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Review of The End of Her  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a very sad poem about how lost and adrift one can feel at the loss of a parent; in this particular case, a daughter losing her mother. The world at large doesn't change, but the ties to it that ran through the mother are gone and what was once familiar now feels strangely different. Here, as with the loss of any significant person to you, you look at the places where she used to be, doors through which she used to come, and expect to see her appear. She doesn't, and the sorrow deepens all the more.

The open verse style employed works well here, and no rhyme scheme is needed to get across the feelings of loss and abandonment. Thank you for sharing this heartfelt poem.

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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (3.5)
My wife used to love the Suite Life shows and, as noted, this is a piece of fanfiction. It shows a side of Dylan I don't recall from either series, but - hey! - literary license. It's easy enough to follow the action and even, perhaps, to make a prediction or two on how Dylan is next going to mistreat his brother. Definitely a different take on the siblings' on-screen dynamic.

As far as suggestions go, I would only say that, if you want to make this available to a wider or different audience, you may want to use a grammar checker. It would catch little things like desert versus dessert, and possibly make a recommendation for rewording unusual descriptions (such as replacing 'scantily posed' with 'scantily clad'). As a fanfiction item, this story assumes some familiarity with Suite Life canon, so fans of the boys' antics will likely enjoy reading it. Thanks for sharing!

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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
As I'm a past (and possibly future) NaNo'er myself, the title of this poem caught my eye. Naturally, based on that title, I read it with the basic rhyme scheme and rhythm of Mr. Moore's classic Christmas poem and found that it followed those characteristics quite nicely. It's obviously much shorter than the original poem, but I believe that's completely understandable, as it was created less than eight hours before NaNoWriMo kicked off and you were probably hoping for a little nap to get you started. *Laugh*

The poem's actual subject matter is clearly in sync with the title and indicates you were likely as prepared as it was possible to be. *ThumbsUpGreen* Thanks for sharing this with us!

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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I have a son-in-law who would probably enjoy this, as he's very much interested in minerals, rocks, and so on. This is a fun exercise and it contains a few terms that are likely unfamiliar to the world at large (augite, chalcopyrite and plagioclase, to name a few). Thanks for setting this up for us!

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Review of The Rose  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
How appropriate, that I found this poem during Valentine's Day week! I love your comparison of love to a rose, and how you describe the nature of each, as well as the simple rhyme scheme. Both love and the rose have their phases, their waxing and waning but, as you point out in hope, having friendship as love's foundation is something to be desired. Thank you for sharing this!

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Review of Silent Child  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This isn't a very long poem, but you still manage to get across the desperate feelings of despair and fear the girl or woman lives with. Isolated on a farm and apparently unable to flee, she has to endure whatever evils are inflicted upon her. It's all very sad, and even worse that it happens in thousands of homes every single day.

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Review of Lucky Irish  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Ah, the things that bind father to son! It's touching that you wanted to share such a deep-rooted cultural tradition with your son, and it's too bad his young palate wasn't developed enough to appreciate some of the finer products of Irish brewing and distilling traditions. Maybe after he completes Primary School; you never know. *Laugh* Thanks for sharing this (ideally nowhere close to autobiographical) story with us!

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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Ah - an oldie but a goodie! You poetically mention multiple ways to amuse and entertain yourself while barricading yourself from the scourge that was (and, to some extent, still is). I like your aabb rhyme scheme and, even though the rhythm varies somewhat, it still carries the poem right along from start to finish.
Thanks for sharing this, and keep that mask handy!

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Review of The Suitor  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
You just have to wonder: are male black widow spiders not required to attend Spider Sex Ed., or they just not bright enough to grasp the end result of their flight to passion? Whichever one's true - or, maybe, both of them - the system works, else we'd have run out of black widows long, long ago.

I do like how you tell the tale of spider mating in so few words. The mental image accompanies the text quite nicely. Thanks for sharing this!


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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (5.0)
For some reason, it seems as if the system had mercy on us, aided and abetted by the longish words scattered among the words to be found. This one wasn't as hard as some past ones have been. Of course, that was on this go 'round; the letters get reshuffled every time you load the page, so the next time might be different. Anyways, these were all good words and, as always, it's fun to complete a word search. Thanks for setting this one up for us!
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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Looks like another fine entry for The Dialogue 500 from back in the day! I like the humor you injected into this story, with the customer going on about his girlfriends - one of which is, unbeknownst to her, on the way out - and his primary, whose name he's getting permanently inked to his body. His description of her and their relationship is sexist, to say the least, and bragging about his "multi-level marketing empire" incurs the ire of the tattoo artist (to his detriment). His favorite phrase seems to be "Life is strange."; so is he.
Thanks for sharing this; it was funny.

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Review of Incarnate  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Looks like what we have here is 'Freaky Friday' with a horrific twist. The movies were basically sweetness and light, with a soupçon of teenage angst. This story? Not so much. *Shock2* I never saw any of the 'Chucky' movies, but this tale looks like it would fit right into that movieverse.

You have the action blocked out into appropriate sections, from what I can see, so I have no suggestions. Thanks - I think - for sharing this!

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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.5)
A simple-looking poem about a very emotional subject. I think the aabb rhyme scheme you used works very well here, and you don't really need more than two stanzas to get your message across. Nice job.

That is the blessed hope, isn't it, to see our loved ones again as we walk the streets of Glory? It gives us something to look forward to.

Thanks for sharing this with us.

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Review of Mirror Mirror  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I like the imagery your words evoke, likening the reflection in a mirror to the still waters of a lake, and it's true. You can only see the sky and the surrounding landscape reflected in a lake. A mirror also only shows what stands before it: nothing added, nothing subtracted - just reality.

Thanks for sharing this with us.

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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
An "I Write in 2024"  review.

And, with this item, another very useful page is added to the "Wealth of Knowledge" warehouse scattered throughout the site! This information appeared in the Newsfeed in similar form not too long ago, but a lot of members almost certainly missed it due to the fact the Newsfeed posts keep getting pushed down the page by incoming entries. This will allow folks to find the info via the Search function, in addition to being able to use the {item:101} link at the top of their screen.

Thanks for putting this together for us!


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Review of A Narrow Escape.  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (3.5)
It's a good thing for Sergeant Steve that he pays attention to those little premonitions, especially handy that he has the expertise to literally defuse the situation, and more than fortunate his Leatherman tool was present for duty in its holster. Congrats on the 1st Place showing in what was a really fun contest!

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Review of Priorities  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This poem's title caught my eye, so I thought I'd take a look and, perhaps, make a comment or two. The title tells me you are aware that some things are more important than others in at least one respect, and deserve to be closer to the top of your to-do list. The Brief Description tells me you're aware that there may be times when at least two such priorities appear to be equally weighted, so you must decide which to tackle first. This can be a very difficult decision to make.

Maybe I'm reading way too much into this, but it seems to me the flies represent the lesser priorities distracting you from the main issue - or maybe not. That's the great thing about poetry; it lends itself well to interpretation. Thanks for sharing this with us.

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Review of Celtic Curses  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello! I found this poem in your port and thought to make a comment or two. I like the abcb rhyme scheme you employed; it really helps the words flow along. I also like the poem's message, the admonition to beware of crossing a Celtic person, in order to avoid being cursed (although the humor imparted by the rhyme scheme softens the threat a bit).

I have one suggestion regarding the word-flow in the last line of the 4th stanza. I could be reading it wrong, but the wording just seems a little off. I thought perhaps changing it to "Our curses sometimes wreak!" might work better, but it's just a thought.

Again, I liked your poem and I want to thank you for sharing it.

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Review of Overt  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
A direct-report poem from back when the coronavirus was seemingly everywhere and we heard all too often about people dying from it. The twenty-four syllables you used were more than up to the challenge of conveying the outrageous act and its completely warranted consequences. Thanks for writing and sharing this with us.

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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.5)
There's no particular rhyme or rhythm, but that doesn't hold back the message of the poem. Properly employed, words can capture our imagination and hold us spellbound, spur us to action or bring us to tears. Children recognize them, before they know how to use them, mobs are too wrapped up in their own rhetoric to listen to anyone else, and words only enhance the glance and touch of the one we love.
Thank you for sharing this.

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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I've been to and through Dallas more than a few times, but probably only once through the western half of that Texas metroplex. It's nice that you have so many fond memories of your time growing up there, and I enjoyed reading the little glimpses into what you did, and where you did it, back in your younger days. You are rightfully proud of the contributions your parents made to their community.
Thanks for sharing this with us!

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Review of Less Than a Month  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Your poem cleverly covers the busyness of the last two months of the year, as well as some of the things that can go wrong (e.g. a burnt Thanksgiving turkey, insufficient wrapping paper and tape for all those Christmas presents, etc.). Fortunately, all the holiday craziness will come to an end and then you can relax, right? Not exactly, as you point out. There are all kinds of activities available here on site, and you know you're going to get caught up in them.

I like the accompanying emoticons, as they add a bit of color and flavor to their respective stanzas. I also like the way your rhymes and rhythms flow along; it makes for enjoyable reading. Thanks for sharing this!


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Review of BAR HARBOR, MAINE  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a lovely description of the Bar Harbor, Maine area. The poem covers some of the fall and winter activities, and the natural features that make them possible. It also covers the types of winter clothing worn to keep the residents warm and dry, and the terrain and weather that make them necessary.

It's easy to "see" the harshness of the area, as well as its beauty, so I have no suggestions or corrections. Thanks for sharing it with us!

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Review of Amy’s story  
Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: E | (2.5)
I would have to say this is technically not a Self Help story, although Amy did help herself out of a dangerous situation. We see Amy assaulted and kidnapped by her boyfriend, Tony, who claims she has cheated on him, but we never find out if this is true. Amy's friend, Mike, rescues her, but there is a tragic ending.

I have a couple of suggestions and one solid recommendation, if I may. I might be wrong, but it looks like you wrote this in one continuous burst, like during a NaNoWriMo Word Sprint; you have a story, but everything is jammed together. When you write, take a little time to separate the paragraphs and bits of dialogue and, if you can, check your punctuation and spelling (commas, words that should be capitalized, and so on). This will make your items much easier to read and your stories easier to follow.

You should probably check out the site's "Content Rating System (CRS)"  when assigning a rating to an item. Due to the violent content, this one should be rated at least 18+. The Moderators and Senior Moderators "roam the halls" looking for issues like this. With as many of us as there are, and with as many items as we all create, they can't find everything. I happened to find this, though, so it can happen.

I don't mean to discourage you. You can obviously tell a story, so keep it up. You just need to keep a few things in mind to make them the best they can be!

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Review by Writer_Mike
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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
If you never wrote anything for someone else to read before, I'm not going to pick at little things. I would like to make one suggestion, though, if you don't mind.

To make your item easier to read, separate your points by a blank line (like I just did). For instance, a blank line after "Here is couple problems", "Even most doctors have no clue about nutrition.", and "People look at their worth thru subscribtions which is craziest thing ever." would break up the text a little and make it look nicer on the page and easier to follow.

As far as your piece is concerned, you make some good points. A lot of people don't think about eating healthy, when they could, and many people go overboard with the way they use social media. Thanks for sharing this.

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