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Review by Patrick Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Well,Yes what you have written is quite true,It is as if faith or Beleif is a sort of wish fufuilling carousel of usubstantiated phantasy with nothing on the other side of spritual reality
Many take these vehicles if beleif into eternity,
one can only imagine the sounds of smashing into some cataclysmatic clanking cans of colligenenus false soul matter into what God has actually said, or told folks to believe
They who have these wrong beleifs are sometimes lake the Wizaerd fo OZ with the victims of tjere imaginations, no unlike the winsomely timid tin man, shaking before the chatlatan potentate, he goes up in his ballon and confessed to Dorothy " i dint know how this thing works....Dorothy looks up sadly and demurely pretty,.but she should be mad
I must confess many times even in my walk iam deeply doscouraged and confused.When this" happens fellow seeker i minimalize eveerything down to teh sound of a clarion reality,
an Avatar, of truth came down, i ate his words and was satisfied,
Oh yes, at times I say this or Write that and people counter it..or doubts assail me, but I return to him and keep walking in his words.
your Poem is metered an written impeccably, carefully,but it would appear you have become weary of discerning what is Behind faith and belieief,
yes i agree it is at times smoke ana mirrors, im almost loathe to use such an antiquated term,, but here goes "take heart", dont give up,you have an advocate for truth that you are seeking.

John:18:vs,,,34-38.
Jesus said,"My kingdom does not belong to this world,:If my kingdom belonged to this world, my followers would fight to keep me from being turned over to the Jewish authorities!
No, my Kingdom does not belong here."
So Pilate asked him,"Are you a king then?"
Jesus Answered, "you say that Iam a king, I came in to this world for one purpose, to speak about the truth. whoever, belongs to the truth, listens to me".
so Pilate asked him,"And What is truth?".....In closing,Please.. seek truth still benot diccouraged and fall away he has it, to this i swear,,,have a nice day, we have conferrd slightly before, and i have recieved some pleasant notifications, they have cheered me, im not bieng fecicious or false when sometimes i look at the reads "looks' at my sermon, and they are the smae day after day, sterile Perusall's make me sad, I say "is anybody out there?" Let us be friends, God bless you and keep you in jesus and in his truth, patrick, thank you
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Review of Life  Open in new Window.
Review by Patrick Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)

Well,You are cheerfull for a stoic,uh ?
is that flag, New Zealand's banner?.
Thanks for writing back thought fully,very nice, Sometimes when i see the rereview im always excited, but then th authors bite me with a sort of effete derison for what they believe is over bearin childish Christian naivate, How dare they?.its easy. they dont believe you,,,.,people must realize whether they likeit or not that the things written will definatively be made real, believing in the present reality because you can see and, touch it, short sighted ness to god who made us in his image...free will is a snare tath will make poeple greet eternity with endless absence from the creater, he honors faith in hin , this will exclaimed loudly and definatively.Im so weary of the street preachers screamning Damnation an hate at people whao are gay,lesbian,or transgendered adn fighting hatefully with them...I tell them boldly allahve sooned and fallen short of teh glaory of God..all flesh with souls inside need only accept jesus witha heart felt thank you and enter in.....there was a truly glaoriou paoem wirtten about william boooth teh ceater od teh salvaltion army, he went blind,and wore a genrals uniform he didnt judge but screamed for more lost to come to jesus and be made clean...he lived adn breathed jesus glory and damned self rigteousness wherever it was, a glorious street being being
hmmm.. i don know why but i rather liked the essay /poem, strangley "positive' it reminded me a lttel of how The two men at the end of "Hamltet"... where thinking about falling to there deaths,darkest humour, one is oblivious to its imortance an the other deepay concerned about its importance, i suppose its an honor, thems being Englishmen. i have the bard upstairs on a book case, but my wife has endenutred me to a myriad host of house chores, im wondering deelay if she really believes in jesus or just getting me to do things she wants done...its llike being in a workig concentraiton camp..ah me jesus anullled divorce.....


since your a nice Gentlemen and Im will shorlty burden you with a few little thiings, to assit you to have a happy landing after you fall.
I do this out of concern, first, a littel tale just for you,
im really cheap, sooo i tried to do all the home repairs myself, rather than let the plumbing guerillas in, i never really unederstood why God comamnded us not to kill one another, until a greedy littel plumber wanted about 1000 doallars to installl a toilet,greed in the land is rabid,
so i thought dont commit a homicide do ir yerself.
so got teh toilet and started on may adventure,, Its not a hard thing to do, but u need to studay a how to do book which home depot publishes. did i do that? uh,,, nope.
After many fails i hated that littel greedy little man who inadvetantly, made me attempt this,
however, a friend, thats kinda "me' to you i guess, said,,get the home depott Book adn follow it religously you and you will succed, i couldld say i did completley,and allwent splendidly, bu in truth i sorta folloed it and it was passable,,,,,,,,,im sure, your going What the hell does this mean,?
i will also worry some about the re-review,i have coaurage an say whatever it .. it is.. but will manfully check it out if u write one,,,,kinda scary but...deliciously intriguing as well.
Heres may point, the bible is the "how to book' of how to live, see, adn be fullly realized in who and what we are... created biengs in need of our creaters love, Jesus is the way to get it and be whole...he is "the way'..Sorry, rather long and,,,eeeh gaddity perhaps annoying,, but, soulfull an heartfelt,
I wrote it cause your pretty sincere guy an our insight are quite good, but slighty cynical. ,, life on earth, with all foibles an challenges is still,,,about..goin point a..this, life tuh point B.....heaven... The bilbe is the way to get there, listen...in the book of "john' the first seekers upon being called by God/
Jesus inquired mundanely."TEAcher.Where are you stayng?," True to form, ( God uses curooausity to draw us in) his answer was crypotic adn mysterious, " come and see"...
So,They did adn found God, i did too, and found him,...iam the same as i was before, but decidedly not the same as i was before, the "soul' is mysterious, but it aware of faith, id it bleieves in jesus promises it will be seen by God and chronicled by God, the fall will be soft and eternity spent in love and peace,
your going " how nice"...but dont doubt,sir, the child speaks a truth...Im a littel about waht i have written, but i have Written it for you, please Listen...I bleive you will consider it somehow
in closing, many people in the site are wary of me an may proseltyyzing attempts, as they see them, but i will be bold this day , and ask you to seek deeper, full realization comes by just believing simply... (it is written) unless you believe like a chld, you willnot enter the kingdom of God" thanks for reading this, be blessed and just believe
.....your new friend patrick, pax in christos
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Review by Patrick Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
You bring up intersting conundrums, but "faith" that is strong or real is not blind, it must have grounding or its just phantasy.ee
The idea of just jumping in someones bandwagon is a real possibility if peope a hoping to live off the vapors of everyone else who is going just to be going,God/ jes,,us in my opinion frowns on this," How weary iam of these lonely posoeurs"
he must say.
to many beleive it or not, they refuse to even take th baby steps of crying out becasue of what people will think, its foolish but, true.
I dont really dont know you, but... you migth be surprised at what will happen if you just jump adn start investiagating what, happens if you call out to jesus,
its not a magical thing that occurs,but... you might, detect a change in the weather spirittually, thanks you for your letter, very real,uh Bye

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Review by Patrick Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
Now um,Hmmm, well one thing youve proven is that the coherency of a long sentence is saved from being a run on sentence if the writer is blessed in The automatic blessing of im definatively feelingittedness. some leivity
Provin aliens exist i believe this cant be done,
but.., a diveriosn,
Uh.. hmm?
isnt it a littel like the song of the late David Bowie," starman" when the two kids are calllin each other up before knockin off to beddy bye....and they have the same iconic Teenage dreamy epiphony....
"Hey did you see him in the sky?"
"What?,,, I mean yeah i did... wow u saw him too?...."
and then the teen hymn starts starts in in the church of Phantasy.
thank your for your "notification'...no lecture, just another souls take on the U F O thing,
The abductees Tales intriguing, but not conclusive, and seem to rabidly be enjoying attentnion,
One guy told do ruffian "alien' tired of the aductees struggleing said, "calm down we always release you after" I mean honestly its intriguing copy But
a lottle too muchiike a little to like the eighth graders bullying the sixth graders
I willhave to use scripture,,,,,:"let your yes be yes adn no..well,,no, lest it become tainted with evil" from James.
So um... No, its just us brother
So lets go back to the two littel english sixth graders, a charmimg epiphony, but a literary device um...not for me,
In closing the devil is in the details, to keep him out jesus has shone me the abject simplicity and soundness of the planetand its other bodies above, and assured me spiritually and scientifically its just us down here.
we must go back to the basics,only God in the form of a man came down adn said to all who bleive in him he gives the right to become his Children of God, chlldren of the "day' to see, to walk an see what is and what is not.
Just sayin.... not a fight, so wear of it. soo thats me..and you for now may not agree,,
thanks fot notification, and praise Jesus through him in all things were created, wihtout him nothing, bless you, in his all encompassing name, your studies your work and your students in you care professor..patrick
But we have free will, so
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Review by Patrick Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoyed your memoir,its Patrick by the way, Still cutting lawns in Greenbelt, Terribly sorry, the town you live in and serve as mayor escaped me, i recall only it was knda near Greenbelt.
your piece showed tha When we hinor our parents we aee made happy and also cheering for others to read.
I liked the ending line an it is a benefit of all who cling tothe feet of our saviour that death cannot to swallow up relationships after people pass.
Just wanted to say " hello".....
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Review by Patrick Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you, wrote it late, kinda uh ,,hmmm..uh? emabarassing,.
how in the heck did you read that thing....?
The aniticipatory rush of what would maybe, happen with the John's gospel message's...and what actually did...un well,,Frankly, turned into a great deal of angst and and dissapointment,
It didnt help that it had been so long since i wrote, i had no idea how to use the plethora ofnew tools, and each one, took about a week to edit,For or five weeks to get, the offering ready,
Its nominally edible verbiage.. drags a lot..pushy and in some rambles, boring uh if wanna read one..A few folks gave some reviews as my own thiking without a conacordence of any kind,,,Not true..a few,maybe two, in the beginnim beginnig of covid as much more enalightened than i actually deserve to be thought of....
Still lately rarher desondent
unhaooy concensus is the venue is not really going to bear fruit..
never say never with God..But,,well look man,,its professional folks dreamin of being a paper back writer's...The oceanic and unfathemable cosmic consequences of just bleiveing in jesus is real, an deserves at the very least a thank you to Him..I worry for these people, they believe what they wish to..,,in regards to eternity stupidly subjective, feels good ,,,uh now!!
but... though im turned off by our "writers", ima convinced with the mild hybids of truh.. like welsey, its going down as God has ordained....
Im not yet what we shall, " street preacher im mad ar you,yeah yeah im mad at you guys an that all there is to it..you rebels you",,.an unforunate childish syandrom syndrome.Which alienates people to jeus gift...
Im really not going there,,They have sinned to run people off as they do...thia I know, but, the lack of hits, and any quickening at all in many, sota gave me a window into why they get so hatefull,
they will be rebuked in the end for driving away sheep
Um sir, the siundest of the vehicles in the foursome, Is probably "Lazarus,' but the most hits and may favorite is stangley, "Nicodemus"...."wowman at the well" the first to go in, is not fully fleshed out, but, married couples, lovesick girls and all whoar ahuam adn like to be e\"in love".. will be woken up by its honesty about how far love goes or doesnt...
After i wrote the mess last night Jesus said....You will reap what you will, p yet your letter gave me hope for th foursome to live...how may oh brother of these folks here we amuse ourselves with literarilay, But jeus makes me wonder sadly, will we see im heaven..?truly dont know, perahos if we sirit driven manage to make one or two or many a thank you to jesus, By our Gdd inspired literature, the thank you f sincere will be chronicled..what a delight to see them.. i his place he prepared.
together let us try...thank you so much, for considering my request for help.dont you dare feel "jammed" oh brother,, be free,,Be real, with me, in our personal master jesus we are alone Free,amen amen an amen Patrick b
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Review by Patrick Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi bob, its patrick, the salty humanity an winsome honesty of flesh adn blood people is alway enduring, uh.. So often i took refuge in the small town world, *im from pittsburgh,) around me adn the rhythm of nuances an strugglesof the likable and winsomely homely n bruisinglay charming ways of working class hmm,nice literary inaterlude, i readit months before,,,
Uh heres a little update of what ive been doing, im doing this because something i wrote u gave, the space ship organ piece,um.. in your RErereview you told me if im not msistaken that you were a "minister" of jesus. i belieive you..
Christianity, curiously,is in my opinion, the only safe and reliable way to have the happy ending on the other side, however; it is the one spiritual thrust that condones preaching,(jesus example) the boat slightly off shore "his pulpit',,, we follow,,also, as the remote places where there was nothing to feed the people, until..well my point is this
( i realize of course this is a critiquing sight not a venue for requests for assistnce form evangeists,,oh well tool ate now,
It is my intent to move people to salvation with sermons in this writin site,this little automatically writtne thing could help..revealing christians humamnity, yieah peoe we are jaut like you in many ways...
i willl in no ways be fecicious or falttering if i asked for a short, (yes its labor i know..we both know,as minister or trying to be one) not only wouid it help me in my long an delrious climb to the destiny that he is calling me to..for a criique a gains being boring,,ifits boring how can theye be saved? must Be real
In closing hoW many times sir, have both of us listened to a message purportedaly to get us to see jesusn but unforotuantlely, and brother i speak truth, many times we are bored to death,,,it is the christan faiths dirty little secret..Er the preachers lose our listener attention.......We know its true,
the "prodigal sons" dinner story was not so..nor i blieve anythign the master did, he was heoroically an beautfully gloirous to the end...Therefore if yo could,,.critique mostly for lag in interest and if any grave theological errors,I dont believe there are any,,,
i want my listenr engaged..not restless adn bored. yes,I have in my writing acredoutmy anst and unahppiness but..iam human man...he is working on me,Iam still learnning
my main sruggle is to move the heart...To see his Beauty and though humble, his very real God head, his back drop an ugly unloving world,,surely many will go to him, i push and believe absolutely in each souls ability if they blieve in him persoanally, to make the reader confident that his simple childlike beleif in him well be rewarded, jesus never he has but left to prepare a place for us in heaven.he is true...
up to you,,any help appreciated ..thank you brother,,, your voice was deeplay encoauraging in our thank you for my reiviw,,sorry if indulgent adn graspng or indulgent, ..iam of course a sinner patrick
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Review by Patrick Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
wherever the servant of God goes and witnesses, he gets funny looks,
Rather than do the obvious thing an go " "I will give him a piece of my mind",
nope, instead ill telling you some intriguing thing.. that happend to me,I was taking a writng class,uhh..hmm?Well.. after it, i had to get groceries... I notiice one of my classmates animatedly, but seemingly joyfully refuting Everythng an Evangelist was preaching to him,
The two of them were doin a kind of animated "u say potatao// i say paa tott,,opphh" you know, a dance of "apologetics" before all of the shoppers in the giant Eagle,
Each one had a smile a mile wide,...as i watched them, things got curiouser an curiouoser.
Later on, in the week i saw may classmate,
I tried hard to just mind may own business, (i never can,uh.. does it show,?"
oh well, I couldnt help but ask him,
"What in the world was going on between you and the evangelist in the Giant Eagle?.
Again he got his coast to grin, and his eyes became wide with pleasure, that i was watching the whatever, it was that went down between them
He said.." well, when those people proselaytize me with big smiles I go into battle mode and summmarily out happy them."
At the time I just laughed,and laughed. yep thats what he said.....
My name is patrick, I studied Theatre, English writing( primarialy fictioan writing.. and lead bible studies in my church, your writing was crisp and easy to understand,and though i dint agree with with you, fighting won get us anywhere...We shall end this conversation.....With the iconic meldaoy and happy but childish old sonog " why cant wee be freinds, .why cant wee bee friends etc etc..have a nice day sir,patrick



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Review by Patrick Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Genuinely intriguing,
you could give me a good run for my money as the most inetersting man in the world,if it were not that the two of us are also rans,
in comparison with the sojourns of saintly men listneing to jesus and then actualizing wonderful things in the fallen world, I also read "soon" which showed off your ability to engage the reader, but in a macabre way.
the formatting for "soon' took me by surprise, as it was not the call and response with the little mary had little lamb ringtone.
truly, theres a lot to be said for a sort of steam of consciousness,that offers up intriguing things that are real an not forced upon folks,
forgive me you seem to have been raised and than fled catholicism when teh flying magical twists an turns of its chitty chitty bang bang path to heaven took liberities of a sentimental an literary tragectory.its not apsostate but..hmm im taking the Jeuus train,you?
I should talk, i mean sometimes when i scribble things, i know intutitively that my errant veniality to be the most inersting man in the world is at the cost of the holiness to lead people to jesus is lost,
Jesus is mercifull, he knows our proclivities sir,his yoke is light, still im chstised some
Im repenting an learning, pruned adn chasitised but not cut to the root jesus is like a kind elder brother who is also God.yes really!
i know, i know we were having a good time chatting in our attmepsts to be the most ineersting men in the world or the little site we hang out in, and then, the proselytying. maybe? yeah ? but his mercy is great an it is true,
any way back to a real critique, um about "soon',
heres a lil story, its real,
Uh hangin oout in a university section in Pgh, oakland bein the most inersting man in the world with street theatics i wasnt happy just lively, hauled in like a fish by missinary koreans and in the long circuiotous,
Darn it again! too much me,sorry, see jesus warns me,,,
any whoo one of then tol me a lil story,
Koreans are incredible folksh story tellers, when allowed to live in the free world, can u beleive north korea,i mean steal a tank an get out,
anywhoo again sorry, its in regard to "soons' ending, still criquin , uh sorta, by the way, its ending too open ended an not crypticallly going anywhere.."soon' your tryin to dig up mystery, but uh,,the hole not big enough or someting...it sorta just sits there,,maybe jus me,
inconclusive,
sorry you may feel this guys collecting me in his army of "most inersting men in the world" to make me an evangelist,um man,n goin,, what is it? i gotta get tuh work
.anywhoo... this little korean woman, told me a story, of her family who were not happy about her conversin and bleifs, particualrlay the ressurection, they were apparently viewien cadvers in a douamntrary together watchin boob tube,viwieng a tomb, such as the one you showed, an fam memberss open facedly an annoyingly( they scraap all the time) asked her, "do you really bleive these rotten things can be brought back to life, you must join us in our adultness an stop this "nonsense o sister,"
there faith was dead, when folks are dead they stay that way, kinda un sunshiney, sumpin like that,

But to her, and to me beleieving this is possiible to b made alive for an omnipotent God is a baby step,
the "real' mountain is maintaining faith in a day to day pragmatic an reall world of flesh adn blood an dollar adn cents an and tangable "adult' realities that mount pretty impressive assaults on our child like faith, a child has come to help you in this its me man
What do I say to someone like you,?
Hope all things, beleive all things, an accept all our masters love an what he has promised,he "was" here!
when the scripture says they will mount up as eagles. its implied, "eagles plural'. its a fraternity of Eagles,
join me man, dive head long into it, it is written for all those who bleived he gave ther power by faith to become children of God, not born of the will of man or flesh an blood but of God and spirit, "
(forgive me im paraphrasin), but, do uh, you hear wind brother? do you hear a call to go up into a wind draft, with a cavalier cry beside you,"
Are you coming, say yes not no ....so tired of no,
just spread wings n believe God is with you, jesus love is real.. hey,, stop doubitn,
thank you for your time,
you write quite well, may Jesus bless my words so as to see you in the beyond,simply say thank you to jesus, if your so moved, check out portfolio, in closing say thank you to jesus for his seperation from Father to cover yours and all the worlds sins once, an its secured in his chronicles, i want to see you in this place please do so
Bless you patrick
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Review of A Quiet Place  Open in new Window.
Review by Patrick Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Yes, i see you are new,I read your piecem you capture well the quaint ad simpple ways of what childhood is,Also the penny piching an bondage to money mom experirences for the medication for Marcus,Also, the Expletive head Dad who takes the batteries to bring peace which is neccesary but a heartfelt dad expalinin or makin supplication fro his sons emor joy would please jesus, nope jus another damned tyrant,uh i got kids butif u mustknow id be checkin out the rocket ship adn puttin it thriough its paces, Hmmm your, writing is easy to read and it shows you clealry understand the nature of familail relations an compassion or lack of it in these situations.You have a good sense of reall dialogue and deftly go
intho the psyche of the speaker or thinker. thisloolks like its an excerpat from a novel about this family, a sortof grapes od wrath thing but they live in a
apartment on teh dole or something,hmm so in closing, uh this,sorry have ot be alil pasurial adn soiritual for your sake, uh.. in justice ineqity in deaing with kids, peopole all of us do this, we see peevishness adn kinda go uh Tahtone ison my list of those who icnt loveo rhang out with due to there behiviour in treatin me,yeah it happens ithappend to me in a large family wherien i sorta figures out realituy and how to mangage all by mysellf adn kinda was unurtured
i becam ecceedingly creative, that may g=have been waht made u like my little thiag i wrote. Jeussh heloed me toget by in my earlytwenties an now.oam able to appera sa a normal chriatian man ,but its not easy, my childhood was as anatelete whodidnothing in school, i wasa winsoe tarzan in sorts crazy america, a coolwild an craze kod,but not rally an aceptable little fellow who nly made his way by his creativity an athleitc talents. that he learned from watchin tv or coaches who he wearied,
not evryon in the fam ,was able to resolve this lack of care, love adn trainig, children need endoemoaus nurturing, an some in fam are deeolay damaged, an just lament,
i fraternize with all my bros an sisses, im am imploring them tow write stuff or make cool artistic stuff fro u tuebe, many are musicians or witers like me, we are irish, and lsot a couason to acohol in clossin sister, as a a chriatian i no longer party but talk to them, but my eledest brother only lamests childhoods inequities adn the crappiness if his rearing, adn selfishness of mon adn dad with nine creative needy Irish kids , in the end my child, all wounds all indequity, yes its real, u showed it, adn brusqueness of handling due to exterteriour inequtities, can be overcome with Christ, teh ganrled tree can grow into a beautifyul creature, if they find jesus personanlly an hold to hos feeet like a worshiper in thw first church at antioch, I see you as just such a woman of faithm by faith and by creative but mostly faith dreaming, thank you fro ntification an a like patick
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Review by Patrick Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
it is indeed wearying to say something and then have another person counter it with a " yes i suppose but,,uh hmmm, cant you see?", perhaps, o frieind in youth, (you expressed its forays into confusion and its subsequent fearpretty well, by the way),Flattery? who knows..uh maybe but is not just a lecture some critique,you dis weave an attractive, sou traveling through othe new identtiities well, not quite sure if its just in this life or ones to come, conjcture of others shady an din conclusive, yes maut be yes adn no no, so forme as a chrstian, no, you cant make t happen by wishing,, reality is not literary,much hindu text and scripture is just that, a clarioan statement a must ye ahve foebeaance freind a must,,
anyway. in youth, it is or rather was more like "sport' or a game,i grew auo on teh seventies an we went for hours pulling joyfyfuly at what we supposed to be folly other tiger cubs ears as it was "new,".....after all noone really knows for sure,even though it changed, again adn again.
and also once you let antothr person change you, youm become a slave to them, or what they are saying or believe, non the less,
let us reason together....Any tragectory of belief that enters a mind heart and soul. will immediatley spawn other avenues that mayor may not be there in a spriitual reality beyond this life, in,closing it is written only being in the history of the planet ever came dwon to earth and revealed and told us things about heaven and what it is and what is not happenening there, and what this world is and what it is not..... we are tmepeted an acqiesce easily to beleive ohther things that the said nothing about, but if he were here he maigh very well callthem lies thisis a bold conjecture forgiveme iam a bold man,but a man who has been given a lotof evidence adn grace fro his weon g mistakes in thiking,,, so
my intent and sortof Job is to warn and advise,sometimes in the hold testament it was called a watchmen in a city, if he he allows the city or a person to be accosted with in untrue things he wil suffer that mans fall and his sin will be on his head,,,,yours brother so I must warn, and so this i Do,,,Be not mad
your reality is poetic and intriguing to you , but have a care and in indian tradition take master, who has as they say in india "one who has left the planet",,,jesus,In teh ast i was a vaishnave, but was chastised, byits inequities spirtually nd haunay thisis what i have done and happy for it.please oh friend no counter arguments. althohg you think you must, if its any consolation for this remark, it is that Iam simply doing as ive been onstructed by jesus and nothing more. may my masterjesu srichly bless you adn give you absolute peace..patrick
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Review by Patrick Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
We both have a lot in commonm.
yes,hmm, um very.. "creative",
I see this is you nature.
So, lets go rathter slowly,
First of all the piece is pretty much well done, in its formatting, grammar, punctuation,spelling,uh as far as I can tell. I need some more discipline in that area.
Hmmm..? being a human being,I did kinda laugh, when after she comes back after the crash, she notices after almost going in to eternity the doctor is attractive.
also, please understand, Im aware this is a fictonal rendering, so im not going to be to annoyng about the order and logic, but, well hmm?
let me tell you how I handle my creative and phantasy urges when it comes to the word of God,(hey dont worry, we are both creative people) please no worries.
fiction, pahantasy. and the reality of the kingdom of God as the creator has made it, Its pretty important to be able to seperate
Whats "real" and whats well meanning phantasy.
First, so as not to bore you, an intriguing an real story that happened to me as a new chrsitian,
Well, I was hangin out just being young, crazy, romantic, I guess.playin my horn writing automatically and no thinking about what i said, because if if i di it would get boring,in short, um hmm, a hell bound fool..
Gee, i guess God/Jesus.. lookd down adn saw me and sent someone to make me realize the way I feel an imagine what is and is not in the spiritual realm, are quite far apart.,,thank goddness
.. a korean missioanlry lady saw me on the street adn invited me to study the bible,
Actually I studied the bible for many many years with That korean nurse missinaary named, simply.. Sarah.
for reasons that cant be fully explained, i liked studyig the bible, but I handled, and digested the word of God rather foolishly,
much of it was going in to my mind,but I didnt digest it carefully and just sorta mixed it in with my creative writing, carelessly and well um in fact, Dangerouslyy
when I would do this she was at first, very patient an went a long time patiently sort of listening,
Occasionally she woud say in her broken konglish, ( That was the term for bad english spoken by koeans) "Paaa trick, You dont understnd the word of God,"
Naturally I was offenddd an always defended myself, I think we at times allplay wit the word of God adn scripture becasue we thiak it needs something ,,something more. In fact it doesnt. It has power just as it is .and it aonly comes t life when the attitude.,,about it, changes..
Well This went on for a time until in he broken konglish she SCreamed rather annoyingly but honesltly, "You only understnd lies and phantasy"
I must confess. i was initallyt offended, But deep down inside scared, and sense she was probably right,
thart night i read the bible slowly, and just let it speak, In my humility and care this time i did not add any of my nonsense to it,
It seemd to open a door into another realm, I wanted to say into a secret Garden,..
But no ,it was just another more powerfull God given reality.I almost missed it,,,
I will be honest,
Iam still much too creative, in this propensity we are similar, however; know this, the walk of jesus,him with us, his words, and his life, is really all we need, though voices will tell us otherwise.
in closing i liked your stories, but I want you to know what i told you, and i have in jesus name. God bless you, and ,its nice to meet you, my name is patrick .
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Infinately rude and irresposible to not critique your work, i promise a rain-check,
I was published when i was in the world an runnig after the paperback writer illusion.I know your goin,,huh? it doestn show?
kinda lazy, but i mean this,thank you for your question,
i have several sermons in my portfilio ,but,,God its frustratin,, no-one!! has had one Question or problems or any of the thing a real priest or pastor or couneslor gets thank you.
okay the work begins,,, fianlly, um ?Yes, i see the problem, it is not easy to answer but here goes...
yes iam "not' a practicing jew in the way that they see the world and what is expected of them, but my faith is woven into_their "history", their laws, and, many of beleiefs of the after-life and holiness and sin,we,Christians are somewhat similar.
However, sadly, for now, when we came or come to the proverial cross roads and the road splits we go our seperate ways.
The messiah adent has occured, it was written and prophecied, truly has come!,
He was caaefull to fufill the scriture written of his advent in Isaih Jearemiah adn Ezekiel,
I read these guys all the time, occasionally im not a scholar, i wont lie at timeits a dry study,it me not the text, im at war with utube an tv, im not a great scholar, my back ground is sports music and writing is may passion,
however: I know that the the bible is true, and if you come to love to readit you will see those prophets are in fact talking about jesus.
most jews dont beleieve this,( which begs teh questiona what are teh thinkking when Chrsitan go on an on) love to know,
but its free will in action,
in fact, i know this was him, they dont, and that he will come back again. this is a real elephant in the room that will soon open up into reality of what is and what isnt at jewis peoples exit from life. Jesus told thejews of his day you will, you will seek me but not find me, adn if you dont bleive in me now you will die in your sins,he was speaking of enter before God the father in a state of sin. When they seek him in this state they will not find him, I will tell all of them tos blieive now, iam one weak man but i will try, Jesu say be sttong an courageous i say okay! lets go. coming to a clos thank you foryour patience,

in my text, sorry poorly edited , thank you for your carfull reading, i will critique your work this week,i claimed to have a judeao Christian back ground, all of God's wirtten word is important to me, not just the new testament, I live to read about David and his trials, Genesis, and Moses leading and his immense raltionship with God is a mystery and an examape of how a man shoud consider God almigthy and be holy,
Iam a soldier like joshua, and at times i want to write like song of songs as soloman did but iam a sinner stepedd in sin and terrible narcicism.
The apostle paul, a pharisee trained in the law. and scirpture under,Gamaleil,and the man who brought with Gods leading the fufilement of Gods will on earth, by making known fully the meaningfull gift of the son of God, jesus,He is my Father and hero, of never ever giving upedness....He makes me wish i was born a jew..im not kidding, But,in closing,It is foretold in realvealairin that a great and gloirous revival of jews will bleieve in jesus and when he returns they will greet him,
This thrills my soul an shows me that God loves his people the children o Israel his chose ones....
hope all things ,beleive all things, and know that Godis fatihfull....the messiah has come but they dont know it, i will go forth and tell them.
pray for my success, your ciritique is coming sister, thank you feeling, hmmmsuddenly pastorish today patrick



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Review of " JUDGE ''  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Take confidence in Jesus who sees you, raise yout arms to the heavens,and shout, dont be afraid, you only live once, just do it, yes.. at first, you will be rather scared, but let the world see what is going on inside of you,show your face, go out into all the world and preach the Good News to all creation,
when jesus was entering Jerusalem The teachers and leader were offended and they told him to make his followeres be quiet, but he told them that if they were silenced the rocks and trees would cry out, Dont be cowed by the status quo,phantoms, illusions, show your face,you wil be surprised waht people will do and what you in turn will feel,very new..
Iam tired of lectures and weary of long winding cryptic messages,the gas line at costco is nice, so too the lakeside walk ways where people mundanely walk their pets adn listen to the ringing in their ears, why not shout? see them with coancern, as they go closer to their destiny, "death",
when jesus was walking in a square in the winter, his adversaries cornered him to explain something he had repeated, he knew it would be deeply perplexing, a sort of phrase hehad repeated many times,
"Iam going away and where iam going you cannot come, you will look for me, but you will not find me", finally,they queried him about this and he told them its meaning,
and do forgive me the exact text is not here before me,essentially he explained to them that if they did not bleieve in him they would still die in their sins, so, essentially when they died they could not follow jesus, the sacrificail lamb by which they were made clean and acceptavle to his his father, we are made whole and cleanby his gift, thus go where he has lead them, do shout, you are right to do so
many will die in their sin. dont evangleize in your imagination the things that jesus aid will become a spiritual reality....shout,..we live once let us serve the lost...He is the way the truth n life, help them see....Go, in Jesus power....Very clear message.thank you
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Review of Autumn Lullaby  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Nicely done, very good pic, duly haunting,Im not sure what to say about these goth offerings,
skillfull yes.. but,They trouble me because they seem to give homage to power of death, the poem took a great deal of time, and was metered and carefull crafted, i believe thats why you won, the weave of the dyings season, and the lovers means of demise, shrouded in mystery, you made a dark cake, that held peoples attention, but have a care, i amiss not to say so
you see, with all the above set a side, consider the shortest the verse in the bible, "Jesus wept" he did so because mans adversary was diabolicallly clever in engeineering, he knew it is not "final", a sleep said jesus, as do I,
his weeping was because of the effects of it upon his unsuspecting children, all of us. the follks around him at lazarus tomb captured by it thiknking it was, final, it definatively is not,
Congratulations on your prize,an if its at all possible have,See the other side of nature, rest from worries, beauty in creation,
last sorry, lecturing forgive me..really,um oh well. lets try as best we can for the sake of th whole picture to know that death though terrible is but the last challenge to cross over... to Christs abode, and real rest and love, forever. and ever, its real i swear, but, it is in fact, not "final' but formidable, as jesus attested to by his weepng for those under its strong illusiion,
have a care in the thinking on it, and do not fall prey to its allures. lest you or me caught in its snare,
Iam worried for you only, nothing is up my sleeve. in closing Dont be angy i only warn as a friend, you are talented, if its possible, and your are moved, use it to Edify, its up to you, "Jeus wept" patrick
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Yes, well done.jesus is the great physician, for just such a reason, one must have great skil care andnlove, was this not at work in the woman at the well, the samaritan woman.she would have left, she stayed tol listen
See..when jesus confronts her of her "many" husbands she is not offended, at least not in the narrarive,is exactly what cospired, we see dimly now as interlopers, soon it will allbe clear,
is it hard to believe he is the embodiment of love, do so I swear he is,Why cant othrs see this, itsmy desire to make this known,My sermosn must be more thislove adn less my invention,
humans are intuitive, woman maybe moreso,not because its a wives tale or an axiom repeated,. Both sexes are, my hope and prayer that peope in this site go far beyond the secuLar moniker of "religous", poems cannot show u how to get there,preaching is a mainstay of the true Christian faith Way to be altlast one with our creater,
Iam amiss in not writign more in this sites,The weoman are more zealous holy and far seeing,
in closing. your dream interpetation seem very good, but do have a care with dreams, they seem to be a mysterious venue, and have biblicallytaken great walking with God to get right I dont knoww why this is,
joseph.s two dreams, were from God in regards to his future and joseph's to marys.purity and to flee to Egypt ,,anyway liked the piece, you cheered me in your insights,Thank you
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Review of Depression  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Alwright, but its a leap of faith, as im for this onelife in a differnt body type as a Guy,um...hmm..uh, you mention depression,hmm,yes as a dad, I try to take care of my wife an kids, just the theee demsnisoanl stuff, pretty hard, so i make a list and like an ol beaver chewin throaug a piece of tasty wood, dont really see what they see in it, i mean needs mayo, but, i just eat up the list and then the shalllower material caused depression kinda scampers a way, but yeah therse metapahysical stuff that mounts up, someo of it surely may be the incredible resposibility and teh invisible check list of keeping in touach with its demands and an liveing up to it, uh a practical hint,thoughts are if not kept in check able to became realities, We are not going to go into a long chrisitian thing,Yes. maybe later but first thing first,
a lil story just for you ,umm..Before jesus came the Greeks had litte made up narratives tales that sorta helped people out of these bad or hurtful thoughts feelings,they creatively called them "furies" and told a leesson, which was short adn sweet.. to sort of not let creaures ahve their way,fight kick their asses and sens them packin,jeus wi helo if yu believe in him, bible says not to swear about anyth, but he does surely assist when you cry out to him please do so, he trus the tiede of the battle, in closing, finally, you seem tome to be a peeson who has a God given understanding of being a mom, Iama christian an later if you want you can read my sermons, or not if not fine, evangelsts, someitimes hurt relatonships by just,being over bearing,
jesus has cautioned me severley to be kind an wise, , so in his name mom, dont let those furies win, fight pray , stay vigialant an let love for you child and in time jesus lead you..God bless you mother.,, rarel, can i finish a piece I was able to read your piece good clarity, Thank you honest always new ,not just sayin it... true in jesus name patrick
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Oh dear,im not sure where you are in my archives,however, the peice "I know I know nothing" is not attributed to you,,again sorry, forgive me an gently comteplate anothers faith, if there is nothing on othter side of it, you are fine, if not ,you are in danger, So I extend a gentle hand of help. In Jesus name, amen
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Review of Grandparents  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I wish I was u and not me, you seem to have a gift of love and say eaxactly what you think, their really cant be a critique becasue it is iconically, perfect grand mothrhered ness, Iam writing sermons and stuff because when im idle i get into trouble, my wife rebukes me all the time, for my selfishness, she seems to be saying, You portend to be a christian man but lack the holy spirit,All day long from morning to night i repeat be holy be unselfish be loving, it seems rather effortless for you,....Pray for me, an if you wish read my sermons. Remember perhaps to witness to jesus, cast your bread on the water and let your lovely grandmother light shine......dont change anything, thas what i do and i end up being to much me in itness, Iam weary and want it to die, rhoahg iama man if I woke up as a granmother im migth very well say,,fine, I can love, the id rumble off to make.. a rhubarb pie....uh, your supposed to laugh.. patrick
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Yes, you answered honestly and well,hmm look it this place, um the moon for instancem,its reflecting light cause its so high up in the sky, the sun rays from other hemispheres is reflecting on its surface, it also makes tides.all nature has these little puzzles and stories, um...you seem somewhat at odds with the God question, but its only because the one who crated it was saying, do you see my handiwork, the order the rhyme an rhythm to it,um im not a very scholarly believer and i have incredible trouble being holy as jesus wants me to be,......When I indulge myself in my less holy nature in my own creativity,all my sermons have to be editied, the light of the world who hleps me to see and be in union with people to relate spiritually adn honestly with other people flees, jesus/ dont be wigged by that, is saying no, its not me its all about you , okay lets see how you do without me created being, hmm,? he does seem to hold all the cards,
but in many ways its good to know our constiutional position as his created beings,and for those who accept his son, jesus and welcome him he give the "right" to be Children of God, Iam his child and his delight (most of the time,) he wants you to be so too,
however, my past and my creativie veinilaities were rather strong, Yes sin, is crouching at my door and Iam masterng it.in truth its not that hard,
why? becasue when iam obedieint he lets me feel love in my souls for people and in my bumbling way,,, i boldly go out to evangelize,.....Ive wrtten some sermons too adn you acan check em out on my portfolio...um in regards to your mother if she was just beieveing with no invisible spiritual interactin she would have given up bu now,
humans are not just beleieving to belieive...its a long and winding road back to jesus but he is definatley there....I was brought to christ by a korean woman who scramed at me for bleivieng in arogance I inderstood and not, jesus, when I only knew and loved myself,
After this,I wnt hmmm....ill have to think about that, its good, that I did,jesus is real, but our pride our wanting to be God insread of his children, pride, hides the truth, an we lead unlovable an unloving lives bacause we missed the boat,in closing think on this,....There is definativley,, a reality in the other side of this life, knowing believing aand comuning with the invisible Jesus is not just people imaagining stuff. it makes me rather sad to thnk you believe that, but so did I man, but its reallly understandable,as ia told you my weakness is creativity,its a crecipe for slef love adn narcicism.. i love to write man, but when i do my stuff im as dead an empty as can be, the I stop an listen to him, he speaks in the soul, in he heart, he is gracious and the real me comes back, ask your mon if her faith is an "adventure' and see what she say...i in closing I liked your piece your yellin to the sky an i liked it.....you were heard by someone besides me........Patick
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Congratulations,Thank jesus for his aid, Im sure, you prayed for this,I mentioned you in a review, about three days ago, I mistakenly gave a review of a blank page that one staff person posted in frustration at empty reviews ,u would think the critique short,nope it went on and on in jesus name,,,,, in Jesus sevice patrick
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I was a spiritual seeker in m youth, I was a hippie traveling and was sucked in by the hare krsna folks, they were shady and mean and they enjoyed mostly feeling smarter than "Karmi's", or, lost greedy materiaistic people in the outside world, they were in fact lost too..but had discipline and a method of some unfrutifull esoteric ancient sort,I pryaed one day for a peoole who were disciplined like them but knew the true and only God.
after this with a friend of mine who was later an ambassador to turkey,"Harold dombi' we went out into the streets surrounding the university of Pgh jumping over cars, asking surreal questions, playing my horn and taking advantage of peoples slavery to the super ego, to sort of f take over the town by a warped sense of look at us world for we bear our ass to you and all you believe,
As we sojourned in this jack assery, a korean woman pushing a baby in a stroller, started showing she dindnt cate aboaut proptiety either and from across the street was yelling in konglish to me to study the bible,Terrible english, she seemd to hope to aquire me as a wild un tameable bird.
Her name was Sarah Chang, but her korean first name was "Soon',We studeied together in her rather militant university ministry for nigh on twenty years, sometines she would scream at me in my strange artistic head trip and freiegten me in to a simplistic way of understiadning the bile as the undisputed word of God. it worked
Korean's are like west vitginia , wild and deeply wonderfull,If as this lady did they get the right info and spiritual direction they clamp onot it like snapopng turtles adn cannot be stopped , they are indomitable, but also deeply superstitious and exellent team players.but terrible terribel un forseeable strange irrtaionally tempered, this u saw too in the fighting when hot,any whoo
in a time of seperation from my mentor, I became proud and stupied aftet being published in a biker magazine, and the vaporous lies of my artistic meanderings wearied her simple snapping turlatle heart,we parted and i made mey way alone with my personal Jesus
Later in some ancient act of this is what is done for our bible study studentsshe got a wife for me ans I married her,I have twwo grown kids and im planning to evagelize DCs himelsles folfs with Gospel jazz little debbiies and thoe power of jesus realness, sorry too much me mean...i like your rendering of korea you too have a realness..please come along with me in jeuss, its great
i found your testimaony and the writing very sincere and real, you have a nonchalant winsome ness adn good observtion with a genuine poetic and God Given twist, you are naot far from the kingdom of God,
Im a servant of Jesus now and write play horn and seek to save peoplw with the wild and wonderfull jesus that I know...Thank you so much, for your service to our God given land of freedom, please be not offended at my solicitation, uh if time, read "Nicodemus' in my protfolio,,,,, in closing, (noone likes a know it all Know) i know ,but, this thing, we are searching for is it not? to be realized fully,
but a person or a career, thought importnt willnot give us the full and complete realization,go a little further and find it, I commit and swear to all that the personal jesus will if know in realness, in the true and real regions of who person is in his soul will do this. please continue to write, continue to love the korean snapping turtles,in Jeus name amen parick
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Theres really Two ways To see these things,you can feel left out like The old witch who in her peevishness curses Sleeping beauty, by being pricked by her spinning wheels needle,
Then prince charming,
oh shucks, I wanna be the iconic prince on a white horse dressed in cartoon purple Who kisses her to wake her up an sings an old timey smaltzy song as they dissapear over cartoony romantic hills,
uh..on a miniaiture horise, burro,midget pony happy to not be dead conveyance its ears raised to the skys seemongly saying.."aint we got fun'
The best thing is its all on line,The omnipresent disease of aclcohol is replaced by atutomatic writing and no-one remembers the crtiquers of the french revolutions who cried off with his or her head head for bearing your soul..... away with you and yir soul,.
Its a scribblers jubilee wherein everyone has a nice time an no-onne is hung over or wake up in there prius looking at a telephone pole and that dreaded triangle on the dash board,"meaning go mobile dead drunkie"
i guess, its uh,,, sorta the secret Christmas for fools who are addicted to writing and wonderin is there anybody out....A long pregnant pause,,,, a moment of deep doubt, then a clarion trumpet blows, and there they bee, they appear as a vast army on midget horsies sayong "of course silly we too, as you, have the automaic writng disease jsut as you do, is it not wonderfull,
Well yes, mostly...uh huh......Oh dear not this, again, the singing cartoon waanna be prince is saddened by his amissedness, See him,he worries he cant in his lack of confidence sing good or make his miniature horsie cantor like the exercise woman did in her happy deluded exercise dance....Gettin serious now
Nope ,,hmm like the princess with the pea under the mattress He..me, feels decidedly hypocrytical,,,
Truly he worries for all.........Hear him, or abandon him,your call no coercion, concern
At this festive time...Think of our true king Jesus,Who made all of us differnt and creative and alive and not dead.hear me now, for iam sobered, by concern for all...
for your futures beyond,For without a "thank you' to our king all our creative winsome creativity will be spoiled by our selfishness and small mindedness unless...yes i bleive this, unless we emote on thing sincerely as we live and breath.
A small but gratefull "thank you 'one time in your lives to the king of love, Jesus, who for your selfishness, and mine, (You see my gluttoess need fot attention) swallowed all our ugliness in a great and terrible seperatiom from his father,The father is the symbol the source of all love...Jesus cried in angst like an ocean "Why have you forsaken me my love, my source of pure joy and delight"
why? He did so for us to to be free of all that harms destroys and annihlates us in emptiness selfishness in short, our sin,,,,
Strange mystery i know,but,patience please,
i beg you, hear,
Go To him alone in solitude, so deep, he hears I un afraid swear, offer a "real" . "thank you", offer... to him from you, and then, "hallelujah," maybe, not right away, But its coming,, true freedom creativity and love forever....My master bids me to obey, and so i have........I must do these things. thank you for being gracioaus, please for your sakes not mine,Iam a sinner too, Remember to do it...
happy 21st celebration writers....thank you all organizers, great writng, great hard work, Good punctuation unlike mine, A novella of divine literature coming, a song?..,,, jesus guy, patrick



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Review of The Music Tree  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Whatever it is your doing,its rather engaging,you have a mature sense of need of description and three demsional details without wearying the reader, it has good drama creation and The fact that the main charracter is punished with abject solitude in a wonder world of green wonder shows that you are aware of the need for team work.
We all have niches that we like to crate adn ask othrs to hang out in, yours is the green thing of nature that is currently prevalent, It always has been sorta important in literature,but sort oflike," oh hey, arent those big fluffy clouds and the trees reaching longingly for them, like star crossed lovers, a sight my beloved,shuttup adn kiss me you earth bound hickory tree lest the winds blow me to another,.. yes dear...smoochedy smooch,I dunno someone may give me money fo rthis foppish stuff adn i can eat a hotdog but now.....topical trendy and people are making the care and preservation of nature a sort of religion,
I must confess i lved the organ of oakas a sort of tempermental transport their trying to jumpstart, its creative and clever,..I do see a sort of problem from a purely inerest level,
Im actually sick of the teacher thing, its nice to just see a strange series of naturally occuring envirenemental stuff, spirtual or otherwise,
quite frankly and that though, nature is in my opinion a sort of inanaimate background an moods setter, for humans, made in Gods image to move around in nature, sort of like the stage props in a play, time of day , seasons, weather and naturally occuring ambience are imortant but humans, but the empiric thrust of us, for good or bad, we are always rootin arousnd lookin for other humans to engage in good or bad,
Either way, intersting things to intrigue the reader.
Nature is alive, but not a personality as we are..it has a sort of soul, but limited in expression, really cool stuff man, but youve gone as far as you can go in my opinion. a nancy drew lonley pine gal or somethin With a lesson of sorts for ol for lonely woody, endles timeless, predictable....I wonder how to coucil a tree with marital problems,,hmmm?
you seem wise enough to know that the loneley bachelor Trhee,(Goodname by the way) is going to have to encounter termites or a love,interest.sorry nature is nice for relaxation and vacation if has limits.i write sermons...abouthow to stay married to ne tme love interests an be happy...only jesus preserves this bond...sinfull humans are complex,but jesus make them simple, like the trees kissing th clouds if u will..possible..of course hes God...whoops done , done it agin. I digress
Any hoo its nice to not lecture about my faith and find something interesting, it was and is a good sketch, the organ, a nice surreal touch, but woody,now has to find drama, thanks for you work, I will pray to jesus for your soul. you are an intersting writer, patrick
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Review of BEING OLD  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
ahoy you,listen saavy, um im workin my nautical theme tday, bear with me,ill be real, hopefully you will leave cheery...wow, okay first of all "it: the body is not you, it seems as its aged its done a good job of fooling you,me too...
believe me,my first duel with the power of the sciatic nerve doin its stuff, made me go to your place too...but take heart,,, not just rosee colered glasses stuff,
we live in it for a while but its really as jesus said, "a temple', Hes said , prophetically, " destroy this temple and i will raise it in thee days, " and he did, so rejoice in scriptural fact we live in this thing but, God in his mercy, has made us higher than it as spiritual beings,
keeping to the "no rose colored glasses things,' think how when you find somethiagn you really like to do comes along,the temple cant work its depressing wiles and its left behind in the dust.
your poem is very good ,and very poetically exacting on how the flesh squeaks moans and makes everything about its pain all about "its pain"....
but remember what jeus taugth us for now, and if its at all possible and i know its a stretch, but im a stretching call on him in pain, metaphysical or physical, but, oh dear here comes the rose coleoerd glasses thing, i get that a lot... so what, ill win in the end,
just believe he hears... cause he does ..... a mystery, many upon entering eternity ask God /Jesus why he didnt listen to their prayers...he may answer, you didnt believe i listend, so how could i answer the prayer..... believe call out..he hears..thank you for your poem very real very adult an well done, it die emote me to do what i do , rose colored glasses or not...im unfraid to have faith... come along,,,,,patrick
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