This is a good read. Written with the prompt "THE TV IS BROKEN" for the Flash Fiction. I think your write go with the prompt and you managed very well.
{/b} This is an interesting story. It is full of suspense’s.
I like the way how you wrote this story. Dialogues flowed beautifully between the character Jakoline and Lattan. I like the fonts as well.
There is no description of the events I found. Otherwise it's a good story.
A very good message with an unique concept.You have written a very good piece of poem from life experience. I liked the way you told the story with very clear descriptions and presentation. I like the emotions and the lines
"Sailing with the wind while cresting reckless waves before,
Churning through the white caps leaves you scurrying for more!"
This is a good poem for global temperature. For the past few years many countries weather pattern are changing. Here, In my country for the past few years, the winter chapter is shrinking.
I really liked the way you put out your feelings. I like the simplicity of this poem. My favorite lines "Heat waves blowing
All around the sky
Sunscreen needed
Now it's high time"
I just read this from read and review page. It is a very good message with an unique concept. You have written a very good piece of story. Yes, we all have skills to communicate. You truly said that "waiting your turn to speak, not interrupting, valuing everyone's opinions, and offering your own contributions."
Truly this is a good folklore poem. It creates the story with beautiful images . I like the way you told the story of good descriptions of Erin's spirits. I like the lines "Banshees wait in graveyards
ghosts don't get their kicks."
I like this family story. It has beautiful thoughts. The role of a loving aunt in a child’s life should be a cherished one and, more important, a necessary one. In this story you describe your aunt Catherine who create a great role in your life.
The title of the story fits the themes of the story. I like the happy ending. The dialogues are believable. They floats beautifully.
I like the emotions evokes in this story.
Overall it told beautifully and well-written. I enjoyed it!!
This wonderful piece of yours is rather epic. I like the story you crafted here.
This poem is powerful in its story and rhyme . I feel the sadness woven in this poem by the line “While sitting at her dining table,
Staring with unseeing eyes,
A dry encrusted crimson band
Adorns his neck, there by her hand.
I feel that it wrote from a person’s life experience, senses and emotions, and it looks great.
This is a good story written and told with the given prompt "The Winning Goal". The title fits this story. Though there is no dialogue but it floated beautifully. I like the ending.
I really liked this because it goes well with your crafted words. The poet go back in time, with his mind in Brooklyn, remember those good old days where he once lived, the street where he played . He tells “Now everyone I know has left
Perhaps a few have stayed”. He remember the people who had loved him and he feel nostalgic.
I feel this poem is positive by the lines “I’m better off where I live now
And this is where I’ll stay”.
This is a good blog written about life. And from personal experience and images. I enjoy your descriptions and the point of view. I like how you you begin it with a new paragraph. It makes me reading to the end. And I hope you will write and share your metaphor of life with us.
A chill in the air: Is a nature story. This is a good story written from personal experience and views.
The words are so true “But the endless winter of 2009 tore away my love of the seasonal cold, as I had thought forever, until the summer of 2021 came and my mask,”.
I learned many about you and the nature of Australian winter. And I hope you will write and share your works with us.
Blue light: Is a nature Poem, pulls the readers to an enchanted nature of night. The poet has painted a charming poem of night with lightning bugs, bats, nightingale, stars and so on. All the natural things sings in melodies of colors of night.
I just read your story about "Tina" on the review request page. This is really a good story. Beautifully told and written that readers can relate your story. I like the suspense. The fonts is appropriate and easy to read. I like the ending.
This wonderful piece of yours is a little epic. I appreciate the simplicity. It is pure, honest, but very true. A good friend always support us. They are really important for our happiness. I like the lines "The memories are
endless
If I ever lost this
I myself
will be lost"
Yes, teenage is the important time of a child. I missed the days. I enjoyed reading this entertaining piece. Your rhyming scheme is absolutely beautiful. I want to thank you for your sweet description. My favorite lines are "Life is a long going race
Teenage is it's cheerful phase."
Good creative imaginary poem. The poet imagine that in future Olympics went to Mars.
This well-crafted write delivers a powerful message to the delight of all who can read it. Science is advancing so fast that maybe in the future we will be able to play games on Mars. I liked the concept. I like the descriptions and presentations. I like the lines
“Ice hockey played out very well, and figure skating too;
the coverage of Mars’ events was beamed so Earth could view.”
This is really a good story. I enjoy the characters Dirk, crow and a raccoon tale and their point of view.. Your prompt was probably to make with the words of “Are you laughing at me? “and you were probably limited by words count. The fonts is appropriate and easy to read. I like the ending words “Yet that is what happened. It was nature; it was harmony; it was indebtedness of the wild.”
I really liked this because it goes well with your crafted words. The poet go back in time, with her mind, remember the good old days where she once lived. Standing in front of an old house she remember the Games she played in the field, she could remember her friends,and the environment. The good memories made her nostalgic. I like the lines
"No worries for the games have changed, and electronic is the rage."
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