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1,480 Public Reviews Given
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Review Style
I am honest, but kind and encouraging. I will offer ideas if something strikes me.
I'm good at...
Poetry is my first love.
Favorite Genres
relationship, romance, drama, and things which break the heart
I will not review...
I don't have the proper time to review novels, chapters, and things of that nature. Plus, they aren't my strongest suit. I'm not comfortable with critiquing items that I couldn't create, but I have a great appreciation/envy for those who can*Smile*
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Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Steph,

*Thumbsup* First, I wanted to thank you for featuring my item in your last newsletter*Bigsmile*

I chose "Chilled" because it seemed like the most ambiguous choice. Although there is a simplicity about the the title, it feels like the book I'd want to pick up just because of the title alone.

Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review of Her Smile  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (3.0)
Hi Juan,

This is a small peice, so I hope you do not mind my suggestions or comments.

I encourage you to expand on this some more. I think if more is added it will feel more like a poem, rather than a few lines from a set of lyrics.

Her smile holds my future
Her eyes my sold
I think you meant: Her eyes my soul

*Idea* I like that your piece is about something simple like a smile. Perhaps, you can discuss different types of smiles and how they affect you (smirk, grin).

I hope you continue!
Lexi


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Review by Lexi
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)

Zero0,

I gather that this is a piece in progress, so I hope you do not mind some early suggestions for the opening line.

I always enjoyed the night. It seems much more peaceful than daytime because of the hundreds of stars I see when I look up to the sky always giving me a piece of mind when I pick up after Tracy.
While I really appreciate the image this gives me, the sentence seems a bit off. Maybe consider rearranging it:
*Idea* I always enjoyed the night; it seems more peaceful than daytime. I look toward the sky and see hundreds of stars, which always gives me piece of mind when I pick up after Tracy.

*Thumbsup* I am interested in finding out what happens to Tracy, and what these accidents are, or how they occur. I would like to see you expand on the idea mentioned in the brief description. What is going to happen that causes love to turn to hatred?

Write on!
~ Lexi


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Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (3.0)
Ash,

*Note2* I think you have a good start on a short story. It sounds like a piece that can easily be expanded. I noticed a few things, so I hope you don't mind some suggestions.

*Bullet* I think you meant The Broken Prince for your title.

The moon beam across the room as Alexander gazed at his parents surrounded by their own blood.
The moon beamed across the room as Alexander gazed at his parents, surrounded

All he could do was stand there staring no pleading for help
He stood there, staring unable to plead for help; his voice was gone.

When the guards came to check on the royal family they seen Alexander
they saw Alexander

I hope you continue this piece. I want to know what happened to Alexander and why his loved ones had to die.

Write on
~ Lexi


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Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (2.5)
Iveltac,

*Thumbsup* I think it is wonderful to share your inspiration ideas with other people. It can certainly help and encourage those that may have writer's block.

Suggestions
still are well here are a few ways to find a good plot without getting frustrated.
I think it's good to sound casual as you would in speaking face-to-face, but maybe consider:
Here are a few ways that may help inspire a good plot, and save you from frustration.

hope these help any if they do comment please thank you. and also if you have any qustions just ask i can probially anwser them.
Consider revising the closing lines a bit, maybe something like:
I hope these help; if they do, please comment. Also, if you have any questions just ask; I can probably answer them. Thank you.

Write on!
~ Lexi


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Review of DUET  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (5.0)
Joy,

You paint a very beautiful picture through your words. I really like the connection your poem makes between music and relationship.

These sips like tonic in safety we take
*Up* Love these lines! Delicate yet powerful.

Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review of Autumn  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (4.5)
Connieann,

*Thumbsup* It's not easy to write something in a twenty-four hour timeframe, especially when there are restrictions and requirements. I think you have painted a vivid picture of fall through your words. I love your brief description, often that is what pulls me in to take a peek.

Write on!
~ Lexi
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Review of Animals  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (3.5)
MarvelGirl26,

*Thumbsup* I think it's always great to use things that you're passionate about as a topic. You have captured some interesting facts about elephants in this.

I hope you don't mind my suggestions listed below.

There are two species of elephant, the African and Asian elephant
There are two species of elephants, the African elephant and Asian elephant


Surprisingly, perhaps, the elephant's closest living relative is an animal called the hyrax
*Up* If this is a factual statement, then I would omit the word perhaps since that means maybe.

There are phew Asian elephants left in the wild
phew means expressing a strong reaction of relief, so I think you meant few


Keep Writing!
~ Lexi


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Review of LET ME DOWN  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (4.5)
CountryMom,

I like that this is a certain amount of heartbreak, but you have managed to put hints of a positive spin, but then turn it back to hurt again in the end. It's like trying to focus on the good things left, but still having the disappointment looming .


Thank you for entering Round 52 of "Invalid Item"  and good luck!
~ Lexi
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Review of Where We End  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (4.5)
Choconut,

*Thumbsup* I like the contrast between the two: a relationship in its prime, and then its decline.

The separation of color verses emotion works well.
*Idea* The only thing you may want to consider is changing the color of your title to match the color of the dissolving relationship, since they are both relating to the same thing.

Thank you for entering Round 52 of "Invalid Item"  and good luck!
~ Lexi
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Review of Where We End  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (4.0)
Elizjohn,

This is a sad picture on a relationship, though I think it is very true. It's almost like rewinding time to a point before having met.

Where love does not await
And hate is not yet commonplace
strong lines! I think it supports your piece quite nicely.


Thank you for entering Round 52 of "Invalid Item"  and good luck!
~ Lexi
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Review of Army of None  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (4.5)
Catdok,

*Thumbsup* Kudos for taking on villanelle poem! I think you have done a great job in the usage of the repeated lines. You have used them in a way which does not make them sound redundant.

What bolsters the heart like the blaze of the sun
nice imagery!

Thank you for entering Round 52 of "Invalid Item"  and good luck!
~Lexi
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Review of Where we end  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (4.0)
Chris,

*Thumbsup* Kudos to you for trying a specific form of poetry, that in itself is a challenge! I think that your belief in God comes through clearly in the poem. It shows the trust you have placed in Him.


Thank you for entering Round 52 of "Invalid Item"  and best of luck!
~ Lexi
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Review of In The Gray  
Review by Lexi
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Vvenom,

breathe in color
*Exclaimv* very nice was to introduce a new way of living that is outside of the daily routine.

I'll just stay here,
And hide in the gray
*Thumbsup* Love the last two lines, it ties the emotions of this poem together quite nicely.

My face bare of my mask and streaked in your vibrant shades
*Note4* I understand the meaning behind this. Consider maybe using a phrase that is a bit softer sounding:
*Idea* My unmasked face brushed by your vibrant shades


Thank you for entering Round 52 of "Invalid Item"  and good luck!
~ Lexi
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Review of Beauty of Age  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (4.0)
Druid,


*Thumbsup* I like the positive message that your poem sends. Our imperfections are what makes us different from one an other, and there is definitely beauty in that.

*Bullet* One thing I noticed: I"ve wrinkles
I've

Write On!
~ Lexi


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Review of The musician  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (4.0)
Sari,

*Thumbsup* I think you have done a beautiful job in describing what music is to you and how it makes you feel. I think that this could pertain to the literal sense, or be a spoken metaphor for something such as love in a relationship.

You say, Telling me which note to play as my fingers move effortlessly, already knowing the way

*Idea* Maybe consider:
My fingers move effortlessly, already knowing the way, telling me which notes to play
*Bullet* I think that it flows better when it's rearranged in that order, but that is only a suggestion.

It left me wanting to read more. Perhaps, try to expand a bit more. Maybe, touch base on what is, or feels like once lost in the music *Wink*

Write on!
Lexi
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Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (3.0)
S.L.,

I think that you touch base on things that are important to learn. It is better to learn by someone's actions than by the words they speak, which you show here.

I hope you don't mind a few suggestions.

be greatful
*Bulletb* grateful
down to much
*Bulletb* too much

You may wish to consider using different line breaks such as:
There's always someone out there who could use a helping hand, so be greatful for what's given, and humble when you demand.
Or if you're feeling down, there are many things to do. There's just one life, no second chance, how you live is up to you.

There's always someone out there who could use a helping hand,
so be grateful for what's given, and humble when you demand.
Or if you're feeling down, there are many things to do.
There's just one life, no second chance, how you live is up to you.

Keep Writing! You have some valuable lessons to share through your writing.

Thank you for entering Round 49 of "Invalid Item"  and best of luck to you!
~ Lexi
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Review of SPIRIT RUSH  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (5.0)
CountryMom,

This is absolutely heartbreaking, completely pulled my heart-strings. I can imagine nothing being harder than to have to watch your daughter fight through a battle such as this. I am truly sorry for your loss. Her memory lives on through you, your family, and your words.

Thank you for entering "Invalid Item"  and best of luck!
~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (4.5)
Magoo,

*Thumbsup* This is a great lighthearted and adorable idea. Your lines flow smoothly and made me smile. You've written something quite enjoyable, no matter the reader's age. Nice work!


Thank you for entering "Invalid Item"  and best of luck,
~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (5.0)
Maryann,

I love that you can request wishes for others through this idea.
I hope that you have much success, and many donations because of this idea, which also promotes more reviewing*Smile*

*Thumbsup* It appears that you're staying on top of the requests and wishes promptly.

~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (4.0)
Murc,

Your title caught my attention*Smile*

*Thumbsup* Your poem shows how someone new can change the way you feel when you believe love has defeated you. I don't know if you meant anything by the color changes, but I thought it added a nice progression to the piece. Black being the void you were in, purple for the hope coming alive, blue for the sense of calmness and knowing that the time together was getting near, and red for the blossomed love. Good work there, even if not intended.

Thank you for entering "Invalid Item"  and best of luck,
~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (4.0)
Cherry Mac,

Your words present us with a vivid picture of a romantic day. I really like that you chose to be descriptive through your words. I hope you don't mind me offering a few suggestions.

In the second stanza, you use a form of melody twice.
A melody entranced
The melodious tones
*Bullet* Consider using something like harmonious tones, or maybe mellifluous tones

Sunbeams did dance and shine
*Bullet* Since this is free verse, consider sunbeams danced instead of sunbeams did dance. It flows a bit smoother.

All in all, I think you did a good job in showing us a romantic tale*Smile*

Thank you for entering "Invalid Item"  and best of luck!
~ Lexi
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Review of Seclusion  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (4.0)
NathaniaLynn,

Your poem expresses young love, shyness, and the fear of rejection very nicely. I do have few suggestions to offer, so I hope you don't mind.

I stay silent for fear,
For fear that you would choose not to hear.

*Idea* Possibly consider something like...

I stay silent in fear,
frightened it's my words you won't hear.

Thank you for entering "Invalid Item"  and best of luck!
~ Lexi
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Review of Feathers  
Review by Lexi
Rated: E | (4.5)
A Powell,

I know your short description states that this is about a feather quill, but I see your words spoken used as a metaphor for a relationship.

*Thumbsup* The last two lines are strong and tie it together! It shows a flaunting of things that's offered, but never truly given.


Thank you for entering "Invalid Item"  and best of luck!
~ Lexi
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Review by Lexi
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Turtlemoon,

Your words speak about loving someone from afar. I think you've done a good job in showing longing in this piece.

*Thumbsup* butterflies and dragonflies taunt our initial greet
Good way to show the nervousness and anticipation through imagery!

Thank you for entering "Invalid Item"  and best of luck!
~ Lexi
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