I, Prof Moriarty  , do hereby swear, that the following review, provided in good faith and out of genuine concern, is entirely my personal opinion. It is my humble endeavor to be rational, encouraging, pertinent and impartial. But, if I fail in my attempt and cause you any distress, I would beg to be pardoned. I mustered a lot of courage to review a Moderator. If I err, feel free to admonish me as you would an errant child.
The title :
The title is appropriate, but might not hook the reader. How does ‘The Challenge of Love’ or ‘All for Love’ sound?
Brief description:
A tale based against the backdrop of the California gold rush. A young woman from a distant land has to journey across the sea to this New World to bring medical supplies for her village. If she succeeds she will be able to marry the man of her dreams.
The characters :
All characters are well portrayed, but mainly through dialogues. Pooca, Pelo, Patrick, Patrick’s dad, Pooca’s companions, even the girl in the counter or the buyer of their wares come alive. But, since this is a slightly longer piece, I would have appreciated a physical description as well, especially of Pooca.
Kudos and Applause:
You have a lucid easy style which made the reading a pleasure. Right from the first sentence I read every word with rapt wide-eyed attention. Not for a moment did I feel bored. I would loved to read a lot more.
You take a simple uncomplicated plot and weave magic out of it. This is storytelling at its best. I loved that every character in your story is nice. There are no villains lurking around, no swindlers, nobody has a hidden agenda. It read like a fairytale and I am delighted about it. I know life is not so easy, but so what? Your story gave me an outlet from the big bad real world.
Your descriptions of California were effective; be it the dock or the trade center, everything was just right.
I loved the shopping experience you provided. She buys such simple obvious stuff, but I know how difficult it would be for me to envisage all that. This for me was the highlight of your story. 
The Chief sending two men to accompany Pooca was touching.
Lastly, I fell in love with the names Pooca and Pelo. Original and cute.
I have a few humble suggestions, but please remember that you are the best judge of your writing :
As I said earlier I would liked a physical description of Pooca.
Other then that, please, please do not change anything. This is just perfect.
Technical, Grammar and Spelling
The following are only my personal opinions. Ultimately, you and only you can decide what works best for your story. The sentences in red show how your story currently reads. The ones adjacent in black are what you may consider.
While I walked out closer to the water to watch the entrancing scene, While I walked closer to the water to watch the entrancing scene,
They have been on many such adventures. They had been on many such adventures.
My father was the highly admired fisherman of our village. My father was a highly admired fisherman of our village.
“I’ll be Alright. Really[.]’ I said in an assuring tone. “I’ll be alright. Really,” I said in an assuring tone.
Rorke said as he and Tau grabbed the trunk and sack that were obvious baggage. Rorke said as he and Tau grabbed the trunk and sack that were my obvious baggage.
We didn’t have far to walk to the docks, We didn’t have to walk far to the docks,
“I’m Patrick Ma’am.” “I’m Patrick[,] Ma’am.”
Zane seemed thunderstruck for a few seconds as he starred at the big building Zane seemed thunderstruck for a few seconds as he stared at the big building (typo)
It was much plainer looking then the other building, It was much plainer looking than the other building,
“Thank you.” I replied with a smile, “Thank you[,]” I replied with a smile, (several such instances noted throughout the story)
Overall Impression :
An enchanting story about a young woman’s adventure to claim the man she loves. Lots of beautiful descriptions and a lucid read. Highly recommended to all readers.
Rating parameters
Storyline: 5 / 5
Technical points (Language, Grammar, Flow, Spellings):4 / 5
Emotional Connect / Impact / Eroticism: 5 / 5
Unputdownability:5 / 5
Ending:5 / 5
Final Rating: 4.8 / 5
Thanks for allowing me the opportunity to read your submission.
Wish you all the best.
Regards
Moriarty
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