Assignment Objective Met~
I see where you were trying to go with this. Building sexual tension can be a bit tough.
There is a natural playfulness between your couple that works well. Both are growing in the relationship, and that shows.
Flow of Scene~
The scene moved along well. See below.
Val and Steve are at their usual hangout, a bar beneath their apartment. A game of pool turns into a public dare and things begin to heat up.
This is a semi-crowded place, but the other patrons don't come into play until the end of the scene where Steve has already lost most of his clothes. You have a good gasp of your characters. When they are in this setting, what does it look like? Are the lights dim? Is it smokey? Hot? Is music playing? Adding these little tidbits of information paints a clearer picture of the scene. As this is told from Steve's viewpoint, we identify with him. His thoughts focused mostly on Val. We see here, know what she's doing, but his reactions are missing. She's teasing him, taunting him and yet I want to picture him reacting to all of it.
Get into the descriptions, take them further. When she kisses him, even breifly, what does Steve feel? Excited, disappointed that it wasn't longer?
---She had never been this aggressive before. This excited me even more. <----how does this excite him more? What changes happen in his body? Are his thoughts racing as he thinks about what will happen later that night?
Example: Suddenly, I retract my cue stick grab her with my free arm and kiss her hard. She kisses back but then stops the kiss and pulls away.
Suddenly, I retract my cue stick and grab her with my free arm. I press my lips to hers needing just a little taste. Her lips were soft as I coaxed them apart by nibbling her bottom lip, granting my tongue access. where does it go from here? You could describe what she tastes like. The taste of beer, whiskey,etc. If she's going to pull out of the kiss, how long does it last? A few seconds? Is he disappointed, or ready to get out of there and get her upstairs? These are big moments that showcase how your characters feel, show us what they want and need. Take advantage of it by slowing the scene down and putting the reader into the characters head. It's great that we know how into Val Steve is, but we also need to identify with him as well, go on this journey with him.
two glasses balances delicately in my hands
Since you're strips,--stripes