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Review of Project Hermes  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Words Whirling 'Round , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Project Hermes" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the Hermes launch reminding people of the importance of the Lunar colony. The description of the technology used kept the reader focused on the plot. The interaction of the characters built the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is a well-written and fresh simile, looked like an inverted candle flame in the inky vacuum surrounding the moon. It is visual and descriptive, letting the reader visualize it in their mind.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the way the descriptions of the technology was made part of the action.

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Review of Shadow Man  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, W.P. Gerace , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Shadow Man" , because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Amanda's conversation with her mother returning. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite simile, each beat sounding like some runaway train that would speed off its track to a deadly end. I like this simile because it is fresh and descriptive.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because the of the descriptions. They kept me focused on the characters and the movement of the plot.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, elizjohn , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "He Came Back for Love" , because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Impression: The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace. The main emotions of this poem are mourning and longing.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The first and last lines of this poem are my favorite. I like these line because they contain the most emotion.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it expressed the emotion of sorrow.

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Review of Dog People  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, Damon Nomad , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Dog People" , because I discovered it on the news feed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Shamus power-walking. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical difficulties.

I like: I like the climax because it was a happy ending and the logical conclusion to the story.

Final thoughts: Detective Anderson is right about dog people and cat people they can both be just as crazy.

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Review of Sophia's Library  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, LightinMind , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Sophia's Library" , because I discovered it on the short story page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the way Sophia discovered the library. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

In the first section Sophia's talent, personality, and fears are revealed. This helps readers to sympathize with her. The second section reveals Sophia as an unselfish person, who is willing to help her village advance no matter what difficulties she has to face. The third section help readers understand why Sophia and John are a good match.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: My favorite part of the story is the climax, because it suggested that Sophia and John would live contented and happy lives.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Sophia, which is a sympathetic and intriguing character.

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Review of The Fire Dragons  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, LightinMind , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Fire Dragons" , because I discovered it on the short story page.

First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with DNA changes. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The first half of the story reveals both Zhang Jin's personality and fears.

The best part of the story's second section is the description of the lab hidden in the Tibetan Himalayas. The description was detailed enough for readers to visualize it in their minds. This section also reveals that Zhang, despite his attempt to suppress it, has a conscience.

The climax of this story is the logical conclusion of Zhang's conscience coming realizing what could, and probably would, happen if the lab and everything associated with it weren't destroyed.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: Zhang is an intriguing and sympathetic character, who is changed by the project he worked on.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Zhang and the lesson the story suggested.

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Review of The New Order  
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, SizeFanDude79 , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The New Order" , because I discovered it on the fiction page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Nora being dragged by a super mutant. The descriptions are part of the action and moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite simile, like one would snap a stalk of celery. I like this simile because it is fresh and descriptive.

Final thoughts: The description of the transformation of the women was well-written, with enough details on how it was done to satisfy any questions the reader may have.

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Review of The Smith  
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, Whiskerfaceschoolsout! , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Smith" , because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (August 23, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Coalie’s description and his profession. This is a good character description because it gives information about Coalie that arouses the reader's curiosity. The reader wants to know more about Coalie.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: Coalie is an intriguing and sympathetic character.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this character description because of the person it described.

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Review of Take a Hike  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, THANKFUL SONALI Now What? , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Take a Hike" , because I discovered it in "Short Stories Newsletter (August 23, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the number of people on the hiking team and their title. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, knew is team-mates, I suggest changing is to his.

I like: John is an intriguing and sympathetic character. I also like the end where everyone way praying.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of John.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, PastorJuan , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Beyond My Wildest Dreams" , because I discovered it in "Action/Adventure Newsletter (August 23, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the Tailless Runner entering the planet's atmosphere. The speaker moved the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story. I like the climax because it showed that each species jumped to the same conclusion.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the conclusion each species jumped to.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, LdyPhoenix , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Every Shut Eye Ain't Sleep" , because I discovered it in "Action/Adventure Newsletter (August 23, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Leah failing in her mission. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: In this phrase, she could not moved, I suggest changing moved to move because move sounds better in this context.

I like: Leah is an intriguing and sympathetic character, who is a strong woman.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Leah.

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Review of Contest Entries  
for entry "How is it possible?" 
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Angelica- Happy Mothers Day! , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Contest Entries"  "How is it possible?" , because I discovered it on the "Twenty-three in Eleven "  forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the volcano turning blue. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the climax because the speaker knew why the volcano turned blue.

Final thoughts: The first person point of view and voice are good choices for this story because they focused on the action.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Mahe , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Where I'm From (Warendorf Edition)" , because I discovered it in "Poetry Newsletter (August 16, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, speaker, and theme of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace. The main emotions of this poem are love and nostalgia.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite. I like this stanza because it closes the poem with love and mourning.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because I the way the author express the emotions through the memories.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, John Farley , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Knowledge of Nothing" , because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (August 16, 2023)" .

First Impression: The second paragraph of this prose essay hooked me with the experience of infinite ignorance. The author describes his realization clearly, so that the reader can understand what happened.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last paragraph is my favorite because it reveals the change in the way the author live his life.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this well-written and thought-provoking essay because of the view of enlightenment it gave.

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Review of ZAZEN  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, ridinghhood-p.boutilier , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "ZAZEN" , because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (August 16, 2023)" .

First Impression: The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and tranquil emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite line, of aspiration and inspiration. I like this line because of the internal rhyme.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it show tranquility.

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Review of My Prayer  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Becky Simpson , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "My Prayer" , because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (August 16, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, speaker, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and spiritual emotions of love and hope forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The first stanza is my favorite, I like the first stanza because of the rhyme on pray and stray.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this prayer-poem because of the way it showed the spiritual emotions.

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Review of Jack and Jill  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, QueenNormaJeanGreeneggs&vegham , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Jack and Jill" , because I discovered it on the folklore genre page.

First Impression: The question about the time warp hooked me. The conversation between Jack and Jill move the plot forward at a good pace. The questions build the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax was a surprise, while being the logical ending to the story.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this take on one of my favorite childhood stories.

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Review of Sol'ginok  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, J.R. PETE , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Sol'ginok" , because I discovered it on the mythology genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker's statement in the first sentence. The descriptions are part of the action and moves the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: Sol'ginok, Soul Stealer, is a name that will strike fear into anyone.

Final thoughts: The first person point of view and voice are good choices, because they revealed Sol'ginok, as an intriguing and unsympathetic character.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Joey's Spring has Sprung , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Music is it a poem" , because I discovered it in .

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: These are my favorite lines, From the strings, cups, reeds, and skins pulled at various degrees of tension/Come harmonies to calm and cool our dissension. I like these lines because of the rhyme on tension and dissension.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this beautiful poem because of the subject.

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Review of Let It Grow  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Amethyst Angel🌸📝🪽 , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Let It Grow" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Joseph pruning the rose bush. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: Joseph is my favorite character. I like him because he is sympathetic, intriguing, and does not give up in his attempt to win Fiona back.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0, because the descriptions showed the beauty of the green house.

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Review of Thank You  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Chris Haines , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Thank You" , because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (August 16, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, speaker, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and spiritual emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite, I like this stanza because it expresses hope.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this beautiful prayer-poem because of the way it expressed the speaker's gratitude.

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Review of Meditation  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Going Away For Two Months , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Meditation" , because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (August 16, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm of this free verse poem moves the narrative and tranquil emotions forward a a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The third stanza is my favorite because it tells the reader the results of meditation.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written poem a 5.0 because it encourages the reader to meditate, while showing one of the methods of meditation.

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Review of My Prayer  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Chris Haines , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "My Prayer" , because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (August 16, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first line establishes the mood and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming word compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite line, Help so my future holds your face. I like this line because it makes an unselfish request.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this beautiful prayer-poem because of the way it expresses faith.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Reviewed in association with The "Flights of Fantasy Group"  August Review Raid.

Hi, Rayyna , I read and reviewed "A Night in Novgorod" , because the teaser aroused my curiosity.

The first paragraph hooked me with the description of the court of Novgorod. The descriptions are visual and allow the reader to understand the danger that is present. The descriptions also suggested the personalities of the main characters.

I like the description of sunset in the second paragraph because it was visual.

Morena is my favorite character because she is intriguing, strong, and somewhat unsympathetic. I also like the way she was described more through her actions and the way she made other feel then her appearance.

I found no technical problems.

This is a good character introduction because it shows Morena at her best, while suggesting there is something more to her then is seen.

I enjoyed reading this story and would like to read more about Morena and her partner. I would also like to know what happens between Morena and the visitor to the Novgorod court.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Kenzie , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Whisper Writings, Whisper Prayers" , because I discovered it on the spiritual genre page.

First Impression: The quote from Logan Pearsall Smith hooked me. It caused me to stop reading for a few seconds to think about the quote. The questions in the second paragraph made me smile, because sometimes, when I pause to read what I wrote, I wonder what is is I am attempting to convey to either the reader or myself.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last paragraph is my favorite. I like this paragraph because when I transcribe items from a handwritten journal to a computer document the words do change. Until now I have referred to it as editing. Now I wonder if its my soul whispering to me.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written and thought-provoking article a 5.0 because it gave me something to think about concerning my writing.

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