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Review of Love Me Tender  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you so much for setting this up for us, Tina Stone ; I really enjoyed it! I especially love the Scriptural background to your word choices. Thanks again!
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Thanks for setting up this puzzle for us, Lilli! You came up with a few words I haven't seen in ages: hamadryas, tamarin, etc. This was fun - thanks again!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Means. Motive. Opportunity. Iffy friends, at best; railways to disaster-in-waiting most times. Great story, Nick. I loved how you wove in the backstory--getting caught and lectured by "the old whingers", Steve's dad and how he shared his knowledge (and, thereby, becoming unknowingly complicit in your random acts of fun *BigSmile*), etc. From my own childhood escapades, I certainly know the feeling of having gotten away with something; unfortunately, I'm also familiar with the other side of the coin. Thanks for sharing this with us!
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Review of bible knowledge  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Well, some of these took a little research, and a format malfunction caused a little confusion, but I got it done! Thanks for setting it up for us!
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Review of Lake Michigan  
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a beautiful story, and what a wonderful memory for you and your family. I've stood on the shores of Lake Ontario and Lake Erie, but I've only seen Lake Michigan from the highway. Thanks for sharing this bit of family history with us, and have a wonderful evening.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Well, I knew some of these and was able to figure out a couple more via crossing letters, but Wikipedia had to help me out with more than a few. Regarding 16 Down, I would have thought the clue would read something like "Which animal do Japanese not consider as good luck?", but I could be mistaken. At any rate, I enjoyed your puzzle. Thanks for sharing it!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
You do a wonderful job detailing some of Braxten's behaviors and triggers. His being mostly non-verbal absolutely makes it difficult for you and his family to interact with him in ways that lift him up and encourage him, but also to instill even basic behaviors (e.g. "Thank you"). It's fantastic that he's incorporating that learning into his life, and I know it just has to be one of the most heartwarming things you could ever experience to have him tell you "Wuv you", prompted or not. Thank for sharing this glimpse in your relationship with your special lil man.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I hope this article has gotten a lot of views, and that each viewer read all the way to the end (those subject to U.S. tax laws, anyway). I used to work Customer Service in the Self-Directed IRA department at a financial services company, and I reviewed the basics with current and prospective clients on a daily basis. More than a few of them would benefit from your article.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Thanks for the puzzle! I never heard of Cut Rock; maybe it has another name or is more a regional treat. Anyway, it was fun looking. Thanks again!
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Review of Contest Entries  
for entry "Amazing
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
You did a fine job taking on an unusual challenge. It's been said it's easier to write a sentence with a vowel in Czech, than it is to write one in English without an 'e'. I'm not sure about the first part, but the latter part is certainly difficult. I liked the basic visuals of flora and fauna, and the simple pleasures that can be gained by enjoying them. Keep on writing!

[suggestion sent under separate cover]
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for entry "Low Batteries
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Well! I would not want to read this on a dark and stormy night, nor after watching any of a particular genre of movies! For me, you built and maintained the suspense nicely while keeping to the central theme of the story: the search for batteries. After what I'm sure would be far too short a time after some disaster, they would, indeed, be in short supply; finding more would become quite difficult. Thanks for sharing this with us, and keep on writing!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Thank you for your timely creation! Some of the words were a lot easier to find than others (after all, how many English words begin with Q?). It's always entertaining to zip around the randomly lettered square, trying to find the next word on the list without getting suckered into an almost-match. Thanks again!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Had I paid more attention to the links you supplied (especially the third one), solving this would have been much easier. I enjoyed the challenge of researching the answers, though, so thanks for creating and sharing it with us! Have a wonderful day!
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Rated: E | (4.0)
It's interesting to me that fanfic has also been chosen, above and beyond the others. I think it's a good choice for someone who has great interest in and, therefore, knowledge of a specific book / movie/ TV series. I, myself, am a Star Trek fan and have greatly enjoyed the efforts of various writers not actually associated with the franchise in some way. Thanks for posting this poll. I hope the final results are useful to you in some way.
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Review of A Fairy Tale  
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Bats*
Greetings to you, Norman! My name's Soldier_Mike 🎺. I promise that I am the true, the original, the one and only Soldier_Mike, and not some imposter appearing by virtue of Polyjuice Potion *BeakerV* (may I be thrown into the deepest dungeon of Azkaban, if I am lying). This review is part of my participation as a member of Slytherin House in Round Three at Harry Potter and the Writers' Spell {item:2228853}. This review is only intended to let you know I read your poem and to give you an idea of what I liked, what I thought needed improvement, and my overall view of your poem. The comments are just my opinion, so you are free to accept, modify or discard them as you deem fit. My review is intended to be encouraging and helpful; nothing is intended to be hurtful in any way.

Visual setup. I like the way you centered the text; the line-by-line ebb and flow kind of guides the eye along. The font size makes it easy to read, and the double-spacing clearly separates the stanzas.

Clarity. The tale was easy to follow, and you did a great job following the rhyme scheme. You did a good job with the meter, too, which can sometimes be a real challenge.

What caught my eye / attention? It seems the love the king and queen had for each other helped them stay alive. The king was grievously wounded, and the queen could easily have given in to despair.

What did I like best? I always like it, when "the bad guy" gets his, so I enjoyed it when the queen's sharp eye pierced the earl's disguise!

What would I change? Just for meter and repetition's sake--and remember, this is just me--I would change the 5th & 6th stanzas to "...The queen was locked inside a room / confined against her will / A trusted earl imprisoned her...". There are a couple of other spots that could be tweaked, maybe; I'd be more than glad to discuss them off-line, if you wish. I'm neither a world-class poet or reviewer, so it's all up to you.

Summing up. I enjoyed your tale of intrigue at court, especially as justice triumphed in the end!

Enjoy the rest of your day and...WRITE ON!
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Review of THE ORICALE  
Rated: E | (4.0)
*Candycorn*
Greetings to you, Robert Hayes! I promise that I am the true, the original, the one and only Soldier_Mike 🎺, and not some imposter appearing by virtue of Polyjuice Potion *BeakerV* (may I be thrown into the deepest dungeon of Azkaban, if I am lying). This review is part of my participation as a member of Slytherin House in Round Three at Harry Potter and the Writers' Spell {item:2228853}. This review is only intended to let you know I read your poem and to give you an idea of what I liked, what I thought needed improvement, and my overall view of your poem. The comments are just my opinion, so you are free to accept, modify or discard them as you deem fit. My review is intended to be encouraging and helpful; nothing is intended to be hurtful in any way.

Visual setup. You lead off with underlined boldness - nice. I like the way the lines weave in and out, none overlong or too short, flowing from beginning to end.

Clarity. Your narrative flowed naturally from beginning to end, and you did a great job following the rhyme scheme. You also did a good job with the meter, something that can be hard to do.

What caught my eye / attention? Your heroine reminds me a bit of the Sorceress in The Scorpion King. She, too, was trapped by her gift.

What did I like best? I like that, at the end, she was able to pursue her own life and was no longer in bondage to the king.

What would I change? I would edit the item's title to match the title in the text (I've had to do this more than once in my own writing). The following suggestions are aimed at aiding the meter in a few places. I would a) remove the "to" in Line 4, b) use the contraction "she'll" in Line 8, c) use "'mongst" in Line 13, d) change "there" to "their" in Line 16, e) maybe use "In the village you'll find a home" in Line 32, and f) use the contraction "you're" in the last line. Again - you needn't adopt any of these suggestions. I know you worked hard to make this flow, and I think these changes could help with that.

Summing up. This is a nice poem that tells the story of a priestess - an oracle - and how she goes from being held captive to being in control of her own life.

Enjoy the rest of your day and...WRITE ON!
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Review of LADA  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I enjoyed your story, WakeUpAndLive~No cig for me!. It reminded me of a fellow soldier from my time in West Berlin who also owned a Lada, as well as another friend who owned a Zhiguli (a Russian car which, interestingly enough, was exported as a Lada). I like how you described how basic your car was, and why you preferred it to other brands. It's wonderful, that you could leave your cares behind when you were behind the wheel of your Lada. Being able to go where you want, when you want, is real freedom. It's very unfortunate about the Belgium part. Having to part with a favorite car is bad enough; having to abandon it is just painful. Thanks for sharing your story!
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Review of Lost  
Rated: E | (4.0)
I liked your story. If it wasn't for the driver being "...a long way from nowhere and getting there fast.", I'd peg the location as some big city with the bad rep of being mean to tourists, and the woman as one of its denizens. Sounds like the companion's in no pain, although coherent enough to come up with some clever rhyming. As it is, it's too bad you missed the contest deadline.
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
This is hilarious! It is certainly something you might hear from a child and, given the right question, would not at all have been a surprising answer on Art Linkletter's old TV show, Kids Say The Darndest Things!. Thanks for sharing this little story with us!
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Review of 2938: Rigel  
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
This looks to be a reasonable start to an interesting story about space travel in the (apparently) distant future. Sadly, the slave trade seems to be alive and well, and spread throughout the galaxy. The security officer becomes aware of some sort of malfunction and finds that one of child slaves has left her pod far too early, which makes an obvious lead-in to the next chapter.
You may want to review the chapter for grammar and punctuation errors. There aren't a lot of them, but they do present a bit of a challenge to your readers, and you want to avoid that, if you can.
Good luck with the rest of your story, and thanks for sharing!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
You make excellent points, Jeff. I admit to having initially skipped to the formatted paragraph, but I did go back up and read the original paragraph for content. Thank you, too, for the information regarding line and paragraph spacing; I didn't know, they were adjustable.
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Review of TEENAGE SUICIDE  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is a wonderful resource, Joy. Thank you so much for putting it together.
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Review of Shock  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi, Miss Lysithea! I think you did a fine job describing the chaos and numbness that comes with a shock like that. It's hard enough to describe feelings, but to capture your own while being overwhelmed by them is nearly impossible. Good job!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
The ideas presented here are great food for thought. Thank you so much for sharing!
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello, Dave! I'm not the world's best writer--let alone, the best one here at WDC--but here is some feedback regarding this item from your Review Request.

First Impressions: Mandated "True Confessions" in a prison setting? This could get very interesting! Cody's nervousness regarding keeping secrets, while telling enough to get Father Mike's stamp of approval, lets us know there's going to be some uncomfortable squirming involved. I can certainly identify with him regarding being in the spotlight, too.

Grammar/Spelling/Character/Dialogue (Picky Stuff): In the 2nd line, add a comma between 'apartment' and 'hiding', so that it reads "...basement apartment, hiding...". In the paragraph before the flashback starts, you should move the 2nd apostrophe so that the line reads "...'Hi, it's nice to meet you' sort of way." Use a Find/Replace to make sure all references say "Fond du Lac" (one of them is only 'Fon').

Setting: "...chairs are bolted to the floor..." is about all the detail needed to set the prison chapel scene. Although most folks have been to a carnival-type event, it would be nice to have a few more details concerning the horse show aspect (sounds and smells, perhaps). For example, I live in Colorado--the 'Wild West'--but have never been to a rodeo, and you can only learn so much from TV and movies.

Overall: The last two lines confirm the preliminary nature of this piece, making this a nice intro to the rest of the story.


Remember that these are my personal thoughts and no offense is meant by any criticism offered.

Thanks for sharing!

Soldier_Mike 🎺
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