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Review of God be my Brother  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Spiritual Dawning , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "God be my Brother" , because I discovered it on the religious genre page.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the poem's form, mood, speaker, and theme. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the spiritual emotions of love and faith forward at a good ace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite line, In the name of love and the Holy spirit. I like this line because it establishes the poem as a prayer.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it showed the spiritual emotions.

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Review of Dead Man Walking  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Reviewed in association with The "Flights of Fantasy Group"  August Review Raid.

Hi, K Hawthorne , I read and reviewed "Dead Man Walking" , because the teaser, under the title, aroused my curiosity.

The first paragraph hooked me with Fracshon and Loti ascending the mountain pass. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

I like the similes and metaphors used in this story because they are fresh and descriptive. I especially like this simile, his words swirling around like withered old leaves, because it is visual.

I also like the way Fraschon is the focus of the story, because it suggest that Loti may not be following him.

Another thing I like about this story is the climax because it left the reader wondering what would happen when Fraschon found the cave. The reader also wonders if Loti is still behind his friend.

Fraschon is an intriguing character that can be either sympathetic or unsympathetic depending upon his actions.

I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to consider writing a longer story or novel about what Fraschon finds in the cave, if he ever reaches it.

I enjoyed reading this story because the descriptions kept me focused on the characters and the movement of the plot.

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Review of Who Do I Believe?  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Shadow Prowler-Spreading Love , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Who Do I Believe?" , because I discovered it on the relationship genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph of this essay hooked me with the questions. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while showing lessons she has learned on who to trust.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The fourth paragraph is my favorite, because it encourages the reader to listen to the Holy Spirit.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written and thought-provoking essay a 5.0, because of the advice on learning who to trust.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Massive Friendly Derg , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Why I'm Useful As a Dragon" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The rhythm of this prose poem flows easily from line to line and encourages the reader to read it aloud.

Suggestions: In this line, I can fly them places or just for fun. I suggest removing or because it does not appear to fit the meaning of the line.

I like: This is my favorite line, I can heat up frozen pizza or waffles. I like this line because a dragon would make these jobs so much easier.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this prose poem because of the dragon.

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Review of Renewal  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, lbidler , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Renewal" , because I discovered it on the inspirational genre page.

First Impression: The quote from Jeremiah aroused my curiosity and drew me into this prose essay. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while revealing the strength of her faith.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last paragraph is my favorite because of the stated goal of looking for ways to bear fruit,

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this essay because of its focus on studying the word of God.

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Review of Pots of Gold  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, W.P. Gerace , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Pots of Gold" , because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the text message. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like Thom because he is an intriguing and sympathetic character.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Thom.

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Review of The Final Journal  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Damon Nomad , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Final Journal" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the knock on Parker's door. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction and conversation among the characters built the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This simile caught my eye: like an altar in a sunlit church. I like it because it is fresh and descriptive.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction of the characters.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, lbidler , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Walk With The Lord" , because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (August 9, 2023)" .

First Impression: The quote from Isaiah hooked me. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while revealing a good way to study the sacred scriptures.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: My favorite part were the questions: Who are You Lord? What do You want from me? I like the question because they are spoken directly to God. I also like them because they are good questions to ask when meditating.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this essay, because it revealed a different way to study the sacred scriptures.

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Review of Living Backwards  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Beholden , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Living Backwards" , because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (August 9, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the man walking on the side of the road carrying a gas can. The conversation and interaction among the characters moved the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I like David because he is an intriguing and sympathetic characters.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the conversation between the characters.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, WriterRick , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Bard's Alternate Reality" , because I discovered it while port surfing.

First Impression: The first paragraph of this article hooked me with navigating a world that blurred the lines between fiction and reality. Each paragraph give information about this intriguing and frightening alternate reality that causes the reader to want to know more.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last paragraph is my favorite. I especially like the last sentence that suggests true growth and transformation occur.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well written article a 5.0 because of its educational value and the description of the alternate reality.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Gaby ~ Quiet contemplation , I am reviewing "A Gypsy Spins a Tale"  in response to the package you won from the "Flights of Fantasy Group" .

The first paragraph hooked me with Emily's question. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction among the characters builds the suspense.


One of the things I like about this story is the description of the market, because it used sight, sound, and smell to show what was going on.

I also like the way Matt show his love for his wife and daughter without mentioning the word love.

I like the climax because it was the logical conclusion to this story. It also left room to make this story the beginning chapter of a novel about Emily and her family as they flee the war.

I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters. The descriptions helped me to visualize each character in my mind.
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Review of Looking Beyond  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, lostboy , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Looking Beyond" , because I discovered it under read a newbie .

First Impression: The rhythm and rhyming word compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and emotions froward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: These are my favorite lines, A world of pain, of hurt and fear laid out for you to see./Conflicting with the sunshine dreams of how things ought to be. I like these line because they emphasize the difference between the way the world is and the way it should be.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way is showed the emotions of both sorrow and hope.

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Review of Autumn  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Priti Lowen , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Autumn" , because I discovered it under read a newbie.

First Impression: The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the emotions of sorrow and hope forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last two line are my favorite because of the rhyme on lost and frost.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the way it expressed the emotions of grief and hope.

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Review of Family Reunion  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, W.P. Gerace , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Family Reunion " , because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Georgeann not looking forward to the family reunion. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: My favorite part is the description of the rain storm. It reminded me of some of the rains storms in Oklahoma.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of how Georgeann change her feelings toward the family reunion.

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Review of The Journey  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, lbidler , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Journey" , because I discovered it on the inspirational genre page.

First Impression: The quotation from Jeremiah hooked me. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while giving personal examples that relate this prose piece to the quotation from Jeremiah.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite sentence, I created those wilderness periods by deliberately choosing not to obey and trust Him. I like this sentence because it is something that many believers know, but sometimes forget.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this prose piece because it is an item any believer can relate to.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, a Sunflower in Texas , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Season upon Seasons" , because I discovered it on the philosophy genre page.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the poem's speaker, mood, theme, and plot. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narratives and emotions forward at a good pace. The main emotions of this poem are fear and hope, both of which encourage spiritual transformation.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite, because it climaxes the poem's plot with hope.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because it showed spiritual transformation.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, J.R. PETE , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "How a Pencil gave me Hope" , because I discovered it on the spiritual genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker being the class clown. The speaker moves the narrative and the plot forward at a good pace, while the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: These are my favorite sentences, Instead of praying formally, I talked to Him like you were talking to a close friend. I like these sentences because the show prayer can be in any form.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because of the lesson about faith that it shows.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Dr Gonzo , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "This One Goes Out to All the Clumsies" , because I discovered it on the comedy genre page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker being a clumsy child. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while making this read smile and laugh.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite part of the monologue, ."Pass me my finger, please! It fell off while I was waving it at them"). I like this because it made me laugh.

Final thoughts: I am giving this funny story a 5.0 because it made me laugh.

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi, t00th4che , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The dangers of music " , because I discovered it under read a newbie.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the piano music. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I suggest beginning this phrase, pressing his ear with an upper case P.

I like: The best description in this story is of the woman playing the piano. It revealed her as an accomplished artist, who sought perfection in her craft.

The last sentence is my favorite because it climaxed the chapter's plot and revealed Azreal's talent.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Sumojo , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "A walk in the countryside " , because I discovered it on the "Twenty-three in Eleven "  forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker waking up with a hangover. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I enjoyed the way this story answers the question What could go wrong? I enjoyed the story because the question is on that usually has an unexpected answer.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because of the active descriptions.

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Review of My Weird Dreams  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Sandyw1 , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "My Weird Dreams" , because the title aroused my curiosity.

First Impression: The second paragraph of this non-fiction essay hooked me with the people walking in a wooded area. The author describes the dream in detail, which keeps the reader's attention.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The author's mother's explanation was good because it show her love for her child by giving the dream an obvious interruption.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this essay, because I have had some dreams that have remained in my memory since childhood. I suspect that dreams like this indicate something important in the dreamer's life.

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Review of Dreams  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Katie R Davis , I'm Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Dreams" , because the description under the title invites the reader to read this item.

First Impression: The rhythm and rhyming word compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the emotions of encouragement, inspiration, and hope forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite line, If you can focus your mind enough to get in the perfect zone. I like this line because it reminds the reader that focus is necessary to achieve one's dreams.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this inspiring poem because of its encouragement.

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Review of Dreamer  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Official "Quotation Inspiration: Official Contest"  Judges' Review

I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Quotation Inspiration: Official Contest" . Thanks for entering!

First Impression: "Dreamer"  The first paragraph hooked me with Adèle watching the good looking man. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

What I like: My favorite part is the surprise climax. I did not expect him to die suddenly

Final Remarks: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction of the characters.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Official "Quotation Inspiration: Official Contest"  Judges' Review

I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Quotation Inspiration: Official Contest" . Thanks for entering!

First Impression: "The Dream Recorder"  The first paragraph hooked me with Jason Mellon pacing his room and talking to himself. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

What I like: My favorite part of this story is the ad Jason made for the Dream Recorder, because it would arouse people's curiosity about the item.

Final Remarks: The climax suggested hope for Jason's recovery.
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Review of Dreamer  
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Official "Quotation Inspiration: Official Contest"  Judges' Review

I am reviewing your story as a judge for "Quotation Inspiration: Official Contest" . Thanks for entering!

First Impression: "Dreamer"  The first paragraph hooked me with Rob expecting the unexpected on his brother's visits. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

What I like: I like climax because Rob's decision to get power of attorney over his brother show how much he loved him.

Final Remarks: I enjoyed reading this story because of the Rob.
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