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This is your third review of four that you have won with your auction prize that you have won. I love this because it is short sweet simple. You can see the imagery as you read this too. Many of us suffer from weight gain and the lack of confidence. Keep On Writing!!
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This is the second review of four from your auction prize you won. I have to say that this is a beautiful poem that you have wrote. I love the imageery in this from the descriptions of the clouds as they change from clear to stormy clouds.
AS I can see there are no grammatical errors. As I read this, the words and pauses all flowed naturally as you read this poem. I will be back after I am done with all my other obligations to review more of your port! Keep On Writing! Keep On helping with Angel Army!
First of all, Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you have had it easy getting around the site. If you need any help there are many groups around here that help out newbies! I would reccomend "Noticing Newbies" where you can have you work reviewed! I also would recommend "I Remember When Group" and "Angel Army"! Noticing Newbies Newsletter is very helpful too!
This is the first of three reivews that were gifted to you from you best friend and fellow member mars! The campfire is a cool idea to do as an on going poem! Out of all the campfires that I have reviewed, think this is the first time I have seen a poetry campfire! The poem has so much description in it with lots of imagery! All the participants of this campfire have vivid descriptive ideas for this to keep going. I have to say that it does take time to keep a poem going with a group. You and your friends have nailed on the spot! I hope to visit back more often to see what has been added! This Campfire ROCKS!! Keep On Writing!
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I think that you have an awesome newsletter! I will definitely be reviewing Black Willow's port since it is the port of the month! I think that you have a great newsletter that everyone needs to read!!! I will try to refer otherz to want to read this! I will be adding my contests next month if they end going well! Keep On HElping OThers!!!
First of all, Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you have had it easy getting around the site. If you need any help there are many groups around here that help out newbies! I would reccomend "Noticing Newbies" where you can have you work reviewed! I also would recommend "I Remember When Group" and "Angel Army"! Noticing Newbies Newsletter is very helpful too!
My step mom is one of the biggest Stephen King Freaks! I know most of these and still second guessed them. Go figure I would be the onely who would click "Ft.Wayne, IN" on for where is was born, since I lived there for 7 years! hehe! Thinking that I really did hear that! That tells you how horrible my memory is! YOu did an awesome job on this quiz! Where did Ft. Wayne,IN come from as an answer? Just wondering since I saw that! Keep ON Quizzing every one!!
First of all, Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you have had it easy getting around the site. If you need any help there are many groups around here that help out newbies! I would reccomend "Noticing Newbies" where you can have you work reviewed! I also would recommend "I Remember When Group" and "Angel Army"! Noticing Newbies Newsletter is very helpful too!
First of all, I want to thank you for bidding on my donation for the auction I was in. I hope that my reviews will help in many ways! After reading this I had to giggle. I love the description from of life with the "clown." Using "gum" to describe your emotions! I also giggled at this to!
I have only a few suggestions with the poem. One, I would add more of comical description in this since you are using "clown" and "chewing gum" in this! I would add more imagery so that you can see more of the melody of autumn. I am sure that this may be more descriptive when it is not in English, so I understand the differences in words.
Thank you for letting me get a chance to read this! You did a great job with writing in this in english! Keep On Writing!!!
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I have to say this poem really lets you know how much the word "Love" is really abused. Your descritptions of the words in this and the imagery from the poem is great! I think that you have nailed the topic right on!
I think that everyone does at one time really think that they do love the person that they are saying "I Love You" to the one they really do love. Then slowly they realize that they really do not mean it. I believe that they do not want to hurt the person they are telling this too!
You have convinced me that others still say this without meaning it! I hate to see young teens, who fall for that word! Most of them end up coming out with more than lost girl or boyfriend! Even as adults we fall for that word, and say that we are not going to do it and still do!
I really appreciate you writing this! Keep On Writintg!
First of all, Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you have had it easy getting around the site. If you need any help there are many groups around here that help out newbies! I would reccomend "Noticing Newbies" where you can have you work reviewed! I also would recommend "I Remember When Group" and "Angel Army"! Noticing Newbies Newsletter is very helpful too!
I think at first I thought was going to be a true "ghost writer" advertising! Then as I read I was laughing becuase it was cute how you said that you were not "casper" cartoonish like! That to me was the best part of the item. Honestly, I would definitely hire you as my "ghost" writer! Keep On Writing!!
First of all, Welcome to Writing.Com! I hope you have had it easy getting around the site. If you need any help there are many groups around here that help out newbies! I would reccomend "Noticing Newbies" where you can have you work reviewed! I also would recommend "I Remember When Group" and "Angel Army"! Noticing Newbies Newsletter is very helpful too!
Honestly, I am not sure what this piece is about. I think that I could picture the paper what you were trying to show how 911 had killed so many and the whole inccident is just blended like words are in the paper! Please let me know if that is right! I hope to see more of you work when yuo add more to your port! Keep On Writing!!
Judity, this was a really sweet story! Unfornately with my girls, they have already had their first kisses in kindergarden! Of course I had to catch them in the act...It was so cute becuase the little boy goes it was her fault!hehe!! These are the best memories to remember. Now for my first kiss , I would have to say it was when I was 17! Being a tomboy, I Did not believe in doing girly things! I had my first boyfriend then! Keep On writing!!! Love reading your stories!!!
I have to tell you that this is an awesome way to show that everyone in god's eyes are equal to equal to each other! I love the imagery in this with the descriptions! I could picture it perfectly! I hope to visit your port more! I am really curious to read more of your work! I think that you have hit that as an awesome theme. Today with the war, religion is a problem in USA and the Middle east! I really do love this poem how you have nailed that the water will be give you eternal Life!! I hope to be back to your port!
Keep On Writing!!!!!! Keep On Thinking of Others!!!!
Wow, this has left me with out words! I think that you did an awesome job on the imagery in this! I could see all the others trying to stone this women for adultry and at the end the "god" of the religion as them if anyone there was sin free! You could picture this with the puublic slowly leaving because they could not stand there and say that they were sin free! Awesome Poem!!! I will be back to your port to read more!!! Keep On writing!!! I am glad to see you became a member of WDC!! Awesome newbie to read!!!
After reading the description, of this play script and reading this item I do not know what to say about the whole thing. I know that the Bagger made a great point "that you can hear everything" in the monitors is true. I am just not sure what else to talk about besides the ending of the piece.
The last part of this from the time the father could not get into the baby's nusery to the end of the script was confusing. I think that the script was a little confusing when the father was going back in forth to the baby's nursery trying to figure who was in there.
I think that having the mom rest the whole time in between this was not real perspective of a mother going through post partum depression. I figuring that you are trying to describe that through this. The reason why I am asking this, I have suffered from the post-partum psychosis. I hope that if this is what you are writing from that you please explore the tooic more and trying to add more to this from research!
Keep On Writing!!! I see potential in this and hope that I can read this when you have added more to it!
I just have to tell you after reading this, I need to get me some chocolate! I could taste every piece of chocolate you described! Honestly you made even like the chocolates that I would never eat!!! I think that the little silver box was described perfectly as I was reading this! You always have awesome imagery in your work!!! I want that box of candly!!! Keep On Writing!!!
Judity, I think that this was a great way to Thank everyone who has left good or bad feedback for reviewing your work. Ihave to admit when I Do review others work I do it on the content and the creativeness of the piece. I will admit that when I do my writing, that I still have mistakes even after using the spell check! I do have a book to use but I do not take the time get it out look at. I think that I will be doing that more with my writing! I want to thank you for writing about that this in your Thank you note. Newbies should not be discourage from negative feedback, cause all feedback helps everyone no matter what! Keep On Helping!
Judity you did a wonderful job on this monologue! I am glad to see more abnout your family. I have read this a few other times to look at other pieces you have wrote. I am glad that I took the time to get to know you! I enjoyed reading about you family! I also love the fact that you have cats and possums. I love reading about the Forensic team, and then reading your CSI books on here too! I will be back to read more of your shorts stories. Keep On Writing!!
I have to say that the imagery in this is awesome!!! I love the descriptions of the characters were perfect. When I read this piece the words flowed with the natural pause. Nothing that sounded ackward.
I did have one problem, i did not know who or what Fey is. I do not normally read fantasy of any kind! I will definitely have to look at the link that you have on there to learn of this character! I am glad that you have that there. I will be back at your port to visit again!!! Keep On Writing!!!
I have to say this is a really cute way to talk about the tooth fairy! I really love this! I could picture the imagery perfectly as I was reading it!! I could really picture the tooth angel as Tim climbed out of the crib. Your descriptions really made a great picture as you are reading the piece! I will be stopping by your port to read more!! Keep On Writing!!!
Kiya, You have came up with a great way to have others improve on their reviewing plus give feedback to newbies, oldies, and everyone else too! This is also great way to meet others who want to be angels to help others out! Since i am recording my reviews in here, I have noticed that I try to do atleast 6 a day. If i can get more, I am doing great. But I love reviewing to help others out!! As I love to get my feedback, so that I can improve on everything I need to do!! Keep On Coming up with ideas to help!! WDC must have thought you were helpful here too with your pretty blue case!!! I am glad to he part of the Angel Army!!!!
Sherri this is a wonderful poem for you mom at Christmas. I know how hard the holidays to be with out your love ones. I have been there, it is not cool. I love the imaagery in this poem. I cam see that you are thinking about your mother! I hope to read more in your port! Keep On Writing!
Kiya, You have came up with another way to have all the Angels come and have a great way to hang out and have fun!! You definitely deserve that wonderful awardicon for this. I have enjoyed being an angel and hanging out here too! I can wait to get to everyone of the Angels!!! Keep on Helping out WDC members!!!
This is a really cute story that is hilarious. I Really like the imagery that this paints as you are reading this with all the animals and the snow fight. I do see that you need to try to center the poem. As you are reading it, the lines do not go straight down. May have been from taking it from a word documnet and pasting it on to wdc format. I think that you have done a great job and hope that you keep on writing! Keep On Writing!!!
This is a great story. I love the descriptions through out the story. The imagery in this is awesome. I really love how Mary-lynn was able to to trust her Nanna with all her heart. Abby was able to feel at home at Marta house. I love how Mary-Lynn was told the proper story of Jesus and Santa Clause. I think that really brought Nanna and Mary-lynn closer as the story was told. I love how Mary-Lynn was so into the Christmas lights. I think that her climbing to the roof to see Santa added just the right touch of suspense. Then to come home to Nanna house with all the lights and Santa on their roof too made a great ending! So she now knows that Santa has came to their house too!!
I think that this story has potential. I think that this story has started off really slow. The imagery in here is good, but could be better with the more descriptions and maybe more detail at the beginning of the story. I think that some of the long paragraphs could be put into more than one paragraph. I think that this has potential to become a great story! Keep On Writing!
I do like the imagery in your poem. I have to say though as you read the poem, that this is hard to read due to the flow of the natural pauses as you read this.
I am not sure if you are doing a rhyming pattern or not. Some of the lines were rhyming and some were not so I could not tell if there was a rhyming pattern. I do like the last stanza how you can picture this stanza. I hope to read this again and review it for you. Keep On Writing!
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