Hi Dr Guptha,
You have written a cute poem , simple in style and words, conveying both a thanks giving guesture and the great truth “And I and all the rest
Are well taken care of
By Him who knows the best.”
I am highly impressed……….. Well written………Keep it up……………..kranand
Hi “mxnasi”
I am impressed by this beautifully crafted flash fiction.
This story is about the ‘BOOK’ which had a supernatural power to send a person who touches it into a trance to make him aware what to do and where to go. He would get rid of all trouble if he goes there”; a place where no body sees,a “land that stretched farther than the eye could see”
It has been concluded well by saying “Our cover was blown. We needed to find a new place to live in without being noticed. How do you like the sound of ‘The Earth,’ son?”
The suspense of the parents and son go missing to such a place has been woven by the writer beautifully, and gradually, to peg thev reader’s attention from beginning to end.
In a nutshell it is a well written fictional flash , true to the title “New Places” in a style that has deployed a good lot of dialogue.
Keep it up;…………kranand
Hi Tim Chiu,
You have brought out in simple language ,what a project needs, and how to proceed with for a sure success. Expertise, firmness of approach, involvement of all stake holders, resources, and more so efficient management, a regular follow up are highlighted. In few simple words , it is not easy to talk of a complicated subject like Project. But you have achieved fairly good success in it. Well done,keep it up! I was impressed by the simple words to convey the message on elements of Project.
Hi Lori J,
I am impressed by the important guidance message you have conveyed through these lines.Generally I have come across advises which do not hold water and they are given to others to follow but not followed by the advisers themselves! You advise in these lines how a poem should be like:
- Concise and short words
- succinct expressions
- In direct words to impress
- Avoid “mumbo-jumbo jargon,
That’s circumlocutory and evasive.
Rather, hide the truth
In simple statements,
Requiring self-reasoning,”
- “And leading to thoughts
Helping me grasp,
A depth of understanding”
- Excel to make it unique, never heard of so far
Your poem is an exemplary masterpiece embracing all that you have advised how a poem should be.
No wonder you are a great teacher by content and by example. Hats off to you.I am carried away by the great message in simple understandable language!
I don’t find any scope left for a reviewer here! Great!............ kranand
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I was dumb struck to read your real life events, so picturesquely written. Every event that you described put an indelible impression in my mind, I felt sometimes testing tides pass serially pushing one to disheartened and disillusioned.Well a person with strong guts will win over silently getting more and more stronger to reach the altar of success. It's great you have done it! I am proud to come across a friend in you! What more can I ask for , than goad you to achieve greater and greater heights. As for the content of your writing , in one word I say its a masterly rendering ! Keep it up. With warm regards....kranand
Quite an interesting story that children get attracted, rendered in quite a simple understandable language. The picturesque description of the sharks movements is amazing! The playful movements, tickling by the human, the ball of seaweed to play are all well knit into the writing that makes the children like to crave for reading it repeatedly. A very good read for playful children!
This is about an intoxicated Walter Deere, Toronto's busiest real estate developer, having trouble relaxing, comes to fishing. He gets distracted by something moving underneath the huge mass of roots emerging from the steep wall of river bank. In a state of intoxication by several pints of Bourbon, he had left behind him a carnage which was found by a pair of game wardens, a week later.
The author keeps the reader guessing what the carnage was about, till the last. It remains a guess what it could be; could they be “maple men”
Or “the ball of snakes as he suggests in the title” or just maple shoots off the roots.
The psychological state of Walter Deere is vividly brought about by his challenge to the “swiggy colossus” through the words “…..huh...well I'm Walter Deere. I chop down green things and replace them with concrete, brick, glass and steel. And if you bother me again I'll do it right here where you live!”
To conclude, it is a very appealing story, keeps reader guessing till the end.
Keep it up “Feyre(1)”Quite a masterly written work. I was impressed .It's Well worded, neatly laid out into a rhythm of a poem. This is what great philosophy propounds if my understanding is right. Great.
Description done quite picturesque, frightening, a hint to indicate an imminent nightmarish event would take place. Setting for the event is well described. Gradual mounting of fear in you about something horrible is attempted but needs to be more intensive. There on the story plot has to be developed. It looks you have such an intention in mind. You have created a nice base to develop it into a story, or better a narrative article.Well started ,keep it up. I look forward a finished work to carryout completed review! My suggestion - you can expand into a detective thriller or end a big surprise after imagining many suspicious events! All the best ahead!.........kranand
A good attempt to describe the scene where Stella holds some thing in her hand, a glass of iced tea is splashed , would have splashed on venyl floor had it been hurled at a little more to the left.
Conversation, appears to be unnatural,doesn't appear spontaneous though tried to appear so. Thought flow is good. Title speaks of "Pattern" Its not clear what it stands for.
It cfould have been more picturesque to visualise.
Good attempt
Very NICE writing, I liked the style and the appeal of it on readers like me.My opinion is you should continue writing as your poem says.Don't get cowed down , ups and downs in life come and go, but you go on in your endeavor! Well done.!
A good guidance, any thing better could not have come on such a complex subject. From my experience on other much simpler areas for review, you have achieved full objectivity as could be achieved on a subject that depends more on the person who reads it. I mean about reader's taste for a subject on which the reviewed piece is written, the intended reader for whom its written unless it's specified by the author. Hope I made myself clear to you.
It gave me a good insight on rating, its criterea and scale. I will try to inculcate in my effots to review and help co-writers! Thank you.
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