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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings elle,
The typical girl that always mimic the adults especially the girls, like Ellen was doing in her "Ellen's Show".
The story has a good flow and the characterization is nice as these young children were doing and the result ?Poor Ellen with her
eyebrows. Descriptive . ..
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Aversion  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings naynizzy,
A poetry with a very intriguing message. It tells of the future as well as a sort of politically inclined in every move.
Like a heavy drama added with suspense.
Unique in its own way.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Music To My Soul  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings vindhya,
It is always nice to note and to know that there is "Music To My Soul", and this one is being shared through a well-written and beautifully presented poetry.
Joyful, mesmerizing, and wonderful.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Life's Jewels  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings brandonb194,
Truly describes of "Life's Jewels" in a very special and artistic way.
"just enjoy the joys
that God made by hand.
Enjoy this gift He gave you
this glistening golden land"
My favorite lines in this poem that also reminds me of a beautiful poem my parents taught me when I was young,"All Things Bright Is Beautiful"
Thank you for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON !
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Review of broken mind  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Greetings kissthesky,
The caption below the title made me very curious to know what is this "broken mind" about."aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa
which could be a scream or a yawn or whatever you did capture my interest.
Reading between the lines I believe that this is a novel in the making. The fact is there are corrections needed like the spelling as well as the presentation, yet I suggest to continue writing the story until the end and have it fully edited when the ending is done.
Good luck for this and I am sure sooner or later this will be fully written.
Thank you for the read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings eskay,
A diary is always a special thing for the writer who owns it, as it records what is in his or heart the events or the happenings of the day that includes many topics .
The story behind this poetry expresses a diary with posting many years ago and the conclusion of a sudden twist with a question mark" for others to rejoice in or despise?" makes this more truthful.
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Greetings Marissa,
A sample and a brilliant one. Fiction as it is, I believe this will come out as an interesting novel. Narrative and the storyline is interesting. There is a good flow and the presentation is nice.
Keep the thoughts flowing and keep on writing them. You are a talented individual and so blessed with the gift to write.
Thank you for the read and thank you for sharing this to all of us in this awesome community.
Write On !
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Review of My Mother's Hand  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings hisbaby,
I am sure your mother love this poem with all her heart as you describe her through her caring and loving hands.
My favorite lines:
"For as small as it be....
there is no greater love than the love given to me in my mother's hand..."
Well-said...Well-written !
Thank you for sharing.
Write On !
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Review of Yellow  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings dogpack,
Nice poem that expresses joy and gladness of the spirit. The wonderful color Yellow that radiates warmth like a ray of sunshine is the main topic of this poem simply because having a Yellow portfolio is truly great.
Very creative...
And Yes ! CONGRATULATIONS !
See you again in this awesome community.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings grzzbrdover,
The story has a good flow and the conclusion is unique as you allow your readers think.The presentation is great.
My suggestion (minimal):
"But he was so self adsorbed."
Please change the word adsorbed to......absorbed
But he was so self absorbed.
SUGGESTION ONLY.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Martha  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings bertiebrite,
A story with the main character Martha as the title. A story like a movie with scenes so remarkable and so interesting to note.
SAD as in dramatic with a reason.
My suggestion ....as to the continuity of the story:
"Ben got into the driver's seat and started the vehicle."
SUGGESTION ONLY.
Please change the name of Ben to ...Bartholomew
Bartholomew got into the driver's seat and started the vehicle.
Good Luck for the contest.
Thank you for the read.
Write On !
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings yuvenyach,
This is a poem that comes from the heart, so full of meaning and very touching.
The love for your mother as well as the love of your mother for you is beyond compare, so full of goodness of the spirit, so inspiring in every way.
I thank you for sharing this to all of us and for the opportunity for me to read this beautiful piece of love, honor and respect for your Mum.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings bellissima,
This is informative and helpful and it speaks of realities in life. A healthy living is a clean living and health is so precious and when one is sick medicine is expensive and discomfort follows.
My minimal suggestion:
"Thats all it takes."
Please put an apostrophe in the word "That's
"lets face it "
Please also put an apostrophe in the word let's
let's face it
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review of Love Letter  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Greetings gospelsalt,
A love letter with a song attached, and the message is a horrible sight to note especially this line:"I slit my wrists and write you a love letter........"
My suggestion in this work:
The letter i ....
i do, i think, i sit, i wish......Please capitalize the letter I which was being used many times in this work.
dont, cant.....Please put an apostrophe don't , can't
SUGGESTION ONLY.
Thank you for the read.
WRITE ON !
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Review of Hands  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings Thundersbeard,
The trials of life and the needed strength to keep going and of course prayers will help as it is all powerful.
A biographical essay about a family with the understanding of a husband and wife promise to love each other in sickness and in health. It is not that easy when one is sick and there are children to take care and the many things to be done, but once again GOD gives us problem surely there is a solution.
"to talk calmly, think calmly and act calmly" is indeed a brilliant idea.
Thank you for sharing this very touching story.
May the Good Lord watch over you, your wife , the children and be a happy family inspite of all these trials.
Keep writing an d keep posting.
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Review of I Am A Cornfield  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings idreamincolor,
WOW ! This is like a nursery rhyme that both young and old enjoy reading and reciting.
Beautiful as it is with its connectedness to nature.
I love it !
Thank you for sharing your talent through "I Am A Cornfield"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of The Interview  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings kiffit,
Hahahhahha ! "Take two seats then !" Very funny conclusion of a well-written and well-presented "The Interview"..
DESCRIPTIVE... The truth is , I wanted to read more of this story, possibly this can be added a few more paragraphs. Hahhahhahhha... Just kidding, this is fine and fun.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON !
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Review of The Greatest Gift  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Greetings dnadream,
This is inspiring and enlightening. Nicely presented all the way.The spirit is moving and GOD makes a way for you to gain such a wonderful, meaningful experience, giving you precious existence moment to moment, day by day.
Thank you for sharing this to all of us in this awesome community.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Habit  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings vercerise,
A poem with a good flow and it shares a deeply emotional message as it touches life without a spirit of eagerness.
I like the way you present your work.
I have nothing to correct. I like it the way it is .
Thank you for sharing "Habit"
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of Just a Dream  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Greetings insomnia at rest,
An essay, or a prose or an article describing one's emotional state, sad and blue.
My suggestion:
The letter i which was being used many times in this work, Please have it capitalize.
Suggestion Only.
Thank you for sharing your work.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review of The essence  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings arwen,
The poem is nice like a beautiful song that describes one's special individuality, precious and unique.
I love these lines:
I stand alone, not lonely
I stand strong
I stand surrounded by love
I am who I am"
It fits for the lyrics of a lovely song stating that "knowing to love yourself, is the greatest love of all"
Thank you for sharing "The essence" which I believe is really an inspiring piece.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Greetings brandonb194,
A poem so direct to the point, so pure message from the heart.
Gay/Lesbian...in this generation they are accepted, embraced and appreciated except for the few hypocrites who believe that they are perfect, when the fact is nobody is perfect because we are all human beings.
I like your free-verse poetry, very honest.
My suggestion:
The word lord, it actually is referring to God, so please capitalize the first letter, "Lord"
The word its/Its....Please put an apostrophe...it's ...It's
dont....Please change it to ....don't
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings mrjavitrinidad,
OH ? I find this a very intriguing story, the title alone makes me want to read your work.
The story has a unique twist and also a sad one for Miss Swanson ending up that way.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings eskoartz,
Reading the title, made me so happy for you in having God as your best friend. Reading the poem, I agree with the religious genre in its own inspiring lines that made this work so meaningful.
I have a minimal suggestion but still the same, I admire your work:
"Living from my soul rather then the flesh.
"
Please delete the
and please change the word then to...than
Living from my soul rather than the flesh.
Thank you for the read.
Write On !
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Review of My room, my life  
Review by tsurtidogni
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings acedimond,
The story behind the poetry is inspiring especially the last four lines that completed this work.
I like this from the start to the end, and yes the ending of the poem, the last line is a nice twist with a spirit-filled message to your readers.
All in one, I enjoy reading your work that expresses the true feelings of the heart.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
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