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Review of A Million Dreams  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Official "Quotation Inspiration: Official Contest"  Judges' Review

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First Impression: "A Million Dreams"  The first paragraph hooked me with the problem with the propellant tank. The interaction among the characters moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

What I like: I like the way this emphasized the title by using the song lyrics. It showed the disappointment of the commander and the crew.

Final Remarks: The first person point of view and voice were good choices for this story because it showed the emotions of the speaker.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Official "Quotation Inspiration: Official Contest"  Judges' Review

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First Impression: "More Than A Million Dreams "  The first paragraph hooked me with the description of the silence. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

What I like: I like the climax because of the suggestion that the digital memory was uploading to Lilia's brain.

Final Remarks: I enjoyed this story because of Lilia, who is a sympathetic and intriguing character.
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Review of Travel-Uppity  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Writer_Mike , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Travel-Uppity" , because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (August 2, 2023)" .

First Impression: Mabel's question hooked me. The conversation between the couple moved the plot and the laughter forward at a good pace, while revealing a little about their relationship.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: Both Mabel and Arthur are intriguing character. I like Mabel better than Arthur because she was somewhat more sympathetic.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this funny story because of the interaction between the couple.

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Review of The Island of Bob  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Adherennium Dr of Phoolishness , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Island of Bob" , because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (August 2, 2023)" .

First Impression: Bob the Milkman laying unconscious by his float hooked me. The narrative moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the laughter.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like all of Bob's personalities because Bob is an intriguing and sympathetic character.

Final thoughts: I am giving this story a 5.0 because it made me laugh.

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Review of The Swing  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, Beholden , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Swing" , because I discovered it in "Horror/Scary Newsletter (August 2, 2023)" .

First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with the death of Robbie. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite metaphor, a ghostly cloud that streams from her head in the chill breeze of the night. I like this metaphor because it is fresh and descriptive.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0, because of the active descriptions. The descriptions kept me focused on the plot.

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Review of Skeleton Bones  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, PB Curtis , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Skeleton Bones" , because I discovered it in "Mystery Newsletter (August 2, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with George liking to comb the beach. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation among the character builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The detectives went about solving the case in a logical way.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction of the characters.

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, ♫~ Kenword~♫ , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Chyrpiirs Ascending " , because I discovered it in "Mystery Newsletter (August 2, 2023)" .

First Impression: The statement about the bullets hooked me. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: A possible typo in this word, Luis. Is it spelled Louis or Luis.

I like: The climax of this chapter aroused my curiosity about what would happen next.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction among the characters.

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Review of Encounter  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Beholden , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Encounter" , because I discovered it in "Mystery Newsletter (August 2, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the woman's stillness in the crowd. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: My favorite paragraph is paragraph three, because of the way it describe people walking over the woman's head.

Final thoughts: The first person point of view and voice were good choices for this story because they made the description authentic.

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Review of Friend or foe?  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, M S Groves , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Friend or foe?" , because I discovered it on the action/adventure genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Drake descending the stairs into the darkness. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

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Final thoughts: Drake Grimstone is an intriguing character, who has the ability to be both sympathetic and unsympathetic depending on the circumstances.

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I enjoyed reading this story because of Drake Grimstone.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, SSpark , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Mighty Mesquite: Harbinger of Hope" , because I discovered it on the home/garden genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the mesquites weather prediction. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: My favorite part is the description of the mesquites because they were visual.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the mesquites.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Dan I Am , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "On the Road, Off the Road, On the Road" , because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker getting off the bus. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: My favorite is the part about the dog, because of the unique description

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the descriptions.

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Review of Smile  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, JustinRock , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Smile" , because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Jerry liking to spend time with his grandkids. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: My favorite part is when Jerry lost his teeth, because at 76 I can relate to it.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Review of Shadow Over July  
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi, Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Shadow Over July" , because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Impression: The first stanza draws the reader into this free verse poem. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace. The main emotions of this poem are disappointment and joy. The emotions change from disappoint to joy as the poem advances,

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like the way the emotions change as the poem advances.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it expressed two opposite emotions.

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Review of HOPE  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, strlcuckoo , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "HOPE" , because I discovered it on the community newsfeed.

First Impression: The first stanza established the form, mood, and plot of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of hope forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last line in the last stanza is my favorite because it climaxes the poems plot.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it expressed hope.

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Review of This Task  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Dave's gone until 5/22/2024 , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "This Task" , because I discovered it under online authors.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the theme and mood of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming word compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of discovery forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: My favorite is the way task in the first line of the first stanza rhymes with blast in the last line of the last stanza.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this beautiful poem because of the way it expressed the emotion of discovery.

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Review of Brown Eyes  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, strlcuckoo , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Brown Eyes" , because I discovered it on the community newsfeed.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, speaker, theme, and mood of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the romantic emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite because it closes the poem with the most emotions.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written poem a 5.0, because of the way it shows the emotion of love.

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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi, Vick Rolling 🏳️‍🌈 , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "A Stranger's Call (Contest Revision)" , because I discovered it in "Horror/Scary Newsletter (July 26, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the cell phone ringing. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction among the characters builds the terror and the suspense.

Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, Blake's boy collapses. I suggest changing boy to body.

I like: This is my favorite metaphor, The thunder applauds the lightning as it dances across the night sky. I like this metaphor because it is fresh and descriptive.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because of the terror it shows through the active descriptions.

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Review of Her Smile  
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi, Serena Blade , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Her Smile " , because I discovered it in "Horror/Scary Newsletter (July 26, 2023)" .

First Impression: Sarah's question hooked me. The conversation moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense and the terror.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax was the logical conclusion to this story.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this frightening story because of Sarah.

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Review of Time Bandit  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, JustinRock , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Time Bandit" , because I discovered it in "Fantasy Newsletter (July 26, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the date 2247. The conversation and interaction between the characters moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: My favorite part is Arlo's motive for hijacking the time machine. Only a person who truly loves french fries would do that.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this amusing story because of Arlo.

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, brom21 , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Heart of Zealous" , because I discovered it in "Fantasy Newsletter (July 26, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with blame it on the moon. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation between the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite sentence, ‘God’s strength is made perfect in weakness.’” I like this sentence because it is true and it is something we need to be reminded of ever so often.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the way it showed Touran's increase in faith.

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Review of The Changed Man  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Than Pence , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Changed Man" , because I discovered it in "Fantasy Newsletter (July 26, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the reason Polme Gra’taf hated his job. Polme's interaction with the customer moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: Polme handled the difficult customer very well.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the main character.

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Review of Hot and Spicy!  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, QueenNormaJeanGreeneggs&vegham , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Hot and Spicy!" , because I discovered it in "Comedy Newsletter (July 26, 2023)" .

First Impression: Murry's statement about the contest hooked me. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation among the characters builds the laughter and the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last paragraph is my favorite because it climaxed the plot and made me laugh.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because I enjoy eating spicy food.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Jeffhans , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Hyperbaric Deep Underground Base" , because I discovered it on the scientific genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the statistical anomalies of the deaths. The narrative moves the plot forward at a good pace, while giving information on why life spans increased.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to use this as background information to on longer story or novel about this subject.

I like: The last sentence is my favorite because it climaxed the story's plot, while suggesting the plot for another story.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the reasons for the longer life spans.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, WriterRick , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Clever Dragon of Neverbrook" , because I discovered it on the fantasy genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Cinders being neurotic. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense and laughter.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: My favorite part was the fireworks display by Cinders.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this beautiful children's story because of the dragon.

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Review of the shifter  
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi, emmittcarwell , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "the shifter" , because I discovered it on the mythology genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the difficulty a shape shifter has fitting into society. This is a good character introduction because it focus on the character's ability and attempting to fit in.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to expand this character introduction to show more background and give the character a name. This character would make a good protagonist in a novel.

I like: My favorite part of this character introduction was the shape shifter needing an education.

Final thoughts: This story is a good beginning to a novel because it suggest a character and a plot.

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