clear voice.


Word Choice
Simple.


Figurative Language
You did not use metaphors, similes or any other figurative language.


Rhyme and Rhythm
This is a free verse so no rhyme is needed. The rhythm faltered. The syllable count in each line should be close enough to maintain a perfect rhythm.


Structure and Form
Nothing to say about the form. You did it wonderfully.


Imagery
Nothing that struck me. A bit awkward to think that winter is like a thief.


Theme and Meaning
You are hoping for Spring to come and wanting a respite from the chilly winter.


Personal Opinion
A nice attempt at a poem. I thought winter creeping in slealthily a bit funny. A little polish will make this fine. Write on !
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Review of Poetic Serenity  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Title
Very catchy. I was compelled to read this.


Style and Voice
Unique and nice.


Word Choice
Great word choice. Your words pull off colorful images.


Figurative Language
Nice usage of metaphors.


Rhyme and Rhythm
This is a free verse. So no rhyme is needed. The rhythm faltered a bit. Some lines are longer than the others and this distracts. Line two has eight syllables while it jumps to twelve in line three. Also , sometimes the lines seem to rhyme but at other times they do not. In free verse it is not necessary to put the lines in a definite rhyming pattern.


Structure and Form
You did well with this free verse.


Imagery
Pretty and it evokes a lot of emotions.


Theme and Meaning
A lovely romantic poem .


Personal Opinion
You did a good job, expressing your feelings for your beloved. With a little tweaking, it will sparkle even more.
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Review of Ben's  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Title
Not catchy.


Style and Voice
Unique


Word Choice
Simple. I found nothing that stood out.


Figurative Language
No usage of similes and metaphors.


Rhyme and Rhythm
Initially, I thought the rhyme scheme was aabbc but in the stanzas that follow it was not accomplished. The rhythm faltered . Some lines are longer than the others and this distracts. The best way is to keep the syllable count as close as possible.


Structure and Form
This is a free verse. I found nothing wrong with the form.


Imagery
No vivid imagery.


Theme and Meaning
A poem about going to the restaurant .


Personal Opinion
I think it was a nice attempt. A bit more attention on the rhyme, rhythm and imagery would make it perfect. Write on !
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Title
It is not catchy because it hints at the subject matter of the story. Perhaps, a more interesting title.


Plot
The plot has come through strong and a succesfully established one. I noticed that you did not wait too long for the conflict to happen, so nice job with that. Only problem is that the story moved at a very fast pace. Before I could savor the emotions in it, it ended.


Style and Voice
Unique and nice. I did not notice any slips in your style.


Referencing
This is a biographical story , I suppose. The modern day referencing was clear at the beginning.


Scene/Setting
Did not observe any inconsistency here.


Characters
The protagonist has a clear voice and is believable though it moved me only partially. You included some distinctive features of the main character , which breathed life into this story.


Grammar
No suggestions for grammar, punctuation and spelling.


Just My Personal Opinion
Overall, you did a good job. However, this is a short short story, a bit more elaboration on the facts would make this perfect. I understand that , perhaps you had a word constraint. Write on !
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Review of Released  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Title
The title is nice and catchy. It instantly grabbed my attention.


Style and Voice
Your style and voice is unique. I did not notice any slip in your style.


Word Choice
Word choice is simple but apt .


Figurative Language
I love the last two lines of this piece
From where I was moored
And let me float away.
Nice use of metaphors.


Rhyme and Rhythm
No rhyme is needed for this free verse, the rhythm is wonderful.


Structure and Form
You did not stick to any particular form .


Imagery
The imagery does not have a fresh appeal , it is a bit cliched , I think.


Theme and Meaning
This is an emotional poem , portraying a sad truth. The theme is stong, though a bit common.


Personal Opinion
The poem is a bit short. Some more lines or stanzas and imagery would make it perfect. Overall, you did a nice job. Write on !
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a lovely non-fiction. What a painful ordeal you have gone through. Your voice and style is wonderful, the words flow beautifully. The title is catchy and inatantly grabbed my attention. There are no spelling or grammar misakes. I have no suggestions for improvement. You did a great job in relaying this true story. Write on !
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Title
The title is appropriate for the prompt and capturing.


Plot
This is a succesfully established plot and it has come through strong.


Style and Voice
The voices of the characters are clear and paint vivid pictures in the reader's mind. The characters are true to form and consistent enough.


Referencing
This is a modern-day story. The referencing was clear at the beginning. Your dialogue has been carried off well and souped up this story.


Scene/Setting
The characters are sitting under the shade of a dogwood tree. You have used sensory words involving sight. Perhaps, usage of sound and smell too would make it more apealing.


Characters
The characters are believable and they quite move me. You have incorporated a distinct trait of "Dementia" of Grandma that makes it stand out from the others.


Grammar
No suggestions on this.


Just My Personal Opinion
You did a fantastic job with this story. Though I think the ending was bit abrupt , but considering the word limit your job is commendable. Keep it up. Write on !
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Review of Forever friend.  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Title
The title is appropriate and it interested me.


Style and Voice
You have an unique style and your voice fits the subject.


Word Choice
I could not find any word that stuck out. The language is plain and simple .


Figurative Language
There is no use of metaphors and similes that spices up a poem.


Rhyme and Rhythm
This is a free verse with no rhyming. However thr rhythm faltered a bit. This depends on the number of syllables per line and theyy should be close enough and consitent.


Structure and Form
This is a free verse .


Imagery
The imagery used here is bland and cliched. It does not have a fresh appeal.


Theme and Meaning
This poem depicts the loss of your beloved friend in a sad manner. The theme is nice .


Personal Opinion
This is a nice atempt. However, I have a few suggestions for you. This is a short poem. An addition of a few more lines or stanzas would make the emotional catharsis stronger. Also, I felt the lack of enough emotions in this piece. A bit more of them would make this more poignant.
This review is intended to help you. Accept what you like and reject what you dislike.Write on !
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Review of Raven  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a nice poem about a raven. I liked it but I have a few suggestions for you. This poem is short and a bit more elaboration would have made it perfect. Perhaps, you can use a bit of imagery and relate to things which the reader will find interesting like ravens of war or ravens of death. There is lack of enough emotion here and some lines are choppy. Just a thought. This review is intended to help you. Accept what you like and reject what you dislike.
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Review of The Anniversary  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a lovely poem about the tearful anniversary caused by the death of the husband of a woman. Wars bring disaster sometimes. The rhyme scheme of the poem is abab and it is perfectly maintained in each stanza. The lines don't seem to be forced and the flow is smooth. The rhythm is wonderful too. It evokes a lot of emotions and very touching poem. Great job! By the way, I noticed an oblique or off-rhyme , in the words "back " and "plaque". This review is intended to help you. Accept what you like and reject what you dislike.
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Review of Soul  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a nice cinquain. I liked it but I have a few suggestions for you. The fourth line " Devilish but with Passion " seemed a bit awkward to me. I did not understand what you meant by this. Also, the word "Passion " should be replaced by " passion". There is again soul in the last line. It is better to avoid repeatition. Perhaps psyche or a different word whichever you may choose. This review is intended to help you. Accept what you like and reject what you dislike.
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Review of A Day in My Life  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a nice humorous poem about your son. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. The rhyme scheme of this poem is abcb and it is flawlessly maintained in each stanza. I like the free flow of words off your pen. The rhythm and meter is also wonderful. I have no suggestions for improvement.
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Review of Scrap Metal  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is an excellent story based on the prompt_ nothing, basement and rifle. This depicts your rich imagination. This is a nice comedy. I could not find any error or snag in it. There are no spelling or grammatical mistakes. No suggestions for improvement. This review is intended to help you. Accept what you like and reject what you dislike.
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Review of Baseball  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi willow,
I like this poem about baseball.This is written in the tri-fall format.You have nailed the form.So perfect with that.Only suggestion is that I felt the lack of enough emotions in this piece.Poetry is catharsis of the soul and this is not reflected here.Just a thought.Keep writing and posting.
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Review of Changes  
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a nice poem for your friend.There is quite a lot of emotions in it.This is what I liked about it.I have a few suggestions for you.While this is a free verse with no rhyming, the lines need to be organised a bit to make the flow smooth.It depends on the syllable count in each line.
For example,
Baa Baa Black Sheep,
Have you any wool?
Here the first line has four syllables while the second line has five syllables.This is an example of a poem with smooth flow.
In your poem the lines are shorter or longer than the others.This distracts a bit.
Just a thought. Keep writing and posting.
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Review of Concrete Roses  
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a nice poem.I liked the imagery in it.Your word choice is excellent.The rhyme scheme of this poem is abab and this is perfectly maintained in each stanza.I have a few suggestions for you.The lines flow off meter.This means some lines are longer than the others and this distracts a bit.You need to tighten the flow to make it more uniform.This depends on the syllable count. For example, in
"Baa Baa Black Sheep
Have you any wool?"
Here the first line is four syllables
while the second is of five syllables.This is smooth flow in poetry.
Also , in the third line of third stanza the word "keening " should be " keen ", since an adjective is used.
Just a thought.Keep writing and posting.
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