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The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: A lady responds to an ad for a guest room on rent. The address appears to be remote. The woman receives a mixed welcome from the two owners of the house.
What I enjoyed? This seems to be an excerpt from a larger piece. This introductory prologue hooked me right at the beginning. The two owners of the house are such a contrast! One seems to warm and welcoming, the other one is cold and surly. I would surely like to know who these two characters are.
Friendly Suggestions: Nothing
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is also 5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: A page from a diary written by a 14 year old girl.
What I enjoyed? I liked the smooth flow of all the events that have occurred in the girl's life. The unexplained disappearance of her father's fourth wife added a dash of mystery. It was heartening to see Edith's relationship with her other siblings including the step ones. The entire read sounded authentic and true.
Friendly Suggestions: You should add more entries to this diary and convert it into a mystery story.
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Simple and easy to understand.
The Plot: A man is writing a letter to his ex where he confesses the reasons for ditching her.
What I enjoyed? Your story evoked revulsion in me for Todd. How can he be so weak-minded that he can't be without his girlfriend even for a few days! Is he a baby who has to always be pampered and fussed over at all times? He is also a coward. When he has committed such a grave crime, he should be confessing in person to the lady he has wronged. Instead, he resorts to the pusillanimous method of writing a mail.
Friendly Suggestions: None
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.5.
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The Language: Lucid and pleasant to read.
The Plot: A story about a random act of kindness at a restaurant.
What I enjoyed? I enjoyed the simple story with a powerful message that random acts of kindness make the world a better place to live in. The short one-sided conversation "All is well" was great way to kindly hope in a sad soul.
Friendly Suggestions: None
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is also 5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: The narration shifts from first person to second person. It must be intended though but I did not get the purpose of doing so.
Example: One winter while I was in the Peace Corps, I went to Taiwan on a personal visit. He met a famous fortuneteller who made three predictions – He would marry an Asian woman; he would marry when he was 27 and he would become a diplomat. All three predictions turned out to be true.
In the above paragraph borrowed from your story, why does it shift from the first person to the second person?
The Plot: This is a sweet love story with lots of psychic drama.
What I enjoyed? I liked the steadfastness of the main lead towards his dream. It is said that if you believe something really strongly, the universe rewards you with it.
Friendly Suggestions: I would enjoy this story more if there is consistency in the narration (the conflict between first person and second person)
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: Two men meet for dinner but the consequences are unimaginable and terrifying.
What I enjoyed? This is a good attempt at gore and horror. The way the story moves from a botched up dinner to a malevolent and perverted occurrence is admirable. You surely have let your imagination run riot. It really made me wonder whether such characters do exist in real life. I am sure they do.
Friendly Suggestions: None.
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: This is the story of a person who could tell about the past by just being in the place where those occurrences had taken place.
What I enjoyed? I am always fascinated with psychic tales. The man has a unique gift which is admirable. Your story underscores the axiom that truth is stranger than fiction. It is actually chilling to think of being in such a person's shoes. Just imagining about a probable eerie history of a place would give me the creeps. Imagine how terrifying it must be visualize the entire ghastly scene play out before your eyes!
Friendly Suggestions: You mention that you could tell about murders that have happened centuries ago. This played upon my mind and I imagined that the boy who was murdered must have lived a long time ago. How come the police could test the water in the child's lungs?
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: A racoon hunter ventures into an unknown part of the woods. He has heard some scary stories about that area but he still proceeds.
What I enjoyed? I liked the sense of paranormal and eerie atmosphere you create.
But I had a good laugh when you write that you forgot all your father's tips on bravery and instead made a dash to safety. I don't know if humor was intended but I found it hilarious.
Friendly Suggestions: Some more facts about what creates the scary atmosphere would help.
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: A story set in 1971 where a pleasure excursion turns into a nightmare when a member of the group accidentally shoots himself.
What I enjoyed? Your descriptions are detailed. You bring out well the contrasting emotions of the group before and after the accident. How Woody's excessively fat body turns out to be a savior is humorous.
Friendly Suggestions: I found the last line a bit confusing. Were they planning to shoot the cans with dummy bullets? Had Woody actually placed real bullets? How could the group think that dummy bullets could do such harm to Woody?
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Smooth and easy to understand.
The Plot: A 'self-help' guide for women writers who are walking the tightrope of balancing the needs of their family and the demands of their profession.
What I enjoyed? The fifth point in your list - Love what you do - was the cherry on the cake. That is applicable for anyone who does anything that is socially useful. In fact, your article would hold true for all working women, not just for women who write.
Friendly Suggestions: None
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is also 5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: A story about how a son brings happiness to his recuperating mother.
What I enjoyed? I liked the way you traverse a period of 24 years with such few words. You create powerful emotions. The delightful thing is that the relationship between mother and son has remain unchanged over 24 years. This is unique because real life is not usually so kind. I am happy that it has worked out so well in the writer's life.
Friendly Suggestions: None
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is also 5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: A sweet story where a young girl suffering from an intractable disease uses her plight to bring joy and laughter to her school.
What I enjoyed? I liked the innovative and unusual way in which Carolina battles her misery. The description of the art room was humorous and pleasant to read.
Friendly Suggestions: I suggest that you not reveal the 'cancer' at the beginning. You mention it in the item description that takes the thrill out of your story. You can simply write "A girl uses a creative method of dressing differently."
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: A woman pines for her lover on Sunday night because she returns to her own house after spending a delightful time at her lover's.
What I enjoyed? This struck a chord with me because I have seen such situations at close quarters. My father worked in a different city and would come home only for the weekends. It was really painful for him when he returned. This poem is written with the angst of a lover, but similar situations are faced by families also.
Friendly Suggestions: None.
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Not easy to understand. Some of the portions are quite pedantic and need intense focus to comprehend. This is not exactly light reading. However, to be fair, there is no compulsion on writers of this community to dish out easy stuff always.
The Plot: This is a detailed essay on the role of research in writing. The article gives several tips on how to do meticulous research.
What I enjoyed? This is a very useful article. At the primary level, it lists down several useful tools that can be used to research the article you wish to write. At an advanced level, it gives useful insights - working out anger from your article, the observations on using secondary sources etc.
Friendly Suggestions: None.
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: This is an essay on the writer's motivation which is a single minded focus on writing.
What I enjoyed? I could sense and feel your passion for writing. You make a strong point on how motivation should be used to do something that you really care about. I echo your affinity for the macabre. It is a genre that I would also like to specialize in.
Friendly Suggestions: Though feeling motivated about writing is good, it would help to be 'commercial-eyed' also. Unless, you have been born with the umbilical lottery, how does one dedicate oneself to a profession where "winners take all', and a chance to be a winner is like one in a million.
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: This is a sci-fi story where a man (author) meets someone who resembles him and lives a life which he(author) dreamed of living.
What I enjoyed? This is a unique and innovative story. You managed to trigger my won chain of thoughts making me wonder whether I am happy the way I am or would I have been better off in some other form and manner. Your story produces conflict and triggers introspection. In the end, one is left with a deep sense of under-fulfilment and inadequacy. I mean all of this as a compliment. If your story makes someone feel that way (unhappy and overwhelmed), it is the reader's fault. You have managed to do a great job. In the end, I felt both pity and contempt for the main lead because he wants to escape. That is never a good thing. It is like struggling in a bed of quicksand. You only get sucked further in.
Friendly Suggestions: None
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is also 5.
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The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: A writeup on ChatGPT for users above 60.
What I enjoyed? This article is relevant. Though, I am not over 60, but I am approaching that timeline at a breakneck pace. That is what made me read your guide with avid interest.
Friendly Suggestions: This should be more detailed. The article is only cursory and not so useful. The you tube link provided by you is not related to ChatGPT as well. It talks about gifts for the elderly.
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 3.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: The writer wonders what it would be to be granted the power to fly.
What I enjoyed? I enjoyed the idea of getting wings on loan to be able to soar high and watch the angels and the Gods go about their daily routine of doing good for mankind. I also appreciate the thought that the writer feels she is not yet ready to have permanent wings of her own. It means that that she realizes her inadequacy to reach the exalted status of an angel. But she hopes to reach that state when the day of deliverance dawns.
Friendly Suggestions: None.
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: A short essay on the off jobs done by the author during her college breaks.
What I enjoyed? This was a wonderful piece full of humor. The experiences described are both unique and hilarious at the same time. You have described mundane tasks in an interesting manner.
Friendly Suggestions: None
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is also 5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: Two consenting neighbors get cozy and close on Halloween night
What I enjoyed? I love such spontaneous stories of intimacy. Halloween night and a buxom woman on my porch dressed as a sexy witch would be a dream come true. . The only complaint if any is that this piece was so short. It left me gasping for more.
Friendly Suggestions: Make it longer please.
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand
The Plot: A young man leaves her father's home to unite with an unlikely partner.
What I enjoyed? I liked the angst you create. Honestly, had it not been for the fact that the father was a bully, I might have actually sided with him. Being the father of a daughter, I know how difficult such situations can get. Especially, when you have only her well-being in mind. I wish Angela the very best.
Friendly Suggestions: One is left with a sneaking thought that the guy is loaded and maybe she is doing this for money. You may consider addressing that suspicion.
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: A man gets seduced by a 100 dollar bill in the forest and falls into a trap.
What I enjoyed? Your story has a powerful message which is conveyed in a vivid manner. All of us are a victim of some sort of greed - whether it is the lust for money or hunger for fame. It is foolish to lose sight of your dreams by getting into a meaningless rat race.
Friendly Suggestions: The message on the phone should be in a different font.
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: The writer meets an old lady scrounging for food in trash. The story is about the interaction and the writer's somber thoughts that are evoked by this encounter.
What I enjoyed? Actually, enjoyed is a wrong word in the context of this story. But this is a standard template that I use. It would be rather what touched me. This was tale of human anguish and suffering and deeply pained me. I appreciate the writer's gesture. I also found it ironical that such poverty is common in the US - the world's wealthiest and most powerful country.
Friendly Suggestions: None.
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is also 5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: This talks about the travails of a man who happens to pass by a town which goes by the unique name of "The Dam Town." The town has a quaint history and some quirky regulations.
What I enjoyed? This is an entertaining story where in a few words the writer is able to give a town's history and origins. I found it to be a humorous and light-hearted read. The story was also intelligently written in the form of a letter requesting legal counsel.
Friendly Suggestions: It was not clear how the man had confessed to the judge? Was it something to do with the citation? This part needs some clarification.
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.5.
The following is my humble feedback on your work:-
The Language: Easy to understand.
The Plot: The story describes the events in a boy's life when he get reprieve for a day from his school of magic.
What I enjoyed? I liked the way you create the suspense when Toby is atop the cliff. When he removes his clothes and his pendant, you build up interest and the reader wants to know more. Toby's true form was a real surprise.
Friendly Suggestions: It would help to know why Toby assumes the human form.
I give a 5 rating to all stories I review so as to not diminish the appeal of your story for other readers. My actual rating is 4.
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. The only complaint if any is that this piece was so short. It left me gasping for more.