This heartfelt story is a delight. Family memories and lore make for the best subjects, eh? I could not help but notice the slight undertone of a father bragging about his daughter and I say why not. She and you both deserve to feel proud of her accomplishments. I enjoyed the steady pacing and the wording of your story. I never once wavered as I lapped this up. The phrase small but mighty comes to mind to best describe your daughter. Kudos to you both. The final line is hilarious.
Haha! Young children are often very literal with what they say. Ronnie had said bear and he meant bear, just not a living, breathing, potentially growling bear. The grandfather immediately thought of the dangerous kind of bear. I like the surprise and relief that Henry felt. Thanks for this fun read.
Your story title drew me in. I myself partake of daily cups of tea and home- baked cookies. I can relate to that weary mother you describe. Those stolen moments are brief and precious. A cup of tea represents a calming moment to recharge. Yuck! The contents of a broken tea bag are indeed terrible. How typical that a mother must rouse herself to go out and procure more of what she needs. Great response to the prompt.
So, this is a drabble? I am amazed that a handful of words still tells a meaningful, poignant story. You have created a pocket-sized tale and one with a happy ending. I like the spare style without the need for descriptors. The lesson that not all that glitters is a great gift resonates.
Ah, a tale concerning the best laid plans. What is that old axiom? Anything can happen. To be stranded is not always fun or adventurous. A city rooftop is not the wilderness, but it still presents inconveniences. At least JJ had a backup plan and one that his friends considered plausible. They experienced a surprise for sure. Great use of the prompt. Very imaginative.
Is this what a fan fiction could be? You imagined a new chapter to the Hogwarts' saga and I must say it is every bit as creative and fantastical as the original. That Hannah seems to be a hip, savvy mother. She knows what a muggle is and is not ashamed to be known as one. The surprise to both her and her daughter is that Hannah is also a witch. Wow, two surprises/reveals to that family in one day. Despite discovering that she and her daughter are witches Hannah acts as an almost typical mother. She is not above embarrassing Maryann. This story flows as fast as the magic. I enjoyed part of this tale being relayed in realistic dialogue. I commend your take on the prompt.
Another creative response to the given prompt. How many great stories begin with those simple words, I have an idea ? Most likely the expected response is, "Oh no, not again!" What will happen? I like this story And I must say that Sandra, my namesake, is a clever girl. She employed a bit of manipulation, so what. Nobody endured any harm and the kitchen was tidied. Your dialogue is believable, too.
I do sometimes wonder how children learn to speak and make any sense. They have so much to pay attention to and so many things to hear. Your cute story highlights this perfectly. Sandy has misheard and repeats what she thinks she has heard. Thanks for the laugh. By the way I noticed words repeated. "Don't try to try to get out of this."
Surprise in more ways than one. During a daily walk the narrator discovers more than a tall wall to climb. All the little things add up. What a serendipitous accident to become stuck on the wall of a former classmate. I like your creative use of the prompt words. Thanks for this fun read.
Haha! This is a funny use of the prompt words and somewhat realistic, too. Who hasn't encountered a senior with a need to talk and share? So many memories, anecdotes, and observations to release... It must be frustrating for that poor officer. He just wants to issue a ticket and be on his way. I spotted one issue and I do not believe you intended for this senior to have a stutter. "One time, she left the left the whole cart there!"
Huh, I'm not sure what to make of this. I understand it is written as a diary entry and I realize they can be emotional and often become rants. Is the writer becoming a convert to someone, something? Are "those wonderful eyes" using hypnosis? If so, this is indeed scary how quickly and easily it happens. It reads as similar to an addiction. The craving becomes all important. By the way are January and February misspelled with intent? Is the wary meant to foreshadow this change in the writer? "If you ready this." Is that supposed to be 'read this'?
I really like your imagery in this poem. You show how hot a summer may become by writing of "spikes of brown grass". In that line you cover the senses of sight and touch. Yes, anyone who has tasted one recalls the pucker inducement of a crabapple. I enjoyed that final stanza. I can see the kids/play mates "holding court" within the best throne, a tree.
This is a fast paced rollickin' poem. I loved it and guffawed as I perused it. You create a sense of urgency and then let it carry you along. For the most part the rhymes are unforced and 'true'. Ah, the immense beast turned out to be exuberantly friendly and I can commiserate about "drenched in drool". Nowhere have I read about a plot for vengeance and the need for a towel to remove goo' in one verse. Bravo!
Aren't familial memories some of the best? Of course, much of what any of us remember is tinted by the perceptions of a child. The why often eluded us. Houses were more than a structure, or a shelter. They contained adventures and mysteries. I admire your writing style. Including dialogue makes your story realistic and relatable. Thanks for sharing.
Full disclosure. I read this delightful story because anything cookie related catches my eye. I have always been an avid baker with cookies being a favourite treat. I often referred to my son as a cookie monster, but I digress. I love that this is presented as a cherished memory and a confession. Parents hear and see it all.
I'm going to gush a bit here. This is beautiful. Yes, some people are not canine fans. This Dave had been a sensitive boy and had failed or been determined not to form a bond with Duke. Growing up is filled with so much to learn and sometimes the regrets remain. Thank you for sharing this.
Thank you! I love these tried and true pieces of wisdom. Some words do convey so much, eh? I heard that beware of what you wish for many times as a child. On the face of it, it seems puzzling, and why is it couched as a warning? I remember being taught to make an effort to use people's names. It is nice to hear your name.
Awww, a charming proposal story. How sweet to commemorate the place two people met. Those three prompt words were made for this piece of writing. Even the leaves fit. Such supposedly random words gained a cohesiveness here. I can picture the perfect scene.
Haha! This is a fun, light-hearted read. I like this perception of a Santa belting out his own lyrics to an easily recognized song. Soup? Stoop? Every workplace needs this kind of fun. I may be biased, but you implemented the prompt creatively. Thanks for the smile on my face.
Ah, the life of a teenager mother. It is not all glamour and giggles. The suspense is constant. Some mothers try too hard to be a friend to their child. I found the conversation in this story to be lifelike and believable. Communication in all relationships is key. Great use of the prompt.
This is a great use of the prompt phrase. Anybody who co-habitates with another will probably relate to this story. Room mates whether romantic partners or not have the ability to irritate. We are all individuals. That said, we have our strengths and we have our weaknesses. Thanks for the read!
Haha! If only electric vehicles were that simplistic, and only required a very long extension cord. Some ideas just need a bit of tweaking, eh? I know a few wives who expect the worst from their husbands and rarely are they disappointed. This is a funny flash fiction piece.
Ah, too late with that wise warning, Warren. Not too many would attempt a dangerous climb up a public precipice in broad daylight. It is a tad obvious. The ending is funny and unexpected. Bravo implementing the prompt sentence. This is a fun read. Maybe Warren will command respect next time.
I now know what it could potentially be like to drive soneone else's car. Ah, to have everything paid. As if! It is not very impressive for the dates though. This is a cute story and it does answer to the given prompt. I too think breaking a window would be excessive.
In a minimum of words you weave a poignant tale and capture a precious moment in time. Granny is sometimes transported to her past and that pull interferes with the reality of the present. You made great use of the prompt words. "Getting Granny a new resident near the sea." I believe you intended to write residence .
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