Haha! This is a funny use of the prompt words and somewhat realistic, too. Who hasn't encountered a senior with a need to talk and share? So many memories, anecdotes, and observations to release... It must be frustrating for that poor officer. He just wants to issue a ticket and be on his way. I spotted one issue and I do not believe you intended for this senior to have a stutter. "One time, she left the left the whole cart there!"
Round and round the lesson/conversation revolves. Do not say or use a particular word even if your playmates say it all the time. Learning is never straightforward. The dialogue in this short story is believable. What is swearing? Why does it seem to be okay for some to use it? Kids hear so many things, good and bad.
Huh, I'm not sure what to make of this. I understand it is written as a diary entry and I realize they can be emotional and often become rants. Is the writer becoming a convert to someone, something? Are "those wonderful eyes" using hypnosis? If so, this is indeed scary how quickly and easily it happens. It reads as similar to an addiction. The craving becomes all important. By the way are January and February misspelled with intent? Is the wary meant to foreshadow this change in the writer? "If you ready this." Is that supposed to be 'read this'?
I really like your imagery in this poem. You show how hot a summer may become by writing of "spikes of brown grass". In that line you cover the senses of sight and touch. Yes, anyone who has tasted one recalls the pucker inducement of a crabapple. I enjoyed that final stanza. I can see the kids/play mates "holding court" within the best throne, a tree.
This is a fast paced rollickin' poem. I loved it and guffawed as I perused it. You create a sense of urgency and then let it carry you along. For the most part the rhymes are unforced and 'true'. Ah, the immense beast turned out to be exuberantly friendly and I can commiserate about "drenched in drool". Nowhere have I read about a plot for vengeance and the need for a towel to remove goo' in one verse. Bravo!
Aren't familial memories some of the best? Of course, much of what any of us remember is tinted by the perceptions of a child. The why often eluded us. Houses were more than a structure, or a shelter. They contained adventures and mysteries. I admire your writing style. Including dialogue makes your story realistic and relatable. Thanks for sharing.
Full disclosure. I read this delightful story because anything cookie related catches my eye. I have always been an avid baker with cookies being a favourite treat. I often referred to my son as a cookie monster, but I digress. I love that this is presented as a cherished memory and a confession. Parents hear and see it all.
I'm going to gush a bit here. This is beautiful. Yes, some people are not canine fans. This Dave had been a sensitive boy and had failed or been determined not to form a bond with Duke. Growing up is filled with so much to learn and sometimes the regrets remain. Thank you for sharing this.
Thank you! I love these tried and true pieces of wisdom. Some words do convey so much, eh? I heard that beware of what you wish for many times as a child. On the face of it, it seems puzzling, and why is it couched as a warning? I remember being taught to make an effort to use people's names. It is nice to hear your name.
Awww, a charming proposal story. How sweet to commemorate the place two people met. Those three prompt words were made for this piece of writing. Even the leaves fit. Such supposedly random words gained a cohesiveness here. I can picture the perfect scene.
Haha! This is a fun, light-hearted read. I like this perception of a Santa belting out his own lyrics to an easily recognized song. Soup? Stoop? Every workplace needs this kind of fun. I may be biased, but you implemented the prompt creatively. Thanks for the smile on my face.
Ah, the life of a teenager mother. It is not all glamour and giggles. The suspense is constant. Some mothers try too hard to be a friend to their child. I found the conversation in this story to be lifelike and believable. Communication in all relationships is key. Great use of the prompt.
This is a great use of the prompt phrase. Anybody who co-habitates with another will probably relate to this story. Room mates whether romantic partners or not have the ability to irritate. We are all individuals. That said, we have our strengths and we have our weaknesses. Thanks for the read!
Haha! If only electric vehicles were that simplistic, and only required a very long extension cord. Some ideas just need a bit of tweaking, eh? I know a few wives who expect the worst from their husbands and rarely are they disappointed. This is a funny flash fiction piece.
Ah, too late with that wise warning, Warren. Not too many would attempt a dangerous climb up a public precipice in broad daylight. It is a tad obvious. The ending is funny and unexpected. Bravo implementing the prompt sentence. This is a fun read. Maybe Warren will command respect next time.
I now know what it could potentially be like to drive soneone else's car. Ah, to have everything paid. As if! It is not very impressive for the dates though. This is a cute story and it does answer to the given prompt. I too think breaking a window would be excessive.
In a minimum of words you weave a poignant tale and capture a precious moment in time. Granny is sometimes transported to her past and that pull interferes with the reality of the present. You made great use of the prompt words. "Getting Granny a new resident near the sea." I believe you intended to write residence .
Ah children, they do understand often in different and limited ways. The poor Father had to engage in semantics to interest his son in a day outing. Plan, do, it all translates to going out somewhere and doing something. This is realistic. I noticed a few things. "What a person your age should to do." The 'to' is unnecessary. "We're you're happy to do this?' It should be 'were'.
Wow, this is a powerful glimpse into one man's world. Great implementation of the three prompt words. You created a breathing, palpable scenario here. I think I like this Drake fellow. Now this is an affirmation. "He would stand tall, like his father had taught him, one small act at a time."
I am not sure if I understand this story. Does the newcomer meet her future self as someone applying for a job? Does she fear success and advancement? Does she see who and what she is destined to become? Great use of the three prompt words. You made me think.
Cue the dramatic music and the look over his shoulder. Yes, what will Ian do with his discovery? Have the crows shown him a much-needed treasure? Will finder's keepers prevail in this instance? Great use of the prompt words and creating a suspended story. What will happen next?
There's momentary lapses and then there's total memory loss. To lose a spouse right after a restaurant meal together is definitely forgetful. Ah, the human brain can only process and contain so much before it rebels. This is a delightful story that made me smile. Again, great use of the given prompt.
Oooo, I like that the previous story has a new chapter. Travis is over-confident and proud of what he did, so he just has to brag about it. Fools and their best laid plans are soon thwarted. Sadly, too many women do not consider their own fates and only see that a rival is out of the picture. Great use of the given prompt.
Aha, this is a clever murder tale.Well sort of a murder. How to get rid of a fiancee and try to make it look accidental. Poor sun-worshiping Libby. Death by sun stroke cannot be pleasant.Actually, I am surprised this doesn't happen to more tourists. Great use of the prompt words.
Ah, family discord certainly makes for compelling stories, eh? This mother-daughter duo does not come across as cute and cuddly. There is so much animosity between the two. I like that you wrote with strong verbs . This adds depth to the story. The ending is a surprise and a cliff hanger. Cue the ominous music. Has there been foul play?
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