Greetings In2Writing,
The deepest emotion is showing here as I read between the lines of your free-verse poetry.
A big release of such emotion and I believe you feel much better or relieved after writing this poem from the heart.
I have nothing to suggest or to correct. Keep it the way it is,
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
Greetings dansturn,
Religion is the theme in this poem and the words chosen to complete this work is in perfect harmony.
Very well written as it shares where is Heaven and where is hell.
The last line ? Very authentic, very sincere.
Nice !
Thank you for sharing.
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Greetings maxell,
A prose that sounds like a love song to me. Writings from the heart.
My suggestion :
"I knew you was the one"
Please change the word was to....were
Its a feeling........Please put an apostrophe in the word....It's
im going insane..........Please change the word im to.......I'm like the I'm not sure
wasnt.....wasn't
Also the letter i .....Please capitalize it.
Suggestion Only.
Thank you for sharing.
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Greetings Mara,
Mona, the secret admirer of Christian dies all because of her crazy and confusing love. But in reality, I believe this
happens.
The title is captivating and the cpation below the title is intriguing.
Descriptive and there is a good flow.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
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Greetings Miss Giggles,
Hhahaha, What our mind can really do and the imagination is great and fascinating.
I enjoyed reading your work.
My suggestion:
Words to be changed as follows:
possitions....please change to positions
intruiging.....intriguing
judgemental......judgmental
Well, keep the thoughts flowing and keep writing and posting.
Thank you for the read.
Greetings pinkbutterflies,
Interesting story with a very sad ending. Captivating title and unique storyline in its own way.
Poor Rosa and poor Jake.
Amazing characters like Happy, then Angry, and eventually Melancholic.
Highly impressive.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings jadearielle,
A prose about the wonderful gift of God, "Rain", and you described it in your own poetic way.
My suggestion:
The first word Rains....Please change this to....Rain
Rain is a clenser.....Please change the word clenser to...cleanser
humilated....Please change this to...humiliated
Suggestions only.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
WRITE ON !
Greetings Lana,
A lovely poem and its own beauty is clear and full of warmth, like a ray of sunshine that spreads all around.
Thank you for sharing your talent through "Footprints of the Heart"
Lovely as it is from the start to the end.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings pdykie,
WOW ! How interesting ! William, the main character, a boy, a very special boy..
The story is wel-presented. It has a good flow and I wish to read more of this until the end.
This is a future bestseller.
Thank you for sharing.
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Greetings ezas,
A poem so full of deep emotion and yet so strong as ot fits to the given title.
Yes ! Honesty is not a crime and it is still the best policy.
"It's up to me
To make things right"
My favorite lines in your work and it is so powerful.
Thank you for sharing your talent.
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Greetings Tim Chiu,
The poetry of friendship and total, honest caring.
Friends come and go but real friends stay forever accepting and embracing our individuality is the wonderful message I gain in reading this work.
Thank you once again Tim for another wonderful read.
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Greetings Alynn,
A free-verse poetry written with so much love and care. True to its given title this poem is inspiring in every way.
My suggestion:
And juggling about 4 more things
Please change this to..Ang juggling about for more things
Gaurantee..........Please change this to Guarantee
Suggestion Only.
Thank you for sharing.
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Greetings magicofthe ink,
A short prose about life and the way it is in a sad way as it ended.
Well, may I add a little, "shattered life can always be rebuild and eventually be enjoyed"
Thank you for the read and the opportunity for me to share my idea about life.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings stokecity,
The title fits for the story behind the poetry.
Wise words, and the three lines in each stanza make the poetry so nice.
My suggestion:
The last line: Please delete the last word with a bitem format {/center}.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On !
GREETINGS STELLA,
I was very curious with the la la la la caption below the title "Poem" which gives the uniqueness to your work of art and special creativity.
Reading between the lines of the story behind your work, I find it fascinating and amazing as in a Glorious Work.
From the start to the end, I am truly impressed.
Thank you for sharing.
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Greetings jadiaz,
The love/romance poetry that has a very sad ending. Regrets always come at the end, too late but life goes on....
The last stanza is a twist of the story behind the poetry.
I like the presentation.
Thank you for the read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings readertolearn,
The title offers great readership as it is always a blessing to have a friend.
The written lines are so true, and my favorite line is:
Friendship can make memories blossom like flowers on a beautiful spring day.
I enjoy reading your free verse poetry that looks like a prose to me.
My suggestion:
Possibly you can improve the presentation.
Thank you for sharing.
Write On !
Greetings floridaauthor,
Reading the title as well as the caption below the title made me very curious what is this all about.
AHA! I am not that knowledgeable as far as technology but my husband, my daughter and her husband are.
Thank you for sharing something informative and in return I can share to my family. This is one of the reasons why this Writing.Com. is so awesome.
Thank you for the read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings cianter,
I enjoy reading your poem that shares wisdom and written with questions and answers.
HOPE, one virtue that keeps me going and enjoy this wonderful journey called life.
For all that was written in this poetry, I AGREE !
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings mikewrites,
A story so touching that shares and expresses the truth, it hurts but it is the truth, making us free to live fully no matter what the situation is.
This is an exquisite and an authentic writing. Highly admirable.
Thank you for sharing a story with the most meaningful title.
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Greetings Cairylee,
The poem expresses a kind and caring soul to animals. The joy gained in return is very sure here regardless of all the pets unpleasant activities in the home.
I love this line"But all is forgiven" Very true . The poem is lovely ! So full of life .,.
Thank you for the fun I gain reading your work.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings overkord,
A love poetry and I admire the chosen words that completed this work. I like the rhythm and the rhyme too.
My suggestion:
"But to the many who are truely in love"
Please change the word truely to.......truly
"is all i have to say" Please capitalize the letter I
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
Greetings jrm24,
A poem or a prose ? The facts of life as facts of life as far relationship is concerned.
And the sad ending.
My suggestion: The title.....Please put an apostrophe in the word "That's"
Thank you for sharing.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings slimysnail,
I am not going to touch the grammar issue because you are aware about it. This is a story in progress so you are surely going to edit this.
May I give a suggestion for this.
Possibly for a better presentation you may divide this to five or six or even to seven paragraphs.
Yes! Keep the thoughts flowing. Write them and edit them.
Thank you for the read.
Keep writing and keep posting.
Greetings StuAyris,
The story behind the poetry is like a story of a bestseller novel that once I started reading I do not like to stop until I read the last page or the ending. This proves how wonderful your work really is.
The title ? FANTASTIC!
Thank you for sharing.
WRITE ON !
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