I just read your story from read and review page. This is a very sweet story about a girl who lost her way . You did very good at moving the story toward a happy ending. It seems you wrote it for a contest with the given words "orange sign" and "window".
It's well written, it followed the prompt. I think you can make bigger story from everything I just read. It would be interesting.
I just read your story from read and review page. It's been a pleasure to review your piece.
The story is beautifully written and told. I like the transport you are using here. I like the setting of the story and how you described the cars. I like the character Lena and the view of her life. I like the line "Independence was a wonderful thing."
I think you can make bigger story from everything I just read. It would be interesting.
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Good write! I like this, it's a thoughtful piece. Yes, Society really needs to get back to real Godly values and stop letting religion, Color, social status, money and all the other MAN-MADE barriers divide us,.
Because life is too short. We come to this world for a period of time. And in this period of time we have many things to do.
I could only see you need to put spaces between paragraphs.
It's been a pleasure to review your story on behalf of "The WDC Angel Army"
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FIRST IMPRESSION: Wonderfully told. I like the thoughts eveokes.
THE POEM:In the dark room negative developed. But darkness is not the absence of light. I loved the images of the poem.
The ending was really well written and so moving.
FAVORITE: I wish soon,
its morning,
and let moon disappear,
then I can rest my fear.
I can’t wait to read another poem from you. I enjoyed it reading.
This is a good poem about survival of the fittest. I like the way you are telling this story. It's inspiring and motivating. I can imagine the scene. I like the thoughts woven in this poem. This well crafted write delivers a powerful message to the readers which you told . The poem has a nice rhythm. Like the lines "A microcosm of a greedy and deadly society
In which love is the rarest form of truth…"
It's my pleasure to review this poem"Gracefully Growing Old " . This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. Every words are so true that keeps me reading.
We all living through a hard time as virus continue to rampage around the world.
You have written a very good piece of poem, I really liked the way you put out your feelings. You have good rhyming. I like the lines “So when my life is at it’s end,
I’ll have some extra stored up.
In this body that is gracefully growing old."
I like this poem about seasons change. Each season brings different looks and beauty which reflected in this poem. It is the feelings of the poet . I feel this poem has a soothing tone. Rhyming makes this poem happier and brighter. I like the thoughts evokes!
You have captured an emotional poem. When the world is covered with lunar eclipse . The virus affecting our life. I appreciate the thoughts and the emotions portrayed in this poem. I like the way you put down your feelings. Like the lines " and I hate being alone,
being locked away inside."
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I appreciate the thoughts portrayed in this poem. Yes, darkness is not the absence of light. Darkness has its own smell, scent and color. When we look at the dark sky at night, we see moon, millions of stars. Everyday darkness is slowly shifting into light.
The words are so true that keeps me reading your poem to the end. I like the lines “A man of twilight and gloom, amongst the owls, moths, and slugs.”
I like this revise version. Your poems are so rhythmic that keeps me reading. I liked the thoughts and the way you displayed life. The words are so melodic. I like the lines "then reached out, grabbing feather quill again.
On very last page he just wrote; The End"
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Death is not permanent and it serves as an eternal pathway to life hereafter. Which the poets told by the lines “and who will sit amongst the clouds,
free-spirited,
so young, yet
stealthily spirited away.”
The poet presented death as a white flying balloon. The poem evokes the poet’s emotions when she passed by a cemetery and saw a small crowd holding white balloons.
This is thoughtful poem . The words are so true that keeps me reading your poem to the end. It has good rhythm and flowed beautifully with your crafted words. Yes "Dream of a peaceful exit,
To reach His glorious feet."
It seems you wrote it from personal experience and it looks great. The words are beautiful that keeps me reading your poem to the end. It has good rhythm and flowed beautifully with your crafted words. I like the lines
"Don’t make a noise oh! Wind,
blow without sound.
My tired love lay on my lap
so blow calm, blow silent."
I like the thoughts evokes in this poem.
The words are so true that keeps me reading your poem to the end. It has good rhythm and flowed beautifully with your crafted words. Throughout the poem the poet telling the meaning of joy.
Poetry is like a canvas, you can paint any picture with it. In your poem you paint beautifully a picture of a seagull.
Initial Impression : This is a sweet poem. You are using a powerful image.
Theme and Creativity : It wrote with perfect emotion that gives the readers a good feeling when they read it. The fonts are appropriate. I like the lines. “A swoop, a peck, he was dewalled,
And so to life and flight recalled.”
It's pleasure to know someone like you. Keep writing more!!!
I like this loop poem about dragon. You told the story beautifully with the repeated lines "Sleep my dearest and fold your wings,
Curl your tail around you tight,
And lay your head down."
The words are so true that keeps me reading your poem to the end. It has good rhythm and flowed beautifully with the word "devoid". I like the emotions and the way you put out your feelings.
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I like this little piece. I like rain too-- but not too much.
You paint beautifully how rain feels. I like the self awareness quote which you have put here "some people feel the rain others just get wet." Yes, we should accept the things in life.
I like this story written for a contest (Dialogue 500). Dialogues are flowed beautifully. It seems you wrote it for Christmas and you managed it well. I learned that description gives story the life it needs. But I can imagine the scene where they are. The way you wrote keeps me reading it to the end.
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The beautiful Fine white China pot caught my attention. This is a good start of a detective story. I appreciate the suspense of this story. I can imagine the scene perfectly. The descriptions and the plots are so good. I think you can make bigger story from everything I just read. It would be interesting.
First I want to welcome you in WDC. This review reflects my opinion only, and I am not a writing expert. I do hope you find something that is interesting or helpful to you.
It’s really a wonderful poem about color of roses. Poetry has always been one of my favorite genre. It’s a great device of express feelings. You paint wonderfully about the colors of roses and what they symbolize. I like the way you crafted your words in each stanza. You have the rhyme scheme AABB .Rhyming makes this poem happier and brighter.
I like the lines “Yellow meaning friendship, the joy in your heart
To be given to those worthy, right from the start”.
TITLE:The Title “A Beautiful Life” caught my attention. You beautifully painted how nature can impacts a person life. I like the simplicity of your poem.
IMAGERY: You have captured a charming poem of quiet little home garden with beautiful images where the tranquil nature of gives pleasure to her heart.
RHYMING & REPETITION:The free verse rhyming go well to your words. The tone I found is cheerful and soothing.
RHYTHM:Your poem has different rhythm. It flowed beautifully. The final stanza tells facts of life.
OVERALL IMPRESSION :I enjoyed the story of your old maiden aunt.
It's pleasure to read a poem from your port. Happy New Year!!
I like this poem because each stanza is beautiful and so enchanted. The poem captures the moment of life. Yes, people blaming others. I like the images you have used here. The descriptions are vivid and very artistic. I like the last stanza.
This is a very good poem about friend. The message is good with an unique concept.You have written a very good piece of poem, I liked the way you told. The descriptions and presentation are clear. Yes I believe
"Special friends, though, share love and life
Through our daily joys and sorrows."
I like this poem because each stanza is beautiful and so enchanted. The poem captures the moment of life. The words are so true that keeps me reading. It makes me feel connected. I like the words "Seasons come and seasons go,
Delete off that harsh word "NO""
Thank you for sharing!!
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