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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (5.0)
It is a refined and deeply deceptive trap that many fall into.... that is to know or be fooled by the adversary of man that the pastor the teacher,the bibe teacher one with the living God,
The allure is nothing at all like the illusons of wealth fame notoriety.
you really have not seen or know anythong, about pride until it is the facade of knowing, about God? Jesus.
The pride, is sometimes a seamless illusive,but massive and unbelievably subtle,
but this is an insight and that though painfull is neccesary, learnadn put it behind you please
candidates must be scrutinized continually, I have read pilgrims progress so many times,and it has helped me a lot,
It is one ditch or lying person or misinfromed person seeking an easy way to the Celstial city, ir a false professor giving one wrong way after another.
At first it seems like an entertainment, and its just fot dramas sake, but listen, when the bibles says enter by the wicket or narrow gate , for wide is the way to destuction,Its not a falbel now, clearly u see its true
However,when paul,( where would we be withuot him?)
When he say be as wise as serpants but as gentle as lambs, he wants you too knows, as did the puritan john bunyan that many things on this road to jesus, many teachers or master are not what they appear to be.
why is this.... perhaps, becasue it is dealing in invisible realities that cannot be tested or touched,
pastors, teacher are many ties giving advice or admonshments that noone can really prove are correct,
So whether we are in a church or group it is imortant to be holy and prayerfull and pure in all our conduct and pastimes.
Carefull should be made of pastors..holiness and purty to see with our souls eyes are imortant..personal jeus knows,,be holy be pure
Well in closing, the poem was telling that the trials the illusions, the dyanamics of danger loss and deception in Pilgroms progress are alive and well, in clos
ing i read John Wesleys devotional this morning or was it yesterday morning,...hmm Imigoing to get it,and share a short part of it with you,
it heloed me an will help you too....excuseme ima gettng it now,,,,unfortunately the text couldnt be found,but i remember it and it flowed thusly, "do no think that when Christ was on the earth that he in any way or form was moved o,r decieved by the adversary, as we are, yes he was sorely temepted and his thinking was clouded, (he was in the flesh) but no Grouod at all was given by our God and saviour,our divine and perfect lamb without blemish gave him no victory or ground.
so look to him not to or at fraill men, and rejoice in him in love and security alone,
I hope this has helped you, many time as man iam tempted by pride, but Jeus save me, hallelujah ,what a saviours..listen and obey him alone...in ajesus name amen

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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (5.0)
?o it nice to have the prose opened and explained, its a nice
piece of medicine,good to be reminded of his benfits,
I cant really think or force myself into a critique,things God Gave us to say, graded?,,cmom?
academic scrutny,no way
pharisees Queried,"How did he {jesus learn so much wihtout school,?" school? He was God silly,
we are his vessles so too it is like him some, it is, a drink of water, Thank you, I was thirsty
when i go into the religous Genre
lately when ima in church people think its school days,with bible apaologetics,
no its lif,e then eternity, be ready,be oceanic, be born again, im tired of head Games.. "i kinda want to go, "what?" that not whatt that means,, or he didnt mean that,but its flesh
The relaigouos Genre.. seems to be more of a freedom of expression, poetry share, its poetery live a little with Jesus.its okay
still
I have pause to wonder about some of it, huh? goodness no, yikes,
also u ,cant look for cleverness or style,just power, or freedom from worries by there stuff,
theological mistakes,..Away away.just.Catch the spirit catch it,Stop thinkin, many are just peacefull happy, daily thanks.Jesus is good.... to them, so i just sing happy littel birds, happy yes, gratefull good, ...But unfortunatley some is just wrong,
thank fully not too much,
if im not sure about that, i just pray for them, actually , im not sure i do really pray...honesty
thats a good thing, just sayin... words are not lostned to mauch lately, , The nation,our home chruch, is full of dissension,.. people listentowhat you say, so hust sow love for all, such scrutinizing,,sowearhing really
one nice poem was in there about praying hard instead of doing nothing jusr praying?,lil skeptical, then in the end i really liked it, the nation needs prayer warriors,,,it difficult to speak out, countries like a big jingha ready to fall,.Sow love, pray to jesus.,..
uh i gotlost..oh well
David fascainting, arc comes back,,David,wow, hes ecstac, dancing ,. But Michals the queens "eyes'..her souls decievd, seeing a sinner being a fool, no you are the fool madaam,
passage is so telling,of the eyes of eh soul,
of sins ugly nature when faced with true worship So true is this like all of us, we are sinners with sin vison,Jus woship freely sing dance dont be afaid of your exstacy, i wish allwould dance loe david
procliviities and obcessions and endless misteps make uswary...but if we love jesus deeply enough we are holy and have freeom and can dance an sing,
we get excited but they think crazy people,, no happy people, many in that genre really are o commend them as the on.y real Genre, you listneing , reading,,join us? we are not mad, we found the desire of the ages..our lord jesus....
Its odd. its all poetry, but, thats teh skinny of the personal walk with jesus,I bring a boatload of fishes
in closing, we are not kings or queens,like David and michael, but someitmes we are under the illusion of being nobodies, but,dont lay down in this, get up, put onyou rdancing shoes, we can "see"things, others cannot,
unlike David we hace th holeu spirit adn are blessed inour agoe to be born again, many things david traveersed snfully for and got , we will not do.... yet,still. he sang and danced befor God. as he was a man after Gods heart, and his child,
thank you for the poem, send more,,the releigous genre and critquing community must grow,
my goal is to rennovate this place, in the future maybe not a temeporal profesional writing veunue... through no fault of anyone it is is whatt it is,,,,, eterrnal life upgrade i say,, WeHeappered in a dream, sad laonel degectedmthoahg incredibley skilled, cant see. and express the anyting trul new...trully time to time, Famous wiiters get depressed, the world is not enough, dont say, no no! ,,cmon,u have dreams too,",, show jesus to others... forgive me, or not time to time I gotta crow for jesus heis freedom, thank you for your poem..patrick

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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (4.5)
okay im glad that you were not offended, you actualy recognized what iam most intersested in about the gospel messages and what I was saying,
I worry about critiques because im rather erratic, as a result many times its a slew of angry spaghtti like words spewed at me, for typhoes, run on sentences, and the nuts adn bolts that i crated my vehicle of expression with,
they are technicians not one in purty an the spirit,they seem to enjoy mocking,
we maust a paul said suffer many sufferings to enter the kingdom of Our master. Jesus..my writing is at time hard to read cause im lazy,
you have a large body of work, ITs rather school bookish, remember waht God proises thase aho follow him , I will reveal deep an hidden things,, perhaps find em,
I wrote four sermsons during th pandemic, and call the readers to see the reality of Jesus,but i sense they think them too long,
so they wont read it even if it lead to have eternal life, honeslty i wonder if anyone will beleive in Jesus unless the spirti leads them .
SO i ask him what am i doing wrong constanly,The answer, its usally my selfishness and I dont lsiten to the holy spirit,
the servant must listen, cry out to him its important
Revealation for me is not exciting but terrifying, only lately with the times so unusual,so I remotley embrace that It all will occur,,,,you right about it, but im amazed personally that its so like laik a movie production,
i mean honesly! look a how folks freak out when they wake up an have a flat tire, or a tree falls on their shed...the stuf mentioned is catalclysmic,but will come to pass just as their judgment will be at the end of heitr lives,
its a real act of faith to emebrace it all isnt it
but I honeslty wonder if i wont end up like the cowardly lion goin, 'I do beleieve, i Do bleive....I dooo believe"
it really isnt funny at all but some leivity is a littel okay, or perhaps not, tis is lack of holiness in literary musings, i repent
anyway, Only now is that book one that should be opend and studied,
thank you for your study of it, if wish to write about it for others to read and be quickened, you might have to read some puritan writers."Johnathan Edwards" ""Sinners in the hands of an angry God" scary but reall.. be holy be scared
For me,personally what makes me bleieve it is, a deep and forboding feeling, its two things,
first, God has had enough,disbeleif and lack of holiness, times just up, and..the othter that Jesus, when he ascended, after his ressurectin and training his diascioles a littl more, he was attended by angels who asked the amazed disciples "why do you stare at the clouds men of galilee, jesus, will return, the same way that he left ", it states" in the clouds"
Then he exhorted then of to go out itno the world and preach the good new of his completed sacrifice and the new birth to all mankind until his return. adn so this is what we should do
In closing two things, firsr since you love the book of revealation, you must dig deep in concordances for it, here various an many,
for the tangeable meanings of these events,its based upon his vengeance for disbleif, and lack of holiness, its a hard book to wins souls with, but there are God given meing behind it all. thank you for your work. patrick
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Review by Patrick
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Tremendous amounts of cryptic information,
but believe me when i tell you ive seen these cryptic theories turn into long knitting balls of of theieogoical yarn an grown men adn weoeman reduced to angry Kittis arguang ove the meanings the shrouded things.
I found most of it correct, but "unmoving' and obtuse perhaps,
Only a critique, a notion, mind you step back from the doctorial theolaogical choo choo trains running in the night with a sense of academic urgency urgency, its is moving so fast no-one can get on the train.
sorry kinda rude,critiquing.. i apologize,Hmm yes..
Hmm? remember, what the master said about this generations blaisae attitude to his life his words his activities," what can i say of this Generatiaon, I played the flute for you , but you would not dance, i sang a funral dirge for you, and you wouldnt cry" sorry paraphrsing badly, in end this means, his stuff, hislife his words wer from God adn was good heart and soul moving way to fall in love with him, many did adnlater were sanstified by the holy spirit ,
,, but in closing we must play his hits and mmake the readers dance or cry, t isknow this
is not sentiment, its Gods plan. my friend..thisis my take on it, you are entitled to see ti differntly . but express his love and espescially his "care' for the lost,
See,The lost lonely woman a the well, was found,
The blind man was rescued from the legalisma an hypocrrysy of his teacher and leaders, and "hallelujah". one sweet dream came true, when with his faith and common sense he schooled them" and.. entered the kigdome of heaven
when he fell down to worship jesus he was saved
My missiona is to show he is worthy of worship
And, remember too, the scholar Nicodemus, all theology cannot sustain or hide, the terrible hypocrysy an unfufilledness that he felt,
only jesus life an words saved him.
the masters concern love and corect theologey, you have it but it doesnt sing g or dance.. as of yet... is think it will



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This is not to say, that, or take issue with anyting you have written,
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but and iam speaking crypitically a littel when i say " No tears/ soul speak" from the Author no being moved by the reader unles he is moved, you are not proone to ppmakng anyting up, but yuou sometim theorize and i wonder about this some
please know, i foundn no grave errors in what you said, and much good work went into it,howevere: it may simply be, iam an evangelist first adn a scholar second, Continue on in what you are doing, it is much needed in th venue you and i ere in in.Be not angry with me
for we are brothers in Christ Jesus .patrick
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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (5.0)
Well,Yes what you have written is quite true,It is as if faith or Beleif is a sort of wish fufuilling carousel of usubstantiated phantasy with nothing on the other side of spritual reality
Many take these vehicles if beleif into eternity,
one can only imagine the sounds of smashing into some cataclysmatic clanking cans of colligenenus false soul matter into what God has actually said, or told folks to believe
They who have these wrong beleifs are sometimes lake the Wizaerd fo OZ with the victims of tjere imaginations, no unlike the winsomely timid tin man, shaking before the chatlatan potentate, he goes up in his ballon and confessed to Dorothy " i dint know how this thing works....Dorothy looks up sadly and demurely pretty,.but she should be mad
I must confess many times even in my walk iam deeply doscouraged and confused.When this" happens fellow seeker i minimalize eveerything down to teh sound of a clarion reality,
an Avatar, of truth came down, i ate his words and was satisfied,
Oh yes, at times I say this or Write that and people counter it..or doubts assail me, but I return to him and keep walking in his words.
your Poem is metered an written impeccably, carefully,but it would appear you have become weary of discerning what is Behind faith and belieief,
yes i agree it is at times smoke ana mirrors, im almost loathe to use such an antiquated term,, but here goes "take heart", dont give up,you have an advocate for truth that you are seeking.

John:18:vs,,,34-38.
Jesus said,"My kingdom does not belong to this world,:If my kingdom belonged to this world, my followers would fight to keep me from being turned over to the Jewish authorities!
No, my Kingdom does not belong here."
So Pilate asked him,"Are you a king then?"
Jesus Answered, "you say that Iam a king, I came in to this world for one purpose, to speak about the truth. whoever, belongs to the truth, listens to me".
so Pilate asked him,"And What is truth?".....In closing,Please.. seek truth still benot diccouraged and fall away he has it, to this i swear,,,have a nice day, we have conferrd slightly before, and i have recieved some pleasant notifications, they have cheered me, im not bieng fecicious or false when sometimes i look at the reads "looks' at my sermon, and they are the smae day after day, sterile Perusall's make me sad, I say "is anybody out there?" Let us be friends, God bless you and keep you in jesus and in his truth, patrick, thank you
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Review of Life  
Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (5.0)

Well,You are cheerfull for a stoic,uh ?
is that flag, New Zealand's banner?.
Thanks for writing back thought fully,very nice, Sometimes when i see the rereview im always excited, but then th authors bite me with a sort of effete derison for what they believe is over bearin childish Christian naivate, How dare they?.its easy. they dont believe you,,,.,people must realize whether they likeit or not that the things written will definatively be made real, believing in the present reality because you can see and, touch it, short sighted ness to god who made us in his image...free will is a snare tath will make poeple greet eternity with endless absence from the creater, he honors faith in hin , this will exclaimed loudly and definatively.Im so weary of the street preachers screamning Damnation an hate at people whao are gay,lesbian,or transgendered adn fighting hatefully with them...I tell them boldly allahve sooned and fallen short of teh glaory of God..all flesh with souls inside need only accept jesus witha heart felt thank you and enter in.....there was a truly glaoriou paoem wirtten about william boooth teh ceater od teh salvaltion army, he went blind,and wore a genrals uniform he didnt judge but screamed for more lost to come to jesus and be made clean...he lived adn breathed jesus glory and damned self rigteousness wherever it was, a glorious street being being
hmmm.. i don know why but i rather liked the essay /poem, strangley "positive' it reminded me a lttel of how The two men at the end of "Hamltet"... where thinking about falling to there deaths,darkest humour, one is oblivious to its imortance an the other deepay concerned about its importance, i suppose its an honor, thems being Englishmen. i have the bard upstairs on a book case, but my wife has endenutred me to a myriad host of house chores, im wondering deelay if she really believes in jesus or just getting me to do things she wants done...its llike being in a workig concentraiton camp..ah me jesus anullled divorce.....


since your a nice Gentlemen and Im will shorlty burden you with a few little thiings, to assit you to have a happy landing after you fall.
I do this out of concern, first, a littel tale just for you,
im really cheap, sooo i tried to do all the home repairs myself, rather than let the plumbing guerillas in, i never really unederstood why God comamnded us not to kill one another, until a greedy littel plumber wanted about 1000 doallars to installl a toilet,greed in the land is rabid,
so i thought dont commit a homicide do ir yerself.
so got teh toilet and started on may adventure,, Its not a hard thing to do, but u need to studay a how to do book which home depot publishes. did i do that? uh,,, nope.
After many fails i hated that littel greedy little man who inadvetantly, made me attempt this,
however, a friend, thats kinda "me' to you i guess, said,,get the home depott Book adn follow it religously you and you will succed, i couldld say i did completley,and allwent splendidly, bu in truth i sorta folloed it and it was passable,,,,,,,,,im sure, your going What the hell does this mean,?
i will also worry some about the re-review,i have coaurage an say whatever it .. it is.. but will manfully check it out if u write one,,,,kinda scary but...deliciously intriguing as well.
Heres may point, the bible is the "how to book' of how to live, see, adn be fullly realized in who and what we are... created biengs in need of our creaters love, Jesus is the way to get it and be whole...he is "the way'..Sorry, rather long and,,,eeeh gaddity perhaps annoying,, but, soulfull an heartfelt,
I wrote it cause your pretty sincere guy an our insight are quite good, but slighty cynical. ,, life on earth, with all foibles an challenges is still,,,about..goin point a..this, life tuh point B.....heaven... The bilbe is the way to get there, listen...in the book of "john' the first seekers upon being called by God/
Jesus inquired mundanely."TEAcher.Where are you stayng?," True to form, ( God uses curooausity to draw us in) his answer was crypotic adn mysterious, " come and see"...
So,They did adn found God, i did too, and found him,...iam the same as i was before, but decidedly not the same as i was before, the "soul' is mysterious, but it aware of faith, id it bleieves in jesus promises it will be seen by God and chronicled by God, the fall will be soft and eternity spent in love and peace,
your going " how nice"...but dont doubt,sir, the child speaks a truth...Im a littel about waht i have written, but i have Written it for you, please Listen...I bleive you will consider it somehow
in closing, many people in the site are wary of me an may proseltyyzing attempts, as they see them, but i will be bold this day , and ask you to seek deeper, full realization comes by just believing simply... (it is written) unless you believe like a chld, you willnot enter the kingdom of God" thanks for reading this, be blessed and just believe
.....your new friend patrick, pax in christos
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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (4.5)
You bring up intersting conundrums, but "faith" that is strong or real is not blind, it must have grounding or its just phantasy.ee
The idea of just jumping in someones bandwagon is a real possibility if peope a hoping to live off the vapors of everyone else who is going just to be going,God/ jes,,us in my opinion frowns on this," How weary iam of these lonely posoeurs"
he must say.
to many beleive it or not, they refuse to even take th baby steps of crying out becasue of what people will think, its foolish but, true.
I dont really dont know you, but... you migth be surprised at what will happen if you just jump adn start investiagating what, happens if you call out to jesus,
its not a magical thing that occurs,but... you might, detect a change in the weather spirittually, thanks you for your letter, very real,uh Bye

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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (3.5)
Now um,Hmmm, well one thing youve proven is that the coherency of a long sentence is saved from being a run on sentence if the writer is blessed in The automatic blessing of im definatively feelingittedness. some leivity
Provin aliens exist i believe this cant be done,
but.., a diveriosn,
Uh.. hmm?
isnt it a littel like the song of the late David Bowie," starman" when the two kids are calllin each other up before knockin off to beddy bye....and they have the same iconic Teenage dreamy epiphony....
"Hey did you see him in the sky?"
"What?,,, I mean yeah i did... wow u saw him too?...."
and then the teen hymn starts starts in in the church of Phantasy.
thank your for your "notification'...no lecture, just another souls take on the U F O thing,
The abductees Tales intriguing, but not conclusive, and seem to rabidly be enjoying attentnion,
One guy told do ruffian "alien' tired of the aductees struggleing said, "calm down we always release you after" I mean honestly its intriguing copy But
a lottle too muchiike a little to like the eighth graders bullying the sixth graders
I willhave to use scripture,,,,,:"let your yes be yes adn no..well,,no, lest it become tainted with evil" from James.
So um... No, its just us brother
So lets go back to the two littel english sixth graders, a charmimg epiphony, but a literary device um...not for me,
In closing the devil is in the details, to keep him out jesus has shone me the abject simplicity and soundness of the planetand its other bodies above, and assured me spiritually and scientifically its just us down here.
we must go back to the basics,only God in the form of a man came down adn said to all who bleive in him he gives the right to become his Children of God, chlldren of the "day' to see, to walk an see what is and what is not.
Just sayin.... not a fight, so wear of it. soo thats me..and you for now may not agree,,
thanks fot notification, and praise Jesus through him in all things were created, wihtout him nothing, bless you, in his all encompassing name, your studies your work and your students in you care professor..patrick
But we have free will, so
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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoyed your memoir,its Patrick by the way, Still cutting lawns in Greenbelt, Terribly sorry, the town you live in and serve as mayor escaped me, i recall only it was knda near Greenbelt.
your piece showed tha When we hinor our parents we aee made happy and also cheering for others to read.
I liked the ending line an it is a benefit of all who cling tothe feet of our saviour that death cannot to swallow up relationships after people pass.
Just wanted to say " hello".....
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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you, wrote it late, kinda uh ,,hmmm..uh? emabarassing,.
how in the heck did you read that thing....?
The aniticipatory rush of what would maybe, happen with the John's gospel message's...and what actually did...un well,,Frankly, turned into a great deal of angst and and dissapointment,
It didnt help that it had been so long since i wrote, i had no idea how to use the plethora ofnew tools, and each one, took about a week to edit,For or five weeks to get, the offering ready,
Its nominally edible verbiage.. drags a lot..pushy and in some rambles, boring uh if wanna read one..A few folks gave some reviews as my own thiking without a conacordence of any kind,,,Not true..a few,maybe two, in the beginnim beginnig of covid as much more enalightened than i actually deserve to be thought of....
Still lately rarher desondent
unhaooy concensus is the venue is not really going to bear fruit..
never say never with God..But,,well look man,,its professional folks dreamin of being a paper back writer's...The oceanic and unfathemable cosmic consequences of just bleiveing in jesus is real, an deserves at the very least a thank you to Him..I worry for these people, they believe what they wish to..,,in regards to eternity stupidly subjective, feels good ,,,uh now!!
but... though im turned off by our "writers", ima convinced with the mild hybids of truh.. like welsey, its going down as God has ordained....
Im not yet what we shall, " street preacher im mad ar you,yeah yeah im mad at you guys an that all there is to it..you rebels you",,.an unforunate childish syandrom syndrome.Which alienates people to jeus gift...
Im really not going there,,They have sinned to run people off as they do...thia I know, but, the lack of hits, and any quickening at all in many, sota gave me a window into why they get so hatefull,
they will be rebuked in the end for driving away sheep
Um sir, the siundest of the vehicles in the foursome, Is probably "Lazarus,' but the most hits and may favorite is stangley, "Nicodemus"...."wowman at the well" the first to go in, is not fully fleshed out, but, married couples, lovesick girls and all whoar ahuam adn like to be e\"in love".. will be woken up by its honesty about how far love goes or doesnt...
After i wrote the mess last night Jesus said....You will reap what you will, p yet your letter gave me hope for th foursome to live...how may oh brother of these folks here we amuse ourselves with literarilay, But jeus makes me wonder sadly, will we see im heaven..?truly dont know, perahos if we sirit driven manage to make one or two or many a thank you to jesus, By our Gdd inspired literature, the thank you f sincere will be chronicled..what a delight to see them.. i his place he prepared.
together let us try...thank you so much, for considering my request for help.dont you dare feel "jammed" oh brother,, be free,,Be real, with me, in our personal master jesus we are alone Free,amen amen an amen Patrick b
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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi bob, its patrick, the salty humanity an winsome honesty of flesh adn blood people is alway enduring, uh.. So often i took refuge in the small town world, *im from pittsburgh,) around me adn the rhythm of nuances an strugglesof the likable and winsomely homely n bruisinglay charming ways of working class hmm,nice literary inaterlude, i readit months before,,,
Uh heres a little update of what ive been doing, im doing this because something i wrote u gave, the space ship organ piece,um.. in your RErereview you told me if im not msistaken that you were a "minister" of jesus. i belieive you..
Christianity, curiously,is in my opinion, the only safe and reliable way to have the happy ending on the other side, however; it is the one spiritual thrust that condones preaching,(jesus example) the boat slightly off shore "his pulpit',,, we follow,,also, as the remote places where there was nothing to feed the people, until..well my point is this
( i realize of course this is a critiquing sight not a venue for requests for assistnce form evangeists,,oh well tool ate now,
It is my intent to move people to salvation with sermons in this writin site,this little automatically writtne thing could help..revealing christians humamnity, yieah peoe we are jaut like you in many ways...
i willl in no ways be fecicious or falttering if i asked for a short, (yes its labor i know..we both know,as minister or trying to be one) not only wouid it help me in my long an delrious climb to the destiny that he is calling me to..for a criique a gains being boring,,ifits boring how can theye be saved? must Be real
In closing hoW many times sir, have both of us listened to a message purportedaly to get us to see jesusn but unforotuantlely, and brother i speak truth, many times we are bored to death,,,it is the christan faiths dirty little secret..Er the preachers lose our listener attention.......We know its true,
the "prodigal sons" dinner story was not so..nor i blieve anythign the master did, he was heoroically an beautfully gloirous to the end...Therefore if yo could,,.critique mostly for lag in interest and if any grave theological errors,I dont believe there are any,,,
i want my listenr engaged..not restless adn bored. yes,I have in my writing acredoutmy anst and unahppiness but..iam human man...he is working on me,Iam still learnning
my main sruggle is to move the heart...To see his Beauty and though humble, his very real God head, his back drop an ugly unloving world,,surely many will go to him, i push and believe absolutely in each souls ability if they blieve in him persoanally, to make the reader confident that his simple childlike beleif in him well be rewarded, jesus never he has but left to prepare a place for us in heaven.he is true...
up to you,,any help appreciated ..thank you brother,,, your voice was deeplay encoauraging in our thank you for my reiviw,,sorry if indulgent adn graspng or indulgent, ..iam of course a sinner patrick
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Review by Patrick
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
wherever the servant of God goes and witnesses, he gets funny looks,
Rather than do the obvious thing an go " "I will give him a piece of my mind",
nope, instead ill telling you some intriguing thing.. that happend to me,I was taking a writng class,uhh..hmm?Well.. after it, i had to get groceries... I notiice one of my classmates animatedly, but seemingly joyfully refuting Everythng an Evangelist was preaching to him,
The two of them were doin a kind of animated "u say potatao// i say paa tott,,opphh" you know, a dance of "apologetics" before all of the shoppers in the giant Eagle,
Each one had a smile a mile wide,...as i watched them, things got curiouser an curiouoser.
Later on, in the week i saw may classmate,
I tried hard to just mind may own business, (i never can,uh.. does it show,?"
oh well, I couldnt help but ask him,
"What in the world was going on between you and the evangelist in the Giant Eagle?.
Again he got his coast to grin, and his eyes became wide with pleasure, that i was watching the whatever, it was that went down between them
He said.." well, when those people proselaytize me with big smiles I go into battle mode and summmarily out happy them."
At the time I just laughed,and laughed. yep thats what he said.....
My name is patrick, I studied Theatre, English writing( primarialy fictioan writing.. and lead bible studies in my church, your writing was crisp and easy to understand,and though i dint agree with with you, fighting won get us anywhere...We shall end this conversation.....With the iconic meldaoy and happy but childish old sonog " why cant wee be freinds, .why cant wee bee friends etc etc..have a nice day sir,patrick



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Review by Patrick
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Genuinely intriguing,
you could give me a good run for my money as the most inetersting man in the world,if it were not that the two of us are also rans,
in comparison with the sojourns of saintly men listneing to jesus and then actualizing wonderful things in the fallen world, I also read "soon" which showed off your ability to engage the reader, but in a macabre way.
the formatting for "soon' took me by surprise, as it was not the call and response with the little mary had little lamb ringtone.
truly, theres a lot to be said for a sort of steam of consciousness,that offers up intriguing things that are real an not forced upon folks,
forgive me you seem to have been raised and than fled catholicism when teh flying magical twists an turns of its chitty chitty bang bang path to heaven took liberities of a sentimental an literary tragectory.its not apsostate but..hmm im taking the Jeuus train,you?
I should talk, i mean sometimes when i scribble things, i know intutitively that my errant veniality to be the most inersting man in the world is at the cost of the holiness to lead people to jesus is lost,
Jesus is mercifull, he knows our proclivities sir,his yoke is light, still im chstised some
Im repenting an learning, pruned adn chasitised but not cut to the root jesus is like a kind elder brother who is also God.yes really!
i know, i know we were having a good time chatting in our attmepsts to be the most ineersting men in the world or the little site we hang out in, and then, the proselytying. maybe? yeah ? but his mercy is great an it is true,
any way back to a real critique, um about "soon',
heres a lil story, its real,
Uh hangin oout in a university section in Pgh, oakland bein the most inersting man in the world with street theatics i wasnt happy just lively, hauled in like a fish by missinary koreans and in the long circuiotous,
Darn it again! too much me,sorry, see jesus warns me,,,
any whoo one of then tol me a lil story,
Koreans are incredible folksh story tellers, when allowed to live in the free world, can u beleive north korea,i mean steal a tank an get out,
anywhoo again sorry, its in regard to "soons' ending, still criquin , uh sorta, by the way, its ending too open ended an not crypticallly going anywhere.."soon' your tryin to dig up mystery, but uh,,the hole not big enough or someting...it sorta just sits there,,maybe jus me,
inconclusive,
sorry you may feel this guys collecting me in his army of "most inersting men in the world" to make me an evangelist,um man,n goin,, what is it? i gotta get tuh work
.anywhoo... this little korean woman, told me a story, of her family who were not happy about her conversin and bleifs, particualrlay the ressurection, they were apparently viewien cadvers in a douamntrary together watchin boob tube,viwieng a tomb, such as the one you showed, an fam memberss open facedly an annoyingly( they scraap all the time) asked her, "do you really bleive these rotten things can be brought back to life, you must join us in our adultness an stop this "nonsense o sister,"
there faith was dead, when folks are dead they stay that way, kinda un sunshiney, sumpin like that,

But to her, and to me beleieving this is possiible to b made alive for an omnipotent God is a baby step,
the "real' mountain is maintaining faith in a day to day pragmatic an reall world of flesh adn blood an dollar adn cents an and tangable "adult' realities that mount pretty impressive assaults on our child like faith, a child has come to help you in this its me man
What do I say to someone like you,?
Hope all things, beleive all things, an accept all our masters love an what he has promised,he "was" here!
when the scripture says they will mount up as eagles. its implied, "eagles plural'. its a fraternity of Eagles,
join me man, dive head long into it, it is written for all those who bleived he gave ther power by faith to become children of God, not born of the will of man or flesh an blood but of God and spirit, "
(forgive me im paraphrasin), but, do uh, you hear wind brother? do you hear a call to go up into a wind draft, with a cavalier cry beside you,"
Are you coming, say yes not no ....so tired of no,
just spread wings n believe God is with you, jesus love is real.. hey,, stop doubitn,
thank you for your time,
you write quite well, may Jesus bless my words so as to see you in the beyond,simply say thank you to jesus, if your so moved, check out portfolio, in closing say thank you to jesus for his seperation from Father to cover yours and all the worlds sins once, an its secured in his chronicles, i want to see you in this place please do so
Bless you patrick
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Review of A Quiet Place  
Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (5.0)
Yes, i see you are new,I read your piecem you capture well the quaint ad simpple ways of what childhood is,Also the penny piching an bondage to money mom experirences for the medication for Marcus,Also, the Expletive head Dad who takes the batteries to bring peace which is neccesary but a heartfelt dad expalinin or makin supplication fro his sons emor joy would please jesus, nope jus another damned tyrant,uh i got kids butif u mustknow id be checkin out the rocket ship adn puttin it thriough its paces, Hmmm your, writing is easy to read and it shows you clealry understand the nature of familail relations an compassion or lack of it in these situations.You have a good sense of reall dialogue and deftly go
intho the psyche of the speaker or thinker. thisloolks like its an excerpat from a novel about this family, a sortof grapes od wrath thing but they live in a
apartment on teh dole or something,hmm so in closing, uh this,sorry have ot be alil pasurial adn soiritual for your sake, uh.. in justice ineqity in deaing with kids, peopole all of us do this, we see peevishness adn kinda go uh Tahtone ison my list of those who icnt loveo rhang out with due to there behiviour in treatin me,yeah it happens ithappend to me in a large family wherien i sorta figures out realituy and how to mangage all by mysellf adn kinda was unurtured
i becam ecceedingly creative, that may g=have been waht made u like my little thiag i wrote. Jeussh heloed me toget by in my earlytwenties an now.oam able to appera sa a normal chriatian man ,but its not easy, my childhood was as anatelete whodidnothing in school, i wasa winsoe tarzan in sorts crazy america, a coolwild an craze kod,but not rally an aceptable little fellow who nly made his way by his creativity an athleitc talents. that he learned from watchin tv or coaches who he wearied,
not evryon in the fam ,was able to resolve this lack of care, love adn trainig, children need endoemoaus nurturing, an some in fam are deeolay damaged, an just lament,
i fraternize with all my bros an sisses, im am imploring them tow write stuff or make cool artistic stuff fro u tuebe, many are musicians or witers like me, we are irish, and lsot a couason to acohol in clossin sister, as a a chriatian i no longer party but talk to them, but my eledest brother only lamests childhoods inequities adn the crappiness if his rearing, adn selfishness of mon adn dad with nine creative needy Irish kids , in the end my child, all wounds all indequity, yes its real, u showed it, adn brusqueness of handling due to exterteriour inequtities, can be overcome with Christ, teh ganrled tree can grow into a beautifyul creature, if they find jesus personanlly an hold to hos feeet like a worshiper in thw first church at antioch, I see you as just such a woman of faithm by faith and by creative but mostly faith dreaming, thank you fro ntification an a like patick
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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (5.0)
it is indeed wearying to say something and then have another person counter it with a " yes i suppose but,,uh hmmm, cant you see?", perhaps, o frieind in youth, (you expressed its forays into confusion and its subsequent fearpretty well, by the way),Flattery? who knows..uh maybe but is not just a lecture some critique,you dis weave an attractive, sou traveling through othe new identtiities well, not quite sure if its just in this life or ones to come, conjcture of others shady an din conclusive, yes maut be yes adn no no, so forme as a chrstian, no, you cant make t happen by wishing,, reality is not literary,much hindu text and scripture is just that, a clarioan statement a must ye ahve foebeaance freind a must,,
anyway. in youth, it is or rather was more like "sport' or a game,i grew auo on teh seventies an we went for hours pulling joyfyfuly at what we supposed to be folly other tiger cubs ears as it was "new,".....after all noone really knows for sure,even though it changed, again adn again.
and also once you let antothr person change you, youm become a slave to them, or what they are saying or believe, non the less,
let us reason together....Any tragectory of belief that enters a mind heart and soul. will immediatley spawn other avenues that mayor may not be there in a spriitual reality beyond this life, in,closing it is written only being in the history of the planet ever came dwon to earth and revealed and told us things about heaven and what it is and what is not happenening there, and what this world is and what it is not..... we are tmepeted an acqiesce easily to beleive ohther things that the said nothing about, but if he were here he maigh very well callthem lies thisis a bold conjecture forgiveme iam a bold man,but a man who has been given a lotof evidence adn grace fro his weon g mistakes in thiking,,, so
my intent and sortof Job is to warn and advise,sometimes in the hold testament it was called a watchmen in a city, if he he allows the city or a person to be accosted with in untrue things he wil suffer that mans fall and his sin will be on his head,,,,yours brother so I must warn, and so this i Do,,,Be not mad
your reality is poetic and intriguing to you , but have a care and in indian tradition take master, who has as they say in india "one who has left the planet",,,jesus,In teh ast i was a vaishnave, but was chastised, byits inequities spirtually nd haunay thisis what i have done and happy for it.please oh friend no counter arguments. althohg you think you must, if its any consolation for this remark, it is that Iam simply doing as ive been onstructed by jesus and nothing more. may my masterjesu srichly bless you adn give you absolute peace..patrick
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Review by Patrick
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
We both have a lot in commonm.
yes,hmm, um very.. "creative",
I see this is you nature.
So, lets go rathter slowly,
First of all the piece is pretty much well done, in its formatting, grammar, punctuation,spelling,uh as far as I can tell. I need some more discipline in that area.
Hmmm..? being a human being,I did kinda laugh, when after she comes back after the crash, she notices after almost going in to eternity the doctor is attractive.
also, please understand, Im aware this is a fictonal rendering, so im not going to be to annoyng about the order and logic, but, well hmm?
let me tell you how I handle my creative and phantasy urges when it comes to the word of God,(hey dont worry, we are both creative people) please no worries.
fiction, pahantasy. and the reality of the kingdom of God as the creator has made it, Its pretty important to be able to seperate
Whats "real" and whats well meanning phantasy.
First, so as not to bore you, an intriguing an real story that happened to me as a new chrsitian,
Well, I was hangin out just being young, crazy, romantic, I guess.playin my horn writing automatically and no thinking about what i said, because if if i di it would get boring,in short, um hmm, a hell bound fool..
Gee, i guess God/Jesus.. lookd down adn saw me and sent someone to make me realize the way I feel an imagine what is and is not in the spiritual realm, are quite far apart.,,thank goddness
.. a korean missioanlry lady saw me on the street adn invited me to study the bible,
Actually I studied the bible for many many years with That korean nurse missinaary named, simply.. Sarah.
for reasons that cant be fully explained, i liked studyig the bible, but I handled, and digested the word of God rather foolishly,
much of it was going in to my mind,but I didnt digest it carefully and just sorta mixed it in with my creative writing, carelessly and well um in fact, Dangerouslyy
when I would do this she was at first, very patient an went a long time patiently sort of listening,
Occasionally she woud say in her broken konglish, ( That was the term for bad english spoken by koeans) "Paaa trick, You dont understnd the word of God,"
Naturally I was offenddd an always defended myself, I think we at times allplay wit the word of God adn scripture becasue we thiak it needs something ,,something more. In fact it doesnt. It has power just as it is .and it aonly comes t life when the attitude.,,about it, changes..
Well This went on for a time until in he broken konglish she SCreamed rather annoyingly but honesltly, "You only understnd lies and phantasy"
I must confess. i was initallyt offended, But deep down inside scared, and sense she was probably right,
thart night i read the bible slowly, and just let it speak, In my humility and care this time i did not add any of my nonsense to it,
It seemd to open a door into another realm, I wanted to say into a secret Garden,..
But no ,it was just another more powerfull God given reality.I almost missed it,,,
I will be honest,
Iam still much too creative, in this propensity we are similar, however; know this, the walk of jesus,him with us, his words, and his life, is really all we need, though voices will tell us otherwise.
in closing i liked your stories, but I want you to know what i told you, and i have in jesus name. God bless you, and ,its nice to meet you, my name is patrick .
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Review by Patrick
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Infinately rude and irresposible to not critique your work, i promise a rain-check,
I was published when i was in the world an runnig after the paperback writer illusion.I know your goin,,huh? it doestn show?
kinda lazy, but i mean this,thank you for your question,
i have several sermons in my portfilio ,but,,God its frustratin,, no-one!! has had one Question or problems or any of the thing a real priest or pastor or couneslor gets thank you.
okay the work begins,,, fianlly, um ?Yes, i see the problem, it is not easy to answer but here goes...
yes iam "not' a practicing jew in the way that they see the world and what is expected of them, but my faith is woven into_their "history", their laws, and, many of beleiefs of the after-life and holiness and sin,we,Christians are somewhat similar.
However, sadly, for now, when we came or come to the proverial cross roads and the road splits we go our seperate ways.
The messiah adent has occured, it was written and prophecied, truly has come!,
He was caaefull to fufill the scriture written of his advent in Isaih Jearemiah adn Ezekiel,
I read these guys all the time, occasionally im not a scholar, i wont lie at timeits a dry study,it me not the text, im at war with utube an tv, im not a great scholar, my back ground is sports music and writing is may passion,
however: I know that the the bible is true, and if you come to love to readit you will see those prophets are in fact talking about jesus.
most jews dont beleieve this,( which begs teh questiona what are teh thinkking when Chrsitan go on an on) love to know,
but its free will in action,
in fact, i know this was him, they dont, and that he will come back again. this is a real elephant in the room that will soon open up into reality of what is and what isnt at jewis peoples exit from life. Jesus told thejews of his day you will, you will seek me but not find me, adn if you dont bleive in me now you will die in your sins,he was speaking of enter before God the father in a state of sin. When they seek him in this state they will not find him, I will tell all of them tos blieive now, iam one weak man but i will try, Jesu say be sttong an courageous i say okay! lets go. coming to a clos thank you foryour patience,

in my text, sorry poorly edited , thank you for your carfull reading, i will critique your work this week,i claimed to have a judeao Christian back ground, all of God's wirtten word is important to me, not just the new testament, I live to read about David and his trials, Genesis, and Moses leading and his immense raltionship with God is a mystery and an examape of how a man shoud consider God almigthy and be holy,
Iam a soldier like joshua, and at times i want to write like song of songs as soloman did but iam a sinner stepedd in sin and terrible narcicism.
The apostle paul, a pharisee trained in the law. and scirpture under,Gamaleil,and the man who brought with Gods leading the fufilement of Gods will on earth, by making known fully the meaningfull gift of the son of God, jesus,He is my Father and hero, of never ever giving upedness....He makes me wish i was born a jew..im not kidding, But,in closing,It is foretold in realvealairin that a great and gloirous revival of jews will bleieve in jesus and when he returns they will greet him,
This thrills my soul an shows me that God loves his people the children o Israel his chose ones....
hope all things ,beleive all things, and know that Godis fatihfull....the messiah has come but they dont know it, i will go forth and tell them.
pray for my success, your ciritique is coming sister, thank you feeling, hmmmsuddenly pastorish today patrick



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Review of " JUDGE ''  
Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (4.5)
Take confidence in Jesus who sees you, raise yout arms to the heavens,and shout, dont be afraid, you only live once, just do it, yes.. at first, you will be rather scared, but let the world see what is going on inside of you,show your face, go out into all the world and preach the Good News to all creation,
when jesus was entering Jerusalem The teachers and leader were offended and they told him to make his followeres be quiet, but he told them that if they were silenced the rocks and trees would cry out, Dont be cowed by the status quo,phantoms, illusions, show your face,you wil be surprised waht people will do and what you in turn will feel,very new..
Iam tired of lectures and weary of long winding cryptic messages,the gas line at costco is nice, so too the lakeside walk ways where people mundanely walk their pets adn listen to the ringing in their ears, why not shout? see them with coancern, as they go closer to their destiny, "death",
when jesus was walking in a square in the winter, his adversaries cornered him to explain something he had repeated, he knew it would be deeply perplexing, a sort of phrase hehad repeated many times,
"Iam going away and where iam going you cannot come, you will look for me, but you will not find me", finally,they queried him about this and he told them its meaning,
and do forgive me the exact text is not here before me,essentially he explained to them that if they did not bleieve in him they would still die in their sins, so, essentially when they died they could not follow jesus, the sacrificail lamb by which they were made clean and acceptavle to his his father, we are made whole and cleanby his gift, thus go where he has lead them, do shout, you are right to do so
many will die in their sin. dont evangleize in your imagination the things that jesus aid will become a spiritual reality....shout,..we live once let us serve the lost...He is the way the truth n life, help them see....Go, in Jesus power....Very clear message.thank you
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Review of Autumn Lullaby  
Review by Patrick
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Nicely done, very good pic, duly haunting,Im not sure what to say about these goth offerings,
skillfull yes.. but,They trouble me because they seem to give homage to power of death, the poem took a great deal of time, and was metered and carefull crafted, i believe thats why you won, the weave of the dyings season, and the lovers means of demise, shrouded in mystery, you made a dark cake, that held peoples attention, but have a care, i amiss not to say so
you see, with all the above set a side, consider the shortest the verse in the bible, "Jesus wept" he did so because mans adversary was diabolicallly clever in engeineering, he knew it is not "final", a sleep said jesus, as do I,
his weeping was because of the effects of it upon his unsuspecting children, all of us. the follks around him at lazarus tomb captured by it thiknking it was, final, it definatively is not,
Congratulations on your prize,an if its at all possible have,See the other side of nature, rest from worries, beauty in creation,
last sorry, lecturing forgive me..really,um oh well. lets try as best we can for the sake of th whole picture to know that death though terrible is but the last challenge to cross over... to Christs abode, and real rest and love, forever. and ever, its real i swear, but, it is in fact, not "final' but formidable, as jesus attested to by his weepng for those under its strong illusiion,
have a care in the thinking on it, and do not fall prey to its allures. lest you or me caught in its snare,
Iam worried for you only, nothing is up my sleeve. in closing Dont be angy i only warn as a friend, you are talented, if its possible, and your are moved, use it to Edify, its up to you, "Jeus wept" patrick
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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (5.0)
Yes, well done.jesus is the great physician, for just such a reason, one must have great skil care andnlove, was this not at work in the woman at the well, the samaritan woman.she would have left, she stayed tol listen
See..when jesus confronts her of her "many" husbands she is not offended, at least not in the narrarive,is exactly what cospired, we see dimly now as interlopers, soon it will allbe clear,
is it hard to believe he is the embodiment of love, do so I swear he is,Why cant othrs see this, itsmy desire to make this known,My sermosn must be more thislove adn less my invention,
humans are intuitive, woman maybe moreso,not because its a wives tale or an axiom repeated,. Both sexes are, my hope and prayer that peope in this site go far beyond the secuLar moniker of "religous", poems cannot show u how to get there,preaching is a mainstay of the true Christian faith Way to be altlast one with our creater,
Iam amiss in not writign more in this sites,The weoman are more zealous holy and far seeing,
in closing. your dream interpetation seem very good, but do have a care with dreams, they seem to be a mysterious venue, and have biblicallytaken great walking with God to get right I dont knoww why this is,
joseph.s two dreams, were from God in regards to his future and joseph's to marys.purity and to flee to Egypt ,,anyway liked the piece, you cheered me in your insights,Thank you
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Review of Depression  
Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (5.0)
Alwright, but its a leap of faith, as im for this onelife in a differnt body type as a Guy,um...hmm..uh, you mention depression,hmm,yes as a dad, I try to take care of my wife an kids, just the theee demsnisoanl stuff, pretty hard, so i make a list and like an ol beaver chewin throaug a piece of tasty wood, dont really see what they see in it, i mean needs mayo, but, i just eat up the list and then the shalllower material caused depression kinda scampers a way, but yeah therse metapahysical stuff that mounts up, someo of it surely may be the incredible resposibility and teh invisible check list of keeping in touach with its demands and an liveing up to it, uh a practical hint,thoughts are if not kept in check able to became realities, We are not going to go into a long chrisitian thing,Yes. maybe later but first thing first,
a lil story just for you ,umm..Before jesus came the Greeks had litte made up narratives tales that sorta helped people out of these bad or hurtful thoughts feelings,they creatively called them "furies" and told a leesson, which was short adn sweet.. to sort of not let creaures ahve their way,fight kick their asses and sens them packin,jeus wi helo if yu believe in him, bible says not to swear about anyth, but he does surely assist when you cry out to him please do so, he trus the tiede of the battle, in closing, finally, you seem tome to be a peeson who has a God given understanding of being a mom, Iama christian an later if you want you can read my sermons, or not if not fine, evangelsts, someitimes hurt relatonships by just,being over bearing,
jesus has cautioned me severley to be kind an wise, , so in his name mom, dont let those furies win, fight pray , stay vigialant an let love for you child and in time jesus lead you..God bless you mother.,, rarel, can i finish a piece I was able to read your piece good clarity, Thank you honest always new ,not just sayin it... true in jesus name patrick
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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (4.0)
Oh dear,im not sure where you are in my archives,however, the peice "I know I know nothing" is not attributed to you,,again sorry, forgive me an gently comteplate anothers faith, if there is nothing on othter side of it, you are fine, if not ,you are in danger, So I extend a gentle hand of help. In Jesus name, amen
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Review of Grandparents  
Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (4.5)
I wish I was u and not me, you seem to have a gift of love and say eaxactly what you think, their really cant be a critique becasue it is iconically, perfect grand mothrhered ness, Iam writing sermons and stuff because when im idle i get into trouble, my wife rebukes me all the time, for my selfishness, she seems to be saying, You portend to be a christian man but lack the holy spirit,All day long from morning to night i repeat be holy be unselfish be loving, it seems rather effortless for you,....Pray for me, an if you wish read my sermons. Remember perhaps to witness to jesus, cast your bread on the water and let your lovely grandmother light shine......dont change anything, thas what i do and i end up being to much me in itness, Iam weary and want it to die, rhoahg iama man if I woke up as a granmother im migth very well say,,fine, I can love, the id rumble off to make.. a rhubarb pie....uh, your supposed to laugh.. patrick
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Review by Patrick
Rated: E | (4.5)
Yes, you answered honestly and well,hmm look it this place, um the moon for instancem,its reflecting light cause its so high up in the sky, the sun rays from other hemispheres is reflecting on its surface, it also makes tides.all nature has these little puzzles and stories, um...you seem somewhat at odds with the God question, but its only because the one who crated it was saying, do you see my handiwork, the order the rhyme an rhythm to it,um im not a very scholarly believer and i have incredible trouble being holy as jesus wants me to be,......When I indulge myself in my less holy nature in my own creativity,all my sermons have to be editied, the light of the world who hleps me to see and be in union with people to relate spiritually adn honestly with other people flees, jesus/ dont be wigged by that, is saying no, its not me its all about you , okay lets see how you do without me created being, hmm,? he does seem to hold all the cards,
but in many ways its good to know our constiutional position as his created beings,and for those who accept his son, jesus and welcome him he give the "right" to be Children of God, Iam his child and his delight (most of the time,) he wants you to be so too,
however, my past and my creativie veinilaities were rather strong, Yes sin, is crouching at my door and Iam masterng it.in truth its not that hard,
why? becasue when iam obedieint he lets me feel love in my souls for people and in my bumbling way,,, i boldly go out to evangelize,.....Ive wrtten some sermons too adn you acan check em out on my portfolio...um in regards to your mother if she was just beieveing with no invisible spiritual interactin she would have given up bu now,
humans are not just beleieving to belieive...its a long and winding road back to jesus but he is definatley there....I was brought to christ by a korean woman who scramed at me for bleivieng in arogance I inderstood and not, jesus, when I only knew and loved myself,
After this,I wnt hmmm....ill have to think about that, its good, that I did,jesus is real, but our pride our wanting to be God insread of his children, pride, hides the truth, an we lead unlovable an unloving lives bacause we missed the boat,in closing think on this,....There is definativley,, a reality in the other side of this life, knowing believing aand comuning with the invisible Jesus is not just people imaagining stuff. it makes me rather sad to thnk you believe that, but so did I man, but its reallly understandable,as ia told you my weakness is creativity,its a crecipe for slef love adn narcicism.. i love to write man, but when i do my stuff im as dead an empty as can be, the I stop an listen to him, he speaks in the soul, in he heart, he is gracious and the real me comes back, ask your mon if her faith is an "adventure' and see what she say...i in closing I liked your piece your yellin to the sky an i liked it.....you were heard by someone besides me........Patick
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Congratulations,Thank jesus for his aid, Im sure, you prayed for this,I mentioned you in a review, about three days ago, I mistakenly gave a review of a blank page that one staff person posted in frustration at empty reviews ,u would think the critique short,nope it went on and on in jesus name,,,,, in Jesus sevice patrick
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