Well, if your aim is to compose a terrible Valentine's Day poem, you succeeded. I imagine this is like someone pretending they cannot dance or sing when they have the talent. It must be difficult, so kudos. Hey, if Dr. Seuss could do it, why not you. You needed to make words rhyme, right?
You've done it. Now I am hooked and vested in this story. What happens the next day? I presume the narrator escapes the attic unscathed. This mystery builds with an intriguing clue. Great use of the prompt words. You created the attic and the climb to it as very lifelike. I could feel the tension.
Well, Leo is front and centre for a double-cross, isn't he? Who says crime doesn't pay? I like the use of the given prompt in this fast-paced, taut story. I can feel Leo's palpable dread as he rocks in his chair hearing the three men coming for him.
Well, this is a creative use of the prompt. Men paying for wooing classes? I noticed a few editing issues. I believe it should be yeas and alrights. That apostrophe is for possession. The sentence that begins with " you told me" doesn't need commas. Oops whispered needs an h. The word envelope is misspelled in its last usage. "Hey your hot" should be you're hot. Sorry, I notice these things.
This was a delight to read. The humour shone through. I laughed out loud at the mention of "three pinches of graveyard dust" and "baked with intentional eye contact." A new twist on a watched pot never boils? I envisioned Mom throwing the salt shaker in a panic. Great use of the prompt.
Great use of the prompt words which you wove into a wee story. I like the friendly reception the narrator received from the three sisters and their parents. The wellness check benefited the visitor. Visits are healrhy for everyone. It feels wonderful to be welcomed and accepted.
Bravo. Kudos. Your cheering/motivational self has reared his head and kicked you with the best of intentions. He thinks in terms of doable goals. Anticipating your reluctance he has presented the why and how. This is a starter kit. "Start small." Somewhat helpful, definitely logical. I appreciate the exercise and construction metaphors. Yep, writing requires unceasing, immense, blood, sweat and tears effort. Building does not occur over night. Your style is relatable and humorous.
Could Grandpa be a moonshiner? Not many granddaughters party with their grandfathers in such a way, or so I once thought. This is an interesting and imaginative use of the prompt words. Many an engaging tale revolves around a fish out of water scenario and this is another one.
More opinion servers need to read this poem. Yes, we do not all "sing from the same hymn book". By the way, I have never heard this particular turn of phrase before and I like it. Too many believe their opinions are the only ones that matter and then they attempt to impose them. Your rhyming is effortless, kudos.
This story is mesmerizing and scary at the same time. Is this what happens to missing children? I suppose anything is possible. How frightening that someone could abduct a child and then consider that child to be a daughter. Great use of the prompt. This would be quite the secret.
So, sneaky Angela was never struggling or floundering. She learned to delegate, or fob off her work to Sandy. This is definitely not team work. Angela never needed the proffered encouragement. As a schemer she had another plan. Some people do just enough to benefit themselves, eh?
Well, what can I comment? Debra has decided to leave her crazy boyfriend and strike out on her own. By crazy, I mean unfaithful and oblivious. He has not honoured their relationship. There are great descriptors here. I like the immediacy of " within punching distance."
This is a pleasure to read. I had no idea what caused such dissatisfaction until the surprise ending. Kudos for personalizing something as banal as a wallet. Probably many people can relate to this. What is a fat wallet anyway? Too many of us may never know.
Whew, now this is a story with many shiny facets. Apparently, the space time continuum is complicated and ever-evolving. Those seemingly mundane ripples cascade at warp speed with devastating consequences. I love this backhanded derogatory comeback. "You boys seem to be on the smart side of stupid." Thanks for the laughs.
It must be lonely to be thought invisible. Kareem proved himself diligent and sharp-eyed with his new star discovery. "His relationship with the teachers weren't" seems awkward. I believe it should be wasn't as that verb is tied to the word relationship. I also espied a missed letter."He tried not to let is invisibility". I know you intended that to be his . Great use of the prompt.
This is indeed a cute story told from the viewpoint of the family dog with seniority. Why had the family adopted an interloper? I like Mav as the set in his ways canine. Kudos for the imaginative use of the prompt sentence. I never viewed it in this story .
I laughed my way through this delightful story of burning and yearning. As you explained there are many types of oil, many not in the least bit edible. I like the term deconstructed for a mess. The vivid description of the weary smoke detector is comedy gold. Bravo.
Fun, imaginative use of the given prompt words. You managed to make the gifting of a bottle of wine into an appreciative mystery. I laughed at the introduction of the nosey neighbour. They live everywhere. This could be the beginning of a longer story.
Well, that is one unexpected but satisfying use of wine. Huh, it can be a firestarter and obliterate terrible letters. I for one would be livid if a significant other claimed I was sucking up his free time. How callous and cold. Great use of the given prompt.
Hurray for Manny! His luck changed perhaps due to perseverance and attempting to go against the very real flow of a river. This is a feel good story. Great use of the three prompt words woven together. I suppose there is a lesson here wrapped up in charming writing.
This is similar to that old verbal sparring match who's on first. What? What? It is a wonder these two communicate at all. And the mystery noise proves to not be unique at all. Oh, I noticed you wrote "over buy the rocks" and it should be "over by the rocks".
I did it! I found all the doctor names from a fantastic television show. Yes, some of them are certainly mouthfuls. Imagine muttering Koothrappali. Thanks for the challenge. There may have been a scramble, but my eyes found everything. Thanks for rekindling funny memories.
Well, that is one heck of a reason for a father and son to bond. One disastrous accident in a family is rare, but to have another one? Now these two share a similar job and a similar survival story. Imaginative use of the prompt words. Thanks for the read.
I laughed my way through this rollicking piece of poetry. I can see that tattered bald angel atop the tree. And she had "her ass lit with bulbs slightly mauled." What a shimmering spectacle. "Never saw it coming the rat from the hood." Alas, we never do. Vermin do not appreciate Christmas. The nod to restorative spirits made me guffaw.
Great use of the prompt words. Susan felt comfortable enough to make a choice about sledding or not. She learned she was not quite ready. This is a wonderful homage to the bond between grandmothers and granddaughters. Everyone should be so blessed to have memories like this.
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