|Hello, Dave! I'm not the world's best writer--let alone, the best one here at WDC--but here is some feedback regarding this item from your Review Request.
First Impressions: Mandated "True Confessions" in a prison setting? This could get very interesting! Cody's nervousness regarding keeping secrets, while telling enough to get Father Mike's stamp of approval, lets us know there's going to be some uncomfortable squirming involved. I can certainly identify with him regarding being in the spotlight, too.
Grammar/Spelling/Character/Dialogue (Picky Stuff): In the 2nd line, add a comma between 'apartment' and 'hiding', so that it reads "...basement apartment, hiding...". In the paragraph before the flashback starts, you should move the 2nd apostrophe so that the line reads "...'Hi, it's nice to meet you' sort of way." Use a Find/Replace to make sure all references say "Fond du Lac" (one of them is only 'Fon').
Setting: "...chairs are bolted to the floor..." is about all the detail needed to set the prison chapel scene. Although most folks have been to a carnival-type event, it would be nice to have a few more details concerning the horse show aspect (sounds and smells, perhaps). For example, I live in Colorado--the 'Wild West'--but have never been to a rodeo, and you can only learn so much from TV and movies.
Overall: The last two lines confirm the preliminary nature of this piece, making this a nice intro to the rest of the story.
Remember that these are my personal thoughts and no offense is meant by any criticism offered.
Thanks for sharing!