This is a good poem about survival of the fittest. I like the way you are telling this story. It's inspiring and motivating. I can imagine the scene. I like the thoughts woven in this poem. This well crafted write delivers a powerful message to the readers which you told . The poem has a nice rhythm. Like the lines "A microcosm of a greedy and deadly society
In which love is the rarest form of truth…"
It's been a pleasure to review your story "THE STONES" on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" . This review reflects my opinion only,
Beautifully constructed poem. I like this poem because it is so rhythmic.
It seems the poet wrote it from personal grief. The poet confides his sorrows to a stone. The poem expressed the heartbreak feeling of the poet. The poet wrote “I part the stones in history
Split in two they rest no more
As I leave to fight my war
A battle fought within my mind”
Yes, It can be difficult to accept. I like the images you have painted. The poem has a nice rhythm. The rhyming aa,bb makes this poem brighter.
It's my pleasure to review this poem"Gracefully Growing Old " . This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. Every words are so true that keeps me reading.
We all living through a hard time as virus continue to rampage around the world.
You have written a very good piece of poem, I really liked the way you put out your feelings. You have good rhyming. I like the lines “So when my life is at it’s end,
I’ll have some extra stored up.
In this body that is gracefully growing old."
I like this poem about seasons change. Each season brings different looks and beauty which reflected in this poem. It is the feelings of the poet . I feel this poem has a soothing tone. Rhyming makes this poem happier and brighter. I like the thoughts evokes!
You have captured an emotional poem. When the world is covered with lunar eclipse . The virus affecting our life. I appreciate the thoughts and the emotions portrayed in this poem. I like the way you put down your feelings. Like the lines " and I hate being alone,
being locked away inside."
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I appreciate the thoughts portrayed in this poem. Yes, darkness is not the absence of light. Darkness has its own smell, scent and color. When we look at the dark sky at night, we see moon, millions of stars. Everyday darkness is slowly shifting into light.
The words are so true that keeps me reading your poem to the end. I like the lines “A man of twilight and gloom, amongst the owls, moths, and slugs.”
I like this revise version. Your poems are so rhythmic that keeps me reading. I liked the thoughts and the way you displayed life. The words are so melodic. I like the lines "then reached out, grabbing feather quill again.
On very last page he just wrote; The End"
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Death is not permanent and it serves as an eternal pathway to life hereafter. Which the poets told by the lines “and who will sit amongst the clouds,
free-spirited,
so young, yet
stealthily spirited away.”
The poet presented death as a white flying balloon. The poem evokes the poet’s emotions when she passed by a cemetery and saw a small crowd holding white balloons.
This is thoughtful poem . The words are so true that keeps me reading your poem to the end. It has good rhythm and flowed beautifully with your crafted words. Yes "Dream of a peaceful exit,
To reach His glorious feet."
It's been a pleasure to review your story "The Hummingbird" on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army" . This review reflects my opinion only,
TITLE:I like this poem about Hummingbird . The title go well with the words.
IMAGERY:This poem is not just about a bird, but also the feelings of you had when you saw her. This creature was far above the others. It flew wildly from flower to flower . I think you perhaps uses the symbol of the hummingbird to represent life.
RHYMING & REPETITION:Your rhyming is pleasing to the ear. The tone I found is cheerful and soothing.
RHYTHM:Your poem has good rhythm.
FAVOURITE LINES:” There is beauty and grace,
In the form of a tiny bird,
And when I ask God "Why",
I think God heard.”
It seems you wrote it from personal experience and it looks great. The words are beautiful that keeps me reading your poem to the end. It has good rhythm and flowed beautifully with your crafted words. I like the lines
"Don’t make a noise oh! Wind,
blow without sound.
My tired love lay on my lap
so blow calm, blow silent."
I like the thoughts evokes in this poem.
The words are so true that keeps me reading your poem to the end. It has good rhythm and flowed beautifully with your crafted words. Throughout the poem the poet telling the meaning of joy.
Poetry is like a canvas, you can paint any picture with it. In your poem you paint beautifully a picture of a seagull.
Initial Impression : This is a sweet poem. You are using a powerful image.
Theme and Creativity : It wrote with perfect emotion that gives the readers a good feeling when they read it. The fonts are appropriate. I like the lines. “A swoop, a peck, he was dewalled,
And so to life and flight recalled.”
It's pleasure to know someone like you. Keep writing more!!!
I like this loop poem about dragon. You told the story beautifully with the repeated lines "Sleep my dearest and fold your wings,
Curl your tail around you tight,
And lay your head down."
The words are so true that keeps me reading your poem to the end. It has good rhythm and flowed beautifully with the word "devoid". I like the emotions and the way you put out your feelings.
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I like this little piece. I like rain too-- but not too much.
You paint beautifully how rain feels. I like the self awareness quote which you have put here "some people feel the rain others just get wet." Yes, we should accept the things in life.
I like this story written for a contest (Dialogue 500). Dialogues are flowed beautifully. It seems you wrote it for Christmas and you managed it well. I learned that description gives story the life it needs. But I can imagine the scene where they are. The way you wrote keeps me reading it to the end.
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The beautiful Fine white China pot caught my attention. This is a good start of a detective story. I appreciate the suspense of this story. I can imagine the scene perfectly. The descriptions and the plots are so good. I think you can make bigger story from everything I just read. It would be interesting.
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It’s really a wonderful poem about color of roses. Poetry has always been one of my favorite genre. It’s a great device of express feelings. You paint wonderfully about the colors of roses and what they symbolize. I like the way you crafted your words in each stanza. You have the rhyme scheme AABB .Rhyming makes this poem happier and brighter.
I like the lines “Yellow meaning friendship, the joy in your heart
To be given to those worthy, right from the start”.
TITLE:The Title “A Beautiful Life” caught my attention. You beautifully painted how nature can impacts a person life. I like the simplicity of your poem.
IMAGERY: You have captured a charming poem of quiet little home garden with beautiful images where the tranquil nature of gives pleasure to her heart.
RHYMING & REPETITION:The free verse rhyming go well to your words. The tone I found is cheerful and soothing.
RHYTHM:Your poem has different rhythm. It flowed beautifully. The final stanza tells facts of life.
OVERALL IMPRESSION :I enjoyed the story of your old maiden aunt.
It's pleasure to read a poem from your port. Happy New Year!!
I like this poem because each stanza is beautiful and so enchanted. The poem captures the moment of life. Yes, people blaming others. I like the images you have used here. The descriptions are vivid and very artistic. I like the last stanza.
This is a very good poem about friend. The message is good with an unique concept.You have written a very good piece of poem, I liked the way you told. The descriptions and presentation are clear. Yes I believe
"Special friends, though, share love and life
Through our daily joys and sorrows."
I like this poem because each stanza is beautiful and so enchanted. The poem captures the moment of life. The words are so true that keeps me reading. It makes me feel connected. I like the words "Seasons come and seasons go,
Delete off that harsh word "NO""
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This is a good story. Wonderfully told. You paint a wonderfully flawed character. I like the morel of the story "never betray your friends"
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
FIRST IMPRESSION: This is a good story. Wonderfully told with the view of a tree. I especially liked the way you tell your story.
DIALOGUES: Though there is no dialogue but it floated beautifully. I like the presentation.
CHARACTERS: You crafted the tree so beautifully. This made it come alive for the reader you vividly described.
SUGGESTION: I didn't find any mistake.
FINAL THOUGHT: you are a good storyteller. I appreciate the way you are telling this story.
I can’t wait to read another story from you. I enjoyed it reading.
Mina
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