|Hi, ! I'm OOT™ and I'm honored to review your work on behalf of "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" .
My Thoughts: Wow. I have become so used to your daily smiles and groans, I had started to forget what a terrific writer you are. Well, I'm still waiting for you to finish the book you started that I fell in love with, but I understand that life gets in the way. Anyway, I digress...
First let me say that I'm not surprised by the beautiful trophy adorning this piece! I can't remember any story that I have read on the site that touched me as much as this one did. Furthermore, I can't remember reading a story on WDC that literally brought me to tears. But this one did. I'm nothing short of amazed. It's a little difficult for me to even write this review, because I'm still so wrapped up in the story itself.
I was drawn in from the first line, and I remained captivated throughout. Yes, I expected that Rick had been killed on September 11th, but the rest of the story took me completely by surprise. I wondered why Nick didn't just meet Sara, but that was explained at the end of the story. I got goosebumps as I read. Your writing was spectacular. I believe I'm awestruck right now, because I can't seem to adequately put into words how much this story moved me. It was terrific from beginning to end, and I would give it 10 stars if I could.
My Suggestions: I'm sure you know that I love to be able to offer some type of suggestion for every piece I read. And I must say that I really had to "dig deep" to find anything beneficial to offer. So, here goes:
In these sentences, "He had fond memories of that school. It had been a while, but he had fond memories," rather than using "he had fond memories" twice in such quick succession, why not edit to make it one sentence, "It had been a while, but he had fond memories of that school."
Also, "Rick pondered the call for a while." should be "Nick pondered the call for a while." That was an easy mistake to make, because the rest of that paragraph had been about Sara, so, of course, she was referring to Nick as Rick.
Grammar, spelling, and punctuation were flawless. I had to read the story twice to find anything to suggest, and I hope the suggestions were helpful.
Overall: Thank you for pointing me to this amazing story. As you can tell, I absolutely loved it. This is a piece that won't quickly be forgotten, as it had such an impact on me. As always, it has been a pleasure reading and reviewing your work, and I can't wait to get lost in some of your other stories!!!