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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
An "I Write in 2024"  review.

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Review of A Narrow Escape.  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (3.5)
It's a good thing for Sergeant Steve that he pays attention to those little premonitions, especially handy that he has the expertise to literally defuse the situation, and more than fortunate his Leatherman tool was present for duty in its holster. Congrats on the 1st Place showing in what was a really fun contest!

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Review of Priorities  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This poem's title caught my eye, so I thought I'd take a look and, perhaps, make a comment or two. The title tells me you are aware that some things are more important than others in at least one respect, and deserve to be closer to the top of your to-do list. The Brief Description tells me you're aware that there may be times when at least two such priorities appear to be equally weighted, so you must decide which to tackle first. This can be a very difficult decision to make.

Maybe I'm reading way too much into this, but it seems to me the flies represent the lesser priorities distracting you from the main issue - or maybe not. That's the great thing about poetry; it lends itself well to interpretation. Thanks for sharing this with us.

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Review of Celtic Curses  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello! I found this poem in your port and thought to make a comment or two. I like the abcb rhyme scheme you employed; it really helps the words flow along. I also like the poem's message, the admonition to beware of crossing a Celtic person, in order to avoid being cursed (although the humor imparted by the rhyme scheme softens the threat a bit).

I have one suggestion regarding the word-flow in the last line of the 4th stanza. I could be reading it wrong, but the wording just seems a little off. I thought perhaps changing it to "Our curses sometimes wreak!" might work better, but it's just a thought.

Again, I liked your poem and I want to thank you for sharing it.

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Review of Overt  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
A direct-report poem from back when the coronavirus was seemingly everywhere and we heard all too often about people dying from it. The twenty-four syllables you used were more than up to the challenge of conveying the outrageous act and its completely warranted consequences. Thanks for writing and sharing this with us.

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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.5)
There's no particular rhyme or rhythm, but that doesn't hold back the message of the poem. Properly employed, words can capture our imagination and hold us spellbound, spur us to action or bring us to tears. Children recognize them, before they know how to use them, mobs are too wrapped up in their own rhetoric to listen to anyone else, and words only enhance the glance and touch of the one we love.
Thank you for sharing this.

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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I've been to and through Dallas more than a few times, but probably only once through the western half of that Texas metroplex. It's nice that you have so many fond memories of your time growing up there, and I enjoyed reading the little glimpses into what you did, and where you did it, back in your younger days. You are rightfully proud of the contributions your parents made to their community.
Thanks for sharing this with us!

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Review of Less Than a Month  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Your poem cleverly covers the busyness of the last two months of the year, as well as some of the things that can go wrong (e.g. a burnt Thanksgiving turkey, insufficient wrapping paper and tape for all those Christmas presents, etc.). Fortunately, all the holiday craziness will come to an end and then you can relax, right? Not exactly, as you point out. There are all kinds of activities available here on site, and you know you're going to get caught up in them.

I like the accompanying emoticons, as they add a bit of color and flavor to their respective stanzas. I also like the way your rhymes and rhythms flow along; it makes for enjoyable reading. Thanks for sharing this!


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Review of BAR HARBOR, MAINE  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a lovely description of the Bar Harbor, Maine area. The poem covers some of the fall and winter activities, and the natural features that make them possible. It also covers the types of winter clothing worn to keep the residents warm and dry, and the terrain and weather that make them necessary.

It's easy to "see" the harshness of the area, as well as its beauty, so I have no suggestions or corrections. Thanks for sharing it with us!

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Review of Amy’s story  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (2.5)
I would have to say this is technically not a Self Help story, although Amy did help herself out of a dangerous situation. We see Amy assaulted and kidnapped by her boyfriend, Tony, who claims she has cheated on him, but we never find out if this is true. Amy's friend, Mike, rescues her, but there is a tragic ending.

I have a couple of suggestions and one solid recommendation, if I may. I might be wrong, but it looks like you wrote this in one continuous burst, like during a NaNoWriMo Word Sprint; you have a story, but everything is jammed together. When you write, take a little time to separate the paragraphs and bits of dialogue and, if you can, check your punctuation and spelling (commas, words that should be capitalized, and so on). This will make your items much easier to read and your stories easier to follow.

You should probably check out the site's "Content Rating System (CRS)"  when assigning a rating to an item. Due to the violent content, this one should be rated at least 18+. The Moderators and Senior Moderators "roam the halls" looking for issues like this. With as many of us as there are, and with as many items as we all create, they can't find everything. I happened to find this, though, so it can happen.

I don't mean to discourage you. You can obviously tell a story, so keep it up. You just need to keep a few things in mind to make them the best they can be!

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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
If you never wrote anything for someone else to read before, I'm not going to pick at little things. I would like to make one suggestion, though, if you don't mind.

To make your item easier to read, separate your points by a blank line (like I just did). For instance, a blank line after "Here is couple problems", "Even most doctors have no clue about nutrition.", and "People look at their worth thru subscribtions which is craziest thing ever." would break up the text a little and make it look nicer on the page and easier to follow.

As far as your piece is concerned, you make some good points. A lot of people don't think about eating healthy, when they could, and many people go overboard with the way they use social media. Thanks for sharing this.

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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Your poem's title and the short description caught my eye. I'm actually doing a little thinking at the moment regarding storytelling using pen and paper versus electronic devices, so this short poem really spoke to me. I hope the poem's last three words don't reflect reality, and that you really do share at least some of your stories.

You chose the Fibonacci form for your poem, a form I also enjoy using from time to time. You did it well, and also centered the text for a little additional / extra flair - nice!

Thank you for sharing this with us.

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Review of Pen To Paper  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I couldn't agree with you more; writing something by hand is a more expressive act than using technology. There is just something special about putting pen to paper and letting a bit of yourself flow through. It is certainly possible to get the same meaning across via computer or text message, but the background emotion of it is missing. No matter how hard you stab at your keyboard, the characters appear exactly the same as if you had barely tapped them. I have no doubt your feelings can be read right along with your words, and am fairly certain a handwriting analysis expert would agree.

I have no suggestions for improvement - the piece makes your feelings clear. I wonder, though, what you think about the interface between technology and handwriting, of touchscreen software that actually captures your handwriting across the screen? I refer, of course, to advanced software, not just the little text boxes used in Point of Sale devices and such for just a signature. It is an interesting situation, I think.

Thank you for sharing this.


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Review of The Escape  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (3.5)
The item's description - as well as her companion, T-Bear - tell us Eleanor is a young girl, but there's no clue to why she's on the run. While it's most likely she's running from home, she could also have been at school or at a friend's house. We also don't know whose hand touched her shoulder. For her sake, we can only hope it's one of her parents or a friendly neighbor.
While even this short text can certainly get ones heart pounding, it could easily grow into a full-fledged tale of terror. Something to consider. Thanks for sharing it with us.

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Review of Claimed  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Poor Elson! She was certain she had finally found the strength to beat back depression's clutches, only to find out that she needed some outside help after all. Your description of her depression finally overcoming her is indeed horrific. One can only hope she was somehow able to make it back to the bathroom and the salvation of her medication.
Thank you for sharing this dark tale.

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Review of Tornado Drill  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Well, as you point out, you do what you can to add a touch of realism, but I see your point about the whole desks versus ceiling issue; the same issue would apply to earthquake drills. While we're at it, may we touch ever so briefly on the "duck and cover" training Florida's schoolchildren underwent back during the Cuban Missile Crisis?

As short as your monologue is, it does point out that unpleasant things can happen, preparing to deal with them is better than ignoring the possibility, and even young children can learn to take a hand in their own survival.

Thanks for sharing this with us!

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Review of Lost In The Sound  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Music is indeed a wonderful thing. Of the fives senses, smell may be best at triggering memories; for many, though, music does it better. I like how you describe the power of music, its ability to call forth the strongest of memories and the associated emotions. Joy, sorrow, nostalgia - they can all come into play.

Depending on the song and the accompanying memory (or memories), reliving that moment really can take you on a rollercoaster ride from happiness to sadness and back. I understand - feel - what you mean when you write about the music whispering or thundering. It just transports you back in time, allowing you to experience everything about the event almost "live". It's all fresh again, as if it just happened. This is what I understand you to mean by the phrases "One that can heal, one that can scar."

Your choice of free verse, with the occasional bit of rhyming just for fun, works well for this piece and carries it from start to finish. Thank you for sharing it with us.


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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.5)
When I read the title, I'm not sure which came to mind first: Wolfman Jack or a werewolf. A reader taking note of the Genres might wonder how Comedy would apply to what, on the face of it—as well as almost all the way through it—should be a tale of horror. The final stanza holds the answer.

Your 4-line stanzas look just fine, and the abcb rhyme scheme is agreeable to the ear. I had to chuckle at the way you strung the three concepts together: wolfman, lunatic and full moon; I can almost hear the woman chastising the beast.

Thanks for sharing this with us, and have a great evening!

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for entry "~ Basic Training ~" 
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Ah, Basic Training! I, too, had the opportunity to stand what the Army called Fire Guard a few times. There was nothing to read, though, and nowhere near enough light to do it anyway. Having a similar background, I can perhaps appreciate the descriptions of the lessons you learned a little better than some other readers. You learned leadership skills, teaching skills, and attention to detail, all of which I'm sure served you well when you got to your training school.

Thank you for sharing this bit of your history with us!

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Review of Gator Wrangler  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Well, you certainly made it sound relatively easy! Visitors to zoological parks seldom consider the training involved in caring for the various animals, especially the patently dangerous ones, so it's little wonder the two old ladies were amazed at your fearlessness and skill.

Long, long ago, I used to watch Mutual of Omaha's Wild Kingdom. From your description, it sounds like you could have been featured on one of the episodes, or you could even have been a semi-regular on The Tonight Show With Johnny Carson; he frequently had animals on the show.

Thanks for sharing this exciting tale with us, and have a great day!

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Review of The Babysitter  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Oh, poor Uncle Chris! Imagine having to watch an entire brood of little kids while your sister - their mom - is gone all day. Now imagine they're ten little bunnies, able and inclined to get into all sorts of mischief. That's the situation here and that's the scene you describe very well! Chris Rabbit is very fortunate to have such a good neighbor and friend, and one has to wonder if Chris ever let his sister in on his little secret.
Thanks for sharing this, and have a wonderful day!

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Review of If I  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi! I found this gem in your port. Oh, if only! I like the format you chose for this poem, beginning each stanza with a theoretical proposition, and then declaring what the result would be, should the proposition be true. All of it leads up to the final stanza, and your profession of love for the lucky lady.
To me, this poem shows the depth of your love for your lady, and it's just perfect. Thank you for sharing it with us.

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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi! I found your story in the Random Reads section of The Hub and the title caught my eye, so I thought I'd check it out.

I like the approach you took with this story, highlighting some of the positives of having an autistic child. Jonah sounds like a delightful little boy, even if routine events like bedtime are more challenging then you might hope (as hinted at in a set of limericks you've penned). It's certainly entertaining to watch children interact with their world, and even more so, when their take on things is unique.

Thank you for sharing this with us!


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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi! Here's an anniversary review for you! I'm a bit of an aviation enthusiast, so the article's title caught my eye. I have friends in North Carolina, so there's also a bit of 'local interest' involved.
I like the unusual POV you chose: a reporter who refers to himself in the third person. The reporter conveyed the excitement of the experience well, and it's easy to imagine this as an article in a local newspaper. Thanks for sharing a unique take on a historical event with us!

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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi! I'm reviewing your poem for "I Write in 2024" . The Writer's Cramp prompt called for a specific title, so that was easy to follow. Your free-verse poem acknowledges your faith, and offers a glimpse into some of the things that prompt you to offer praise and worship. You reflect upon the some of the aspects of what you've experienced as a result of your faith, and how you evidence that in your spiritual life.
Thank you for sharing this with us.


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